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3. Chapter 3 New Friend Reviews
(Chapter 3 Review)
Hmmm, pondering here why Joey had to run home so quickly???? I'm getting a gut feeling that him and his family may have voluntarily moved to get away from some bad ju-ju that was surrounding Joey and to try and protect him. Some preachers can be very strict but I'm not sensing that Joey's father is being strict just because he can be or he is naturally strict. I'm sensing more of a protective vibe going on here. I have no proof of that as we know nothing of the families past. It's just a feeling really.
Really wondering about Timmy as well. Could it be jealousy or could it be the fact that he has figured Andy out and he is trying to be protective? Trying to prevent Andy from getting hurt and having Andy's secret become the gossip of the town?? Timmy seems like a pretty observant person so maybe he has figured Andy out. Should be interesting if we ever find that answer out.
Really wondering about Timmy as well. Could it be jealousy or could it be the fact that he has figured Andy out and he is trying to be protective? Trying to prevent Andy from getting hurt and having Andy's secret become the gossip of the town?? Timmy seems like a pretty observant person so maybe he has figured Andy out. Should be interesting if we ever find that answer out.
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
The next couple of chapters will explain Joey's situation clearly.
I promise that at some point the motive behind Timmy's reaction will be revealed.
Again, thank you very much for leaving a review. It's the only reward my team and I receive.
I promise that at some point the motive behind Timmy's reaction will be revealed.
Again, thank you very much for leaving a review. It's the only reward my team and I receive.
(Chapter 3 Review)
I like the way this is unfolding. Joey sounds so cute but it has to be hard being the kid of a preacher. Can't wait to read more. Write faster Billy!!! 
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
*rolls eyes* I'm still ahead of you... for now
(Chapter 3 Review)
I like the pace of this. it is quick and steady. I'm liking Andy, and i wonder what's up with Joey. I have a bad feeling about his home life it concerns me. the principal's reaction was really cool.
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
I like to think that not all principals are jerks. 
(Chapter 3 Review)
I agree with Conner that the story is an easy read. There are one to two places where it backs up a bit and gets slightly stilted but on the whole it is still very easy on the eye. Things are moving on and developing at just the right pace. Nice work
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
I'm hoping I'm learning as I go and by the middle of the story everyone will enjoy it and not be distracted by a mistake on my part. Thanks Nephy
Michael9344
Nov 12 2011 03:21 AM
(Chapter 3 Review)
Okay. Still enjoying the story. Like I said, for a first try, you are doing great. Looking forward to more chapters.
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
Thank you Mike for taking your time to read the story and leave a review. It encourages me to write a better story.
Chapter 4 is with the editors.
Chapter 4 is with the editors.
(Chapter 3 Review)
Nice build-up and story so far, eager to see where it is going. I have never known anyone in Joey's situation, so I guess we must expect bad news here. That's sad, also i RL, brings out tears for sure.
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
Thank you for reading and taking your time to leave a review. That means a lot to me. Thank you.
I can't say exactly what's going to happen, but maybe with a friend like Andy, things will get better. But you're right, no matter how things turn out, it's a sad situation.
I can't say exactly what's going to happen, but maybe with a friend like Andy, things will get better. But you're right, no matter how things turn out, it's a sad situation.
(Chapter 3 Review)
This aint gonna be good poor Joey, not looking forward to 4. nice to see them all hit it off though
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
Time tells all tales as I like to say. But Joey did seem upset for some reason.
I like to comment on something here that Conner brought up. I really do like to give credit where credit is due and Trevor deserves a lot of credit for taking what I hand him and making me look a lot better at this than I really am.
I don't know how Joey feels exactly; but it appears Andy sure likes what he sees when he's looking at Joey. But will he overcome his fears to let Joey know? Again, time tells all tales
I like to comment on something here that Conner brought up. I really do like to give credit where credit is due and Trevor deserves a lot of credit for taking what I hand him and making me look a lot better at this than I really am.
I don't know how Joey feels exactly; but it appears Andy sure likes what he sees when he's looking at Joey. But will he overcome his fears to let Joey know? Again, time tells all tales
(Chapter 3 Review)
Really a nice flow to the story; fun easy read. Well edited too, my compliments to you and your team. 
I do have a question for the team, you used the expression "pay the fiddler" - I'm more familiar with "pay the piper", as in Pied Piper???
So Andy's a Yankee fan; I'll try to get past that.
Andy's "argument" to the principal was excellent - definitely had that skilled lawyer touch to it. The Q Man will be proud of you, I'm sure!
Sounds like Joey has a tough row to hoe with his father.
I do have a question for the team, you used the expression "pay the fiddler" - I'm more familiar with "pay the piper", as in Pied Piper???So Andy's a Yankee fan; I'll try to get past that.
Andy's "argument" to the principal was excellent - definitely had that skilled lawyer touch to it. The Q Man will be proud of you, I'm sure!
Sounds like Joey has a tough row to hoe with his father.
Reply from Billy Brat (author)
Yup, pay the fiddler! Around here there's a lot of square dancing going on every weekend with the fiddle and banjo as the main instruments. So pay the fiddler here is the same as pay the piper. No fiddler, no square dance.
Thanks for reading and your warm comments. They make writing the story worth while in ways a lot of people don't understand.
Thanks for reading and your warm comments. They make writing the story worth while in ways a lot of people don't understand.
(Chapter 3 Review)
I am not sure I understood the full meaning behind Debbie's warning.
You have taken Joey and turned him into a really rather charming young man.
What more could a gay boy want.
Thanks, I try to make each character react as a person their age would to each given situation.
Thanks for your review. It means a lot.