Review by TL The Writing Tiger

This poem is a touching one. For those who have had difficulties in life, it is a sobering reminded. The poem was well written and definitely a good read for those who like the darker side of poetry.

hey guys (and gals)

I know poetry is a rough thing to like comment about... especially poems like this... and well honestly I don't mind if you don't like it... or do.. or whatever, but I had to write it, so I did and now it's done and maybe I can write something else.

Anyway, could you like just let me know you are reading it, even if you don't like it, or understand it, or whatever....

thanks..

Lugh

It's arguably more difficult to write a poem than a story because the "rules of writing" are so loose, nowadays, for poetry. I guess it's equally more difficult to review a poem. But I'll try.

As I read "Wingless Dreams," what struck me was its eloquence. When you've got short, sometimes one-word lines, it's hard not to sound like a hiccuping machine gun. Some lines and word pairings really struck me: "soul-betrayed" and triptych with "skies" towards the end.

The difficulty with a poem that builds each stanza on a repeated line ("Living in shadows") is that you risk being repetitive. Structurally, it's imperative to keep the poem going *somewhere*, even if it's ultimately circuitous. While reading, I was sufficiently entertained and interested by the sonicisms and images, but the last stanza is a bit too murky for my taste. "Wingless dreams take flight" -- does that mean that the speaker is finally escaping the shadows, maybe as a reincarnated phoenix? The still-repeated first line betrays that assumption. It wouldn't have bothered me if the poem hadn't been so insistently repetitive all along.

All in all, this was a well written effort that I enjoyed reading. Nicely done!

Well said Corvus!

As always, I'm transported by Lugh's writing to another place and time. Full of imagery - and complexity - we're left to read into this poem our own thoughts.

Favorite line - "Wedding fate to chance". Love it.

Thank you Lugh for this poem. It feels like it came from deep down inside you.

As you said, now you may be able to move on and write something else - MAYBE SOME TINE (oops - did I say that outloud - chuckle).

Centaur (yep - still here)

Very nice, Lugh Poetry is not something I read a lot of, but I could feel myself moving through different stages of conflict and struggle, to the eventual resolution. I just wish there had been a different resolution, that's all