The alternating first and third person narratives was very effective. It's a technique that should be used with caution, but it worked very well here.
When I first started reading it, I thought that Logan and Jonah were still a couple. Then I thought that they had only recently broken up. It was only later that I learnt how long they had been apart... ten long years. The fact that Tom instantly recognised the name shows how much Jonah meant to Logan.
There were other signs, too. Logan knew the address and recognised the vehicle that was parked there. Had he been stalking Jonah over all those years? Exactly how badly was he affected by their breakup?
The really painful part was how utterly
stupid their breakup was. It was over Logan sacrificing his future for Jonah, and because Jonah questioned that sacrifice, Logan attacked. Jonah retaliated... and realised he'd gone too far. I found it interesting that it was Jonah that ended things -- was it guilt for hitting Logan, guilt for holding Logan from his dream, a combination of both, or maybe something else? Was Jonah sacrificing their love so Logan could have his dream? And if so, was that too high a price to pay?
One thing had me intrigued, because the story didn't appear to resolve it:
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The car was empty except for a few bags and the car seat. I turned back around and stopped. Slowly I looked back into the car and at the backseat. He only kept that car seat there when...
Unless I'm mistaken, a car seat is used for toddlers and young children. But that was the only mention of the possibility that there may be another person in the fire. It also implies that Jonah's a father, and Logan knew it. A lot had happened in that ten year gap....
