This is something I scribbled in one of my efforts to write something different.. Any thoughts...? What do you think this is about...?


He jumped the gun!

Realizing it was too late to run

He smashed the door

And it was heard over the floor

He was frustrated and agitated

And his will could not be executed

Oh dear me, said he loud

Knowing that the silver line has disappeared from the cloud!

It's cute and lively! I really like it!

On a side note, it seems best fitted for the poetry discussion forum (and perhaps you might want to post it in eFiction as well!), so I'm going to shift it over there

Great job!

Thanks for sharing it with us

Kevin


BTW: welcome to the forum!

thanks kev..

I think it's about that moment when you could kiss and didn't, or when someone you loved moves away and ends the relationship.  It's good ... I like it.  You got me pondering...