Excellent job, Nick! I really enjoyed this story. I loved how what started out as a summer fling turned into something more serious and romantic! I also loved the supporting characters. Addie seemed really cool, I was crazy about Eleanor, and Eric's parents seemed really great. I was initially thinking his grandparents might be a problem, but I'm so glad all that worked out for the best. I also really enjoyed the style in which this story was written! I did have one question though, did you mean for Eric's ex-boyfriend's name to keep changing?




LOL anyway I got a huge kick out of it whether it was intended or not, and it definitely doesn't affect the overall message of the story!

Great job, Nick! Keep the stories coming

Kevin

Great, Nick! I loved the story, and the ending.

I can't speak for Nick, but, as the editor, I wanted to leave it to the reader's imagination as to whether Eric was simply a whore before he went on this vacation, his ex had multiple personalities or lots of nicknames, or Eric was a pathological liar. I like to think of it as a little mystery in the story. Maybe we should conduct a poll?





P.S. I didn't really notice this, but am not suprised Kevin did since he probably spent 3 hours reading it and going over it with a fine toothed comb.

Don't be silly, Matt!......It was only 2 and a half hours and I used a small hairbrush

That is an interesting interpretation! I guess it could have just been multiple ex-boyfriends!

-Kevin

Great story, I really like your style. Addie is a cool character. My only complaint is with the title. 'Finding my summer adventure' is... I dunno, a bit limp somehow.

A lot of it had me laughing out loud - these 'bits' are especially good:

I stuffed my suit case full with ultra fabulous clothes, because even if I am going to be in dead-wood Florida, I still need to look my best.

“I’ve got it.” My dad said just as the vein over his right eye started to pop out.

My parents are such dorks.

“To early, must sleep.” I said pulling my pillow over my head, incapable of forming complete sentences at this ungodly hour.

I was reminded of Corey Haim in 'Lost Boys' god knows why.

Camy

OMG you guys! wow... i am glad that some one cared enough to start a topic about my story. You dont know how happy i am about this. It makes me feel al fuzzy... lol i guess that's how i put it. I am glad that most of you found humor in it... i really didnt try to make it funny, but my friend brittany tells me all the time that i am the most naturally funny person she has ever met. I dont mean to be, i just call things how i see them...

Anyway i am so glad that you all have enjoyed it and are wanting more... just so you know i am gonna do a fall anthology piece and i am working on chapter four of out there (i dont think that i am a very good chapter story writer because i am slow at putting things out... and i have to be in the mood to write and it doesnt happen very often.)... Anyway....

I DID NOT MEAN TO KEEP CHANING THE EX-BEAU'S NAME!!! LMAO that is the biggest mistake on my parent... i reread it a thousand times before i sent it in to make sure that i didnt miss anything, and that matt didnt miss anything the multipule times he looked over... simple mistake... i just flat out couldnt remember what i named that character... my intentions where not for Eric to be a man whore... though that would have been a good addition to the plot... but then he probably wouldnt have fallen in love with Jackson... so yeah...

I AM SO GLAD THAT EVERYONE LOVED IT AND THANKS FOR THE FEED BACK AND KEEP IT COMING

later ~ nick

Oh ... about that long.