All apologies for hijacking this thread all-be-it momentarily...

Does anyone find it suspicious that a lurker has made the centennial post on two different threads within the span of seven days?



Steve

We now return to this thread in progress...

haha yeah i guess so...

Sneak preview...

Chapter 28

Ben led me into the house where he greeted a man who seems to be in his mid-30s.

"Steph, meet François, my oldest cousin." said Ben.

"What the hell..." I said as a memory flashback of a sex shop that specializes in bondage at the corner of Ste. Catherine and St. Laurent (the sex district of downtown Montreal). On the store's window, there was an ad with a photo of a man on it. He looks so similar to him...

"Wait, aren't you the guy who owns..." and he interrupted me.

"Yea, yea, yea, I know I know...I'm the guy who owns ze bondage store." he said with a thick French accent, smiling and offered his hand to shake.

I blushed a little since he seemed perfectly OK with it; I was not, or at least not completely. I had long stopped wondering about the whys of my fantasies, but still... I had never experimented with tying someone up, or being tied up, but there was some appeal to it.

"Hey, zat's OK whezer you like bondage or not. Actually, I also use the word "tie-up games", or even ze French "ligotage" that doesn't bear all ze connotations of 'bondage'. Plus we are quite a few guys who like this strange fantasy without having the least taste for either inflicting or receiving pain. You guys want to play together?"

I looked at Ben. Apparently he didn't mind. His cousin winked at him. There had been something sometimes in the past, something that his cousin had been a witness of and that told him Benoît wouldn't mind. (...)

How nice of you to write such a misleading "sneak preview" (I even doubt I will write up to Chapter 28).

As an old man once told me:

"Build your own legend..."

But the little girl says you can always keep on dreaming whatever you wish to be true...in your mind.

Dream On is one of my favorite Aerosmith songs.

Chapter Seven!!!

Wonder if Krist suspects anything

Seen a bear in back woods of in the house we live in now, when dad was building the fence 4 yrs ago, wouldn't want to be right next to it.

Black bears are shy and curious animal and they avoid humans. It's very rare for them to get aggressive towards to humans. That bear in the story was just curious at the car.

I saw a bear once when I was a boy...my mum took me to show it and we were like 15 feet away from it with the neighbors. That's the only time I saw a wild bear. Other few times I saw them...they were roadkills.


A question for everyone. I couldn't help feeling I made this chapter as a "filler" and it seems to be "plain". Is it me or anyelse feels like that?

I get a lot of black bear around here. The do some damage as they like to scratch on wood and seem to like one corner of my house. I don't mind them, but if they get a little too incautious I fire a shot or two in their general direction to run them off (no, I do not aim for them, just near them).

BTW, if you leave food in your car, or even things that smell like food (such as a hamburger wrapper), they WILL break in.

I felt the chapter was good character development, especially for Krist. The Icelandic was a very nice touch! How did you do that?

I too wonder if Krist suspects anything?

I'm also wondering when the other shoe will drop (that sound in the Bathroom).

Great chapter!!

It was a black bear, It was a year were there was no food in the Blue Ridge mountains in Virginia,it then traveled to where we live.

I like the chappie Jack, wasn't boring

How I do that with Icelandic? I learnt some couple years ago and I still review a little once every while to refresh my mind. So I can make and understand some phrases without much problem. I thought it would be fun to put a "rare" language with only 300,000 speakers in the story.

Since Alex is Vietnamese so it's possible I might put some Vietnamese as well. My boyfriend is Vietnamese afterall and always talks to his parents in Vietnamese so I would have no clue what they're talking about.

My dictionary is having heart palpitations.

Sharon

Heart palpitations?

Did you realize I had to get a dictionary to find out what that means?

Maybe I should have written it in French.


Sharon

LOL I don't even know how to say it in French.

This is a chapter with lots of making out. They should stop using public restrooms before they get caught with their pants down! There are lots of threads that are left hanging, and waiting to be pulled in further chapters. It seems (but maybe I'm wrong) we're halfway through, or something's going to start.
As for the ursine situation, I know there were some in Northern Minnesota but never saw one. I've got friends who were woken up by one as they were camping in Alaska. They were quite scared. I've got lots of cats outside, living wild (they're not wildcats though). Less scary.

My one criticism of this chapter is the make-out scene in Krist's bathroom. That was just too close for comfort. I can certainly imagine Jake making out with Ben after he tries to comfort him, but dicks whipping out and all that action? Why would Ben put a stop to it in the tree house, only to get it on with his boyfriend in a place where they would likely be caught? To me it just doesn't quite seem real. Othere than that, it was a great read, as always.

If I can remember right, it was Steph who stopped it in the treehouse.

Jake making out with Ben? Eh? Again...didn't I remember it was Steph?

Just finished catching up with your story, Jack. I'm really enjoying it

I enjoyed reading this thread as well. Here's what I gleaned: you're an American, studying French in Montreal with (maybe) the hope of becoming a French teacher, you have a Vietnamese bf (in Montreal?) and some dude called Francois who edits your French and betareads, and you shoot sick goats. No one can say you're uninteresting.

I hope you have something nasty planned for Fran.

The French certainly know how to turn the air blue!!

A riddle: What do you get when you cross Jack Frost with Dracula?

Conner

Yes, you got it all right except François doesn't do very much correcting my French in the story...usually I get most of them flawless.


And what's the riddle? I hate riddles...I never can figure them out.

They also are pretty fond of barbecued caprine animals, if you really want to know. So, Jack revealed my first name, because my nick might have sounded stupid, or bring to life fantasies he's struggled with and repressed... Or maybe he's just an open sincere guy? For the French Canadian parts, I tend to trust him in using the colorful expressions of our Belle Province's cousins. And let's face it: he's not too bad with French.

Listen up, Frenchie! There'll be no goat bar-b-que going on here at GA!!! I hope you realize that Myr is very protective of his moderators.

Yes, Jack is doing extremely well with the French content of his story. I should add that a lot of the French he uses is not taught in his uni studies...at least that would be my guess.

Riddle answer: frostbite

Like that will stop me.


Or frostnip....depends how nice I am.

Here is an exchange between CJames and Jack. A little feud has been going on for quite some time now, since Jack objects to being sold in slavery by CJames, raising obscure legal points (some convention of Human Rights...)

How would you feel if such a dreadful thing happened to Steph and Ben, faithful readers of Moving On? Is an author allowed to exert a right of life and death over such moving characters? It's time you stand for what you think is right, and let Jack know you want a bright future for Steph and Ben!

To be clearer...I refuse to say that would happen, but just saying anything could happen in the story. Honestly, I don't have an ending all planned up yet...just running the story on and see how it ends. I intend to make this story somewhat realistic (just like the setting and some events that really happened in real life...), and death is just part of real life.

I could say I'm not a big fan of seeing characters dying. So you could say this could be a small chance instead of a big one.

If you haven't plotted it yet, that would be an author's way of chickening out to find a proper conclusion. Come on Jack, I was only kidding with the heart of ice thing! I know it's not like you to pull such a mean one on your readers!

(And I'm not too much into leather... Read my story to get rid of easy misconceptions.)

Chickening out...call whatever you want. I have many possiblities to end it.

Hi Jack and everyone else

I just read your entire story Jack and I think it is amazing ... You are a wonderfull writer, you describe the surroundings and the feelings of the people so well. I don't read the story but I live the story. I really like the french parts in the story. French is my second languages and it is nice to see both languages, English and French, combined in one story. The storyline is very good and I just love Ben, don't ask me why but I love that boy. Also I think Ben's little brother is a very good character in the story, the younger brother who looks up to his older brother.

I found your story just recently by accident. I read on another forum someone who said So I wanted to check it for myself so I read his story and I don't see a cold-hearted person. I see a warm-loving person through the characters is the story . Keep up the good work Jack

Sorry for my bad english, it is my third languages

Max

ACK! Someone called me a warm-hearted person.


But thanks a lot for your comment. I love them.

I agree with a lot of what you say, Max. I'm sure deep inside Jack is a warm, good-hearted loving person. And it's interesting to know that saying bad things about someone in a forum will get him new readers. No bad publicity, only publicity, apparently.

E-mailed Chapter 8 to Sharon.

It seems she's sleeping now since I don't see her on MSN. Must be my shoo-fly pie.

I hope Ben and Steph find a location more proper to make out than a public bathroom this time, if they make out.

You mean private? Public is outside the house...

Yes, I do. Having fun in public restrooms means they should end up getting in trouble. What if someone is already there or if they get caught?

You've got mail.

And actually, for once, I was sleeping. Quite a change from my usual midnight edits. I'm starting to think Jack's a vampire as I usually only talk to him in the middle of the night.

Sharon

OK, so I was not the only one having the impression there was something fishy. Stake, anyone?


AND WHEN IS THE NEW CHAPTER GOING TO BE POSTED?

Impatient, eh?

Chapter 8 is here!!!

For a second, I though Krist really did see em in the can, I really like Krist mom, wonder if that Step later on will confess to her before telling his other friends, hugs Ben.

WARNING! Spoilers below: Go read chapter 8 first!~














That opening sequence was GREAT! And now I know why you gave both the dog and one of Steph's friends the same name!
Very convincing sequence, BTW!

My hunch is that Krist knows, and was trying to show he's supportive (via including Ben, and his statements to Steph).

I have a feeling that things are coming to a head; how will Steph react if Ben is outed? And how will Steph's mother react if he is outed?

Now, too, we know who was in the bathroom. Very well done! I was expecting a far less pleasant reaction from whomever it was, unless of course Steph's reaction triggers trouble there...

Good one, Jack!!!

And BTW, I agree with Sharon: Vampire...

Oh I am so glad you commented on this. I loved this part. It had me laughing out loud. Woof

Sharon

That's not my reason why I gave the dog and friend same name. It's because I actually have a dog named Jake back in Pennsylvania.



Jake's the black one...other one is Dillion, his brother. I miss them. Jake does really love getting his belly rubbed.

Yes, the dream sequence is great. It fooled me completely. Nice develoments in this chapter. Glad they go back to the bedroom for having fun. Now the concern is about Mathieu's diet. What will happen if they keep locking themselves in and leaving the kid to plunder the cookies from the kitchen?

I don't know if it's really relevant to this thread, but it's great to see Sharon's and Jack's great work on the story.

I'm still loving the story, Jack, but I'm going to climb on my soapbox and make a speech. It's relevant to this chapter so you can't delete it.

First it was the cliffhanger endings and now its dream sequences disguised as part of the story. Readers don't want these shameless practices any longer!!! They play havoc with our hearts and minds. It's particularly upsetting to see you young authors developing bad habits so early in the game.

Is anyone still reading???

No, I wasn't still reading...sorry...

I was just wondering why you're not longer a goat. I guess CJ is alone now.

Oh yea, thanks everyone.

What do you mean I'm no longer a goat? Of course I am.

Seeing that you brought it up ....

Who is my avatar and what is the connection between my avatar and the movie "Children of Dune".

So there!!! I'm so cool!

Conner (still a goat)

So what's going on for Steph and Ben? Any news about them coming out to their hockey friends? Is poor Mathieu still forced to glut on starch and fat because the boys leave him on his own, locked inside Ben's room?

The readers want to know! They have a right to!

Mathieu and the rest of the gang will be pigging out on pizza.

That's all the hint I will be giving.

Your characters will be eating Pizza? That's shocking! Horrendous! Absolutely abominable!
How could you?


Signed;

CJ, Forum lurker and resident hypocrite.