Hehe


Well, it looks like a duck to Steph....

Glad to say I have couple loonies on my desk waiting to be spent.


I "wander" too, CJ, that Ben will end up running into his ex. Only fate will tell.

Those final stairs in Berri-UQAM are just a pain-in-the-ass when you have a couple heavy-as-a-bitchass suitcases to bring up to the bus station there.

Travel light! There's no need carrying bricks around with you, I assure you.

Me and my typos... LoL

I'll bet those stairs are a pain. I've been in plenty of paces where I've had to carry luggage up or down stairs, and there's nothing like having a 80lb suitcase in each hand and having to climb half a dozen flights of stairs. Ugh.



But Bondwriter (Or, should I say, Frosty Hunter? ) I think he needs to bricks to keep the rocks in place?

How can I travel light when I have to jam two suitcases at the size of two bedroom pillows to prepare myself for the cold and warm season, some winter outwears. not to mention to put some several small books, a shoebox of personal documents, bedsheets, a pillow and blankets, and few other stuffs for a several months stay in Canada. And people are always amazed how well I pack all of these craps in two suitcases without them exploding apart.


Et Bondwriter, je suis très déçu de tes compatriotes pour avoir élu Sarkozy. Euh ben, pas tellement étonnant...je sais déjà qu'ils sont toujours impotents quand même.

impotent= disabled; impuissant= impotent; and I'd like to see the figures tomorrow, but you should know that a study a few days back gave every age group under 65 being 52-56% in favor of Mrs Royal, but people above 65 were more than 75% President (ugh! This hurts) Sarkozy prospective voters. So, for the renewal and dynamism, we'll have to wait a bit. And hope the mainstream media stops feeding the fear and loathing feeling of these people.

Ok...correction...impotents et impuissants....oooh, so powerful and descriptive.

A question...what's going to happen in the next chapter? Any ideas? Any fanasties?

As if it’s not bad enough that I have to double check the French and the Icelandic (which freaks my spellcheck out, by the way) but now I have to research currency.

Hey, Boss !! I think I should get a raise.




“places”

Sharon

I almost laughed when you put in can you give me some change, watched a ep of south park recently where homeless ppl basically invade their town saying can you give me some change.

Sure, how about two shoo-fly pies per chapter instead of one?

My betareaders are my slaves anyway.

It's a true story that there will be always a homeless guy opening the door to the metro station from the bus station. lol

Walk along Ste-Catherine...you'll find few people on the sidewalk holding a sign for change or ask you for some...especially in the gay village where their number triples.

Works for me

And, as I've learned recently, the correct term is 'minions'.

Winter clothes are indeed bulky; I've had to pack for trips to multiple climates, and ended up with quite a bit of luggage. Besides, we know you don't carry rocks in your suitcase, but between your ears instead.



I don't know whether they will or not, bur seeing more of Montreal would be my hope, and I do wonder if Ben's Ex will make an appearance.



But Sharon, it's not easy typing with hooves!
(and I'll bet you pity my poor editor! )



Yes, 'tis true, Frosty has minions...

http://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewsto...&chapter=13

Tata!

Running into ex's suck. Waiting to see what Ben's revenge will be.

What makes you think he's his ex? No confirmation were made.

Well, if he's not his ex, who is he? Santa Claus in disguise? Canada's PM undercover? And we all know you're quite heartless and evil, but you wouldn't pull a cliff-hanger CJ style on your readers like this, would you?

Hey he made me work the day before Mother's Day so I wouldn't be surprised what he did.

Sharon

Btw the whole thing about why he's called a boy screw driver made me crack up

I enjoyed that chapter immensely. A trip down memory lane...well sort of.

Je suis ne a Montreal...il y a longtemps.

If the Irish had gypsies, my mother had to be one. I lived in and around Montreal for 21 years. My mother moved 13 times. That must explain a lot, eh? Let me see if I can remember: NDG (Notre Dame de Grace) in Montreal's west side, Outrement, Verdun, St-Laurent, Greenfield Park (south shore - off the island), Pierrefonds and Dollard-des-Ormeaux. That's all I can remember. Actually, I'm fonder of Quebec City (great restaurants), but Montreal has the night life. I studied at Loyola College when the Jesuits still ran the place. I graduated in 1971, long before Loyola merged with Sir George Williams Univ to become Concordia. You wouldn't believe the cross-town hockey rivalry that existed in those days between Loyola and Sir George. McGill couldn't keep up with either of us as far as hockey was concerned. It did have other things going for it, though, I'll give you that.

Oops! Off topic, right?

I'm also looking forward to Ben getting even with his brother. I also agree that the dude in the pub is Ben's ex. Imagine all the questions Steph will have.

Bondwriter: We'll see in the next chapter who that may be.

Conner: lol, I am going to Concordia this fall...so I'll be in the same school but in the right decade, not the wrong one. If it helps, the Plateau is right below Outremont and to the east side of Mont Royal mountain. No Jews living there.

And I thought you were British Columbian all the long, not a born Anglo-Quebecker. :s

I loved the traveler's eye view!!! That was great (and very well done!). I especially liked the history.

I, too, found the "boy screwdriver" explanation hilarious!

Whomever that is at the end, I hereby declair this to be a CLIFFHANGER!

Here you go!

http://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewsto...&chapter=14

Chapter Fourteen!

Sharon gets a raise to four shoo fly pie per chapter for being a wonderful goddess of editors. Her works always makes me tremble.
Bondwriter is technically is my editor as well, for French texts, so he gets one shoo fly pie per chapter.
CJames is just still my property. I'll just give him one litre of goatmilk per chapter. Hey, someone has to keep the slave alive for the job!

Now a request. Some of you have been reading this for a long time now...how about you post some photos of your imagination of the characters in the story. It would be neat to see how my readers see them as.

'shiver'



Goddess

Hey, No slave here! Though, you will be one as soon as Bondwriter (Frosty Hunter) and I catch you...

I really, really liked the very clever misdirection at the end of the last chapter and the beginning of this one; I had no clue they were friends and joking around. That was very well done!

I am still very much enjoying the traveler's eye view of Montreal, the little background details really give a good feel.

Pictures, huh? Well, OK, I'll give this a try...
Ben
Click to view attachment

Steph Click to view attachment

Adrien (and the Author). Click to view attachment

Hmm so our mystery boi is found out, hmm maybe a hot threesome

The word tremble exists...

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/tremble

Where did I go wrong?

I'll get back to the rest of the posts...I just couldn't let Sharon get away with this tonight.

Hey, CJ's Steph looks just like Jack, so how could he be the author (cute pic of Adrien, though in my own stereotypes he'd be more the rugged up type of guys I'd expect to meet in the Poconos)?
By the way, CJames, I have no clue whatsoever how this old pic of me you used to represent Ben ended up on the Internet. I'll have my lawyers investigate.

You also knew I'd be sleeping that late and wouldn't see this until this morning.

Are you 'shivering' with delight or 'trembling' in fear? I like 'shiver', it has a better nuance.

Goddess

Can't you shiver with fear? I only know tremble from an hymn sung at Easter, Where were you when they crucified my Lord, in which the meaning is obviously a shake/ quake from fear, but shiver didn't necessarily match a pleasurable thrill from what I knew.

You mean a twosome?

Whoops...I spoke too much.


Funny you were close to what I see Ben as.

Steph is way too off though...

Don't post a picture of yourself, CJ. You'll just make Bondwriter good looking comparing to you.

I'll post pictures of the characters I always see them as... Now this is no way meant to shatter your imagination. This story is fiction...so you can believe whatever you want (especially for you CJ...thinking Adrien as a redneck...though I find it offensive for you to think him like that.)


He doesn't look nowhere like me. If you want someone like Steph, come online around 4-5pm (-5 GMT) and you'll see.

So that was your old pic? Do you mind me putting it in my porn folder?


Tremble with fear and excitement.

Don't correct the Goddess...I kinda failed there, but I'm getting there to crack her open.

Cannot look at it Says I do not have permission.

"If you play with the Devil, your day will come to pay..." (Nikki Sixx, famous 80s philosopher in leather pants)


Well, the general physionomy and the nice gaze. I thought CJ was being flattering. Actually, to be serious, I kind of picture Steph as you. The first person thing, not very surprisingly. BTW, I picture CJ's Chris as his avatar. Makes for weird pool parties.


Then my lawyers will really be busy...


I wouldn't dare. I just asked for a little tiny bit of her wisdom, poor foreigner that I am.


Well, this is grown-up stuff; I think CJames sets the authorizations individually. A hefty lump of cash (a money transfer to the Cayman Islands) should solve the problem. Oh, and maybe a note from your parents. ;)

SPOT ON! He is pretty much like me...some stuffs are real. Some aren't...just mostly what I dreamed that they could've happened somewhere in my life.

Now the photos...I collect them good before I write about them...so I won't forget their facial features (eye colors, hair colors, etc.)

Steph...



Ben...



Krist...



Jake...



Matt...(doesn't he look like a little devil?)



Adrien...



Julien...(when he doesn't have his hair dyed black)



Loïc....

Nicely done, Cool-one! That chapter was a lot of fun.

Quite right.

I think the Steph pic Jack posted does share some features with his pics. What do others think?

I like Jacks vision of guys

I'll take it you managed to see the hunk of the Poconos eventually.

No sighs.

Not me. I don't have ear piercings.


I like a Drew who likes my vision.

I think my photo of "Ben" is closer than yours, because Ben is described as having a developed chest, which your Ben does not appear to have.

His chest is toned...not developed. I said before...I pick a photo of a character that I want to be before writing. So I have Ben right to the spot.


And a sneak preview what could happen in the next chapter (I just need to type fifteen pages of notebook paper into the computer...)

[...] We quickly walked past Adrien's room, Ben gasped loudly. Adrien stood next to his bed, wide-eyed with Lo­ïc at his crotch, giving him a bj.

"f**K Ben!" Adrien jumped to stuff his good-sized stick back in his jeans. Loïc appeared unfazed by this whole event.[...]

Any theories what would happen?

Alright, this is the first time that I've posted here, but I just wanted to say a few things...

I LOVE THIS STORY!! (Excuse the caps... I got excited...) It's on my favorites list, and everytime there is an update it brightens my day.

Also, the French is my favorite part. I haven't taken the language since high school, but I'm pleased everytime I'm able to understand without the translation. (It means I DID learn something... Madame would be so proud....)

It also makes me really want to continue with my French education. Perhaps next semester? I'll have to see if it fits into my schedule.

Anyway, Keep up the great work! I can't wait to read more!

Thanks Adrian!



Jesus guys...no one cared about my hint?

It could cause some odd situations, that's for sure. LoL

First and foremost, Adrien is going to feel very unsatisfied! Well, he will, once he gets over his embarrassment. Does Adrien have leanings we were not previously made aware of or did his lady friend leave him with a set of blue balls?

With Loic, no less. The age of consent in Canada is 14 so Adrien hasn't gotten himself into a legal pickle....as it were.

I say, "Way to go, Loic!" Loic's going to be an RCMP officer when he grows up. They always get their man.

Ben would certainly have Adrien by the short and curlies! That's my favourite part! I'm sure Ben won't take too much advantage of the situation!

That's what happens when you leave horny boys alone in the big city. I love it!

Conner

OMG, I totally just noticed it.

I had to read it a few times to makes sure that I was getting it right. WHAT?!?!?!?!?

Apparently Adrien (Oooh, a different spelling than mine.) is harboring some same sex attraction. I'm betting he just got shut down by his date, and had to erm, "release".

Could it be a dream? It certainly is a surprise since Adrien had not given any hint that he was into boys. Or is it Adrien's unknown twin brother? Or Julien wearing an Adrien's mask. We'll wait patiently for the answer Jack will certainly provide us in due time.

Finally I got some attentions


That's all you can say?

Jesus...I expected more than you.

Another author trying to have his readers write the story for him... And through relentless taunting. If this works, you should get a patent on your method, Jack.

If you haven't noticed my previous posts, I already finished Chapter 15 in notebook before I gave out the hint for my readers so they can make their minds go wild as I take my time to type 25 pages of notebook (halfway there, should be done tonight).

http://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewsto...&chapter=15

Ta-ta