Be careful about what you gonna say about Longueuil but I guess you're right, Longueuil could be considered like being a neighborhood of montreal

and about you having to do some more work,, don'T tell me that you're lazy.

Great chapter, Frosty!!

I loved the learning-to-drive-a-standard scene; very realistic!

The bit about no pumping your own gas in JErsey was a great touch (it's quite true, too)

Loved the teasing and the coming out to Amanda.

Okay, one bit made me do a huge double-take;



I think you meant B. Speeding up if you start to hydroplane is definitly NOT a good idea.

I guess me and Sharon shouldn't be driving.

Hey!! I drive just fine, thank you very much. And it sounded like a logical answer to me.

'Lead Foot Lucy'

Hey, i would of picked A too...

Another awesome chapter jack!

-Mike

I beg to differ...Mrs-I-Got-A-Ticket-For-Speeding-Last-Year.

And my record is so clean so far.

I can't believe you remember that!! And it was one of those sneaky camera tickets so it doesn't really count.

Even if a cop had caught you with a radar gun, it would've been still sneaky.

Next time keep an eye on for "speeding camera" zone signs. Well I dunno if they do that there...but here, they're thinking about putting cameras up and put up signs warning us about it beforehand. I think it's nice of them...I'd hate to see a ticket in the mail.

I guess I'll keep writing tonight. I don't feel like going to downtown but I won't let myself stay home all day...so I'm just going to the mall to look for xmas sales and get my groceries. I'll have a lot of free time since school is over and what's left are the exams in two weekends.

I read through your story, it's nice and well, but I wonder if you involve any deaf characters in the story, no?? Also, I can't wait for the Chapter 22 to be released!!

Thanks.

And I'm in my lazy period now. My next chapter has been untouched since the end of 2007. Damn school.

you should really get off the tv for a while just long enough to finish your next chapter, frosty. Or maybe you spend too much time in bed with your bf, now that it's winter, who know . Either way, get back at writing will ya, pretty pretty please

I agree with F.C. (Frenchcanadian, Can I call you F.C. or Frenchy??) you should start writing more chapters because there are more fans waiting for ya to continue the story!!

Oh I didn't signed,, you can call me Frenchcanadian, or simply by my name sacha, try to avoid Frenchy tho, it sounds too much like I'd come from France,,, (no offence intended to Bondwritter)

sacha

The Frenchcanadians don't particularly like the French.

Oh Sachie... I don't even have TV. I told you... I don't have cable. At least I managed to answer your PM after waiting so long to do so.


Neither do I. I've been hating them with passion these days for a few good reasons.

Just don't call me and Sacha "les mecs" and you'll be fine.

I would be interested in reading a story with a deaf character.

uh oh, don't want to know why you hate that word

I'd say Ch. 22nd is 2/3 or 3/4 done.

I used the week off last week to write up a 1/3 of it.

Finally,, can't wait to read it,

I'll throw off a few hints.

*Matt get soaked after putting a carrot for a snowman penis
*Washer sex? Involving who?
*Close call coming out to a mother or friend?
*Ben murders a...?
*Steph probably got who pregnant?
*And Ben makes a "drama" out of it.

Let your mind go wild and answer me! I'm aiming to finish this during the weekend.

This makes view number 11,000 for this topic....

Hmm steph gets Ben preggers or Krist

Washer sex, like on a washer machine, that you attach a object to?

Chapter 22 makes it clear, that Matt's a total perve, and might be bi.

If you say so Drewie. Only Sharon and me will know by tonight.

Just so you know, my 'tonight' stops at 11PM.

Sharon

Finally, this mean that eventually,,, I'll get to read the chapter,,,

Well, I submit it for editting first before my betareaders read it. You'll have to wait a day or two.

Sharon: Ok, for you is tomorrow. My night stops somewhere between 1am to 7am.

http://www.gayauthors.org/efiction/viewsto...&chapter=22

Knew it which one got preggers

now im hoping that Ben's mom won't kill Step.

Good news.


School is over for me for the next five months.


Once I get back to my boring-as-hell-but-$300-per-week-to-sit-on-my-ass-almost-all-day summer job, I'll start writing more often.


Thanks for your patience.

...............Looking forward to it!

Goals to do.

When I get a new damn adapter to charge my laptop to get it working again (it's been THREE WEEKS...they told me three days but f**K C'MON!!!)...

I'll try to...

1) Write several chapters over the summer.
2) Start finishing up the story. I say...10 more chapters. Maybe 15 maximum. The point is...it's time to start planning an end because I've been writing this for almost two years now with 22 chapters.
3) Reread all of the chapters I wrote and write down some notes to make out in the future chapters. I've been slacking off for too long now that I'm forgetting some parts of my story. Blame school and I'm a MAJOR procrastinator. Not a good trait. lol

Those are just goals. Not promises. I don't make promises if I doubt I could keep them.

Finally... I need betareaders. Bondwriter is hardly around these days, so I hope I could count on FrenchCanadian as my French editor­/betareader. I know I could count on Sharon for editing. I adore her... CJames is getting busy it seems, but PM me if you still want to volunteer. If not. It's ok...it's just voluntary work.

Thanks for dismissing me without even asking. Now my team of hitmen is back on your trail. *grunts, growls, grumbles...* I quit being a postwhore (expensive therapy...) but I still spare some time zetareading. Even for animals.

Not dismissing you per se, but I wasn't sure if you still want to do it. You're still on my list.

Ok, no more betareaders. Now I got four. Thanks for volunteering and we'll keep in touch!

Note to self: Fix the trash can mistake in Chapter one to refer to Steph's bedroom trash can.

Thanks to GaryInMiami for pointing this out for me.

Hi Bondwriter.

I look forward to working with you. I love Jack's story and I'm honored to be part of his team. I will always defer to you. You're the zeta. I'm just a beta.

Jack, I've made it to Chapter 14 in two days. Not bad. I'm getting a great French tutorial in the process. Your characters seem so real to me. In fact the entire story plays out like a movie in my mind. When that happens I know I've come across a great story.

Note to Jack: Keep in mind you've got to let Steph's mom find the progress report but not the razor blades.

You better watch out for Sharon too.

She's the editor and I take her editing magic like gold...nothing else.

Looking forward to chapter 23,

Heh Moving On is making me want to learn french...

She's done a good job of editing for you through 22 chapters so I don't need to watch out for her, I just need to learn from her.

Again, looking forward to chapter 23, I think Birma would be happy for Steph since he found someone

Birna.


Leomonain: Sorry I didn't notice you but I just want to thank you for the comment and reading the story. Keep posted.



Ok, goal one has been achieved.

It took TWO MONTHS to get my goddamned new adapter for my laptop. Finally I can go to my chapter files.

It's rereading time and make a lot of notes. As I said, even though I am ashamed to say this, I've been forgetting some of my story plots. Blame school and my overloaded brain.

Beta #1--who thinks the real reason for the delay is Jack's a slacker--is standing ready sir!

Here's a brief refresher to get you back up to speed Jack. At the end of Chapter 22 Wilma has just killed herself after coming home early and finding Barney bottoming for Fred. Betty heard the fatal screams as a rapid-fire woodpecker gun hit Wilma in the neck and jets over to Fred's house in time to see a scene filled with blood, gore, the bird flapping around the room, and a naked Fred plugged into Barney who's on the sofa with his legs in the air screaming, "harder, faster."

Keep that dirt out of my story you perv. Next time use my characters, but watch it or I'll sue you for copyright violations.

Opps Birna. Flintstones characters go at it, is to disturbing.

I rather like my warped take on fan fiction. Until Jack comes up with something better that'll have to keep you all entertained.

Just started reading this and am really enjoying it so far. It's different. I'm only on chapter 3 and I like where the story is going. It has me laughing a lot.

I'm not sure if you noticed a slight "Freudian slip" in chapter 3, mind you... if you didn't notice, I'm sure your boyfriend would if you let him re-read it. Here's a hint: "J'arrive" means "I'm coming" in the G-rated sense of the word. "Je viens" means "I'm coming" in the, erm, not-so-G-rated sense of the word. Since Ben was speaking to his mom in that scene, I'm guessing it's a typo, but given what was going on at the time, maybe not?

Edit: Just an update to say I have now stopped reading your story, when I got to the blatant racism of the characters. I was pretty disgusted by it, and couldn't really read on as I'd lost all identification with them. Too bad, as it was a good story otherwise, and was fun seeing my city through the eyes of a tourist. But really, was the racism necessary?

and gary lets wait, no more flinstones fan fiction Please

Think Steph's mom will find out about Steph and ben soon.

What racism? It's hard to be racist and have an Asian character in the story.

And I have a Vietnamese hubby and I'm also practically married to his family. Does that make me racist? :s Well, no...my characters might be acting like that, not me. I'm just making the characters human actually and no one is 100% politically correct. I hope you understand that. But to be honest, I'm not trying to put *very* offensive things in my story, such as the approval of Nazism and the Holocaust...now that's really crossing the line. But the concept of racism and so on is rather relative and it's not easy to tell from a board spectrum. However, poking fun at few ethnicities are very normal in a society and no one is really innoncent of it. A lot of Montrealers make fun of the Chinese people in Chinatown or make stupid jokes about the orthorox Jews in Outremont. Stupid yes, but it's normal and I like making my characters very real-life-like and not some pure fanastry in a ever-perfect world. I'll apperciate your input so I can review it just for everyone's sake.

"Je viens"... Where is it? It's a common verb for everyone to use and I would like to see what kind of context is it in. I might have put it there on purpose and Ben's mom may not have noticed the double-meaning of it.

In defense of Jack. I was initially put off by the same comments that I perceived as being racist. I even mentioned it to Jack.

Eventually I realized I had to separate the author from his characters.

Jack doesn't seem like a racist to me, and maybe his characters aren't really either. But the fact is that far too many people talk like that and for Jack to brazenly include comments like that in a story adds an element of realism to the story. I don't enjoy seeing comments like that. But let's face it, comments like that are made all the time.

I like to think of myself as being open-minded both racially and ethnically. I try never to judge someone by those facts alone. And yet on occasion my imperfect brain starts on a tirade against the stupid f-ing Cuban who just cut me off in traffic. Hey, it's not just Cubans who can't drive here in Miami. We have a ton of racial and ethnic diversity here (A-Good-Thing™) and nobody seems to know how to drive properly.

Can you honestly say you've never had some kind of potentially racist thoughts? Until you can I think we should give Jack the benefit of the doubt here.

..............I really don't remember the "racist" portion of the story, it would have stood out to me. But if a character was being racist how can you blame the author? You have a writer who is simply being realistic with todays world.

It wasn't a racial comment so much as it was an ethnic comment Ben. Both regarding Jews. Once when the guys were picking a dime up off the street and commenting that they felt like Jews. The second when the boys were in Canada and driving through an Hasidic section of town and mentioning how scary the people looked.

I'm Jewish and a lot of the Hasidim scare the hell out of me. I was stoned by them when I tried to walk up the steps to visit Dome of the Rock in Jerusalem. They look flat-out creepy with those black coats, black hats and especially the payoth. To me that section of the story was just a casual observation without any religious malice intended.

.....Fanaticism is scary in any religion, the dime is an old joke (Hey! wait a minute it's supposed to be a quarter, that's why we wandered for forty years) The Hasidics are pretty much right up there. Even though this huge kid (a Golith) knew that A) I was an inspector. b- I knew the Rabbi very well. C) I even went to their temple sometimes....every time I pulled up to the place he would come out to challange me. It got to the point I would park on the property, but far away just to watch the dumbass come running and puffing!