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This is one of my favorite stories ever! I am suffering from a chronic medical condition and this story has helped me heaps
Thank you so so so so so so much!!!!Date: 08/06/2008 10:47 AM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: Steven Keiths
Altimexis,
This is my second read-through of this story. It for me is one of the most beautifully written love stories, interwoven with extremely accurate and detailed information of the challenges encounterd by Brian. It is realistically told--no fluff--yet has warm and tender moments.
I reccommend this story highly.
Warm regards,
--Steven Keiths
Date: 07/20/2008 11:41 AM
Title: Reunion Reviewer: Jey
OKAY! I'm halfway through and even though I was "ehh" at first because of how speedy the "love at first sight" thing went down, this is simply freakin amazing. Theyre so right for eachother, especially to go through all that crap and suffer so much just to see eachother... it only proves that they deeply love eachother. 15 more chapters to see how things turn out though...
Date: 07/12/2008 05:33 AM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: yukibi
I'm really touched by this story
I'm an asian and in my country, homosexuamity isn't accepted by most of people. Here, gay teens have to cope with many difficulties to admit themselves and esp to come out. Most of people in my country think that gay love is based on human desires, not love and it won't be last long. I'm really worried and upset about it.
Sometimes I wish that Brian and Aeron would be real people to help us. I really admire their bravery and their love.
Thank for writting this story.
Date: 05/25/2008 08:12 PM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: dyllane and brad
Hi guys a lot of you who have posted on the GA group would have read the reviews of this awsome story
they were written by DYLLANE my loving and wondeful boyfriend its with great sadness i write this to imform you he lost his battle with the brain tumors that eventualy killed him he had survied two heart attacks luekemia and a car samsh he had also comr through two comas in his young and oh so very brief life
DILLY i miss you and allway will love you untill were together in echothers embrace for all eternity,
I love you
BradnDyllsxxx123
There is a destiny that makes us Brothers,
None goes his way alone;
All that we send into the hearts of others, Comes back into our own.
(Author unknown)
DYLLANE "DYLLS" "DILLY" CZACC -TAYYLOR
02.06.1991 - 08.28.07
Date: 09/10/2007 04:22 PM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: Dismas aka Ben
This story brings teas to my eys because it eminded me when I had my first bf in 6th grade and we hit rough patch's in our realationship but we lasted and made it this far till today we're still together
Date: 08/16/2007 09:42 PM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: Moutons Noire
For a first chapter I liked it and I can't wait to read the rest, though that will have to wait till tomorrow because I'm tired and it's definitely bed time! It was catchy and I loved the whole fantasy/love-at-first-sight. It's romantic. One thing though that irked me about this chapter (I don't know if you fix it as you go on, but I'll say it anyways) you use the word 'dick' a lot. You only exchanged it for another once and then went straight back to using it. Try using other descriptive words (beyond dick and penis) such as member, organ, ect. It just gets slightly trite to see the word dick repeated over and over. Everything else is beautifully written and I can't wait to read the rest.
Date: 07/18/2007 11:11 PM
Title: Breaking the Ice Reviewer: adubya09
This is actually the third time I've tried to read this story, but I simply can't make it any farther than this. In the first attempt I had to stop at chapter one. The second and third tries I could barely endure this chapter, and then I called it quits. If I can't get into a story or it is altogether unreadable, I just leave it alone.
This story is completely unbelievable... well, the first chapters are, and those are the most vital to the story! Readers should be hooked from the very beginning of the story- you can't expect them to stick around in good faith that your story will improve in the coming chapters; you have to capture them from the getgo. This story had an unfortunately weak start- it had no punch, no hook. I was bored instantly.
The characters were completely one dimensional and the writing offered no hope of improvement. The author had several chances to change and catch my attention, but the poor writing and character development was a complete turnoff for me. Aaron and Brian's first encounter was completely unrealistic and not at all romantic or imaginative- do you expect me to believe that two young men who had not previously believed themselves to be gay would all the sudden meet in a hallway and make out? More questionably, Brian calls Aaron out for masturbating and creaming all over his clothes before kissing him? That's just silly to me. First of all, even the simple realization of homosexual feelings would never happen in such a short period of time, and it really wouldn't happen with both boys. If that is what the author was going for- 'a love so strong that it broke self imposed social constructs in love at first sight'- he/she failed considerably. The reader can't be expected to guess at what the author is trying to do... in my case, I think I would be giving the writer a little too much credit.
This story is a disappointment, especially after reading the other reviews about it.
Author's Response: I would like to thank adubya09 for taking the time to write a constructive review of Love in a Chair, even if it is a negative one. Although I think a rating of only one star is a bit harsh, and I can cite a number of examples of other eFiction stories that are much more poorly written for a number of reasons, I don't believe that my story deserves a 5-star rating, either. I just hope that adubya09 rated it as such because he believes Love in a Chair is trash rather than to try to offset the other reviews.rnrnI agree that my story is not strong on character development. The characters are indeed a bit one-dimensional and this is a criticism leveled by my editors, as well as by a few others that have taken the time to email me directly. Unfortunately (or fortunately), I have a day job and I had a story I wanted to tell, but only so much time to write it. As it is, it took me more than a year to write, edit and finally post the story in its current form. I would have loved to have fully developed each of the major characters, giving them depth and making them more real. I could not have done so without cutting important plot elements. Would the story have been better left unwritten? That is a judgment to be made by the readers, and given the tremendous response I have received, I believe that there has been an audience for this story and that writing it was worthwhile.rnrnIs the story believable? I will accept the criticism that it is unlikely two teenagers would meet, realize they are gay and fall in love instantaneously. I cringe a bit when I read the initial chapters, as they are the least-well edited and my writing improved markedly over the course of the story. Still, I think they served an important purpose in introducing the readers to a couple of teenage boys who fall in love and face tragedy together. Love in a Chair is a story with a purpose and telling a story of how two boys fall in love was not the central theme. My intent was to introduce the characters, develop the setting for Brian's injury and establish a pattern of sexual involvement between the boys to serve as a contrast to what would come after the accident. I'm sorry if the initial chapters failed to capture some of my potential readers' interest, but of course some people have different tastes and it's impossible to satisfy everyone. I realize that an uplifting story about survival with a disability means little to a reader who is unable to get into the story in the first place.rnrnPerhaps someday I will expand Love in a Chair and more thoroughly develop the characters. In the meantime, I've started work on my next project, which will focus a lot more heavily on the characters and which will be much less linear.
Date: 07/03/2007 02:00 AM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: axel
Excellent! Well written. Great character development. Good story line. Some cliff hangers. I loved it! A really good love story.
Date: 06/30/2007 02:21 AM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: graeme
it was one of the best stories that i've ever read. i'm 14 and gay with only a few people that know but now i'm going to do what ever i want with who ever i want without caring who knows and who dosen't know. I thank you and congratulate yoou on such a marvolous story if only it ws true.
Date: 06/24/2007 09:10 AM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: PJ xxx
Fantastic.
Eagerly awaiting the next story.
Date: 06/13/2007 09:12 AM
Title: Pillow Talk Reviewer: Dismas aka Ben
This is a very good story that tells about true love and when I first read this story I gave it a 2 thumbs up and I give alot of credit to the preson who wrote this story and thanks for writing it.
Date: 06/11/2007 07:36 PM
Title: A Helping Hand Reviewer: dyllane and brad
YAY well done Brian n Aaron and good luck goes to Chuck & Billy and i hope with our heros love n friendship thier parents do fully love n support Chuck n Billy
xxx123 dyllsnbrad
Date: 06/06/2007 06:53 PM
Title: A Helping Hand Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
WOW! That was really amazing. Totally cool how you turned a chance encounter into something really meaningful.
Date: 06/06/2007 09:23 AM
Title: Recovery Reviewer: dyllane and brad
Awww it nice to see that Aaron really is starting to recover That boy sure had us worried for a time.you know the saddest thing is that young people like "Jimmy" are taught by family and friends it's ok to be hurtful towards gay people and aren’t actually taught that we are not freaks and we also have feelings too. I hope that "Jimmy's" mom has a talk with him and his friends when they get home. I also hope she is able to right the wrong that the boy has obviously been taught
Awww it nice to see that Aaron really is starting to recover
That boy sure had us worried for a time.
you know the saddest thing is that young people like "Jimmy" are taught by family and friends it's ok to be hurtful towards gay people and aren't actually taught that we are not freaks and we also have feelings too. I hope that "Jimmy's" mom has a talk with him and his friends when they get home. I also hope she is able to right the wrong that the boy has obviously been taught
love n huggles everyone xxx123
Date: 06/04/2007 09:09 AM
Title: Truth and Reconcilliation Reviewer: Cutie_Sagittarius
Yay!!! They got back 2gether!!!
Date: 05/25/2007 12:17 PM
Title: Hope and Despair Reviewer: Cutie_Sagittarius
AAAWWW no!!! I hope Brian's ok.
Date: 05/19/2007 07:49 AM
Title: Hope and Despair Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
AHHH! Wonderful Chapter. I really like where this is going... Drama Drama Drama.
Date: 05/19/2007 02:12 AM
Title: Coming Apart at the Seams Reviewer: Cutie_Sagittarius
Oh my God!!! No! Now I'm sad.
Author's Response: Hang in there - there's still hope!
Date: 05/12/2007 11:41 PM
Title: Trials and Tribulations Reviewer: dyllane and brad
hi all not been too good this last few weeks due to chest infections and famliy death but bouncing back brad asks me to say hi for him
is it me or has Brian now able to cum like normaly? I'm sure he came before but it stayed in his body and had to have Aaron chathertrise him quote from chapter 19 """A retrograde ejaculation. It probably went back into your bladder. Wanna check it out?"""
from chapter 24 ""Even though Aaron had already cum once that evening, it didn't take long - Aaron started pumping out spurt after spurt of his cum into the condom as Brian's spunk flew into the space between their bellies. Slowly, they came down from their high and just lay there looking into each other's eyes."
love and hugs n kisses to you all
from dylls n brad xxx123
Author's Response:
Yes, you raise a very important point, and the explanation was unfortunately lost "on the cutting room floor". In other words, I had some explanation of this in the first draft that was dropped in favor or adding other material.
Brian's ability to have a relatively normal ejaculation is perhaps wishful thinking on my part, but it does happen on occasion. The ability to have erections and complete intercourse in paraplegics is fairly high, thanks to the advent of Viagra and similar drugs. The ability to ejaculate probably occurs in less than 10%, so Brian is very lucky.
Most paraplegics can ejaculate with the aide of a vibrator, and based on this I suspect that many more could ejaculate during sex with a little more help from their partners than heterosexual women are used to. In other words, Aaron's good.
Date: 05/08/2007 04:03 PM
Title: Familly & Friends Reviewer: dyllaneandbrad
Chapter 18 families and friends.
Well we had to say we both enjoyed this chapter as well as the other 17.
I'm sorry this is more than a review but a observation of sorts please bear with us and sorry for use off the words marked with .**
My Dad kind of let me down when I came out to him in fact he left home and tried to have me "FIXED" at a religious camp. It failed I'm glad to say. At times the people that are supposed to love you/us the most are often the ones who don't show the love we need or fail they just us at our most vulnerable times in our lives either by design or by accident or by pressures of how will the Guys at work or church think of me if they find out my son is gay/or a fagot** .(sorry for choice of word**)
A lot of our instincts or behaviour as we grow up come from the way were taught as youngsters. Very small kids don't see color at first. If you place some two yr olds in a play pen or room together they will happily play and interact in a loving way and even hug each other openly or even bed down and sleep hugging each other.
As the children grow up and if one of the children is shown a racist point of view or a bigoted point of view then often the child becomes racist or bigoted themselves as well not really understanding why. Or if a child is told not to play with the disabled kid or the "queer** kid" (sorry for choice of word**)then often the bigotry is transferred to the next generation often a gay kid is a bully to other gays or a racist as a cover in fear of punishment of retribution from family or friends.
Although this is not all ways the case and of course there are always those who do turn out to do the right thing.
My dad has finally come round although he's still not 100% happy with my sexuality or me having relationship he's more accepting towards us both as a couple. and classes Brad as a son . Especially during my illnesses brad has also show him that in fact it is love and not the fact Brad want to get his rocks off.
It transpire his hate is more to do with him being scared that we will be hurt and maybe killed but in his way of protection he hurt us both far, far worse than a school bully or bigot could have done. Just as Brian's Mom and Dad were at first so against their son being gay and having a gay relationship, but in this wonderfully written chapter it seems the fact the two of them are now changing their outlook as they see their love and commitment the boys are showing towards each other.
Also the fact that Alan is gay or now at least bisexual and he is able to admit this fact openly is a huge step forward in their family healing.
We're glad that and hope that both the boys and families can continue to over come this part of their live but I think they may face problems as we often all face some prejudices in our own lives.
Once again thank you Altimexis
Date: 03/31/2007 08:57 PM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: kenewaye
LOVE IN A CHAIR
Excellent story. Story shows love between two teens and that love surmounts all circumstances and helps getting through a situation easier with the love and support of their boyfriend. Very uplifting, kind and gentle. Love it.
Date: 03/26/2007 07:14 PM
Title: Rehab Reviewer: dyllaneandbrad
Life in a chair is not only well written but emotionally accurate portrayal of how the hopes, Fear, and lives of two teenaged boys cope with gay life with one of them able bodied and other in a wheelchair .
You will I’m sure find yourselves on an emotional roller coaster ride that will have you going from happiness, sadness, anger, and even guilt. The strong underlying love that is so obvious throughout the story will touch the most hardened of hearts.
From a personal level I found myself feeling the both highs and lows of their relationship. The stresses and problems of being a young gay teen who is now in a wheel chair after an auto smash . Being told that I can no longer walk was not only scary but made me feel angry and withdraw.
The uncertainties about sex being too afraid to ask the question. The quiet reflection. Times of utter despair & loneness. The what if or he wont need me that will and often creep into relationships. Altimexis writes about these very topics and is able to bring forth the love shown by Aaron toward Brian, made me realize that I too could learn from the story and with my boyfriends help and love and encouragement that I too, sorry We both together could have a future. If you to know someone or is someone who is going through life in a chair, be it Gay, Lesbian, Straight or Bisexual then I can honestly hand on heart say please, please read this story and even if your not in the situation as both Brian, Aaron Brad and myself are in then you too will get something more then a good read.
Date: 03/24/2007 11:04 AM
Title: Waiting Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
Awesome job once again. Keep it up!!
Date: 03/08/2007 02:42 AM
Title: Falling in Love Reviewer: ieshwar
It's getting better and better. Cool. I'm really enjoying it. Keep it up.
Ieshwar
Date: 03/02/2007 07:36 AM
Title: Salvage Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
As usual, beautiful work. Keep it up!!
Date: 03/02/2007 03:24 AM
Title: Emergency! Reviewer: Sinbad
Help - I've run out of tissues!
A great story even if it is playing havoc with my emotions. Thanks for writing it - keep up the good work!
Date: 02/27/2007 06:54 AM
Title: The GSA Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
As always, a wonderful job. This is really one of my favorite storys here. Keep it up.
Date: 02/08/2007 03:41 PM
Title: Breaking the Ice Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
Once again, really good job!!
Date: 02/03/2007 11:49 AM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: Adrian Michaels
oh, I thought this was awesome!! Keep it up!!
Date: 02/02/2007 10:19 AM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: xTeddyx
amazing. great story...Keep writing (:
Date: 01/09/2007 02:57 PM
Title: Awakenings Reviewer: TOPBOI
awweee I love the way this is starting out :-) ! !!
Date: 01/08/2007 03:52 PM
Title: Confusion Reviewer: shdowgod
Good Story! Looking forward to chapter 2 and beyond.
Could have done without Tom Cruise though :-p
Steve
Date: 01/07/2007 11:05 PM
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