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#1

*HJ*

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Posted 04 April 2010 - 08:14 PM

Questions? Comments? Concerns? I'm here for ya. ^_^
Smiles,
*HJ*
My Stories: Damp Sunshine, Always, Hibiscus.

The worst way to miss someone is to have them sitting right next to you & know you can never have them.



#2

*HJ*

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Posted 25 December 2010 - 06:50 PM




Title: Falling out of the closet
Reviewer: Nephylim

Hmm Jordan sounds like a good guy so I think he would love Drew no matter
what. I wouldn't be surprised about a little antagonism with Luke though. I
don't think that he would make Drew choose but who knows. Awesome as usual
hunAuthor's Response:
Thanks Nephy!
Date: 12/14/2010 01:56 AM



Title: Falling out of the closet
Reviewer: hh5

Mystery who shot Rose, Waiting for Drew to visit jordan, what david next
move, still wonders how much jordan changed, sounds like he's in a bad
placeAuthor's Response:
Poor Jordan...he would have alot to deal with if he was to return. Rose...hmm
well, we all know she is pissed. Jeff is furious, Luke is fed-up, Drew is well
Drew, and poor Daivid is about to have a mental breakdown, go hide under his bed
in the fetal position, and hug his stuffed teddy bear.
Date: 12/13/2010 02:37 AM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: hh5

ok i can be wrong but I'll say the David Father.
But since not all the facts are in ... the issue can be bigger than I have
imagined.
Wow Luke changed a bit more. Wonder if Drew can get use to that?
Author's Response:
Not giving anything away hehe.
I think Drew will cope just fine.
Date: 09/06/2010 07:49 PM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: Nephylim

It was after Drew’s with rose that he caught Luke by the arm as
he headed for the exit .... that doesn't make sense. I reckon you got too
excited writing it. i mean hell it's exciting to read.
That was an awesome chapter. It makes me shiver to think of what happened
that night. We are definitely getting closer to the answers though. I wonder
what will happen next... will David join forces with Luke and Drew to find the
truthAuthor's Response:
Haha I guess i did get excited. I best go and fix that.
Thanks, Luke knows who is behind it he just can't remember just yet. David
well we never know what he is going to do. I myself don't even know till I get
there.
Date: 09/06/2010 11:21 AM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: Elezbed
Good story and at last, it is a coming out of the closet that everybody
will remember ....Good storyAuthor's Response:
Thanks Hun.
Date: 09/06/2010 08:25 AM



Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: hh5
Is there more?Author's Response:
Yes Dear, there is more. I just have yet to figure out what that is yet.
Don't fret it will get finished.
Date: 06/01/2010 12:46 PM



Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: hh5
Oh wouldn't things be even out if David was outed. I know it would change
things. It would be a matter if any one would treat David differently.
Date: 04/05/2010 10:52 PM
[Respond]


Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: acht-acht

Noooo - what´s happening? Cliffhangers are evil. You got me so so curious now
about Ty and David. David seems so irrationally crazy angry, there just has to
be something else eating him.
And the phone call? Jordan? I hope he comes back.Author's
Response:
Ahhh, yes David is a tough one to figure, and as for jordan...well... you'll
just have to wait and see.
Date: 04/05/2010 02:44 PM



Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: Nephylim

Oh my goodness. What happened? This story is so complex and so
sweet. You've got us so used to being concerned for Luke and Drew that
we've forgotten there are other people who could get into trouble... like
Rose. I like Rose :( Nice storytelling.Author's
Response:
Thank you so much! As for what happened :) you will just have to wait and
see.
Date: 04/05/2010 06:03 AM



Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: dachcr
This is becoming a rally good story! Cannot wait to see how the guys are
going to treat David.
Date: 04/05/2010 03:00 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: jhol7689
Aww I love it Luke and drew make a cute couple. Now it makes me wonder if
David is in the closet. Can't wait for the next chapter =]
Date: 03/15/2010 02:15 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: hh5

more to help the merrier
Date: 03/14/2010 10:59 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: Nephylim

Interesting. the story is moving along. Things are I think about
to get interesting. No. They have always been interesting... let's say...
exciting again. :) Sweet. I like stories with a lot of dialogue and
that chapter was so easy to read. Although I think you would get some
flack if there were too many like this. Author's Response:
Thank you! Yeah, this chapter was very dialogue heavy. I just needed things
to develop a bit quicker and that was the most effective way to do it. I wanted
to keep it simple =). There wont be many of these chapters. This may be the only
one like this..who knows?
Date: 03/14/2010 08:11 AM



Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: Elezbed
well now they have two more friends ^^!Good chapter and write
more
Date: 03/14/2010 04:01 AM
[Respond]


Title: David Reviewer: hh5

Gosh the mystery of David anger on Luke
What can the reason be
Date: 02/19/2010 11:08 AM
[Respond]


Title: David Reviewer: Nephylim

That was a really good chapter. I love Rose. She's been a bit of
an in the background character until now but she has really come out and shone
in this one. Luke is certainly lucky with his friends.
Looking forward to the next installment - I am VERY interested to know what
Drew has figured out and what he can do with it.
Date: 02/19/2010 02:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Wyndham

Wonderful! I Really enjoyed it, thank you.Author's Response:
You are very welcome!
Date: 02/01/2010 09:54 AM



Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: hh5
Passion at its best!!Definitely Luke on his way to healing and be loved
renewed
Date: 01/27/2010 09:54 PM
[Respond]


Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Nephylim

It's going absolutely fine. That was a very touching chapter. There was
fun too but the focus was the emotion that the guys were releasing and it was
very sweet. I wonder what's the deal with David... it gets more and more
intriguing. I suspect that he might have been the one to kill Tyler and
that's why he wants Luke dead... because he might figure it out. We'll see if
I'm right :)
Date: 01/27/2010 02:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: Nephylim


That was breathtaking. So sweet. I loved it. Drew was very
brave and it paid off. I am loving the snake... always wanted one but never got
around to it. There is still a lot of tension in the air, what with David
and Jordan and I have a feeling this story has a ways to go but just for now
everything is calm and all is right with the world :)
Date: 01/17/2010 08:51 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: Elezbed
So cute... I wonder if the snake was a pet that someone let it go in their
house to make them afraid...Good chapter, write more!
Date: 01/17/2010 01:30 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: hh5
now i can't wait till these two make the bed squeek jane awake!!!
Date: 01/16/2010 09:31 PM
[Respond]


Title: Settling Down Reviewer: Nephylim

It's coming along fabulously. This has to be one of my favourite
stories... yes it is definitely one of my favourite stories and I get excited
when I see a new chapter posted. I am so in love with Luke and Drew is
such a sweetheart. Keep up the good work.
Date: 01/14/2010 11:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Settling Down Reviewer: hh5
great chapter. both are getting acquainted with each other. Luke is slow to
settle in and drew is gaining more friends.
Date: 01/14/2010 09:47 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Nephylim


Ahhhh. that is so beautiful. There is no way they are going to be
able to ignore that for long. It's going to be beautiful... well if they
survive long enough. We still don't know Luke's full story and we don't
know why David is so all set to kill him... so much more to come and I can't
wait
Date: 01/11/2010 05:55 PM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: acht-acht


It´s great. Hurry up, I wanna know what´s next. And i want to hear more about
asshole David.
Cheers, Clara
Date: 01/11/2010 09:04 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: pumukli

Great story! I like it very much! Thanks.
Date: 01/11/2010 01:57 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Ricky

A great read. I can't wait for the next one.
Date: 01/11/2010 01:32 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Elezbed
No don't stop here, I want to know what happen after and how David is going
to react! Good chapter and write more ^^!
Date: 01/11/2010 01:17 AM
[Respond]


Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: Ricky

Another tender moment. Likeing it better with every installment.
Date: 01/11/2010 12:39 AM
[Respond]


Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Ricky

Saweet! Is he too sore to even suck tongues? I better turn the page
quickly!
Date: 01/10/2010 11:58 PM
[Respond]


Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Ricky

Likewise. Getting better and better. I just hope the bad guys get theirs. And
then there is Jordan to find.
Date: 01/10/2010 11:30 PM
[Respond]


Title: Roomies Reviewer: Ricky

Getting Juicier but now I am getting concerned. David and his bunch haven't
shown up in the hospital yet and brass knuckles break bones!

So off I go to the next chapter.
Date: 01/10/2010 11:17 PM
[Respond]


Title: He Dreams in Anguish Reviewer: Ricky

Great. I'm not so sure I would have stopped where he did. No witnesses and
they were already down. I think I would have finished the job, put the piece in
David's hands and left him to take the blame and die of his wounds.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:58 PM
[Respond]


Title: Last Words Reviewer: Ricky

The only complaint I have is the damn chapters are so sissy short! Bust out
with some man size chapters. You no sooner become ensconced in the fantasy of it
before you have to return to reality.
A great story LineAuthor's Response:
I'm not sure if I should be offended or not. I'm leaning more toward
offended.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:24 PM



Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts
Reviewer: Ricky

Awesome. Getting sweeter.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:00 PM
[Respond]


Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: Ricky

Delightful. Thanks
Date: 01/10/2010 09:40 PM
[Respond]


Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: Ricky

Another Great Chapter.Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 01/10/2010 09:10 PM



Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: hh5
yes very very nice - wonderfully work out good idea of what goes
between the two.Either a combination of lovers or brothers.
Date: 01/10/2010 12:29 AM
[Respond]


Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Elezbed
Don't stop here!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to know what happened after this
sentence!Good chapter and I wonder how you are going to make Luke loved by
the inhabitants...
Date: 01/09/2010 02:09 AM
[Respond]


Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: hh5
Is Luke younger than Drew?Gosh I think its still a mystery of what
really happen with Luke and his father. Inspite of what every one thinks.
Surprise that there wasn't a trial or Luke being in jail?? So it must have been
an accident rather a murder?Author's Response:
Yes, Luke is younger then Drew, but not by much. At the
very start of the story it is Drew's 18th birthday. The death of
Luke's father was an accident (that was mentioned by someone...Rose I
believe) although nearly everyone in the town seems to think otherwise for
reason that will become quite clear later. There is one detail that no one
knows about that 'accident'. Luke will go into detail about it in
a later chapter. I hope I cleared everything up for you. If you got anymore
questions feel free to ask!
Date: 01/08/2010 08:50 PM



Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Nephylim

I think it's awesome as ever. You are really keeping the tension going. I am
in suspense the whole time not quite sure what is going to happen next.
Very nice.Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Date: 01/08/2010 05:25 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: hh5
Nice Chapter but I wonder do I have to worry about Drew and or Luke from
here on.Author's Response:
I'm not quite sure what you mean. Things may seem okay for the moment but do
not think David will stay dormant for long. These two have a long rocky
road ahead of themselves.
Date: 01/07/2010 11:47 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Kodes100
I really like this tale.Also I don't think you need to keep apologizing
for mistakes.The few mistakes have not interrupted the flow of the
story.I appreciate your ackowledging them - but you are starting to be
paranoid & that can't help the creative process.Be a little easier on
yourself.I am an avid reader & I think your writing is pretty
good.You will learn the more you write.Bravo to you for
"Always."Author's Response:
Thank you, I tend to harbor on my mistakes. Thanks for your words of wisdom
and for your positive feedback about always! It means the world to me!
Date: 01/07/2010 04:09 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Nephylim

If I did I didn't notice, I was too caugh up in the story. It's rare I read
every word no matter what I am reading... occupational hazzard... but I read
every word of this. It's an edge of the seat story and I can't wait to see what
happens next.
Date: 01/07/2010 01:13 PM
[Respond]


Title: Roomies Reviewer: hh5
oh now its starting to get juicy
Date: 01/05/2010 11:43 PM
[Respond]


Title: Roomies Reviewer: Nephylim

This is an excellent chapter. I feel so sorry for Luke... even his own
family!!!
As I say and keep saying... yeah grammar adds polish and makes a story easier
to read but at the end of the day it's all about the story and how it is told...
and this is a good one. I am looking fowards... with some trepidation...
to what comes next.
As a slight observation I would say that it feels to me as if Luke is
recovering a little too quickly from two serious beatings and an abdominal
stab wound (albeit a shallow one) resulting in surgery... all in 24
hours. But that's just an observation and not necessarily a
criticism. As was commented on lately... I must like hospital beds because
my characters seem to spend a lot of time in them :pAuthor's
Response:
Haha Thank you. Yeah, I know it seems a bit odd for him to recover so
quickly, but it is rather tricky to make this event tie into the plot. The
biggest reason he has made such a speedy recovery is my lack of
wanting to drag anything out. I'll see what i can do because honestly i see
your point and it bothers me as well. Thank you!!! Much love!
Date: 01/05/2010 05:46 PM



Title: Last Words Reviewer: dachcr

This is really great - everyone needs to have someone special to look
after. Hope that Davids father will realise that his son is not the best
person on earth.
Cannot wait to see how these two new friends will help each other always.

Date: 01/05/2010 12:40 AM
[Respond]


Title: Last Words Reviewer: hh5
I do hope to find out what David has against Luke. I also guess its going
to take awhile before Drew finds out about jordan. I just hope David and the
police keep quiet.Author's Response:
All will be revealed in time =p. You are correct it will be awhile before
Drew's brother issue is brought back into the story.
Date: 01/04/2010 09:41 PM



Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts
Reviewer: Nephylim


Aaagh... bloody hell. Again I am left breathless and I have to go to
work today :) Excellent story. Fabulous chapter. I have no
idea where this is going to go but i am definately going to be along for the
ride.
Date: 01/04/2010 03:06 AM
[Respond]


Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: Mykal

I am excited to see what happens next! Great Story!
Date: 01/04/2010 12:41 AM
[Respond]


Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: taina1959


Oh this is getting better and better with each chapter! We know about the
kidnapping and Drew beating his dad but I still don't see why the press would be
all over Drew. Is there a mystery yet to be revealed? And David? HUH! He doesn't
have a chip on his shoulder, he's got the whole 2x4! LOL The bigger the bully
the harder he falls! Great Story!!
Date: 01/02/2010 06:42 PM
[Respond]


Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: hh5
it sounds like one town to not live there. it feels like one is walking
into trouble.I think Luke is definitely afraid of more trouble to stir
up.
Date: 01/02/2010 11:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: Nephylim


I liked this chapter a lot. It shows how lonely and sterile it is to be
Luke. Drew is very impulsive and may well have bitten off more than he can
chew. David sounds like a nasty piece of work. Clever to use a
legitimate boxing match to get revenge :) I like the way his mind
works.
Date: 01/02/2010 09:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: theoneadd2

I really want to know where this is all going great story. Thanks for
sharing
Date: 01/01/2010 01:07 PM
[Respond]


Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: taina1959

This is such a good story! I like the Boxing team already and Luke also. I'm
hoping to see him and Drew becoming friends soon!
Date: 01/01/2010 10:37 AM
[Respond]


Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: Nephylim

Wow what an interesting story. I was hooked right from the start.
Cant wait to see what's coming next. I am liking Luke even though you
haven't really introduced him yet. and Drew is pretty awesome. Give us
more soon
Date: 12/26/2009 06:33 AM
[Respond]




Title: Falling out of the closet
Reviewer: Nephylim

Hmm Jordan sounds like a good guy so I think he would love Drew no matter
what. I wouldn't be surprised about a little antagonism with Luke though. I
don't think that he would make Drew choose but who knows. Awesome as usual
hunAuthor's Response:
Thanks Nephy!
Date: 12/14/2010 01:56 AM



Title: Falling out of the closet
Reviewer: hh5

Mystery who shot Rose, Waiting for Drew to visit jordan, what david next
move, still wonders how much jordan changed, sounds like he's in a bad
placeAuthor's Response:
Poor Jordan...he would have alot to deal with if he was to return. Rose...hmm
well, we all know she is pissed. Jeff is furious, Luke is fed-up, Drew is well
Drew, and poor Daivid is about to have a mental breakdown, go hide under his bed
in the fetal position, and hug his stuffed teddy bear.
Date: 12/13/2010 02:37 AM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: hh5

ok i can be wrong but I'll say the David Father.
But since not all the facts are in ... the issue can be bigger than I have
imagined.
Wow Luke changed a bit more. Wonder if Drew can get use to that?
Author's Response:
Not giving anything away hehe.
I think Drew will cope just fine.
Date: 09/06/2010 07:49 PM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: Nephylim

It was after Drew’s with rose that he caught Luke by the arm as
he headed for the exit .... that doesn't make sense. I reckon you got too
excited writing it. i mean hell it's exciting to read.
That was an awesome chapter. It makes me shiver to think of what happened
that night. We are definitely getting closer to the answers though. I wonder
what will happen next... will David join forces with Luke and Drew to find the
truthAuthor's Response:
Haha I guess i did get excited. I best go and fix that.
Thanks, Luke knows who is behind it he just can't remember just yet. David
well we never know what he is going to do. I myself don't even know till I get
there.
Date: 09/06/2010 11:21 AM



Title: The Truth Reviewer: Elezbed
Good story and at last, it is a coming out of the closet that everybody
will remember ....Good storyAuthor's Response:
Thanks Hun.
Date: 09/06/2010 08:25 AM



Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: hh5
Is there more?Author's Response:
Yes Dear, there is more. I just have yet to figure out what that is yet.
Don't fret it will get finished.
Date: 06/01/2010 12:46 PM



Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: hh5
Oh wouldn't things be even out if David was outed. I know it would change
things. It would be a matter if any one would treat David differently.
Date: 04/05/2010 10:52 PM
[Respond]


Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: acht-acht

Noooo - what´s happening? Cliffhangers are evil. You got me so so curious now
about Ty and David. David seems so irrationally crazy angry, there just has to
be something else eating him.
And the phone call? Jordan? I hope he comes back.Author's
Response:
Ahhh, yes David is a tough one to figure, and as for jordan...well... you'll
just have to wait and see.
Date: 04/05/2010 02:44 PM



Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: Nephylim

Oh my goodness. What happened? This story is so complex and so
sweet. You've got us so used to being concerned for Luke and Drew that
we've forgotten there are other people who could get into trouble... like
Rose. I like Rose :( Nice storytelling.Author's
Response:
Thank you so much! As for what happened :) you will just have to wait and
see.
Date: 04/05/2010 06:03 AM



Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: dachcr
This is becoming a rally good story! Cannot wait to see how the guys are
going to treat David.
Date: 04/05/2010 03:00 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: jhol7689
Aww I love it Luke and drew make a cute couple. Now it makes me wonder if
David is in the closet. Can't wait for the next chapter =]
Date: 03/15/2010 02:15 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: hh5

more to help the merrier
Date: 03/14/2010 10:59 AM
[Respond]


Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: Nephylim

Interesting. the story is moving along. Things are I think about
to get interesting. No. They have always been interesting... let's say...
exciting again. :) Sweet. I like stories with a lot of dialogue and
that chapter was so easy to read. Although I think you would get some
flack if there were too many like this. Author's Response:
Thank you! Yeah, this chapter was very dialogue heavy. I just needed things
to develop a bit quicker and that was the most effective way to do it. I wanted
to keep it simple =). There wont be many of these chapters. This may be the only
one like this..who knows?
Date: 03/14/2010 08:11 AM



Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag
Reviewer: Elezbed
well now they have two more friends ^^!Good chapter and write
more
Date: 03/14/2010 04:01 AM
[Respond]


Title: David Reviewer: hh5

Gosh the mystery of David anger on Luke
What can the reason be
Date: 02/19/2010 11:08 AM
[Respond]


Title: David Reviewer: Nephylim

That was a really good chapter. I love Rose. She's been a bit of
an in the background character until now but she has really come out and shone
in this one. Luke is certainly lucky with his friends.
Looking forward to the next installment - I am VERY interested to know what
Drew has figured out and what he can do with it.
Date: 02/19/2010 02:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Wyndham

Wonderful! I Really enjoyed it, thank you.Author's Response:
You are very welcome!
Date: 02/01/2010 09:54 AM



Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: hh5
Passion at its best!!Definitely Luke on his way to healing and be loved
renewed
Date: 01/27/2010 09:54 PM
[Respond]


Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Nephylim

It's going absolutely fine. That was a very touching chapter. There was
fun too but the focus was the emotion that the guys were releasing and it was
very sweet. I wonder what's the deal with David... it gets more and more
intriguing. I suspect that he might have been the one to kill Tyler and
that's why he wants Luke dead... because he might figure it out. We'll see if
I'm right :)
Date: 01/27/2010 02:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: Nephylim


That was breathtaking. So sweet. I loved it. Drew was very
brave and it paid off. I am loving the snake... always wanted one but never got
around to it. There is still a lot of tension in the air, what with David
and Jordan and I have a feeling this story has a ways to go but just for now
everything is calm and all is right with the world :)
Date: 01/17/2010 08:51 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: Elezbed
So cute... I wonder if the snake was a pet that someone let it go in their
house to make them afraid...Good chapter, write more!
Date: 01/17/2010 01:30 AM
[Respond]


Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies
Reviewer: hh5
now i can't wait till these two make the bed squeek jane awake!!!
Date: 01/16/2010 09:31 PM
[Respond]


Title: Settling Down Reviewer: Nephylim

It's coming along fabulously. This has to be one of my favourite
stories... yes it is definitely one of my favourite stories and I get excited
when I see a new chapter posted. I am so in love with Luke and Drew is
such a sweetheart. Keep up the good work.
Date: 01/14/2010 11:02 AM
[Respond]


Title: Settling Down Reviewer: hh5
great chapter. both are getting acquainted with each other. Luke is slow to
settle in and drew is gaining more friends.
Date: 01/14/2010 09:47 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Nephylim


Ahhhh. that is so beautiful. There is no way they are going to be
able to ignore that for long. It's going to be beautiful... well if they
survive long enough. We still don't know Luke's full story and we don't
know why David is so all set to kill him... so much more to come and I can't
wait
Date: 01/11/2010 05:55 PM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: acht-acht


It´s great. Hurry up, I wanna know what´s next. And i want to hear more about
asshole David.
Cheers, Clara
Date: 01/11/2010 09:04 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: pumukli

Great story! I like it very much! Thanks.
Date: 01/11/2010 01:57 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Ricky

A great read. I can't wait for the next one.
Date: 01/11/2010 01:32 AM
[Respond]


Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers
Reviewer: Elezbed
No don't stop here, I want to know what happen after and how David is going
to react! Good chapter and write more ^^!
Date: 01/11/2010 01:17 AM
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Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: Ricky

Another tender moment. Likeing it better with every installment.
Date: 01/11/2010 12:39 AM
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Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Ricky

Saweet! Is he too sore to even suck tongues? I better turn the page
quickly!
Date: 01/10/2010 11:58 PM
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Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Ricky

Likewise. Getting better and better. I just hope the bad guys get theirs. And
then there is Jordan to find.
Date: 01/10/2010 11:30 PM
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Title: Roomies Reviewer: Ricky

Getting Juicier but now I am getting concerned. David and his bunch haven't
shown up in the hospital yet and brass knuckles break bones!

So off I go to the next chapter.
Date: 01/10/2010 11:17 PM
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Title: He Dreams in Anguish Reviewer: Ricky

Great. I'm not so sure I would have stopped where he did. No witnesses and
they were already down. I think I would have finished the job, put the piece in
David's hands and left him to take the blame and die of his wounds.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:58 PM
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Title: Last Words Reviewer: Ricky

The only complaint I have is the damn chapters are so sissy short! Bust out
with some man size chapters. You no sooner become ensconced in the fantasy of it
before you have to return to reality.
A great story LineAuthor's Response:
I'm not sure if I should be offended or not. I'm leaning more toward
offended.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:24 PM



Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts
Reviewer: Ricky

Awesome. Getting sweeter.
Date: 01/10/2010 10:00 PM
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Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: Ricky

Delightful. Thanks
Date: 01/10/2010 09:40 PM
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Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: Ricky

Another Great Chapter.Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 01/10/2010 09:10 PM



Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: hh5
yes very very nice - wonderfully work out good idea of what goes
between the two.Either a combination of lovers or brothers.
Date: 01/10/2010 12:29 AM
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Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Elezbed
Don't stop here!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to know what happened after this
sentence!Good chapter and I wonder how you are going to make Luke loved by
the inhabitants...
Date: 01/09/2010 02:09 AM
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Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: hh5
Is Luke younger than Drew?Gosh I think its still a mystery of what
really happen with Luke and his father. Inspite of what every one thinks.
Surprise that there wasn't a trial or Luke being in jail?? So it must have been
an accident rather a murder?Author's Response:
Yes, Luke is younger then Drew, but not by much. At the
very start of the story it is Drew's 18th birthday. The death of
Luke's father was an accident (that was mentioned by someone...Rose I
believe) although nearly everyone in the town seems to think otherwise for
reason that will become quite clear later. There is one detail that no one
knows about that 'accident'. Luke will go into detail about it in
a later chapter. I hope I cleared everything up for you. If you got anymore
questions feel free to ask!
Date: 01/08/2010 08:50 PM



Title: Keys & Air Mattresses
Reviewer: Nephylim

I think it's awesome as ever. You are really keeping the tension going. I am
in suspense the whole time not quite sure what is going to happen next.
Very nice.Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Date: 01/08/2010 05:25 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: hh5
Nice Chapter but I wonder do I have to worry about Drew and or Luke from
here on.Author's Response:
I'm not quite sure what you mean. Things may seem okay for the moment but do
not think David will stay dormant for long. These two have a long rocky
road ahead of themselves.
Date: 01/07/2010 11:47 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Kodes100
I really like this tale.Also I don't think you need to keep apologizing
for mistakes.The few mistakes have not interrupted the flow of the
story.I appreciate your ackowledging them - but you are starting to be
paranoid & that can't help the creative process.Be a little easier on
yourself.I am an avid reader & I think your writing is pretty
good.You will learn the more you write.Bravo to you for
"Always."Author's Response:
Thank you, I tend to harbor on my mistakes. Thanks for your words of wisdom
and for your positive feedback about always! It means the world to me!
Date: 01/07/2010 04:09 PM



Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Nephylim

If I did I didn't notice, I was too caugh up in the story. It's rare I read
every word no matter what I am reading... occupational hazzard... but I read
every word of this. It's an edge of the seat story and I can't wait to see what
happens next.
Date: 01/07/2010 01:13 PM
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Title: Roomies Reviewer: hh5
oh now its starting to get juicy
Date: 01/05/2010 11:43 PM
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Title: Roomies Reviewer: Nephylim

This is an excellent chapter. I feel so sorry for Luke... even his own
family!!!
As I say and keep saying... yeah grammar adds polish and makes a story easier
to read but at the end of the day it's all about the story and how it is told...
and this is a good one. I am looking fowards... with some trepidation...
to what comes next.
As a slight observation I would say that it feels to me as if Luke is
recovering a little too quickly from two serious beatings and an abdominal
stab wound (albeit a shallow one) resulting in surgery... all in 24
hours. But that's just an observation and not necessarily a
criticism. As was commented on lately... I must like hospital beds because
my characters seem to spend a lot of time in them :pAuthor's
Response:
Haha Thank you. Yeah, I know it seems a bit odd for him to recover so
quickly, but it is rather tricky to make this event tie into the plot. The
biggest reason he has made such a speedy recovery is my lack of
wanting to drag anything out. I'll see what i can do because honestly i see
your point and it bothers me as well. Thank you!!! Much love!
Date: 01/05/2010 05:46 PM



Title: Last Words Reviewer: dachcr

This is really great - everyone needs to have someone special to look
after. Hope that Davids father will realise that his son is not the best
person on earth.
Cannot wait to see how these two new friends will help each other always.

Date: 01/05/2010 12:40 AM
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Title: Last Words Reviewer: hh5
I do hope to find out what David has against Luke. I also guess its going
to take awhile before Drew finds out about jordan. I just hope David and the
police keep quiet.Author's Response:
All will be revealed in time =p. You are correct it will be awhile before
Drew's brother issue is brought back into the story.
Date: 01/04/2010 09:41 PM



Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts
Reviewer: Nephylim


Aaagh... bloody hell. Again I am left breathless and I have to go to
work today :) Excellent story. Fabulous chapter. I have no
idea where this is going to go but i am definately going to be along for the
ride.
Date: 01/04/2010 03:06 AM
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Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: Mykal

I am excited to see what happens next! Great Story!
Date: 01/04/2010 12:41 AM
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Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: taina1959


Oh this is getting better and better with each chapter! We know about the
kidnapping and Drew beating his dad but I still don't see why the press would be
all over Drew. Is there a mystery yet to be revealed? And David? HUH! He doesn't
have a chip on his shoulder, he's got the whole 2x4! LOL The bigger the bully
the harder he falls! Great Story!!
Date: 01/02/2010 06:42 PM
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Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: hh5
it sounds like one town to not live there. it feels like one is walking
into trouble.I think Luke is definitely afraid of more trouble to stir
up.
Date: 01/02/2010 11:02 AM
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Title: Persistence and Background Info
Reviewer: Nephylim


I liked this chapter a lot. It shows how lonely and sterile it is to be
Luke. Drew is very impulsive and may well have bitten off more than he can
chew. David sounds like a nasty piece of work. Clever to use a
legitimate boxing match to get revenge :) I like the way his mind
works.
Date: 01/02/2010 09:02 AM
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Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: theoneadd2

I really want to know where this is all going great story. Thanks for
sharing
Date: 01/01/2010 01:07 PM
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Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: taina1959

This is such a good story! I like the Boxing team already and Luke also. I'm
hoping to see him and Drew becoming friends soon!
Date: 01/01/2010 10:37 AM
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Title: High School and New Faces
Reviewer: Nephylim

Wow what an interesting story. I was hooked right from the start.
Cant wait to see what's coming next. I am liking Luke even though you
haven't really introduced him yet. and Drew is pretty awesome. Give us
more soon
Date: 12/26/2009 06:33 AM
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Posted 28 January 2012 - 12:49 PM

I am enjoying this story very much. At the risk of sounding too critical, I would suggest a new editor. There are too many mistakes in subject/verb agreements, spelling, and grammer. The story, as I said, is very entertaining and keep up the good work.

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Posted 15 June 2012 - 12:43 AM

Sorry about not replying to you sooner, but no one seems to ever post on here and I sort of forgot it existed. Sorry about that.

Sorry about the grammatical mistakes, but I didn't have an editor when Always was on e-fiction. When I transferred the story here I found Frosty and she just hasn't had time to go back and edit all the chapters for me. All the latest chapters have been thoroughly edited though. There may be a couple mistakes, but we are all human. I do hope you are still a reader of the story.
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Posted 10 July 2012 - 12:18 AM

No problem with the delay in answering my post. I have began to reread this story. It is as entertaining the second time as the first.
Congrats on finding an editor, I am sure all will be well.

I have been quite ill for the last couple of years with Luekemia and the effects of chemo. You will never know how much you and the
other authors mean to me, and I am sure others, that read them to help pass our time.

Do take care.
Spittune

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Posted 10 July 2012 - 01:19 AM

No problem with the delay in answering my post. I have began to reread this story. It is as entertaining the second time as the first.
Congrats on finding an editor, I am sure all will be well.

I have been quite ill for the last couple of years with Luekemia and the effects of chemo. You will never know how much you and the
other authors mean to me, and I am sure others, that read them to help pass our time.

Do take care.
Spittune


I'm so sorry to hear about your illness. I do hope you are doing well :hug: . I am glad you enjoy my work. It make me happy knowing it entertains you :) . I hope you enjoy the new chapters. My editor has only made it through the first four chapters, but we are working hard to get through them all.

Lots of hugs,
Holly
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Posted 31 January 2013 - 05:35 AM

Hi HJ(don't worry, I'm here to comment on 'Always'). I've been waiting since August for chapter 27 and was wondering if you are continuing with this story. I've loved it till now and hope you will continue. I hope you are well and your sabbatical from this story is not permanent.

Stephen

P.S. Spittune, I hope you are feeling better and are overcoming your illness. Be assured that there are many readers and members of GA that are praying for you.
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Posted 31 January 2013 - 09:51 PM

Stephen,

 

Always will get finished...eventually. I actually sent chapter 27 to my first editor a couple days ago and I'm just waiting for her to get to it. From there I will send it to my second editor for the final touches and then I'll publish it. The inspiration for Always has always come in spurts for me. Sometimes I just hit a wall and have to work my way over it. Anyway, chapter 27 should be up in a few days. I hope you continue to enjoy it!

 

Hugs,

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Posted 01 February 2013 - 12:01 AM

Excellent to hear Holly, I look forward to it. Best wishes.

Stephen
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Posted 02 August 2013 - 03:14 AM

Really? Nothing posted since February with at least three potential murderers and death threats hanging fire? Can you say frustration?




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