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[Jack Scribe] "Goblins at the Door" by Jack Scribe


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Posted 22 October 2006 - 08:27 PM

Goblins at the Door by Jack Scribe


Jack Scribe's Fall Anthology story


***Possible Spoilers***




In this excellent and heartwarming story Jack examines the pain and devastation which occur when a long-term relationship ends and the joy which accompanies an unexpected reunion with a lost love.

I really enjoyed the way Eric recognized Steve in little Stevie! It really shows how he had never truly forgotten his friend and how just a name and a child’s face are enough to bring back the memories of the special times he used to share with Steve.

I also loved how they were able to pick up where they left off and be forthright with each other about their pasts. Their lives together are by no means “sealed” since many things could still happen to tear them apart, and yet Jack leaves the reader with a warm impression that everything is going to be okay for these two. After surviving years of separation, and presumably each assuming the other was straight, what else can keep these two apart?

Excellent job, Jack! I really enjoyed this story! What did everyone else think?
Kevin

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Posted 29 October 2006 - 03:24 AM

This started out with a palpable feel of loneliness, and the story of Pete's cold-blooded move-out was wrenching. But everything turned around when he answered that door and thought he recognized little Stevie.

I'm definitly in the "everything will work out" camp!

This is a beautiful and heartwarming story. Thank you Jack!!


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Posted 29 October 2006 - 03:19 PM

I have to say this ended a lot better than I ever expected! I actually felt more sorry for Steve Watson than I did Eric. While I'm sure Steve's years with his wife weren't all bad, and they had the gift of a child, it seems sad that he 'potentially' wasted time that could have been better spent had he been true to himself from the beginning.

The story was warm and real to life, with an almost provocative ending. I really liked it Jack.

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Posted 30 October 2006 - 01:49 AM

I really liked this story. It makes me feel hope for those screwed over by assholes.

Thank you, Jack, for sharing this awesome piece of work with us.
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Posted 30 October 2006 - 03:17 AM

I have to say this ended a lot better than I ever expected! I actually felt more sorry for Steve Watson than I did Eric. While I'm sure Steve's years with his wife weren't all bad, and they had the gift of a child, it seems sad that he 'potentially' wasted time that could have been better spent had he been true to himself from the beginning.

Steve situation is one that can not really be appreciated except by someone who has been through similar. I am, unfortunately, finding that it's more common that you might think. As a married gay man myself (and one of the very lucky few whose wife has accepted that I'm gay, even if she doesn't understand), I assure you that while Steve's life could've been different, that doesn't mean the life he had was wasted. I certainly don't consider the years where I repressed who I am as "wasted". They could've been spent differently, but having two wonderful boys at the end is something I would've hated to have missed out. Having said that, I certainly would NOT recommend anyone going through what I've been through -- there was too much pain and misery along the way and I am extremely lucky not to have lost access to the boys through a messy divorce. That would've killed me.

As for the story, I was more struck by the breakup of Pete and Eric. It is not common for a gay-themed story to deal with the breakup of a long-term relationship, and I think Jack did a great job of it. It is, unfortunately, common for people to start to take each other for granted, and then to slowly drift apart. It's rarely sudden, but a slow progression as they spend less and less time with each other. I want to congratulate Jack for showing such a breakup realistically and convincingly.

I'm also happy that there are signs that Eric will find someone new, but it's early days yet.
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Posted 30 October 2006 - 09:54 AM

I'm also happy that there are signs that Eric will find someone new, but it's early days yet.


I think that Graeme has given me inspiration to explore Eric and Steve's reunion with a series story. Stay tuned!

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Posted 01 November 2006 - 11:13 PM

... As for the story, I was more struck by the breakup of Pete and Eric. It is not common for a gay-themed story to deal with the breakup of a long-term relationship, and I think Jack did a great job of it. It is, unfortunately, common for people to start to take each other for granted, and then to slowly drift apart. It's rarely sudden, but a slow progression as they spend less and less time with each other. I want to congratulate Jack for showing such a breakup realistically and convincingly. ...

Agreed! :2thumbs: Estrangement is usually gradual, whether from person to person or person to employer. How to end it with a minimum of pain? Given the asymmetry in the relationship--Eric need Pete more than vice versa--Pete had to end it and Eric was going to get hurt. Pete did about as well as can be expected, I think.

The transition from high school in Sacramento to university had been a difficult, challenging experience for Eric. Becoming friends with Pete provided a needed anchor for Eric’s young life.

Eric just now beginning to stand by himself. I hope he lives along for a while before hooking up again. Maybe, eventually Eric and Steve. As Graeme say, it's early days.

I agree with Kevin:

I really enjoyed the way Eric recognized Steve in little Stevie!

The goblin a sweet vehicle to bring Steve back into Eric's life. :great:

To pick a nit: The sentence "Eric decided not to beat around the bush of half-truths and fabrication." does not do right by the bush of truth and justice! :D The grasses around the bush are the half-truths and fabrications. One tiny change preposition could get around this: of ->with.

Finally, the home-dipped caramel apples brought back fond memories for me: I used to live, fully out, in California. I too served up home-dipped candied apples, one to a customer! Resistance in my funky neighborhood to food from a gay man was minor, but the mass-publicized pins and glass shards in cookies did me in. My house was too far off the beaten path for many visitors to come just for prepackaged candy.

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Posted 02 November 2006 - 04:10 AM

Estrangement is usually gradual, whether from person to person or person to employer. How to end it with a minimum of pain? Given the asymmetry in the relationship--Eric need Pete more than vice versa--Pete had to end it and Eric was going to get hurt. Pete did about as well as can be expected, I think.


Hmmmm. I have to respectfully disagree there. I think what Pete did was awful: to start with, he was unfaithful. Secondly, he declined to discuss things, and just moved out, no notice, bang, when it suited him. I felt that a long-term partner such as Eric deserved far, far better treatment even if it was over.
Just my opinion. :boy:


I think that Graeme has given me inspiration to explore Eric and Steve's reunion with a series story. Stay tuned!


GREAT!!! I'd love to see where this leads, and maybe hear more of their backstories. :great:
Thank you!


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"CJ, you're a lurker, you never use cliffhangers, and you'd never use blackmail." ~Wildone 10-03-07
"We all know that CJ is neither a cruel author nor does he leave cliffhangers." ~ Clydee 3-23-11
"CJ doesn't use cliff hangers." ~ Low Flyer 3-23-11


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Posted 02 November 2006 - 03:34 PM

Hmmmm. I have to respectfully disagree there. I think what Pete did was awful: to start with, he was unfaithful. Secondly, he declined to discuss things, and just moved out, no notice, bang, when it suited him. I felt that a long-term partner such as Eric deserved far, far better treatment even if it was over.
Just my opinion. :boy:
GREAT!!! I'd love to see where this leads, and maybe hear more of their backstories. :great:
Thank you!

I think you convinced me. Pete should have said before he shacked up with someone else. Of course, then he would not have been as sure. And so Eric and Pete would have suffered together in purgatory for a few months as Pete made up his mind. But still, you're right, I guess.

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Posted 02 November 2006 - 03:58 PM

I think you convinced me. Pete should have said before he shacked up with someone else. Of course, then he would not have been as sure. And so Eric and Pete would have suffered together in purgatory for a few months as Pete made up his mind. But still, you're right, I guess.

I won't get into a discussion of right or wrong, but what happened is very typical. I personally know of two marriages that broke up in similar fashion -- one partner started a relationship before telling the other that they were leaving. In particularly disgusting case the husband was just waiting for his wife to have their third child before he moved out and in with his giirlfriend -- she kicked him out as soon as she found out what was going on.
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Posted 27 November 2006 - 10:35 PM

I think that Graeme has given me inspiration to explore Eric and Steve's reunion with a series story. Stay tuned!

Jack B)


Once again Jack, another great story. I like the idea of a series too. :2thumbs:

Thanks much

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 01:57 PM

Thanks for bringing this story to our attention, Jack. I very much enjoyed reading it a second time.

Where is the series you promised?

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 02:29 PM

Where is the series you promised?


Yikes...I'm embarrassed that I'd forgotten about this idea. Three years ago I was having a handful of challenges as caregiver for my mom. Except for that final months of her life that ended shortly thereafter, she enjoyed her 94 years in this world.

I will definitely think about an appropriate story down the road that explores Eric and Pete's reunion. Hmmm...

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 04:40 PM

Yikes...I'm embarrassed that I'd forgotten about this idea. Three years ago I was having a handful of challenges as caregiver for my mom. Except for that final months of her life that ended shortly thereafter, she enjoyed her 94 years in this world.

I will definitely think about an appropriate story down the road that explores Eric and Pete's reunion. Hmmm...



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