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That was a really good chapter. I teared up during the conversation between the grands and Lucy and Geoff. I have a feeling when Lucy gets a copy of the pictures her mother's intuition may kick in and she may notice something between the boys that they haven't even acknowledged to each other. Yes, I hope one of them will have the courage to talk to the other. Now for the return home. I just hope it is not too many tears.
What a wonderful day for everyone, especially those of us reading ET. Luke and Ryan appear to be spiraling toward each other - hope one or the other gets the courage to come out to the other very soon. Simon is still a very great worry. Who will help him change his course? And what in the world will happen to Toby? Or with Elliott?
One of the best portions of this chapter was the background on Ryan's life that we got to see. It explains a great deal. And how good it is that Ryan has family he can count on now. Thanks so much for this chapter. Looking forward to more, of course. It is bad form to beg. How about I grovel? Please sir? More?
Finally we get to the Gramp's and what happened to Ryan, BEST chapter so far. I really love the Gramp's,
This chapter really had a lot of feeling, the wily Gramp's helping Ryan he in turn coming closer to telling his best friend his secret, getting along with his own Mother and lucky for us all no mention about the sperm donor.
Ryan has matured over the summer, in fact since his hang, but Luke on the other hand has not matured yet. I hope the " sit down Luke I have something to tell you " chat is not to long coming then hopefully Ryan and Luke will be cumming but somehow I think even then Luke could bottle it and hide which could have a devastating effect on Ryan..
As for Simon, Mmmmmm not sure how that one will pan out, Simon has to me always acted a bit of a "victim", seems to allow himself to be led and steered through life and has not really asserted himself with the likes of Toby who in effect took charge of things.
Toby wanted to do this Toby wanted to do that and Simon went along like a lamb, unfortunately Simon was going to be on a loosing side.
With Luke having a go at Simon before they all went to Ryan's may have been a good thing as Simon is feeling sorry for himself big time and although Luke is suspicious he will always be there for his brother when he needs a shoulder to cry on and should be putting two and two together that Toby did something to hurt Simon or is Luke that thick?? I don't think so, maybe slow on the uptake, but thick no, Simon's attitude is one that needs a good slap to wake him up, he has a brother who can help and knows hes gay so the rents can be kept out of it a bit longer, so please Riley, make it soon.
Thanks once again for a great chapter and look forward to more Ryan/Luke shenanigans lol lol
Enjoyed the continuing saga
painfully slow at bringing Ryan and Luke to knowledge that they have more in common than they might have imagined possible. Just think how much the story possibilities that will be at hand when they are out to each other!
So, Ryan and Luke are too afraid of losing each other's friendship that they can't come out to each other. However, Luke is getting closer to Elliott, who is comfortable being gay, and Ryan is developing a friendship with Jacko, and they're out to each other. I can see how these new friendships could turn romantic.
Which is to say, I totally ship them. Still want to see Luke and Ryan together, buuuuuuuuut this will do for now.
Reply from Riley Jericho (author)
Hello again, Dayne.
I’m not sure that Ryan is developing that kind of friendship with Jacko. I think Jacko would like to think it though! However, it’s also good to see that Luke is loosening up a bit. Maybe something will happen….
Another great chapter, I do like the ones with Ryan's Grandparents in.
Like other have said, little worried for Simon all alone at home with the dark place he is in mentally.
Hi Simon - yes, it’s always great to see them. And let’s hope Simon is okay, and thanks for the review.
Now I remember how great Ryan's grandparents are! I wish I knew what story I was getting mixed up with! lol
I really enjoyed this chapter because it brought some happiness to Luke and his parents. It was great seeing Ry again, and I would hope if Luke ever does feel comfortable enough coming out to Ryan, that Ryan would do the same. I'm curious about tennis camp and how well Ryan and Jacko got along. After all, Jacko was following Ry around like a puppy dog at the barbecue.
Like your other readers, I am really worried about Simon. I'm praying that he didn't do anything stupid since he was home alone.
I'll be waiting on pins and needles now until the next chapter.
Hi Lisa! I’m trying to stay on track with this week\s posting. Hopefully will be out tomorrow. Ryan and Jacko? Well I think Jacko would like that, but not sure Ryan would feel the same! Like you say - he’s like a puppy dog at a BBQ! Many have also wanted to know a bit more about Ryan’s grandparents, so this was a good opportunity to look closer.
One of the reasons I look forward to Saturdays is your updates. With theexception of feeling bad for Simon, I realized I had a big smile on my face as I read. I hope one of those boys will get the courage to come out.
Saturday is near - the next chapter is in edit with Andy! A surprising step forward for Luke this week. I wonder if he’ll go anywhere with that, or just sit on ti as usual?
As always, thanks for the review.
I am so, so worried about Simon. There could be a tragedy, and very soon, if someone doesn't intervene. Very, very surprised that Lucy hasn't done so yet. On the good side is Luke finally thinking about trusting Ryan with coming out. Perhaps his honesty could beget still more from Simon...if he is still with us.
Thanks for a great chapter - Ryan sounded like he had a grand time over the summer; perhaps he is able to talk about himself, too.
Simon is all over the place - at least internally. On the outside he’s not saying enough for his parents to really get what the problem is other than their own guesses. A good step forward for Luke though. Perhaps he’s getting off the fence?
Thanks for the review
The one time Lucy, who is way to much of a helicopter mom, should have been more in tune with her youngest son, she wasn't.
I don't know about anyone else, but I'm worried about Si, alone at his house.
Don’t be too hard on Lucy, Skinny. It’s a lot easier to see this stuff from our perspective when we get to see behind all the characters, whereas she, Geoff and Luke are a bit lost. That said, I’m not sure how she would handle it is she DID know what was really going on!
Thanks for the review.
Thank you Riley. Great read as always.
While neither as eventful nor dramatic as the last hand full of episodes, it advances the plot and characters nicely.
As Luke suspects, Si pulled off a manipulative escape from social obligation. On some level he may be 'a little prat' as Luke muses. Come on Luke, at leat call him 'a smart little prat'. Well done Si !
Ryan seems much better emotionally and more willing and/or able to interact with Luke. Interesting to observe Luke contemplating a deeper honesty with Ryan. I suspect that Ryan and Jacko have had some interesting, and perhaps profoundly benificial, conversations over the summer.
Well done Riley!
As you say, I guess this chapter has a lot of transition in it. Ryan seems to be in a pretty upbeat mood these days, though I’m not convinced it’s much to do with Jack! Perhaps we’ll know more in the next instalment?
Yay, Ry's back!! Although weren't Ryan's grandparents always fighting with each other? Didn't they embarrass Luke and Ry the last time they went out to the country club? Or am I totally mixing up different stories? lol
I can sort of feel Toby's panic and desperation in getting Simon to talk to him again. He really has no clue what he did. He hadn't realized that he went way too far with Simon. Like Oxala said, many trauma victims blame themselves for what happened, and Simon definitely feels everything is his fault. He's spiraling down a dangerous path, and he really needs help before it's too late. He has to be able to come back from this.
I was cracking up when Lucy saw Ryan buying his own lube! lol At least Lucy had good sense not to start a conversation with him about the best kinds of lube to get teenage boys!
Wasn’t just so funny Lucy catching Ryan buying ‘solutions’! And she’s also trying here best, though she’s missing part of the puzzle.
Ryan’s Grandparents? No I think you’re confusing them with another story. They are a great old couple and Luke really likes them. More about them in the next chapters.
Riley, I'm enjoying every chapter because they are always full of surprises. Of course, Luke doesn't know that his best friend is gay and like usual, they play cat and mouse with each other. Simon and Toby managed okay even though they are younger. The only thing that caught my attention was that the scenes, while different, they were also very similar because the two brothers are both gay and are hot for their best friends, who also happen to be gay. You write very well and hold a reader's interest.
Hello my friend. Thanks for the review and for getting this far!
And I'm review 22 --- better late than never, isn't that what they say? lol
I'm glad you had a good birthday, Riley, one that carried over into the next day. lol
Yeah, the end there with Luke -- definitely not good. I can understand he was pissed now because the whole family was trying to cheer Simon up, and they don't have any idea why he's so moody. Luke is going to kick himself when (hopefully WHEN and not IF!), he finally finds out.
Maybe Luke should think back to breakfast when Grace stopped by. Simon told her he had work to do and didn't have time for Toby to come over. Even though they communicated silently, and Grace knew something was up, Simon did say he's probably see Toby next week in school. That should sound odd to anyone who knows they're best friends. Never mind boyfriends (only Luke and Grace know that), but best friends would be with each other and keep each other company in times like these. So right there by Simon not wanting to see Toby at all should have been a red flag. Then when Luke saw how Simon reacted to Toby being there, should have been red flag number two.
It's heartbreaking to see Simon suffering like he is. He has so much sadness and anger in him, and he has no outlet for it, except by taking it out on Luke. I did notice that he's taking too much Tylenol. He woke up early, took two or three, then two hours later he's taking more, and then he goes down to breakfast AND TAKES MORE, along with his antibiotics. Not good. I can see him getting addicted to them, if people can actually get addicted to Tylenol, which actually does NOTHING for me. lol
Another thing I didn't like was the fact that he is already sort of shutting off his penis. I don't know the right word for it, but he was thinking about not having anything to do with it (or something like that), and not letting anyone else ever touch him or get close to him again. He will find it very difficult to trust from now on. I just pray somebody catches on quickly (maybe Toby can confess to Grace and get the ball rolling here), because Simon is going to need to talk to a professional about what happened. He will never get over this (if he will at all), without professional help.
And, I have another chapter to read! Yay me! lol Awesome chapter, Riley! As usual!
Hi Lisa - and thanks for the birthday wishes!
You’re right, Luke should be a lot more on the ball, though I think he has his mind elsewhere just now what with Elliott being on his horizon. In the meantime, Simon is slipping into a bad place and nobody seems to be able to help him. He’s even losing confidence in himself. I just hope he’s resilient enough to pull through.
Riley- just wanted to let you know that I love your writing, and am always eagerly waiting for the next chapter!
Keep it up.
Mr Arsenal! Guessing you’re from this side of the pond? Thank you for the note, and glad you’re enjoying the tale!
Very scary times for Si. I so hope something will jar him into help before the depression moves into a more active faze. Good to have Ry back. But Luke,too, has questions to sort,out. So well done. pax.
Something likely to start bubbling over, for sure! Thanks fro the review, Steve.
Another great chapter. I am looking forward to Ryan being back and hearing what he has been up to. Also, I am sure the dinner with his grandparents will be fun.
Hi Peethree. Ryan’s Graands are always great value for money. I don’t doubt it will be a memorable occasion!
I hurt with Simon, and feel for him in his isolation. That it is self imposed is both tragic and completely understandable. The explosion, the release of tension, when he finally let's go of his secret will be very much greater as a result. I hope for a figure - Geoff or Luke - who can get through the walls and ease the terrible story out of him. Thanks for a great chapter. Looking for more, of course.
Hello Parker. Yes, totally agree. Whether Simon likes it or not, it’s going to start firing off in unexpected times and ways.
So yeah, my heart is breaking for Si...
Me too. Everything seems to be going against him just now.
Thanks for the review
I really hope Simon doesn't do something really stupid, but it kind of feels like he is heading in a downward spiral at the moment.
Looking forward to the next instalment
I hope he doesn’t either - but he’s still not letting anyone near.
Double plus awesome Riley! Double plus awesome! Thank you!
As I suspected, Si had come close to being 'honest' with Luke just prior to Luke losing patience. Oooooof Luke, if you could only have maintained patience a few more seconds ...
Last week I was miffed because some were being too hard on Toby. This week I am schooled. I've been too hard on Lucy, and to a lesser extent Geoff. I enjoyed observing Lucy coming to terms with the maturity of her boys. To see her put so much effort into cheering Si was simply beautiful. I have a whole new respect ....
Obviously, neither Lucy nor Geoff really understand why Simon is so hurt. But they KNOW he is hurt. This is an excellent potrayal of what I like to call "parental intuition". As cynical and scientific as I am, my parents still astound me on occasion with almost clairvoyant insight ... and it is spooky! One instance of this about four years ago literally saved my life.
I love the characters in ET. They are so realistically flawed, just like me .
That Luke puts genuine effort into coaxing Simon to dinner with Ryan's grandparents while genuinely hoping Si will decline is too funny and too real. Been there done that!
Simon thinks Toby raped him. Wow! I really don't care whether or not the situation fits a technical or legal definition of rape. I am not a barrister (uh, lawyer). It is important to acknowledge that this is what Simon understands. Yet he still blames himself:
"I know." They were wrong about one thing at least, and he added, "It was my fault."
It will be interesting the learn whether or not Si can find the inner courage to forgive Toby and/or himself. And how long? Days? Months? Years? However Simon reemerges, he will be different, wiser, and wearing a difficult scar. As his penis told him, "We're both hurt, I know that, but I've not changed...we can still do what we need...we can get past this...try and you'll see..." Wisdom often comes from unexpected sources, unexpected context ...
Lucy finds cool sailing themed briefs on "special offer". Lol, I understand that only because I listened to "the Clash" as a teenager. Lucky Si, let's just hope he finds enough peace to appreciate mom's effort ...
I’m always amazed how many significant - even life-changing - moments can balance in the edge of a knife in life. Maybe things would be different if Luke had actually waiting those few seconds and listened. Now we’ll never know.
Like you say, Oxala, we’re all flawed. One of the things I like about this story is that there is nobody who is that perfect. almost all the main characters lose it at some point, or make poor decisions. Lucy is an example - she’s trying to be a good mum, but she can also be a right pain.
Simon’s confusion is growing as quickly as his self-confidence is diminishing! Let’s hope there’s a way out.
Thanks for the review,
Well I could certainly foresee this from the moment of the rape chapter. It's got to come out, like bilious food making you nauseous.
Well done Riley. Every shredding moment of the chapter leading us to ??
Hi Skinny. Yes it has to come out. Simon will find out that you can’t bury it alive, eventually.
Thanks for the review,
Well, we all know where Simon is heading.
It remains to be seen who or what will save him. I'm gonna trust in you, Riley. Don't let me down, please, or
Keep heart - it’s far from over!
I have to admit I sort of gave up on the story when there was all the locker room bullying. But I'm back on board now, skimming the previous chapters and really getting into the story with this one. I like Simon a lot more as the main character, and you do a great job of showing how little mistakes and the wrong word at the wrong time can be fatal.
I don’t think anyone particularly enjoyed those chapters! I guess, however, what happens to us makes us who we become - even for Simon.
Thanks for the review Timothy.
Do clicks count as reviews? Some of us kept checking a link for almost 2 years until 3 chapters suddenly reappeared. If each those clicks count as a review of the story, you hold the record!!
In any case, another great chapter(s) and belated Happy Birthday.
And review No. 20!
It’s been amazing to get so much feedback. And yes - clicks count! Sorry it took so many before the story fired up again. There were plenty of reasons for that, but here’s not the place to go into the details. I just wanted to say thanks for keeping clicking!
Thanks for the birthday wishes,
I hope someone figures out it is not just the circ that is a problem. Suspect someone will hug him or something to get emotions going.
Sorry you had to get a year older to post two chapters this week. It is not necessary to wait a year to do it again. And again cheers on your Birthday.
Steve - review No. 19 is yours! I think you probably understand Simon well enough to know he normally is the kind of kid that unreels really easily. But this time he seems really low and shut down. I don’t think he’ll let anyone close enough for that hug anytime soon.
Happy Birthday, great chapter i can't wait for the next one. I really hope Simon talks to someone about what happened or someone finds out he really needs some help.,
Hi there Simon - long time no hear! Thanks for the review (you got No. 18). Simon is in a bad place right now. Let’s hope something changes soon, though he’s pretty much shut everyone out - even Luke.
Just keeping it simple here (going to write in your Birthday blog )
But Wow... I was wondering how things were going to go down for Simon. Not what I had been expecting at all...elective. GULP! And the war ensues hehe.
Good job again mate
Thanks Matt - and thanks for your other message too, it was great to hear from you! You’re reviewer No. 17 and I can hardly believe how many are coming in. Thanks for reading!
I've loved this story for years. I can't wait for Elliot and Luke to get together. Or wait, maybe I meant to say that I can't wait for Ryan and Luke to get together. Or, maybe, since Toby and Simon are obviously finished, maybe Luke can get together with Toby. Since Luke's so shy and at least he knows that Toby is gay. OK, I guess I do NOT hope that Luke and Toby get together. But what I really do hope is that, kind of like The Secret Life of Billy Chase, I hope that An English Teen, Circumcised in the USA never ends! Because it's that good! Seriously, Riley, thanks for writing such an awesome story and happpy (belated) birthday. Michael
Hello MG - and thanks for the birthday wishes! I would definitely say that…nothing is for sure! LOL! Simon, Luke, Toby, Ryan, Elliott, Jacko…who knows what they’re going to do. I can only promise you one thing…it’s far from over!
You got review No.16!
A great double chapter Riley. Interesting times ahead for the Summers family. I wondered how long it would be before Luke snapped a little at his brother. I feel for Simon, but I'm hoping that he will eventually let Luke in on what happened. I think that he would be a good person for Simon to confide in and Luke has already proved his loyalty and love for his younger brother.
Hello Dodger - glad you enjoyed the double bill! I think Luke could help his brother, but something’s going to have to give in Simon first before he starts letting anyone near.
Thanks for being review No. 15.
Well I will be your number 14 Riley.
thanks for for the bonus chapter. Now I feel obligated to give you something in return.
No. 14 is yours!
Happy Birthday Riley!
These two new chapters were really spot on. Especially chapter 60, now that we're seeing more of Simon's perspective and emotions. That was really a major faux pas at the end there on Luke's part, though he didn't really understand the implications of his words. The drama is heating up, and I'm both enjoying it and looking forward to more.
Once again, thank you very much for sharing your fantastic writing, and Happy Birthday!
I think I’m enjoying writing as much as you are reading, Shinoai. Luke really blew it, didn’t he, though you can understand it in the circumstances. Simon is really shutting everyone down.
Thanks for the birthday wishes and for being reviewer No. 13!
Happy Birthday! I love reading this story. I am a pretty crappy reviewer, so I don't say much. I am really feeling bad for Simon.
For being reviewer No. 12, you’re a star! Glad you’re enjoying the story.
Thanks Riley for yet again more great reading. I *always* look forward to your next instalment, and they never disappoint.
I suspect it's going to be hard for Simon to keep his anger at Toby bottled up. Purely for his sake, I hope he can confide in Luke - despite the little conflict between the two at the end of the chapter. It's going to be messy either way, but he's just going to remain a twisted mess if he can't talk to someone he trusts about what happened to him. Toby has a cheek turning up like that. So many pots on the boil, so to speak.
Thanks especially for the double chapter - what a generous way to celebrate your birthday! :-)
Thanks Milotin. I have the feeling that Simon is beginning to interpret everything that comes at him in a way that confirms how bad he feels about himself.
Thank you for review No. 11
Happy Birthday! All my best wishes for you!
Simon has to be in turmoil right now, I hope things will work out for him with time.
I can't believe the nerve of Toby!
Thanks for the birthday wishes - and for taking review 10! I think Toby is only just figuring out how close to the edge he’s gone!
Happy Birthday Riley...
Started late, got caught up and I am following along and rather enjoying the story.. Well now, I feel horribly for Simon. The next few chapters I imagine are going to be even more difficult to say the least...
Thank you for a wonderful story!
Thanks for the birthday wishes, but glad you’re caught up with ET and are even enjoying it! Tough times for Simon.
Thanks for being review No. 9
HAPPY BIRTHDAY RILEY! Awakening to find two new chapters of ET made it feel like my birthday. Thank you for two more excellent and riveting chapters.
From the chapter titles alone, I knew I was in for a rough read. Just when I thought Simon's cornucopia of negative emotion was filled, guilt entered the fray. I know Simon has no reason to feel guilty. To some extent, I'm sure Simon knows it as well. Guilt is an incidious emotion that rarely bows to reason.
The scene with Toby's mother Grace was brilliant. It was like a psychological mexican stand off between Simon and Grace ... and neither flinched. And they pulled it off without communicating anything to Simon's family. The realism of this scene epitomizes what I love most about ET.
Toby seems to have made some enemies among ET fans. Toby did not intend to hurt Simon. He is selfish, immature, brash, impulsive, and a bit kinky; he is not cruel. Now that he has enough information to get somewhere near two when summing one and one, I imagine he will feel horrible soon enough. I actually feel bad for him.
Simon's isolation, anger and despair are heart breaking. With Lucy on Mars and Geoff firmly stuck on the moon, I had really hoped that Luke would be able to communicate with his brother. While Luke can be thick and seems to be in the stratosphere at times, he does understand Simon.
Based on the brief and strange interaction between Simon and Toby, Luke should have realized he was missing important information. Thick! I certainly can't fault him for loosing patience with Simon. Sadly, he could not have chosen worse things to say to Simon if he had tried: "...you brought it on yourself...always someone else's fault with you...Mum and Dad did what they thought was right...GET OVER IT!".
LUKE! Your brother NEEDS you, NOW!
As to Luke's musings regarding hand washing, chili enthusiasts like myself quickly learn the merits of hand washing prior to ....
Hi Oxala - like I mentioned in GA chat, the whole chilli reference made me laugh! as always, thanks for putting so much into your review…it’s hard to know where to start, other than to say thanks for the birthday wishes too!
I really enjoyed writing the scene between Simon and Grace. I could just feel the simmering air between them. I also think you’re right about Toby. He may have made a massive mistake, but I think he’s honestly feeling absolutely awful.
And Luke? He really needs to wake up!
Thanks for being review No. 8
I knew something like this would happen, and said so in my comments when the rape occurred.
This is not going to get better by itself!
Great writing, as always, Riley! And Happy BD!
Hi Skinny - you were spot on! And thanks for being review No. 7. Thanks too for the birthday wishes.
I feel so badly for Simon, but the horrible thing is that his very silence could hurt him quite as much as the original events. I am so sorry that this happy and wonderful kid is so wounded. Love what you are writing - it is so important for this to be seen.
Hi Parker. thanks for grabbing review No. 6! It’s hard to see Simon so down. he needs friends! Thanks for all the great encouragement on the story.
It's a good thing for Toby that Simon was too incapacitated to punch his lights out. I look forward to the rapist ex-boyfriend getting what he deserves when Simon feels better.
This is a great story, one of my favorites in fact, but the last several chapters have just made my blood boil - not good for my blood pressure, by the way - so I wish this situation would get resolved quickly. I suspect that it will take a lot of doing to get poor Simon back to physical and mental health, however.
You got review No. 5 Ozy! Hope the blood pressure is coming down over the week!
Hey Riley, I'm really enjoying your storyline. Thanks for your birthday present to all of us readers. Hope you had a great day and that the coming year will be filled with much happiness. Keep up the great writing.Drew
Even though the title is a bit quirky, it’s been great to see so many people following it avidly. Thanks for the birthday wishes and for being review No. 4
I noticed your story when it was already well on it's way and was hooked right away, so I'm looking forward to every new chapter. I hope you will get lots of reviews as a belated birthday present.
I very much sympathize with Simon, for I wouldn't like to be missing that part of my anatomy either . Now that it was taken from him against his will I hope he will come to terms with it eventually.
Hope to see many more chapters ! Thank you.
Hello there, and thanks for the review (No. 3). Simon’s in a bad way, and feeling angry and let down. For sure, and I think we’re all feeling bad for him.
Just loving the story, Riley, so thank you very much for all your wonderful efforts Clearly the situation with Simon has to 'open up' soon for his sake, but also for the sake his family and friends. And happy birthday for yesterday (sounds like you may have had 'too much' fun lol) - and good luck with getting those reviews!
Thanks for the birthday wishes…I think I’ve recovered now. Thanks for being review No.2
Happy Birthday, may your day be filled with Love and wishes
Thank you for being the 1st to review!
The story has definitely been interesting for the last few chapters. I would think that you were a surgeon specializing in treatment of the male organ with the descriptions in this chapter. I think that Simon will have a rough couple of weeks. I'm wondering what will happen once Toby gets together with Simon.
It's great the Luke and Elliott will probably have that game of tennis, with some other activities added to the mix.
I will look forward to the next chapter. Thanks for writing.
Thanks for the review, Les - not sure about specialising, but I try to do a bit of research! Yes, what will happen when Toby reappears? Will he and Simon be able to talk it out?
Luke and Elliott - not sure Luke knows what to do about that. He can be a bit of a wuss sometimes!
Thanks for another great chapter in a novel and engaging story. I have greatly enjoyed the richness and complexities of the many characters.
As with the last several chapters, I can really feel Simon's isolation, frustration, pain, and sense of betrayal.
He has been betrayed by Toby. To a much greater extent, he has been betrayed by his parents and the doctors. Simon is old enough that the ethical principals of patient autonomy and informed consent are fully applicable. That he was removed from discussion of treatment options is a violation of ethics by both parents and medical personnel alike. Unfortunately, this is very realistic.
Lucy is both clueless and autocratic. Neither she nor Geoff seem to understand Simon. Lucy does not care to understand. Like Luke, Geoff desperately needs 'to grow a pair'. Lucy refuses to genuinely acknowledge that her boys are no longer boys, but young men. Worst of all, she refuses to think.
Simon is smart. I suspect that he will soon learn that circumcision is rarely required to successfully correct acute paraphimosis. I suspect Lucy and Geoff may soon be on the receiving end of some well deserved anger. Simon may well become angry with himself. With a little patience, ice, and ibuprofen, he may have avoided the hospital entirely. (LOL ... this story has caused me to learn far more about penises than I ever wanted to know.)
And Sam .... lol ..
I hope Elliot will take some initiative toward that game of tennis.
Great characters; fun story!
Thank you Riley!
Thanks Oxala. I guess with Simon being a minor, it’s taken for granted by the authorities - whoever they are - that parents can make those kinds of decisions for their kids. Maybe the paraphimosis could have been dealt with differently - and we might explore that later - but of course, in the heat of the moment, it’s not hard to convince scared parents when a white coat makes a case for something.
And Sam? Oh my - what a handful!
Thanks for the review!
Like most worry continues for Si. I hope Luke catches on soon. But given how oblivious he can be... Ahh so where will "Elli" appear next? Pax.
Luke can be a bit of a twit sometimes, but with Elli? I don’t think that’s over quite yet. Do you?
Thanks of the review Steve,
Luke, you chicken!!!!! You should have gotten Elli's number!!!!
Loved the line from Sam: "I'm still going to be able to shoot, right?" No embarrassment from him! Right in front of everyone including his parents!
On a more serious note, Simon has rough times ahead of him. I wonder when Luke and their folks will wonder what happened besides being to rough with the Glansie thing. Of course WE know it wasn't from that, but they will wonder why he's not bouncing back from this.
Hi Lisa - Sam’s a character, for sure! Depending on how Simon reacts, it’s hard to know how his parents will deal with it. If Simon shuts down on them, they may ge shut out.
Thanks as always, for the review!
Unfortunately for Simon he's going home to exactly the wrong mother, father and brother for what his problem really is. I smell some bad times ahead for him. Probably going to withdraw from the world or explode.
Unfortunately, exploding might be preferable.
I was hoping Elliot might have been around as an uninvolved outsider, but while that may happen, it's going to be a while, since Luke chickened out.
Great chapter Riley!
Hi Skinny. I don’t think you’re far off. Perhaps if Simon can confide in Luke he might find help, but it’s more likely he’s going to bury it alive!
Thanks for the review.
Oh, poor Luke with a crush. But his inner turmoil seems so small compared to Simon's. More than a medical doc, he needs a counselor - a trusted friend, at least. He could confide in his brother, perhaps, but can he trust him now? I have my doubts. No way will he talk to his mother or father, oh no. Great chapter, Riley. I'd like more, of course!
Thanks for the review Parker. I suspect Simon will have to decide if he can confide in Luke. I think it would be better if he did, even if there were consequences.
Hi Riley, well after reading INS i know know more about Elliot and can see how hes fitting in with Luke. How ever is Elliot over Miguel fully? could this come back to bite him with Luke?
Sam is a little shit, really needs to be put in his place this thing about his dick and being special almost "god" like seems to have given him an inflated ego of himself and his eventual harem of virgins lol.
As I said before there is a disturbing dark side to Toby that although Simon went along with has led to this drama and poor Simon has taken the brunt of things.
With what happened to Toby in his past he now does not realise right from wrong and must feel what he is doing is normal, this is the sort of kid who could take a gun to school for a joke.
I feel this is just the start and if Simon finishes with Toby then he could make Simon's life hell.
Now, while this happening to Simon what is happening to Ryan?, has he succumbed to the wiles of Jacko and lost his virginity that Ryan and Luke should have shared, or will Ryan come back intact?
Are Ryan's Grand parents still on the scene and has the sperm donor dick been sent to war yet ?
Will Ryan or Luke accidentally out themselves to each other and spend many hours locked in a bedroom???
We wait with baited breath.
Hi Jeff! Some great questions. I think that the history between Elliott and Miguel is going to spill out at some point. Perhaps Elliott is over it, but who knows. Don’t be too harsh on Sam - in some ways, his coping mechanisms for the life they grew up with are almost polar to Elliott’s, but not necessarily worse. School will probably grind a few more corners off.
It’s also a good question in regards to how Toby is going to react. We’ll have to see on that one.
And the other characters? Nobody is out of play yet!
Thanks for the review!
'All kinds of quips about phoning home sprang to mind...' Omg, Riley, that line was hysterical! Holy shit was that funny! Steven Spielberg would be proud. lol
Is Chowdry's name Chowdry or Chaudry? It kept switching in the last chapter and this chapter.
Poor Simon. He's feeling so despondent. It'll be good for him to be back home in his familiar house, but it's going to take a long time for Simon to get back from this physical and emotional betrayal of Toby's. He's going to need therapy.
Excellent chapter, Riley! As usual!
Thanks Lisa - LOL, it could be that autocomplete has had it’s way with Dr Chowdry! I’ll have to check.
Thanks for the review, and a Happy New Year to you!
"His car, his rules!" Hope we’re not headed for another ISH. I don’t think I can take another sad ending.
I think I can put your mind at rest, Wayne, Luke’s not going to total his car!
It was wonderful to see Elliot's family again! I loved Rose and Benedict from ISH, and it's so good to see them here, making friends with Luke's parents.
Skinny's right; things for Simon will get worse before they get better. I see him retreating into himself, into his mind, and I'm not sure if anyone will be able to get him out, at least for quite a while. When he's ready to talk, Luke will be the one he'll confide in. Toby better run for the hills when this happens because I'm sure there won't be a rock he can hide under where Luke won't find him and try to beat him to a pulp.
Ok, on to the next chapter. Hey, I'm finally catching up! lol
From this chapter, it does look like Simon is a long way from bouncing back. I’d like to think he will talk to Luke, but Luke is pretty caught up with Elliott right now, and might not be listening! Simon certainly won’t confide in his parents. The next step will be when Toby come to visit - then what will Simon do?
Well done for catching up Lisa!
Sam's a hoot -- along with Becky! lol Yep, they are a bit young to be 'dating'! haha Becks is a trip though - telling everyone about poor Simon's willy!
Simon is not going to be a happy camper when he finds out what happened to his willy. But that's if he really cares about something physical like that. His mental state is in too much turmoil I think.
Sam and Becks - what a walking nightmare of precocious teen! Simon’s in a dark place though. Not good.
Elliot!!!!! So wonderful to see him again, Riley! Of course it's too bad it had to be in a hospital, but at least Sam's ok. And Simon's circumcision will heal. It's just his emotional state that no one knows about yet that is in jeopardy.
The whole thing with Elliot's brother being born in a Muslim country and what they did to him after he was born...I never heard of that. How could they just take liberties like that? Too bad they can't sue...
Another excellent chapter, Riley!!
Thanks Lisa! Yes, Elliott has hit the story with a vengeance now. We’ve seen a couple of brief glimpses of him in earlier chapters, but this is the first time Luke has really engaged with him.
It’s early days for Simon to know how well he’ll recover, but lets hope that they can sort him out. As for Sam - well..as you say, too bad they can’t sue!
I can feel the emptiness, the pain and the anger Si's going through in your writing. You portrayed that so very well. Also well done is the slow, gathering friendship between Luke and Elliott. It's about time Luke got to crush on someone hard. Hope for Simon's recovery - which may mean he really needs Luke about now. Is there hope for a new chapter soon? Please?
Next Chapter coming soon Parker - it’s with Andy as I type!
Luke really is getting a bit of a crush on Elliott, though knowing him he’s unlikely to do anything about it!
Shit, as a mom, I would have handled it the same way as Lucy did. The fear for your child and the fear that you have no idea what's wrong with your child, makes you snap in anger and frustration, but like it was written, it was only her fear talking. It's terrifying when something happens to your child and you have to rush him to the ER, or worse yet, call 911.
Simon's pain is horrifying. I'm praying that whatever it is, it can be fixed and that he doesn't suffer any permanent damage.
Of course his mental state hasn't even been touched on yet. His physical pain is too much now for him to even THINK of what exactly happened at Toby's.
Hi Lisa - looks like you’re on a roll!
I guess it’s the not being able to do anything about it - to put it right - is what’s the most painful for a mum. Thanks for keeping up with the story!
I did hit the 'like' button, but I didn't really like the chapter. The writing was great, as always, Riley, but it was a really dark chapter.
I think Simon is going to be traumatized by this. Toby has no idea that what he did was essentially rape. Simon yelled 'no' a few times, and even though he may have accidentally caused Toby to go deeper, Toby should have just pulled out.
Plus, thinking about Ryan and not Simon, was wrong. He was so caught up in his little Ryan fantasy, that he didn't realize what he was doing to his boyfriend. He's making excuses now, telling Simon it was HIS fault for pushing him deeper in by Simon moving, but he's in denial. Of course he's angry with Simon now because he doesn't understand why Simon is so upset. He's lucky if Simon every talks to him again, and if he does, it's going to be a very long time from now.
I always liked Toby; I never saw anything bad in him like some of the other readers mentioned. I love his mom! I hope eventually he can confide in Grace, and Grace can get him to see what he did was so wrong.
I'm trying to catch up now, Riley! I think I have a bunch of chapters to read!
Hope you had a great holiday and HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!
Hi Lisa - and a Happy New Year to you too. Yes, the chapter was darkly uncomfortable as a fun romp came to a terribly wrong conclusion. There's been signs of this with Toby for a while now, and it's been hard to separate the quirky from the the baggage he's brought with him from the previous relationship.
Simon is likely to spiral as he's not going to want to tell anyone what happened - maybe not even Luke. Grace is probably the only other one he can turn to, but....
An insightful chapter, Riley!
Speaking of insight, I certainly hope Dr. Jacko's Dad has more than Si's family does. And I hope it leads to what the chapter title as inferring. Simon is not nearly ready to be transported, in his cocoon, back home.
If it happens, he'll remain in that fetal position, mentally at least, until someone wakes up ...and it won't be him!
A very careful portrayal of the shock he's in. Good writing, Riley!
Simon’s in a downward spiral for sure. Physically, he should recover as long as the doctors have done a good job - and there’s no reason to believe that they haven’t. The rest of it? Well that they can’t see, and I suspect Simon will want to keep it that way!
Knowing you I'm suspecting these last two chapters will need re reading for info lost in the first reading. So much up in the air. Hope someone helps Si sort. Luke and E will be interesting. But right now the title summed it up. Happy New Year.
Happy New Year to you too Steve! I just hope Luke leaves some time for Simon now he’s got Elliott in his sights, as younger brother is carrying a shed-load of hurt.
Thank you for sharing this story with us.
Si is my favorite character in this story. It kills me to see him so hurt. I too hope that he can get through this misery without hating Toby. They are both quirky characters; while very different, they compliment one another nicely. I think Toby really cares for Simon, even if he is selfish and careless. Let's hope he learns from this terrible mistake.
It is very nice to see Elliot again. He has certainly grown more confident since we last saw him. I really liked when Luke asked about the wrist band.
Elliott has been drifting on the edges for a while, but he’s definitely hit the ground running with Luke now. As for Simon, he’s really struggling. Will he be able to find his way through? Will he even be able to face Toby, even if his boyfriend try to make amends?
Thanks for the review, Oxala, and a Happy New Year to you
PS Re your question about what happened to Sam…does that happen? Mmmm…will leave you to figure it out!
Ahhhh, I finally made the connection that Elliott was the main character of ISH! I had read it quite a while ago, but English Teen went on so long without him showing up that I forgot, and now he's taken me by surprise!
I am really excited about what Luke's new budding friendship with Elliott means for his development, and ultimately happiness, but I'm also worried that he's not emotionally mature enough yet to help Elliott with his (probable) emotional baggage. Fingers crossed?
I'll have to read In Safe Hands again soon so I can get better context of the coming chapters, but I am really enjoying this story lately. English teen is really picking up pace!
Hello my friend, and thanks for another review! ISH and ET were always going to be the same story, but Elliott was important enough to have his own backstory. Elliott has also arrived into ET a few years on from his own traumas, and has grown a lot in the intervening time. I would say that he was confidant, but under the surface there is still a history that affects him.
Happy New Years to you.
Simon isn't even close to beginning a recovery. In fact, he's still on a downward spiral.
I have the feeling things are going to be much worse for him before they begin to get better. Poor Simon, but poor Simon's family, who won't be able to understand what's really going on. Simon is nowhere near ready to explain. Helicopter mom has the attitude to make it all even worse.
Only Luke, with perhaps insight from Eliot, stand a chance to break through.
Good chapter Riley! It revealed a lot.
Some really astute perceptions, Skinny. It looks like Simon is going to try to keep a lid on his feelings…bad news of course, because his anger and sense of betrayal is going to start surfacing in other ways.
Will Luke be able to help. Maybe, though he’s a bit consumed with his own issues right now with Elliott on the scene. Somebody needs to get Simon talking. Toby? Helicopter mum? Neither seem that good an option!
Happy New Near to you!
you have to feel sorry for simon. not only does he have the injuries but his best friend and boyfriend got carried away and did it to him. that sort of leaves him with nothing.(apart from his loving family of course). instead of calling for toby to be ground up and discharge on the dirt, i would like for the two of them work out the great wrong that was done to simon. what happened was serious and must be handled that way.but simon did at first agree. i happen to like toby and his mother and would not like them to disappear from the story. i don't think the two boys can work out this predicament them self. who would help? and is toby going to visit either in the hospital or at home? that would be very interesting.
riley, thanks for writing.
Yep, it’s really hard to see Simon feeling so low. You almost want him to get blazing angry - at least stuff might get dealt with then. However, I can’t see that happening anytime soon.
At some point he’s going to have to face Toby, and I think that scares him too. Is there any hope for the two of them? I dunno…it would take a miracle or at least a lot of help.
Happy New Year to you, and thanks for the review
Ahhh, poor child, I hope that he does not slip into despair. Simon is such a lovely soul, to have this done to him is deplorable. Let's hope that his big brother is astute enough to discover the cause of this and provide the support Si needs. The brothers love one another deeply, I suspect even more than they've ever thought.
Hello Dughlas, and a happy new year to you!
The big question is whether Simon is going to start talking or whether he’s going to close down. Will Luke be able to look beneath the surface and find a way of helping, or is he more consumed with the new guy on his own horizon?
Poor Simon - he must feel he has been completely betrayed by the person he loved. And he has been given the operation he was determined to avoid. Frankly, I hope Luke beats Simon's "boyfriend" to the consistency of toothpaste!
Simon is in a bad way and is going to struggle to come to terms with what has happened. Will he be able to see any good in it and be able to move on? And what’s going to happen when he next sees Toby?
Happy New Year Ozymandias
Authors prerogative to resolve nothing. Just want the next chapter.
Lol! On to the next chapter, and a Happy New Year!
Another chapter that brought tears to my eyes. I feel so bad for Simon. As he said at the end, he has lost so much. You made me feel all of his lost innocence. This story is getting better and better and it seems
there is so much more left to tell.
It’s hard to see Simon so down. You just want to give him a hug and help him to talk it through. Is anyone going to be able to manage that?
probably read ISF couple years ago. Struck by how sensitive Elli & Miguel were. You really felt for them and then ending really hurt. When started ET there was reference to ISF but I forgot what it was about. Then after this chapter went back and reread. Still hurts. Now you can't let Luke hurt Elli, that would be too much. What are you going to do with Ryan.
Now this is the real problem that's brewing Randy. We know a whole lot about Elliott from ISH, just as we do about Ryan. Is someone going to get hurt here?
Funny how Elliot is the sophisticated one here. It is embarrassing that I lived in Sevilla for three years on my boat and couldn't do the Spanish. Maybe I am a stealth Brit.
This was a nice time getting the boys better introduced but of course there are a lot of plates being juggled. As always waiting for more. Happy Hollidays.
Steve! I didn't even realise you were a Brit! You're right though - we Brits are rubbish at languages. Thanks for the review.
YES! Elliott is back and with a connection to Luke. Have waited 2 years to find out a little more about Elliott. Although I read on with a little apprehension knowing your stories can have a very sad ending.
Indeed Elliott is back - actually he started appearing way back when Luke was in the opticians getting glasses for his dad. It’s true Elliott comes from difficult personal e’s in a experiences - and now he’s in a mix with Luke and Ryan. Is someone going to get hurt?
Happy New Year!
Not much to say, but this was a great chapter to read. It is good to see Elliott and his family and find out how he survived everything that happened. I am sure it will be a story to tell. That ending brought it all back of why they are there and what Simon has gone through. I think Ryan has competition.
Hi Peethree. Ryan may have competition, but I'm not sure Luke will be any forthcoming with Elliott than he ever has been with Ryan...unless something changes...
A great chapter Riley!ISH was posted before I was on GA, so after this chapter, I've been trying to catch up. I'm about half way through and already stuff in ET is making mores sense, although the stories can certainly stand alone.
"If there had been somebody to blame for Simon’s trauma other than his brother himself, he would have gladly beaten the fucking bastard to a pulp!" -- Haha ...Toby better hope Luke never finds out!"Te gusta, verdad" Ha! Sam's sure got thier number. Maybe Elliot will be the catalyst for Luke. He needs a little shove.
Thanks for this chapter Riley!
Hi Skinny. Yes, it was probably a good thing Luke's Spanish is non-existent. Not sure how he would have handled that. Glad to hear you're enjoying ISH!
Thanks Riley for another great chapter. The banter, and bonding, between Elliot and Luke is quite enjoyable. I suspect Elliot's history is just a few of Luke's prying (or innocently curious) questions away - if so, it'll be interesting to see how Luke responds, given his internal conflict of finding Elliot so attractive yet being afraid of admitting his same-sex attraction to anyone in real life.
The aftermath of Simon being circumcised isn't going to be pretty, especially how staunchly opposed he was to the procedure. So, so many issues there, not least will be a feeling that Toby has permanently robbed him of something so private by his mindless, vile actions. I'm also guessing it won't be too long until Becky continues her grossly inappropriate blurting and spreads the word wide and far. The guy had better develop a strategy for dealing with unwanted questions and attention. I really hope that before long, he can put this behind him and get on with being a kid, but I dare say that'll be some time away yet.
So many different pots on the boil in this story, and I'm so eager to get a look in at each of them - no doubt you have an update coming for each (how's Jacko going with cracking on to Ryan at tennis camp, for example?).
Thanks again, and please keep up with the engaging, captivating writing.
Hi Milo. I agree with you, Simon is in a bad place on all kinds of levels. Will he confide, or will he shut everyone out? We already know a lot about Elliott through ISH, so there's no question where he's coming from. But will Luke catch on - and I'd he does, will he do anything about it? And then there's still Ryan. Not sure I can really see him going for Jacko, but stuff can happen...
Lots of choices, and soon they'll be back at school!
An Embarrassing dinner night with a teacher turned out to be an exiting one. I felt like a normal and formal dinner with someone old rather than new. I never knew the situations about a step father, not even seen near me.
About Daniels and Grace!!! We want to know what You think or plan to do. After all its Your story...
Hi MGK. So far so good...it seems to have been a nice meal. Toby has behaved and, it seems, got on well with Daniels. We'll have to see how the rest of the day goes!
What a great chapter! It's so nice to see ET and ISH intersect for more than a passing glance like before. I am quite unsure whether I root for Luke and Elliot or Luke and Ryan at this point. You have made them all likeable and believable at the same time. And they sure need a little more in the love department.
As for Simon, I do hope he confides in Luke some time soon but a ward full of other kids might not be the best place.
Hi Bleu. Thanks for your review. Having Elliott in the mix sure stirs things up for Luke, but who knows where it will lead or with whom!
I've been a fan of Elliott's since "In Safe Hands" first appeared and was waiting for him to arrive.
Toby is in for a world of hurt when Luke finds out just what happened to Si.
If Simon feels able to tell that is... And yes, we now have Elliott in the field. It could get interesting!
great chapter. You had mentioned earlier that you would link up with In Safe Hands. You are insufferable though,if you arrant ending on a cliff hanger then you are teasing us with possibilities. Where is this going, is Luke going to fall for Elliott and leave poor Ryan high and dry or will Elliott be disappointed or... I guess we will find out in time.
Insufferable? That's new - never been called that before, though I do enjoy keeping readers guessing. So is someone going to be disappointed...or is it something else altogether?
I must say I was waiting for the social worker to show up regarding the abuse. Hope that was dodged. Elliott is a cool new direction. Not sure we need too many more directions.
Since it was mentioned above I will put in another bug for, Against the Machine. Pax
Hi Steve. I think Simon was pretty cleaned up before he went to the hospital, and I doubt that Toby would confess anything to his mom quite yet - he probably doesn’t even realise where Simon is.
You knew Elliott was coming, Lol!
As for ATM - as I said to jdvr, let’s see if there’s still anyone ready by the time we get to the final chapter of ET!
Thanks for your review,
I am so happy that you are writing again and have some of your works published. I was wondering when or if Elliot would play a larger role in the story. This last chapter was an excellent read. Poor Simon, and will he tell the truth about Toby?
BTW, is anything happening or going to happen with Against the Machine?
Ah…Against The Machine… Not sure yet. My first goal was to finish ET and get the final chapter published. We’ll have to see how that goes. If there are still people reading by they, then maybe!
Will Simon tell all about Toby…I doubt it, at least for now, but who knows…
Great couple chapters! Things seem to really be moving along again now, what with the serious problems between Toby and Simon, all of Simon's penis issues, and the introduction of Elliot to Luke's life. I am excited and hopeful that Elliot or possibly Simon's problems will evoke some sort of change in Luke or Luke's life.
Hello there! It will be interesting to see how all this affects Luke - especially the arrival of Elliott. Have you read Elliott’s story yet ‘In Safe Hands’?
A great chapter Riley!
i wonder if any of the medical team noticed Simon's posterior condition, assuming there was at least some damage.
Perhaps it will be Elliott, rather than Ryan, to draw Luke 'out' - an intriguing and potentially complicating possibility.
Another interesting chapter in a very interesting story!
I’m guessing not when it comes to Simon’s backside. Simon did have a shower after he got home, so I think he would have been cleaned up - that and the hospital were probably more worried about what was around the front!
Elliott is definitely one to watch!
How I feel so badly for Simon. Perhaps he'll be fully out of pain, eventually. But the scars of the day will last a very, very long time. For Luke, he's made a new friend, and investigating Elliot promises to be a lot of fun. Looking forward to more!
Hi Parker. A bad day for Simon for sure…and tomorrow might not be any better. Elliott is somebody to watch - have you read his story?
I feel sort of guilty that it has taken me until chapter 55 to tell you how much I am enjoying this story. It's very well plotted with a wonderfully realized cast of characters. I hope the story goes on until Simon graduates from college!
A very thankful hello to you! Anyone who reads and reviews the tale is a real boost to me, and the more so if it's a first review from a long-term reader! So thanks for this , and I hope you'll come back with more as the story progresses.
Well, I'm finally trying to catch up with one of my favorite stories!
I think the dinner (lunch?) went rather well. I think the four of them were very relieved. lol
I definitely agree with Skinny; I like the connection that Simon and Grace have. I think it's the type of connection you can't have with your own mom.
Onto the next one!
Lisa! Brilliant to hear from you as always! Dinner did go well, but then…well, I guess you’ll have to see. Your right about Simon and Grace. Often teens can get on better with adults who aren’t their own parents.
Thanks for your review.
A heavy chapter. You describe it like you have experienced it yourselve?
Hi Joey. I’m relieved to be able to say that no I haven’t experienced anything quite like that! I don’t think any of us would want to.
Thanks for your review - it’s great to hear from you.
WOW! Talk about having you on the edge of your seat. Typical mother behavior on Lucy's part. I rather to 1000+ things rather than try to calm a distraught mother. Sounds like Simon has a rough road ahead of him.
Thanks for the review. Yep - a rough road behind and ahead for Simon. Let’s hope he recovers quickly.
Youch!!! Simon's distress translated into reader's tears at this end. Whatever the outcome for him, I do hope he's promptly given some pain relief - and by some stroke of luck, avoids the Spanish Inquisition from his parents as to how this happened.
Loved the used car negotiations, Riley - thanks for the light humour in an otherwise uncomfortable chapter. My first car was a Volvo too. :-)
Hey there again. You gotta love a Volvo! Thanks for the review Milo.
My heart goes out to Simon, maybe he should have listened to the Doc in the first place and had the op like his brother. I'm sure it would have been a lot better for him in the long run. Paraphimosis sounds eye-wateringly painful. Ouch! Lucy seems a little paranoid to me and should understand that at their age, her sons would probably prefer her not to keep demanding to see their willies. She dosen't really understand anyway. She should have trusted Luke to examine Simon's dick, he would have handled it a lot better. Excuse the pun.
Hello Dodger, and thanks for your review! Yes, perhaps he should have listened to the Doc. For sure, he shouldn’t have listened to Toby! Lucy is just being a mum, and I don’t think in the circumstances that she was just going to stand back and do nothing!
I knew it was going to turn out terrible for Simon, and his mind hasn't even been able to process the rape yet. The pain and complications which brought him to ER are focusing his attention. When the rest hits him, being 'out' is going to seem trivial. Unless he shuts sex down completely.
His family has no idea the depth of damage he's endured.
A good (bad) chapter Riley!
Oh dear - what have we done to the poor kid, and what will happen when he gets past anger to something else?
Poor Simon! I suspect this won't end well for him, I wonder if he's going to have an emergency circumcision he won't want. No doubt he's going to be outed to his parents too, it's going to be a very stressful to for him.
Hello Jagboi - and thanks for your review. If Simon’s parents believe that the Paraphimosis is an outcome of the stretching tool, then maybe he won’t be outed. It doesn’t make the rest of it any better though!
How very, very, terrifying for Simon. The pain just amplifies the fear, and the fear reinforces the pain. You do marvelously at characterizing the reactions and painting the emotions of Geoff, Luke and his mother. The reckoning will come later, and that fear will further tear into poor Simon. Toby really did a number on him, and I fear it will put Simon off any kind of healthy relationships for a long time to come. This is an excellent chapter, and I thank you for it.
Thanks for the review Parker. It was quite a rocky ride down to the hospital! You’re right, I think you have to wonder how this is going to impact Simon in the long run. Let’s hope he can get through it.
Another great chapter. I feel so bad for Simon and the family. You capture so well all the emotions of the family members. I know there will be so much more to come for all, including more tears from me.
More to come - and some surprises too I think!
Thanks for reviewing.
Thanks for another great chapter, Riley, even if it was quite dark. Poor, poor Simon - that's the last thing he would expect from someone he's so close to. Even before it happened, I was wondering where the warmth and tenderness in their exchange was - wouldn't that be more Simon's style? Toby is clearly troubled - as others have pointed out, not only to be so offbeat as to be fantasising about somebody else, as if the dude he was with wasn't even there with him, but the way in which he violated Simon is utterly appalling - not only the effective rape, but the 'unhooding', too; it was all so wrong. I do hope Simon is able to talk to, and be comforted by, his older brother - but even that isn't going to be enough to make him feel ok. I wouldn't be surprised if he can no longer trust or even respect Toby, at least not for a very long time. I bet the youngster also wishes he could confide in his parents just for the emotional support, but I guess there's no way he could, given the subject matter.
Very keenly looking forward to your next instalment. Thanks again.
Hello Milo. No, it was never Simon’s ‘style’, and whatever feelings he had for Toby are going to be torn to shreds. There’s something about Toby that’s a little disturbing and whatever is driving him isn’t good. Trust Toby? No. Get help from Luke? Maybe. Confide in his parents? No a chance!
Thanks for the great review.
It was so bad in so many ways. And it's only going to get worse.Simon is traumatized, possibly injured. If Luke pries the truth out, heaven help Toby.
Toby has had issues all along. You've certainly given us enough warnings Riley. But as readers, we usually assume main, likable characters always come through. You've showed us not to make that mistake with a few characters in this story.
You'd think we'd learn!
I don’t think anyone is perfect, Skinny. Most of us have our dark side, and try to ignore a cupboard carrying the odd skeleton! At best, Toby is damaged stock, and you could make a case that he can’t help how he is. Poor excuse though, isn’t it! And, as you say. if Luke finds out, heaven help the guy!
Poor Simon. It was all fun and games, and then he got very badly hurt. He said no, but was in no real position to enforce his wishes. And Toby really didn't get it, or intend to get it. Him fantasizing about another boy while prying open his own boyfriend speaks volumes about where he is right now. So different to Simon. Can Luke be of any help or support to Simon now?
Hi Parker! You’re right, Toby didn’t get it - or possibly didn’t even intend to get it. Honestly, I’ve always wondered why those two are together, and I think Simon is coming to that conclusion just now, too!
The question is, will Simon tell Luke? I don’t think he’d say anything to his parents, but he might his brother. If he could do that, I think it would really help.
I have to say, I really used to like Toby, but in the last few chapers I began doubting if he really was a nice guy. In the course of this chapter I began to dislike him, he displayed a personalitiy I cannot approve - extremely selfish, disregarding of others feelings and opinions, very pressuring and singleminded.
But regarding all the other chapters I am not ready yet to write him off, but that can only be avoided if he realizes his mistake and changes. I also think he won't realize them on his own.
I only hope Simon didn't hurt himself, when his foreskin was forced back and will ne able to process the event
While there is a lot to like about Toby, he definitely has a dark side. It’s not new either - it’s always been there, but it’s only as he’s begun pushing out the boat now that he has Simon that a lot of the previously hidden traits are beginning to show through.
But can he change? And more to the point, can Simon ever forgive him?
Who knows, but thanks for the review!
Wow! The previous chapter was such a high with the dinner going so well and now everything ends so poorly for Simon and Toby. You weaved in some of Toby's issues well with the flashbacks to his earlier treatment that seems like he was dominated and his watching and fantasizing about Ryan's hang. Really good chapter that I hope Simon recovers from, but I am not sure how soon. What is to come? Toby is so unpredictable.
Hi there Peethree! Originally, it was going to be all one single chapter, but it started getting long and my editor and I decided that we should break it up, so that there is a good, followed by a real ugly. Toby has always had issues, damaged by his own experiences when he was a kid. Once you weave in his creative imagination, it becomes a potent mix. Whatever happens now, it’s not over in all kinds of ways…just not good ones!
Not good, not good at all. Toby seems unaware that he just raped Simon. His earlier experience left him damaged and there are issues he needs to resolve. I think we may have just read the beginning of the end of their relationship.
I think it happened without either of them thinking it was that (i.e. rape), but I wonder how long it’s going to take for Simon to begin to see it in that way? Even if it weren’t the end for them, it’s sure going to be a long way back.
Thanks for the review Dughlas
I loved reading about the barbecue!
I do agree with Milo when he mentioned Jacko and Ryan. I also noticed that Jacko is trying to insinuate himself between Luke and Ryan. Luke's already getting a little annoyed, but wait till he finds out Jacko wants Ryan the same way Luke does! Maybe Luke should think about going to their camp also, if for no reason but to keep an eye on Jacko! lol
LOL! Jack is so easy to read, he’s going to have to be careful, I think, Lisa! Thanks for another review - they’re always welcome!
A nice, more intimate, chapter following the bigger busier ones.It wouldn't surprise me if Daniels already has the boys figured out. If not, I'm sure he would be cool with it. Instead of Grace 'telling' him, it would be better if the boys did some small thing to make him realize, if he hadn't already. It would be better than a big announcement.
Riley, you painted the connection between Simon and Grace so well. Also her ability to use Simon to keep Toby under control.
Great chapter Riley! Now about Luke...
Thanks again for another the review Skinny. I actually doubt that Daniels is that clued up. he teaches at an all boys school, so is naturally only ever going to see same-sex friendships as normal day to day stuff, and nothing unusual. Now about Luke…well, we’ll have to see!
A fine day with friends and different kind of pairs and all. It simple, neat and I know You worked a lot. I liked it.
But, when are You going to give a 'Luke and Ryan' shot for Us. I was eagerly waiting for that.
A shot for Ryan and Luke…is that ever going to happen? And if it does, is it going to be how you think? One thing I can promise - it won’t be boring!
Thanks for the review MGK
Yes, indeed, but painfully slow. College--no less?
Hi Napaguy. College seems a long ways away. Maybe that feels safe to Luke - but maybe he isn’t going to be given that luxury?
Thanks Riley for another great chapter, and especially for a back to back treat. It seems there are nuances and dynamics developing between many different characters now, each with a little mystery about how the development will pan out. For example, Owen and Olly (that's especially interesting), Stacey and Luke (will Luke be honest with her, and will it help him to confide in someone?), Jacko and Ryan (I want to say Jacko should keep his eyes off Ryan, but that's none of my business) and of course Simon (one of my favourite characters) and Toby and Mrs Skerrit. Credit to you for getting so much going on, with such flow and consistency and a "down to earthness" about it all.
I'd love to hear from Ryan's perspective some time - no doubt you have that planned for us all. :-)
Thanks again for the brilliant work.
Owen and Olly - well there’s an unlikely pair if you ever met one! Jacko is definitely showing signs of eyes for Ryan, though I don’t know what Ryan will do with that. Someone’s going to get hurt if he’s not careful.
If you like Simon, then the next few chapters are going to keep your attention!
Thanks for the review and the kind comments!
This was a busy chapter with lots of different avenues to take.
Is the story still set in and around 2008/9 ?
You have given Simon the chance to remain intact unlike Luke, but when Luke went to have his SmartKlamp fitted Dr Tiberius for one moment while waiting for the anesthetic to take effect on Luke's dick thought Luke may have been able to stretch the skin, was this the same method Simon now has?? but its good to give options on medical methods.
Toby, Mmmm hard to put a sticker on the boy, seems he gets bored easily and can be very dismissive to others including Simon. I wonder if this all stemmed from his problems he had when he lived in Sarasota and his friendship with Dillon.
It may even be the reason his what seems to be a growing interest in BDSM is coming from, his ability to cause pain and humiliation for others how he had pain and humiliation caused to him though be it not fully sexual then, is now turning that way with Simon.
Simon on the other hand has love for Toby, whether its a first love or the start of something else remains to be seen as both are still in high school and as we all know things change the older we get, but I also see a jealous and troubled streak in Toby that Simon will not allow or to hold more than a curious interest in his BDSM games as to be honest Simon is to "nice" for anything to heavy.
You seem to have moved away from the lax attitude of the teaching facility at the Academy after Ry's hang, true the kids are scrapping as a sign of solidarity but the staff still have gone unpunished.
Like many others have commented on, Luke seems totally closeted in his attitude about Ryan over the last few chapters and in fact the last few chapters have opened for more people to enter so pushing Luke/Ryan to one side.
It will take a lightning strike to get Luke out of the closet unless he is forced out, either by force from a third party or from a bout of maybe jealous anger aimed at Ryan.
I would like to see a bit more interaction with the older folk, will this happen? I know Ry's dad is a shit and is a drain on the lives of Ry and his Mum but with her parents in the picture this could work in both their favors if Ry's dad was taken care of.
Simon and Luke may be typical brother's, fight have there own friends but at the end of the day they both help each other out and they can talk to each other so drawing them closer, maybe Luke should use Simon as a shoulder to cry on and reveal his feeling for Ryan.
Great story, look forward to the continuation of this chapter.
Thanks for the full review Jeff!
So yes, the story at this point is 2008. Sometimes stretching is an option for tight foreskins, but it really depends on the age and the severity of the condition. Well remembered - Tiberius did have another look at that for Luke, just to confirm in his own mind that there was no other option than surgery.
You’ve got it right with Toby. Maybe like all of us, his past affects his present, and the whole leaning towards BDSM games comes from his experiences with Dillon, confused by the agony of humiliation he suffered under his hands. Simon doesn’t like it and, though he loves Toby, none of it bodes well.
Luke and Ryan continue to stay at a distance and, like you say, a lightening strike is needed. Perhaps they’ll never connect, or perhaps it’s coming…who knows, but something has gotta give soon! And if it does, hold onto your hat!!
This is an informative chapter on the developing relationships in the several groups. And it appears to be a kind of watershed moment, when events that fall can have consequences that flow in a bunch of different directions. Wonder how that will work out for Ryan, for Luke, for Toby and for Simon. Looks like Luke is in a waiting / holding pattern...
Hi Parker. Good question. Who knows what will come next and with who…
Ok , need more time on the older group. Some how Ryan and Luke need to become aware that they have more in common than they yet have been able to grasp. Even though neither has any strong interest in the opposite sex.
Keep it coming
They do seem to be managing to remain in the dark! I guess with the likes of Stacey and Mel in the mix, neither is even considering that the other has no interest in girls.
Thanks for the review on this one!
It's been a pleasure rejoining and catching up with this story. It is fairly heartbreaking to read a well written and engaging e-fic, only to discover it's not been updated for quite some time, and may not be again.
On the other hand, the surprise and delight of seeing an update just about makes up for it. These last few new chapters have been very, very good. In particular, I find myself incredibly engaged when Ryan is the narrative focal point. His emotional and life conflicts are complex and powerful, and I can really feel for him.
Luke, on the other hand, has succeeded in annoying me on multiple occasions now, in the way he seems content to just watch things happen and never take action, either for himself or for others. He has become something of an observer character, through which the problems and turmoils of other characters are reflected - a literary device I can understand, but don't exactly love.
Actually, I wouldn't mind if his... idleness was actually something he was aware of, and struggled with (it caused him problems, or he regretted it.) Yet, it seems almost as if he has no idea that he is living his life like a side character. His regret over his inaction during Ryan's hang, a guy he supposedly had at least some degree of feelings for, was really understated and shallow, or so I thought.
These are all just my impressions, and don't get me wrong, I really do enjoy reading this novel. I would not be surprised if, in fact, all of these things I've complained about are actually deliberate on your part, a piece of a greater scheme for an upcoming dramatic or emotional payload. Even if they are not, I'm sure you have interesting things in store.
Hope you are doing well, and eagerly awaiting more!
Hello Shinoai. Glad to hear that you’re back with the story and delighted to read your great review!
I think you hit the nail on the head with the perception that Luke is quite distant in many respects. It’s not just a feature of a person who’s something of an outsider (a Brit living in America), it’s also because he’s never really had to fend for himself in life or faced much in the way of difficulties or failure.
Ryan on the other hand is complex, but solid. He knows who he is and finds ways of coping well with his difficult life. However, I think we’re just beginning to see that Luke realises he can’t keep sitting on the fence.
Again, thanks for the review - and I hope you’ll add more as the story progresses!
So good to see Stacey and Owen again! Maybe even Olly too...eh, maybe not. lol
I was sort of surprised to see Simon and Toby at the BBQ; do freshmen always hang out with the older kids? I mean, I know mine did, but that was mainly b/c the whole wrestling team always hung out together as a group, even JV. But as I always say, the more the merrier!
Great chapter, Riley! Looking forward to the next one!
Next chapter should be up soon, Lisa!
Don’t forget that this cookout was arranged by both Todd and Mason, so they both brought their own friends from their separate years. Still plenty of time left in the day for things to warm up!
I'm thankful Simon doesn't need the surgery (right now at least). That whole SmartKlamp thing with Luke just seemed like such a pain in the ass. I hope Si will have fun with his stretching tool! lol
And of course I agree with everyone else who said Luke is a great big bro!
A massive relief all round I think, Lisa. Now stretching is on the menu - and let’s hope Simon decides to forgive Toby. Luke was pretty cool too - he seems to have a good head on him (pun unintended!) Lol!
OH EM GEE! Poor Simon!! What's he gonna do?? He can't possibly dye his pubes back to natural, what's he gonna do? Oh how embarrassing! lol He's sure to be pissed at Toby now! haha
Can't wait to see how this plays out. Snicker, snicker.
You’re right - sorely pissed off! Toby maybe pushed it too far this time!
What a busy chapter!All the characters in the play were on stage at the same time. Lots of emotions, grudges and plenty of other things to observe and guess about.A triangle between out, partially out and totally in the closet. That could be seriously interesting
Well done, as usual, Riley! Can't wait for more (or should I say, the other shoe?)
Yep, everyone is on stage. Great fun. The day is still young though, and we’ve yet to see how the characters are going to interact. More coming shortly!
Someday, lighting will strike Luke. Maybe Ryan will be there, maybe not. But at least he's had the experience of being happy and delighted with life. For one golden day. Thanks for the busy, detailed and evocative description. More, perhaps? Soon?
Glad you enjoyed this chapter, Parker. I agree with you - lightening needs to strike, but where and how remains to be seen!
I've had the impression that Ryan and Luke are close friends. Since they are both closeted why not break them into at least a closeted couple! And
Lost the last bit of your review there Napa, but interesting direction… What’s it really going to take to get them noticing the right things?
Liked the banter of Luke's dad when they took Simon for his exam, so British , and how Mum was almost ready to do her Florance Nightingale act again seemed disappointed.
Simon gets to play with himself as much as he likes was a joy, talk about a kid in a candy store and I guess he will use that as an excuse and take matter's in hand more than normal and i wonder as Toby is in to a bit of BDSM he will offer a hand.
But methinks there could be tears before bedtime with the Luke, Ryan, Jacko triangle
It looks as though Ryan coming out to Jacko has given Jacko a love interest that he never thought of before other than a possible bedtime wank fantasy that he now see's as a possibility and Ryan could also be tempted to reciprocate if the chance as well as something else should arise Luke although he may not fully realise it he is starting to show a bit of jealousy even though it was only flipping burgers, he is not to keen on someone coming between him and his mate.
Maybe Luke will catch Ry and Jacko kissing a slanging match ensues and Luke outs himself. Who knows
Thanks again Riley for as usual a great chapter.
Hi there Jeff, and thanks for a great review!
I think you’re right about Toby, we’re beginning to see a side of him that probably has Simon a bit cautious too. Let’s hope they can sort out their differences.
Jacko is certainly suffering from a bit of hero worship syndrome with Ryan, that’s for sure! Will it go anywhere? We’ll have to see, though I think it’s yet another thing Luke is totally oblivious to.
i like how you show the brothers' care for each other. They can argue and scrap but have a deep bond love and loyalty. Thanks for the chapter
Thanks my friend! A chapter I really enjoyed writing too.
Nice chapter with all embarrassing situations and all. Luke proved to be a good brother. But Si's not wanting a Op~ there must be some reason You planned I think. Yeah it did look like a BDCM ~Pubes Waxing. Hahaha...
Nice Chapter though...
Luke did prove to be a good brother to have around when you're in a scrape—or in Simon's case more of a waxing! I don't think he enjoyed any of that at all. It might be a while before him and Toby are talking.
Thanks for dropping a note.
Again a very interesting chapter, maybe a bit disappointed about the fact that Si did not get circ'ed .. If he is going to be, hope it'll involve Toby as a special guest !
Actually, i hope that Toby and Si will find to stay together =)
Simon does seem to have got away with it, though it's a real point of tension between him and Toby. Perhaps Si's boyfriend is just going to have to get used to that. I guess we wait and see!
Youch! Pubes waxing!!! Sounds like BDSM Some very funny scenes, throughout Riley! An altogether enjoyable chapter!Somehow I don't see the Simon/Toby dynamics returning completely unaffected by this episode.Luke was so helpful as a brother,until it was out of his hands Can't wait for the fallout and the next chapter!!
Hi there - thanks for the review on this chapter. I had a lot of fun writing it too! You're right, Luke was pretty cool in managing to head off any disaster, but we'll have to see if Simon can shake off his bad mood with Toby. Summer's coming, so perhaps they'll settle down a bit?
I love this series! I am so happy to see you back. I grew up in the southeastern states and I'm very familiar with the Roswell Alpharetta area. Reading your story is almost as good as going home.
I hope I have it right. I like to do a lot of research. Glad you’re enjoying the read, and thanks so much for the review!
Thanks for this chapter. Wonder how Simon is going to handle all this; and can't wait to see the extract from Luke's journal...
Chapter up shortly. Thanks for the review Parker
incredibly funny and sexy too. i figure simon makes a fast run to toby's, or gets lost and forgets the appointment or just mans up with the doctor and his dad. i don't think simon going to take responsibility so its really up to toby and is the washable part is as easy as he described. maybe he could take toby to the drs. and explain its a new fad at his school.
thanks for writing.
A run for it or forget the appointment. These might be options. Can’t see his mum taking that well, though.
New chapter up shortly, so we’ll see.
OMG. What a pickle. I was thinking he would just have to man up and deal with Tiberius and Dad. But I bet if he talks to Luke he will get really yanked about Tiberius's daughter. Eek. Hope she is off. Suspect Toby is in for it. You really do string it along so well.
Of course as a sailor I am distressed he will not be sailing for a bit. That's why I had mine done in February. Lol. Pax.
Okay - good try. Now we don’t want to be messing up his sailing…I’m guessing that’s a mite uncomfortable?! As always, you’re a star Steve - and thanks for the review!
Hi Riley. liked the last couple of chapters, a lot has gone on with Ryan and his life has been a roller coaster but to some extent so has Luke with his feeling's of betrayal towards Ryan for the hang and resulting feelings both have with each other.
Seems Ryan although amazed with the Scraping and its popularity is a bit suspicious that its a fad and many are just going along with it as a joke or from peer pressure.
Joe 's sadness of his own hang and the mental turmoil of his violation hit home on Ryan that while Ryan was a leader of hangs he now realises how traumatic this sort of "joke" can be.
As for Jacko we see a person who is unable to understand his new feeling's who feels he is the only person who has been made this way within a school of macho influenced guys who is terrified his secret could come out and his life made hell (something I know only too well from my own school days.)
Ryan took a huge gamble telling jacko his secret, but it is always easier to talk outside the box instead of inside it with the person you really care for...Luke.
Now Ryan has taken the first step lets hope Luke is the next person he talks to or maybe the wily old Grandparents, who will give him the advice and support he needs.
Maybe Luke needs to drop his straight macho image maybe a slip of the tongue, but whatever it is, these two boys need to get it together.
So the sperm donor maybe getting a promotion? lets hope he gets sent to Afghanistan or Syria and he gets killed, that could open up new story lines involving Ryan with his mum getting back on her feet and controlling her life again.
Thanks Riley, waiting for next chapter with baited breath.
As always, a great review Jeff. I enjoyed writing the scene between Ryan and Jacko, plenty of tension in something that could easily backfire. Will Ryan take it further with Luke? Honestly, I doubt he has that confidence yet. That said, anything can happen in love and war, and we now have the grandparents in play too.
Next chapter out shortly!
Just a quick note to say thanks for another highly enjoyable chapter, Riley. I'm such a fan of this story; it's always such a joy to read. I love the moment poor Ryan has to make a quick exit from the showers - it's nice to see him enjoying a more "normal" kind of experience than what he's had to endure recently. Cheers, Milo.
Yep, I really think Ryan is getting back on track again. It was hard to see him so down.
Thanks for the review, and glad your enjoying the story.
Luke studying urology! lol That was funny!
Great chapter, Riley! I'm finally all caught up! Sheesh!
I thought Ryan's talk with Jacko went really well, and I'm glad he was able to admit it to Jacko. The whole conversation with Joe was good also.
Looking forward to the next chapter, Riley, as always!
Thanks Lisa. Glad to hear you're caught up!
Ahh the fruit is blossoming. Big step for Ry. If only he could be as brave with Luke. Great how he reached out to Jacko.
I get fearful when you disappear for this long. Take care.
Still here and kicking Steve. Managed to get away on holiday, and Andy, my editor has been chokka too. It was a risky step for Ryan, but I think it gives a sense of how he is changing. Luke is still a step to far though, I think.
Thanks so much for the review.
Good writing. Now just hoping that Luke now bares his "secret", now that his brother and Ryan have begun opening up. Difficult issues to deal with at the high school level
i enjoy your stories. Keep them coming.
Hi Lenard — and thanks for the review. School is almost over—at least for now. I guess we'll see what the summer brings?
Thanks for this chapter. I thought the scene in which Ryan finally admits he's gay to Jacko was well done. Please tell us there is more coming. Please?
Yes there is more! Quite a lot more actually. Belt up, it's going to be quite a ride!
Another awesome chapter. I haven't been keeping up with all my favorite stories. However, I did read the last five lol and let me tell you Luke and Ryan need to have something happen. :-) at least once. As for Toby's tree house, that was hot. I'm surprised that mum didn't yell them.
Hi Remijay. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Not sure Grace knew what her son was up to. Not sure she would approve either!
I definitely agree about another great chapter. The action in Toby's treehouse was awesome. Two young men really getting into each other is great. I imagine that Grace suspected something was going on in the treehouse, but decided to give the young lover's some privacy.I'm waiting for similar action to occur between Luke and Ryan, but that may take more time.Thanks again for writing this awesome story.
Not sure if Grace knew or not. She's not daft, so maybe. And Luke and Ryan...well who knows?!
I definitley agree that was another great chapter. The proverbial "shit" almost hit the fan with Ryan. He was going to believe the slightly alterer story that Landon and his father had presented to him. Luke really stepped out of his comfort zone to bring the issue to a head. His technique was remarkable.
I definitely hope that the word about the incident will spread and that the "hanging" and the subsequent bashing of Landon will be put on the shelf.
Then, you will deal with the continuing saga of Luke and Ryan.
Thanks for writing.
And thank you for reading and for the review!
The plot is thickening with both couples--Simon and Toby, as well as Luke and Ryan. Now, I understand the comments about alcohol. I can hardly wait for the next chapter.
As other reviewers have indicated, Grace is really cool. Mother's often know about their son's behavior way before the teen's realize. Grace has noticed the stains in the underwear, as well as the crusty sheets and smell of sex in the air.
I suspect that Luke's mother is aware of the attraction between Luke and Ryan. I can only imagine the reaction when the alcohol is discovered.
I'm waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.
You’re right, Grace is a real tower of strength for Toby. How much has she noticed? Probably a lot more than they think!
As far as Lucy is concerned, I don’t think she really sees anything yet in regards to Luke and Ryan It’s not really on her radar.
Hope you enjoy the next few chapters - and thanks for the review!
Another awesome chapter. The signs are appearing that Ryan really likes Luke. I'm wondering where this will go. Ryan revealed his deep dark secret about beatings by his dad. You could tell that this took a great deal of courage, but also indicates how much he cares about Luke.
What's the comment about Luke and Ryan getting drunk? I don't remember either of them doing any drinking of alcohol. Of course, the inhibitions would go by the wayside. Luke would get his wish for making out and/or sex with Ryan.
Thanks again for writing. I just started reading this story last week, so I'm going through the chapters quickly.
As you know, Ryan has a definite thing for Luke, so this must have been especially difficult for him. I’ll need to check the ‘drunk’ reference. That might have been an orphan, left over from a bit of a rewrite I did. Thanks for pointing it out. And thanks for the review too.
Your readers are on the brink, sitting on the edges of their seats to find out what happens next. I sense some desire for Ryan to get back at the people who participated in "The Hanging". It might not be physical, but he needs to get some revenge for the humiliation.Luke's accident in Ryan's house may allow them to proceed with their relationship. The suspense to find out if Luke damaged himself with the fall is too much to take, so I will proceed to read the next chapter. You definitely brought some interesting twists to the story in the last few chapters. I will look forward to unwinding these twists.
Hello Les - great to have you here and to see some really nice reviews from you! It has taken a lot of time to get to this point in the story, with a lot of setup in the previous chapters. But now it starts with a vengeance! Enjoy the ride!
Wow! That sure took the pain out of scraping! Haha
Another neat chapter Riley!!
Lol! Thanks for the review!
toby and simon. so great young love. they seem to fit together like ying and yang. (what ever that is.) great fun chapter. thanks for writing.
Thanks! Always great to hear from you.
Another great chapter to add to this very entertaining story. A hot scene in Toby's treehouse, with the action taking place virtually under his Mum's nose!
I just love the idea of it becoming de rigueur for boys at their school to be clean shaven in the pubic region. Bet it will lead to plenty of itching and scratching as the hair begins to grow again...
Thanks for the review. Not too much itching and scratching, let's hope!
LOVED Ryan's grandparents! They are terrific!!! And they're his father's parents? They don't seem like they could give birth to someone like Ryan's sperm donor.
The whole scene in the locker room and showers where all the boys were manscaping was so touching. It got me pretty choked up. It's wonderful that they all give a shit, and hopefully nothing like that will happen again.
Terrific few chapters, Riley! As usual!
Hi Lisa - great to hear from you again!
Grands are great, aren't they! Actually, Ryan’s mom is their daughter (not his dad their son). It was because of the army connection that Alexis met - and married - their daughter. We might find out more about that later.
Here’s hoping that the whole Hang incident will never be repeated - but then again, if it’s not that, it could easily be something else in a school such as theirs. For now it looks like they are seeing sense.
Hi Riley, some interesting chapters, I liked Father Kenny, I think Ryan and he will chat again in the not to distant future.
The kids at school finally getting it together and shaving was a nice gesture but I cant see many of them doing it again once the hair starts growing lol.
But the Brigadier and Alice, fantastic is all I can say.
By introducing these characters you have opened the dimensions of the story and are making the story 3D, Father Kenny is not slow on the uptake and I think neither are the Grand parents in fact they may have already noticed how close Ryan and Luke are in such a short time and it will only be a matter of time before the wily old couple see things and will be a power for Ryan.
I would like to see the Gramps meet with Luke's family I am sure things will be a riot with their sense of humor coupled with the British humor.
I am waiting for the family get together at Ryan's and would like to see Ryan's mum more involved.
Did you ever spend time in the US? as you either know your stuff of did a lot of online checking or maybe are you were the "English Teen" ???
Thanks for your time and effort Riley.
Hi Jeff - and thanks again for a really great review. There are a few more characters coming in at this point, and I think you can be sure we haven’t seen the past of the grandparents! They really are a great couple!
I visited the USA for sure, but I do a lot of research as well. Am I the English Teen? Well that would be telling. I tell you what - if I ever get asked to do one of the author interviews that pop up in the forum ever so often, you can ask me outright! LOL!
After the last few, nice to have an upbeat chapter. We needed it! However, I'm missing Elliott.
Missing Elliott? Now there’s a big question…and I’m afraid I have no answers for you! Not even a suspicion of a teaser! Yet…
Well I have to tell you that I almost didn't read your story. I just started it a few days ago, and found the spelling errors, misused words and errors in context rather offputting. I'm happy to say that I persevered because in spite of the errors (in the early chapters) you write a good story. Once I began reading, I couldn't stop, and now have to wait impatiently for the next chapter(s)! How long do we have to wait for Luke and Ryan to discover each other??
All I can say is I’m delighted you stuck with it. You’re right abut the early chapters - I don’t think they’re as smooth as the later ones. I was already part way through the story before I started getting the help of an editor, and I think you can tell! That said, if there are bits that are glaring, do let me know in a PM and I’ll try to correct them.
Thanks for reviewing
What a great chapter. The lucid conversation was so natural and entertaining. It's great seeing Luke and Ryan bond some more, being surrounded by general happiness and good times. Thanks for writing.
Thanks for the review Milotin. I really like writing conversation, particularly between characters that readers know well. It’s fun! Hopefully things are looking up for the pair.
Kudos for great story line. I enjoy the sense o closeness developing between Luke and Ryan.
I think you’re right, Napa. When friends go through stuff- even bad stuff -it can have the chance to build a stronger bond between them.
Thanks for the review.
The solidarity of the upper classmates shows the school culture really is changing.
The Grands are refreshing and welcome reenforcements for future events. Nice chapter.
Hey there Steve. I really like Ryan’s grandparents too. Will be interesting to see what role they end up playing in the future!
I've been catching up on my phone with your new chapters. Anytime I'm waiting to pick my kid up, or waiting for food, or whatever, I'm reading the story.
I love these new chapters and the whole thing with Luke and Ryan getting trashed and Luke's parents finding out was both funny and sad at the same time. When Luke's dad realized that Ryan didn't do anything on purpose, his heartfelt apology and tears really got me choked up. I love how Luke's parents are so welcoming because Ryan really needs people who he can count on for support.
I'm actually reading the next chapter, but I wanted to let you know these new chapters have been great, just like the rest of the story!
Oh, just one small thing: I know Luke and his family come from England, so when they use terms we wouldn't use in the states it makes perfect sense. But when I read Ryan's inner monologue, he talked about being so pissed when he was drunk. That didn't sound right to me b/c he would never use that word to describe wasted, drunk, etc. He would use that word to describe if he were angry or frustrated even, but not drunk.
I know it's hard for someone to think like an American when he's not from the states. lol I know I'd probably do the same thing w/o even realizing it.
Anyway...just stopped by to tell you how much I love this story, and I'm so glad you're back, Riley!!
Hi there Lisa! Great to hear from you - it’s made my day!!
Oh my goodness - you have no idea how hard it is to write in an American culture! Like you say, I can get away with a lot with the Summers family because of their British roots, but the rest is tough. One of the jobs Andy Gordon (my editor) has to do in the time he has, is try to steer me through all the American colloquialisms.
Anyway, glad to hear that ET still has your heart, and thanks for reading and reviewing!
Well, I've just finished reading the whole story and had decided to wait till I reached this point to write a review. Great work ya have here! Before I get started with this chapters review, I gotta say that previous chapter really made my day, Luke's strategy was amazing, it felt like a game or something.
Anyway, focusing in this last chapter I'd like to say that there are some interesting messages you have transmitted us in your writing:
The way some guys that had made bad things realized, thought about it and made a change was one of them, showing that there's not bad guys, just guys which do bad stuff... people is not what they do, as long as there's life there are possibilities to change.
The other one is at the end of the chapter in the chat with Damon and, while it might not be as 'deep' as the first one, it is important to our identity as 'gay guys' or any other group to that matter, here you're saying that to 'brand' people and people's actions is wrong. Just because a guy seems to be dressed as a homeless man, it doesn't mean he's gonna steal from you.
This is one of the causes of me giving you those 'likes', you're transmitting your ideas in a great way, through what you love to do. Of course, I don't really need to point out that your style of writing is really compelling and I love the story and the characters.
Keep up the good work!
Hello there my friend. Glad you made it through to the current chapter! You’ll be glad to know that the story is finished, though often new chapters take a week or so to come out because my editor is a totally ruthless *****! Love him to bits - he’s brilliant!
Some great insights here. Thanks you.
I think that people are always much more complicated than they seem from first impressions - and more so when it’s a limited story. It’s possible to get drawn along by the crowd - and even do bad things - but that’s not necessarily just who you are. People can change. Maybe it’s called growing up?
Anyway, thanks for the nice comments. It’s much appreciated.
when i think about this chapter I'm a little confused. its like you (riley) saying that a bunch of male adolescents are going to forget about their sexual urges and go where?? there boys and they are in a all boys school and they take a shower each day with each other and there's going to be comments and jibes and kidding and even some contact. like its said never drop the soap in a boys shower. even what they did in shaving each other is not too over the top (as far as I'm concerned. it makes the story more interesting? maybe!). they are going to do things like what they did and also what was done to the little brother. its called growing up. show me yours and I'll show you mine. nothing unusual. and i can't for the life of me think that any of these things are going to have a lasting effect on anyone's personality.
it was a good chapter and i enjoyed it even though it was very thought provoking. that's what writing should be about.
thanks for writing. i look forward to each week and the next chapter. and what happened to simon and toby? if i recall weren't they a little more involved previously. i think that the situation they are in and with tobys mother the other element that make it particularly interesting.
Hi Bill - and thanks for the great insights! ’Never drop the soap in the boys shower’! LOL! Never heard that before!!
No of course there’s no way that teen guys at an all boys school are suddenly going to become angels. On the other hand, perhaps the Hang will get dropped. Will something else take its place eventually? Probably.
Simon and Toby are still brewing in the background, and I think Simon is in for a few surprises! (PS - don’t tell anyone I said that!)
This chapter (and the last) have been exciting to read. Read together as a pair, they are especially good. I wonder how Ryan feels about the people who seem to be rallying in his defense. It would be nice to get inside his head for a scene.
Hi Parker. Glad you are enjoying the read. I agree, it’s hard to know what Ryan is thinking just now. I suspect that even if he’s cool on the outside, inside he’s still in some turmoil.
Obviously Todd went through some serious soul searching off camera. That took some guts and I think showed him in a little different light from the way my mind was moving.
It also showed how easily a bunch of kids can be motivated, as did the original incident in the boy's john. Another great chapter!
It’s true, we’re getting to see a bit more of Todd. I think as all teens grow up their personalities begin to get more defined. You see a lot of ‘pack’ mentality in people, and not just in teens. I think everyone likes to believe that they are their own person, but a lot of the time behaviour is very defined by what their peers are doing. Few people are truly autonomous in that respect.
Thanks for the review Skinny
I read the first part of your story some time ago and really enjoyed it, but didn't realize you had continued writing it. Unfortunately, I can't remember where I left off. Hopefully, I can tell by the date. You are a good writer. I'm not sure why I didn't write a review before.
Hi there. Yes, I kind of took a year off, but used the time to completely finish the story. Previously I got to the chapter ’Stitched Up’, but it’s worth the re-read, as I also updated a lot of the earlier chapters. Most were just tweaked so they fitting together better, but also a number had a lot of completely new content added in them.
Anyway, thanks for leaving a review - it’s much appreciated.
Another great chapter Riley, it was good how Luke stood up for Ryan in the office despite starting off making a balls up of an explanation, but thinking about it, it was a logical start for an embarrassed teen to say to something that a simple statement that he had a dick operation would have been enough but he finally said it.
The school seems to have a VERY lax attitude to having a minors parent or guardian present when dealing with "serious" punishment after all Ryan could have been railroaded in to any situation had Luke not intervened. the same as turning a continuous blind eye to the humiliating acts of abuse that goes on under the noses of all the staff.
I would like to hear more about Ryan's mum, as apart from her being driven to drink and made a submissive woman by her dick of a husband it is after all her money that buys everything and gives Ryan his own financial life style, I feel that as someone from such a wealthy background she would have had an "inbred" self preservation to survive maybe she is a volcano waiting to erupt after years of belittling from her husband could come to a head. I feel that deep down she would like to stand up to him and that she and Lucy would be a formidable force if they ever teamed up.
Its only a matter of time before Luke and Ryan come out, to each other then to their family's, Luke would not have a problem but Ryan? no, his dick of an old man would tear him a new one and it would be nice if Ryan had surprising support from his his own family, and to he honest I cant wait for the two to of them finally get down and dirty with each other. lol lol.
I think Ryan will have learned lessons from this hanging saga and will once again sit on his throne and could with Luke's help champion a new age of school attitude's towards pupil's being treated with more respect from staff etc.
Thanks yet again for a great read.
Thanks for such an in depth review Jeff. I think you are right that the Principal made some bad calls. He’s the kind of guy that would want to deal with it himself if he could. Parents are a necessary evil that bring in money, but no more. I’m not sure he was initially looking to throw Ryan out of the school, though with Landon senior turning up, it got more fragile.
When it comes to Ryan parents - especially his mom and wider family - stay tuned. But his father? There lies trouble.
Some really perceptive thoughts from you here, so thanks again for the review.
I have to say, Luke's intervention in the principal's office was absolutely magnificent. What an incredible turn of events to get them all backed into a corner and to back off Ryan - without having to humiliate Ryan with disclosing the infamous Hang. Brilliant writing; thanks Riley.
I'm still absolutely loving this story, just as much as I was a few years back. The boys seem to have gotten through the worst of things - let's hope there's some good bonding to bring them closer than they've ever been before. :-)
Thanks again, Riley.
Hello Milo. You’re right, it really was a turn of events and I don’t think Luke could even guess how it might turn out when he stepped into the office. Are they through the worst? Only time will tell…and the next few chapters of course.
It better not be almost over. What a penis of a chapter. It is so good to have you back continuing this story. Worry about Ry's safety at home as we move ahead. Pax.
A penis of a chapter? Okay - now that’s a first for any review!
Almost over? I hardly think so…
I have to confess, Riley, that this story only slowly grew on me. But like the tides, it doesn't relent. A great chapter. The characters are developing, and I'm addicted. Keep up the great work. Hey! ...I can admit when I'm wrong!!!!
Skinny. Slow or not, I’m just glad you’re reading! And thank you!!
a stinger of a chapter. luke stood up for ryan like a very true friend, cautious with the administrators and landons father and to the point. told only what was necessary to allow landon to accept a lessor penance. thanks for writing and sharing. i too check very often to see if an update is available. and i don't understand why there is always one more chapter that i can't find (as listed on your sign in page)
Thanks for another review Bill. I really enjoyed writing this one too - it was a lot of fun! About the chapter numbers, I think it’s probably because I have an authors intro that’s probably counting in the overall numbers too. You’re definitely not missing anything.
This chapter was pure enjoyment. Luke was smart enough to turn the tables on a situation that might have ended pretty badly. I'm now looking forward to a bit of quiet for Ryan and Luke.
Thanks for the review Bleu. A bit of quiet for them? Really, lol!
Great update. I am glad Luke had a chance to step up for Ryan. Boy, Landon's dad is a jerk just like the son. I almost wanted to see mama bear have to come to the school and protect Luke and Ryan. I check several times a day for updates on this story.
Mama bear was spared on this one - though I think she would have torn strips off them all if she had got involved! I’m trying to update at least once a week, so keep tuned.
Wow! Great chapter Riley. I loved it. Luke finally gets his chance to put things right. Well written, it had me hooked from the first paragraph. I see that you're back with a vengeance.
Thanks Dodger. Not sure it’s back with a vengeance, but I enjoy writing and even more so when others enjoy it too!
You play your readers emotions, well done
Thanks Randy. Appreciate the kind words.
I love this story and was thrilled to find that it's back again. It makes me so happy whenever you post a new chapter. You're a wonderful writer, Riley. Thank you, and keep up the great work!
Thanks so much!
You have a great grasp of parent child dynamics. Very nuanced dialogue between Ryan and the Father as well, letting them each give guidance to each other. Luke and Ryan need to step up and be honest about their sexuality with each other given the story is set in 2015 not 1977. They have been through enough that they should be able to trust each other by now. The relationship part, well let them stumble a bit further
Hi there. Actually, this part of the story is 2008. Luke emigrated from the UK 5 years prior to that. Even 7 years ago - especially in the awkward setting of an all boys school - they would probably be a little more careful about sexuality. And they’re only teens, and stuff like that takes a lot of guts.
So, I think they’re going to keep stumbling for now. Let;s hope they stumble in the right direction soon, though!
Thanks for the review and encouragement!
very good chapter. surprised that the 'father' wasn't the parent and that was a happy development. some humor in that chapter also. thanks for writing and giving us a smile.
I doubted that anyone would suspect that ‘Father’ wasn’t who you might assume. I kinda liked the ‘Collared’ title for the same reason!
Glad you enjoyed that one, Bill.
That was a good surprise. I was not expecting that Father. I cried more than Ryan in this update, but i liked the way Geoff handled things and i hope things are looking up for a while for Ryan.
A good surprise indeed. I’m not quite sure what would have happened if it really had turned out to be his dad. Badly, I suspect. Geoff certainly came up with the goods. Dad’s can do that sometimes.
A very good read.. Less mama and a good dad. And the boys are growing together
keep that thought and trend
Even Dad’s can sometimes hit the nail on the head…sometimes. Thanks for the review my friend!
i just want to say....this is one of my favorite stories on this site! Please don't make us wait for next chapter! Great job with this story. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!
Hi there Rofern - and thanks for the note. Glad you’re enjoying the story! The next chapter should be up shortly.
Someone is addicted to cliffhangers. That is a little cruel when the next chapter is not a click away. I'm so glad that you and your stories are back. Hopefully Luke's family will be there to protect Ryan from further abuse. You capture the teenage brain where they can't see their way out of a situation and everything looks hopeless regardless of whether they are surrounded by friends.
Sorry about that - though I know you’re going to kill me when you finally get to the next chapter.
Thanks for the review - it’s much appreciated!
Ryan escaped a very bad ending. he could have taken a plane to anywhere and then been a boy on the milk carton. after that near miss it looked like he was feeling better about himself, just a little, and would soon have contacted Luke and had an explanation of what had happen that morning. there was some prior history and background between them and Ryan in particular that we knew nothing about. even though its Ryan's father a few sinks away from him it better than an alternative runaway. good chapter. thanks for writing.
The poor guy is on a roller coaster, for sure. Still, I think the next chapter is going to surprise you!
Thanks for reviewing.
Oops. That should finish sobering Ryan up. So excited to have the story back on track.
Thanks Steve. Bet you can’t even guess what’s going to happen now!
I hate Ryan feels like his only safe haven with Lucas' family is gone. Once he gives them a chance, i believe Geoff and Lucy will surprise him. Wow. I was not expecting that ending. They both have some 'splaining to do, although me thinks Ryan will have to do most of it. I read this update at work while i should have been working, but it was worth it. Looking forward to all you have in store for us.
You naughty boy - reading at work! I’m honoured!! It sure is a mess at the moment, but how Ryan will find his way out of it is anyone’s guess.
Completely different direction from what I expected after all this time. Can’t wait to see what happens.
I think you'll be surprised!
Hi Riley, nice new chapter mate.
Dads, what can we say? Geoff went like a typical dad off the deep end with out all the facts, sounded just like mine did when I was 14 lol.
But in his defense he was only trying to do the right thing as he remembered his own alkie brother and did not want his son to make the same mistakes and go down the wrong path with drink.
Like I said off the deep end,
Luke is trying to protect his mate, but somewhere along the line he will need to sit down with Ryan and hash tings out then maybe the two of them can sit down with Lucy and TALK, something that kids do not seem or know how to do.
I was similar at that age, knew it all but knew nothing.
Geoff is a normal dad, how many times have you been told "Ask your Mum" when you need anything and at the same time you see your dad floundering trying to understand how mum makes things seem so easy.
Geoff character is one I can relate to lol.
However he is now slowly starting to realise all is not well in Ryans life and I am sure we will not hear the last of things until he finds out what terrible home life Ryan has, in fact Geoff could soon be hero worshiped by Ryan and his sons, but that is a story line for you Riley as its your story.
Ryan is so scared of adult males due to his dick of an old man that although he likes Geoff the way Geoff went at him reminded him of his own dad so only natural he ran, lets hope he does not have an accident or something where ever he has gone to.
Lucy well she is a power house the one who wears the pants, I look forward to her involvement.
I still think the school needs to be taken to task over the lack of control with the hazing and hangs etc which the staff must be aware of but seem to turn a blind eye, how many more are needed before someone is seriously hurt with a hang etc?
Great story Riley, nice to be on new ground............
Hi Jeff. It definitely makes my day when readers take time to write reviews, even just to drop a note that they’re enjoying the tale. But even more, when great questions get asked and issues probed, I really value it. In fact, what often happens is that - for me at least - a good point can end up becoming part of the story! And I think you hit on something really good stuff here, especially your reflections on Dads. I think you’re right about Geoff…he went off the deep end. It doesn’t come out in the story, but he’s also under a lot of pressure at work with the banking crash of 2008. Even the best guys can get bent out of shape now and again.
Who knows what will happen with the school, though you can be sure it’s all far from over!
It's great to read a new revised chapter after so long, thanks very much. Just a comment that it is rife with typos.
It’s no excuse, but I use an iPad (DocumentsToGo) a lot and sync chapters with my mac if i’ve been working on them. Maybe it’s just me, but content can get totally screwed up when Apple gets hold of it and just make up stuff! Drives me crazy!
Anyway - thank you for reading and for giving me a heads up.
Ahhh back to where we left off. Hope the new chapters show up in the "Stories Update" section. I have a feeling many of the original readers still don't know it's back up. BTW great chapter.
i look for your updates every day and very appreciative when there is one is listed.
thinking about ryan and luke and their drinking bout. being teenagers they are growing up and gaining more independence as they age. the drinking resulted in losing that maturity big time. Luke's mother and father took it all from them and they were relegated to little children being put to bed for misbehaving. its going to take a little time before they are trusted again i would suspect. good chapter.
i enjoy seeing the notes from 2 years ago. but where are your readers now? can't you send a email telling your prior readers that your back on gay authors? they are missing a good thing.
thanks for writing,
Thanks for the review Bill!
I think you’re right, no teens like to be pulled up on their behaviour, and now there will be consequences. Probably a good thing, I think. Nothing worse than when parents threaten something, but never ever do it. Kids learn fast that way!
In terms of readers, it’s been a while since I published, so some who were following have moved on…and there’s a great many really good authors that are worth ready on GA. Hopefully, when some new chapters start coming (which they will shortly), a few will come back to check it out.
Anyway, thanks again for the kind review.
I hope this note finds you well. I just came across this story and loved all of it so far. I love all of the characters and who they are and there quirks. I've noticed it has been awhile since your last posting, will you be adding more? I hope so!
thank you for sharing!
I'm delighted you found the story and are enjoying it.
Yes, I'm updating. It's a long story, but I've been republishing chapters that I temporarily unpublished while I worked on them. From this moment, there's just on left of those, and then something brand new will come!
Thanks again for reading and reviewing.
I do love your writing. I was excited to get to this chapter because i belive this is almost iwhere you left off a few years ago. Such vivid detail when you describe Kieran's hang and Luke's realization of how destructive it actually is to the "victim". I love Lucy, even while she is pissed at Luke and Ryan, she can still jump into crisis mode and help Ryan and maybe protect Luke for the time being.
Thanks Peethree. You're right, Lucy is a huge backstop to the story; a typical mum who knows what she wants for her family.
You're also right in noting we're almost at where we left of. Two more chapters to go and then it's onto the new!
great chapter. really hilarious. I'm not sure these boys could drink so much and still walk. a great change of pace.
I'm laughing still. thanks for writing
Hi Bill. Ryan's certainly had a skinful...and you can do all sorts of unexpected things in that condition!
Riley, just a note to let you know that this story is great and i have been waiting two years to read it again. while the reviews are from another time, 2 years ago, and somewhat baffling at times but obviously you are editing and updating as you go and that great. after all its your story. having read the story before i have been waiting for that little scene between Simon,Toby and his mother. ii want to say its really sweet but that's not what it is. its so private that the reader, at least me, felt that hes listening into a conversation from behind a closet door and that he shouldn't be there. very good writing.
i did want to say something about the hanging that seemed to upset some of your readers. obliviously there some bulling going on here but Ryan participated in doing it to others and he should expect that he was obviously going to get it done to him at some time. there boys, and boys do these things. lets hope Ryan can see that he got what he had given and then get back to Luke. then Luke can tell Ryan that he didn't intervene because of his affliction and that he wanted to see Ryan squirt. after all he is a boy that's very interested in what Ryan looks like down there.
great chapter. looking forward to what happens in the future.
Any review for an author and hearing that somebody is enjoying a story is great - but even better when a reviewer asks questions and takes the time to respond in depth. So thank you so much for going the extra paragraph!
Yes, it’s true, I am doing quite a bit of updating of the story. As you know, I took a break for a bit, but then have been working on it for about 18 months now. Without the pressure of readers waiting for the next chapter - and the the rushing that comes with that - I managed to settle back a bit and have (for the most part) now finished the whole story. SO then I went back to the beginning and began tidying things up in preparation for republishing. In that ’tidy’ a lot of things were re-written and, I hope, improved. There is also a lot of new content that fills in the gaps and improves the flow, and more than a few bits take the story in a rather different direction! I would certainly say to any who are re-reading like yourself…you should go back to the beginning if you have time, so as not to miss some key bits.
Like you note, the Hang is an animal that they have a complicated relationship with. Deep down, I think they all know it’s wrong, but if you give, you get, and it’s only when you get that close do you discover how destructive it can be.
But back to Luke and Ryan. The story is far, far from over, so we’ll have to see where it yet leads!
Thanks again for your review.
Nice chapters Ryan is a survivor and shows his trust in Luke telling him how he was and still is abused by his dad, mental abuse is often more painful than physical beatings. But even so Luke can be a bit of a dickhead at times and thinks with his willy rather than the head on his shoulders, but he is young and starting out so some allowances must be made. As for the rest of those who were involved with the hang I would still like to see a bit more payback.
Tequila, Luke and Ryan getting it on in the bedroom ????? Sorry but 'What ?? i reread several chapters as i thought i missed something important and found nothing about Luke and Ryan getting pissed and getting it on. Then i noticed the reviews where 2013, talk about spoilers.
Nicely put - Luke can be a bit of a dickhead. But then, can’t any of us at times!
My bad on the confusion with the chapter reviews. I broke up a chapter as it was getting too long in the rewrite, making two out of one. Seemed a good idea, except I forgot that there would be existing chapter specific reviews that would no longer make sense! Duh!
So, to get back on track, the next chapter is going to be a bit of a bumper!
Ahhh great! Elliot is still around. Adds some suspense to the tale.
And it's wide open as to what might come of that!
Thanks for reading.
Think Ryan did the same as most other kids would have done. However if it was me there would be pay back to those who were the leaders like broken noses and fat lips. Take them one at a time and show them who's boss.
This type of hazing should be banned from schools someone always gets hurt and its humiliating the teaching staff must be aware of what goes on and should be taken to task over this as well.
Payback is due.
Payback might help, but first Ryan has to find his way out of the desperate hole he’s fallen in. Even then, it’s hard to know if their friendships will survive this.
It looks like this version was much harder on Ryan than the last version. It'll be interesting to see where this goes.
After having taken a break from the story a you know, I took the decision to change a few things. I wanted to explore what would happen if Ryan didn’t get “luckily” saved by the bell, because in a real life situation with shrewd scheming teens, they would have all the angles covered. Whatever the reason, they seemed to be confidant they wouldn’t be interrupted, so it made sense to take it to its natural conclusion and then see how that affected the rest of the story.
Thanks for reviewing!
hi riley, (i hope your there)
all these reviews are from 2012?
anyway i read your story, i guess in 2012. it was still going on then. and then you disappeared for awhile. i wanted to reread and then tried all kinds of segannians to try and find where you were. if you were publishing et or the story was on another internet site than ga. finally got 10 chapters that were bedded somewhere on the internet. and i wasn't the only one trying to find you.
anyway, i enjoyed your story in 2012 and am enjoying your return in 2015. i remember the story but i think its somewhat changed but still, a great great read. please keep it coming. i can only get up to chapter 25 (the hang) and it leaves a lot hanging. (pardon me on that). i know there a lot after that chapter.
so the question? are you going to add chapters after 25? do you have a schedule? can you provide a notice when you post a chapter? i think that ga is supposed to do that but they didn't when you reappeared. if you can advise thanks in advance.
great story and thanks for writing.
Yes - I’m here, lol! But you’re right…it’s been a while!
I guess life - not all of it good - took over and I stopped writing and ended up unpublishing stuff while I figured out what I wanted to do. Then, since last summer, I started writing again with a hope to finish off ET and at least feel I’d achieved something!
So, in answer to your question, yes I do hope there will be lots of new chapters coming out, though like any author, you naturally get motivated to bring out more content if you sense people are reading and beginning to review. I realise that I lost a lot of my readership when I disappeared - which is all my fault - so I think we will see how it goes when we get to new chapters.
That said, the first draft of the story is actually finished now, though I tinker a lot, so it will go through lots of revisions to try to get it right!
You are right in noting that the story software won’t register updates of existing chapters in the normal place, however, when new chapters come out, it should. in the meantime, there is a thread in the forum under the stories section and I drop a note there every time I update. I think that if you click the link to follow the story you also get automatic notifications on updates.
Anyway, thanks for reading and for dropping this note.
Just as fun as first time. Hang in.
Thanks my friend
And I'm delighted to say that the story - for the most part - is now finished!
The one ray of hope was when the official at the customs desk looked through his spanking brand new passport and stared at him, intently. Luke glared back defiantly. Go on – throw me out – do us both a favor! But, instead of putting him back on a plane to where he rightly belonged, he’d brought his stamp down in final judgment.