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Yesterday, 06:26 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Well, I am VERY LATE to this chapter and everyone has said it all.

 

But Ryan/Damon's discovery of Luke's orientation, right after our minds finally wrapped around Luke coming out to Elliott and the budding romance there, was just so beautifully done.

 

Great Riley!

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Apr 30 2016 07:21 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Very exciting development for Luke and Elliott. Of course, this could go south, too. Ryan will be hurt that he missed out on Luke, or Ryan will make a play for Luke and Elliott will be left out. And, sadly, I can't decide if I want to root for Elliott or Ryan. They're both likeable characters and both deserve a satisfying HEA (even if it isn't with Luke).
Also, Ryan kinda made his own bed and now has to lie in it. I can imagine Luke would be very hurt if he found out that Ryan had been posing as Damon. I remember that Luke had confided in him because he felt safer with someone who didn't know the people in his life.

mg777%s's Photo

Apr 30 2016 06:44 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Awesome!!! Riley you're a genius. This is brilliant. And people said you had no idea where you were going with this story. Ha! Can't wait to find out what else you have in store for us! Thank you, thank you, thank you.

milotin%s's Photo

Apr 30 2016 06:34 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Holy bombshell! Some of the pots that were on the boil, so to speak, might have just boiled over! I can't see how this can be good for Luke and Ryan, and wonder what kind of spanner it could throw in the works between Luke and Elliott. Brilliant stuff, Riley. What a clever, if not saddening, twist. Can't wait to see what you have in store next!
Cheers
Milo

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Apr 30 2016 05:38 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

I didn't see that one coming either. Nice twist. But Ryan's negative reaction puzzles me.

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Apr 30 2016 03:15 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

​WOW!!!!! I was so excited for Luke finally coming out to someone. Then I was worried about poor Ryan losing out on Luke and how he would be devastated once he realized what happened...for some reason I was worried that Luke might be talking to someone he knew on line. DID NOT SEE THAT ONE COMING. Great chapter.

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Apr 30 2016 01:00 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

You must have been laughing so much at my complaint in my review for the previous chapter. :facepalm: :*)

 

I'm getting fed up with Luke's inability to deal with his orientation and come out to Ryan and Elliot.

I guess it wasn't too surprising Luke came out to Elliot after he admitted he was in a relationship with Miguel. But I hadn't foreseen him coming out to Ryan afterwards. :o
Ryan's reaction was strange. He hasn't come out to Luke, so why be angry? OK, Damien may have come out to Luke, but since they were friends and not potential boyfriends, he has no right to expect Luke to return the confidence. And Luke didn't say who he was interested in. It could have been Ryan - what if he wanted to ask Damien how he could find out whether his best friend might be gay? We know Luke was thinking of Elliot, but Ryan does not. But perhaps Ryan's emotional state of mind was not the best for this talk... :unsure:

Gandalf%s's Photo

Apr 30 2016 12:50 PM

(Chapter 74 Review)

So somewhere in the earlier versions of the story we knew Ryan was gay;Right? Again it is a bit hard with the chapter revisions over time and add that my geazerhood and all is a bit us sure. At any rate one bomb down and the other bomber circling. I like all three so much it is hard to imagine how you will work it out without Ell, Ry, or Luke being hurt... You will won't you after some necessary angst? You keep putting more spinning plates in the air. Thanks, I think, for another great chapter. Pax. Steve

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Apr 30 2016 10:47 AM

(Chapter 74 Review)

I have read all of your writings submitted to GA. I've enjoyed all of them and find the reviews of other readers very interesting. I did not see Ryan's hidden identity coming, but find it to be a very interesting twist in the story at this point. I eagerly await each new installment and I'm glad to see Simon coming back from what I thought might be the brink of suicide for him.

oxala%s's Photo

Apr 30 2016 08:39 AM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Thank you Riley. An absolutely excellent chapter in all respects!
BOOM! That's the sound of the bombshell we've all been waiting for ... actually two BOOMS. Nagasaki and Hiroshima!
The entire day with Eliot and his family was reminiscent of Estela's party back in Spain, including swimming and the rain at night. Nice touch!
Elliot's reaction to being asked about Miguel seems to indicate that he is still deeply impacted by the sudden loss. The entire interaction in the car was fantastic. Luke's trepidation upon entering his home was perfect. Yep, his world has just completely changed, with one conversation. Everything feels different now. The exchange between Luke and Si was beautiful. Finally, Luke might just be the brother Simon needs. And the phone call and texts ... yep ... Luke's got it bad!
And Ryan! Oooof! I feel terrible for him, even though the fake identity was pretty desperate and low.

 

I enjoyed every word of this chapter Riley, every feeling conveyed, every idea expressed. I can't wait (even if I have to) until the next chapter :) .

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Apr 30 2016 07:54 AM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Wow! I am overwhelmed. All in one chapter you have released the flood gates of emotions between these three guys. A lot of revelation for one evening. Good work it is clearly time for this to happen and clearly makes for some very interesting dynamics among the burgeoning friendships. Good work , keep it going!

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Apr 30 2016 05:30 AM

(Chapter 74 Review)

Okay there"s curve ball - Damon is Ryan!! Didn't see that coming. Good job because it isn't implausible either. Somebody (maybe everybody) is going to be hurt in this love triangle.

Bleu%s's Photo

Apr 29 2016 12:54 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

You will be posting the next chapter tomorrow and I already anticipate something crucial happening. Hoping that Luke will finally start asking Elliot the right questions. Also, when Luke sees Ryan, I believe he will want to be a better friend than he was at the time of the Hang. So he might be torn between his interest in Elliot and his interest/friendship with Ryan.
And then there is still the unsolved mystery of the fire in the Art block.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Bleu,

 

I’m just about to publish the next chapter…and there could be a few surprises! Thanks for taking the time to pop down a review.

 

Riley

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Apr 23 2016 11:43 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

I hate you. Luke is so close I can barely stand it. Anyways, seeing this blend of In Safe Hands and English Teen has made me so happy. :) I'll be sad to see the turmoil in Elliot that I imagine will show soon. :(



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Please don’t hate me…at least not yet…

 

Still glad you are enjoying the read, Rockon!
Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 08:40 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

Eek. Another fine addition. I do hope Estella is right to push Luke and hope he does ask about Miguel. But... More plates in the air. You are good but I'm almost feeling I have to reread both stories to sort it. Pax. Steve



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Steve. I think Estela is a typical girl. She can’t be doing with all the mooching around and wants it sorted! In typical Spanish fashion, having decided that Luke will do as boyfriend material for her old friend, she’s going to push until it happens.

Lisa%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 07:55 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

It's obvious that Estela senses something in Luke. She probably notices him checking Ellie out when he thinks no one is looking! :lol: I wonder if Elliot will get upset with her if Luke does bring Miguel up. And really, it may be too soon in their 'relationship' to talk about Miguel. After all, Luke doesn't know Elliot all that long.

 

I love Natty! She's so cute with Luke! :)

 

I'm getting concerned about Ryan though. Will he be waiting for Luke when Luke gets home?

 

This was another great chapter, Riley! I'm looking forward to the next one now that I'm all caught up! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - glad to see you caught up, and thanks for the review. I think we have to expect that Estela knows all the behind the scenes stuff with Elliott, and know he’s got an interest in Luke. SHe’s quite pushy, though. Typical Spanish!

 

Riley

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 04:49 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

Elliot's scents - Polo Red, Prada Amber pour Homme Intense, Luna Rossa by Prada, or Eros by Versace.
I kinda imagine Elliot being wearing something Prada-like.
For shits and giggles - I think Ryan wears Lacoste pour Homme, or Lacoste Style in Play.
And Luke (if he did wear cologne) would wear Light Blue pour Homme by Dolce & Gabbana, or Boss Bottled by Hugo Boss.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lol! Trust you! Now I’m gong to have to look like a wierdo in the shop trying on all those to see if I like them!

 

Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 04:01 PM

(Chapter 72 Review)

I also got teary-eyed when Luke was studying the painting. It's still gotta hurt Elliot to see it all the time. Well, at least every time he's in the dining room.

 

The meal sounded fabulous, and now I'm starving, so thanks for that, Riley! lol

 

I'm glad Luke is staying for a little while longer; I was also disappointed his folks wanted to leave so soon. I thought it was kinda rude also -- just eating and leaving, you know?

 

Ok, on to the next chapter. :)

Lisa%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 01:24 PM

(Chapter 71 Review)

I wish Ryan's mom would grow some balls and tell that sperm donor off! But of course, she's scared shit of him -- that's obvious. Then again, I would be too.

 

I totally agree with Dayne about the reason for the sperm donor's rejection of major. I'm sure he can't stop his bullying ways when he's at work. And then he comes home and takes out his frustration and anger out on Ryan. Ryan needs to move in with his grandparents.

 

If he drives to Luke's he's going to be so disappointed that Luke isn't home.

 

I did like how you incorporated 'In Safe Hands' into this chapter. :)

 

I'm sure Luke and his folks will have a blast with Elliot and his family (and Estela, of course!).

mg777%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 12:15 PM

(Chapter 73 Review)

I wanted to say how much I love this story and how much I look forward to it every week. This week, I found myself wondering what are the 3 brands of cologne in Elliot's room? I thought at first that perhaps it was deliberately not mentioned due to a reluctance to use real company names in the story -- but then, a few paragraphs later, we learn that Luke is wearing EUROBOY underwear. So what kinds of cologne does Elliot use? And especially, what is the name of the one that Luke finds so intoxicating? Enquiring minds want to know!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thank you! It’s always great to hear how people are finding reading ET. You’re comment about cologne has sparked off quite a lot of feedback in the forum!

 

Riley

Timothy M.%s's Photo

Apr 23 2016 03:59 AM

(Chapter 73 Review)

I guess I'm being unfair, but I'm getting fed up with Luke's inability to deal with his orientation and come out to Ryan and Elliot. But I guess it's a moot point while he cannot decide which of them he would like to date. :rolleyes: I'm also not sure I like Estella being pushy, and Sam can piss off and tell Becky to leave Simon alone. :pissed:
Oh, and Luke has a good point about his mum and her perfectionism, just as he has had several other clever insights. But since he never shares them with her, he's preventing her from ever changing and improving. Also annoying... ;)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for being the 500th review, Timothy!

 

Unfair? Maybe. Don’t forget that Luke is still only a teenager and this kind of stuff is tricky at the best of times. I think we’ve also seen that Luke tends to struggle getting off the fence for all kinds of reasons and situations. Will Lucy ever change. I doubt it. She is what she is.

Lisa%s's Photo

Apr 19 2016 09:23 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

I'm thrilled Simon broke down in Luke's arms. I hope Simon can feel comfortable enough to confide in Luke. I'm so glad he's trying to get back into his life.

 

And kudos to Lucy for trying to put those cops in their place. Jeez, what nerve they had? WTF were they acting so suspicious of Si? Assholes.

 

Truthfully, when Toby admitting to hating himself (for what he did to Simon, I'm assuming), my heart went out to him. If he's been doing a lot of soul-searching and he realizes what he really did to Simon, he'll be hating himself for a long time.

 

Another excellent chapter, Riley! :)

jagboi%s's Photo

Apr 18 2016 12:00 PM

(Chapter 72 Review)

The chapter wasn't quite what I was expecting ( no Ryan or the fallout of his fathers fight) but nice to see a pleasant meal and the interaction between Luke and Elliot. I did catch the Manuel reference as soon as I read the "she's from Barcelona" line. Good job incorporating that!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there - glad you got your review down after all.

 

Don’t you just love Fawlty Towers - or was it Warty Towels! Lol! I couldn’t resist brining it in!

 

So, nothing about Ryan, yet, but that not going away, I suspect. Luke, on the other hand, seems smitten. I think Luke is crushing badly, and would like Elliott to be gay, but would have no idea how to handle the situation if it turned out that way!

 

Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Apr 16 2016 09:38 PM

(Chapter 69 Review)

All along I was thinking Toby set the fire on purpose, but then reading Skinny's review, it makes more sense if Toby was just trying to burn the picture. But...if he was trying to just burn the picture, it would have been in worse condition than it was, right? And if he was trying to do that, then why would he have it in his hand? Unless he just passed out from the smoke and never let go of the picture. That makes more sense.

 

I'm surprised Simon wanted to go see Toby. Maybe to ease his guilt? I'm curious how that conversation will go. I'm sure his mom and Grace will notice how distant Simon is toward Toby.

 

I felt so badly for Elliot when he was asking about the fire. Some things you just never forget. What happened to Miguel left such a huge impact on him, and he will never forget the circumstances surrounding his death.

 

On to the next chapter (I can't believe I missed so many chapters!).

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Apr 16 2016 06:51 PM

(Chapter 72 Review)

What a wonderful meal!
...Oh, where was I. Yes, I was glad to see Elliott get Luke to stay a bit. He's been sort of throwing mixed signals. It will be interesting to see how Luke behaves not under Lucy's eye. :lol: And, of course he now knows Estela is not Elliott's gf.

 

Riley, your description of the meal dialogue was fantastically well done! Kudos.

 

Can't wait for the next chapter!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Skinny - you have to go and cook the dessert for yourself, now - trust me, it’s a delight!

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

oxala%s's Photo

Apr 16 2016 08:51 AM

(Chapter 72 Review)

Thanks Riley!

 

Very enjoyable chapter.

 

I was a little surprised the Ortiz painting was in the dining room. I had expected Luke to notice it in Elliot's bedroom. I guess the bedroom would be too close ... interesting ...

 

I also enjoyed your note ... i'll confess, I got a little teary when Luke noticed the painting ... I really did love ISH :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes, the painting was in the dining room. I reckon that Elliott wouldn’t be able to deal with it being too close for a long time, yet at the same time he would never throw it away.

 

Glad you enjoyed ISH

 

Rile

Timothy M.%s's Photo

Apr 16 2016 04:19 AM

(Chapter 72 Review)

It's no wonder few teenage boys come out of the closet with everyone - and especially parents - always assuming they want to date girls. :rolleyes:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Its tough being a teen, for sure!
Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Apr 09 2016 07:56 PM

(Chapter 71 Review)

Being a sailor I hope Si had the sailing day he deserves. Glad to see him finding his way up. I worry how Luke,who has serious problems with sorting things, will sort out Ry and Elliot. I am guessing and hoping Ry is heading to Luke's while his Dad goes through the opening rounds of being cashiered. Clearly his career is done. Wonder what the possible move of Ruth, Toby, and Daniels will be? As always more questions than clarity. thanks,I think, for another chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

There’s nothing like being out on the water, that’s for sure, Steve - though I think it’s going to take time for Simon. And as for Luke - well with Elliott in the sidelines, it’s getting complicated. And Ryan and his parents? Who knows!

 

Riley

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Apr 09 2016 12:31 PM

(Chapter 71 Review)

Hm. I wonder if it has occurred to anyone, especially Ethan, that all his posturing and aggro shit could be why he'll never get promoted. Although, this may be a moot point. Most of the unit witnessed Alexis punching his own damn kid (after instigating a fight with another officer, no less). If proper procedures are followed, Daddy dearest should find his ass ground under full weight of the Uniform Code of Military Justice, on top of any civilian investigations. Hello, court-martial!
And you better believe Andrew Burford is going to make sure Ethan Alexis gets his ass handed to him. Forget making Major, Alexis is over.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Dayne. I’m not sure it’s that cut and dried. It’s not clear how many others saw the fight between Ethan Alexis and Blackman, and Ryan’s injury was more due to a reactionary side-slash, not a full-on punch. I doubt Blackman will take it further.

 

We’ll have to see - you may also be right…

 

Riley

Beach%s's Photo

Apr 09 2016 11:56 AM

(Chapter 71 Review)

It looks as if Ethan is going to be passed over again. If so, big changes for the Alexis family and Ryan.
But it's good to see Ryan back - not much has been said about him lately. He is, potentially, the most interesting and mature of the central characters - hopefully you are going to delve more into his experiences and the many sides of his personality.
ET is such a well written story - I look forward to each new chapter.
Larry



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi again Larry. Creating characters that are believable is important to me. And everyone is different - just as in real life. Most of us aren’t perfect - like Luke, we have flaws, and like Ryan, often we have to cope with difficult lives behind the scenes.

 

It will be interesting to see what happens on the army front.

 

Riley

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Apr 09 2016 07:31 AM

(Chapter 71 Review)

Hi Riley, another awesome chapter, I had a bit of deja vu with this chapter, did you write some of this chapter about the fire ,Toby and Simon when you originally started this story as it seemed i had read part of it before.
Glad Simon is on the mend, but still early days and I do not think it is all over.
Ryan, what can I say?? the boy needs a hand.
When are you going to kill that son of a bitch sperm donor off?? as painfully as possible would be preferred.
Its time Ryan and his mum took there leave of him at the side of his grave where he belongs so both can get on with their lives.
For one moment I did think Ryan would snatch a knife off the table and stick the pig with it, or maybe an accident cleaning a gun??? but that would be to simple and no way do I want to see him get his that quick without screaming pain and suffering .
Thanks Riley.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff,

 

Not sure about your deja vu, as I haven’t written his before. Maybe you dreamed it?!

 

You really don’t like sperm donor, do you - can’t blame you. I also think Ryan and his mom should leave, though his future might be bleak if Ryan stuck a knife in his father on the way out!

 

Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Apr 04 2016 12:32 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

I so hope the Si and Luke end up moving forward the final scene would lead one to expect that but in this story I'm not sure I would bet on it. I do hope Toby gets sorted. If he did set the fire he will get some other help/consequences if he didn't he hopefully will be scared enough to start talking to?
Me I'm still waiting to sort out the missing Luke dramas.
You have a lot of pots boiling. The adventures continue. Pax. Ste



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lol! You know it’s never going to be what you think, Steve!
Great to hear from you again.
Riley

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Apr 03 2016 01:59 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

A moving and, really, pretty significant chapter Riley.

 

Si is trying to move forward but, understandably, running into little roadblocks. I'm hoping that the last poignant scene will lead to the truth coming out.
I'm not sure Si is quite ready for that to happen, but I also have the sneaking suspicion it will be to Luke, when it does inevitable occur.

 

Thanks for this Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny. I think it will take time for Simon. He’s careful in most things, so I think getting more control over things is going to be his first goal. After that, it may depend on how things are with him and Toby as to what he does next.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Apr 03 2016 12:44 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Really glad to see Simon is starting to get over what happened, I still think he should tell Luke the whole story.

 

Can't wait for the next chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Mmm - hot sure what Simon sill do. he probably doesn’t know himself yet. It will probably depend on what happens next with Toby.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

milotin%s's Photo

Apr 02 2016 07:34 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Thank you Riley for yet another beautifully vivid and realistic chapter. I'm so relieved that, finally, young Simon seems to be turning a corner, and Luke, too. The brotherly hug at the chapter's end has been a very long time coming and was a very special and tender moment - perhaps more for Simon and us readers than Luke, but who knows. Thanks again for this great story.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Milotin - as you say, it’s great to see Simon on the mend. Thanks for your review
Riley

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Apr 02 2016 06:25 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Ok so... perhaps Toby didn't set the fire, and it was unfortunate circumstance that put him in peril. The fact that he just stayed there though... One minor tidbit, the police wouldn't have been able to legally question Si without mom there anyway. He's only 15 and still a minor. I did think it was rather odd that they were so suspicious of Si about the fire, there was an hundreds of kids there, just because he happened to show up at the hospital? Toby had other kids concerned about him.

 

Toby... I know people want to feel sorry for him, but I still don't. Unless Grace was just being polite, he told her they "decided to break up". Yeah it was totally mutual and not because he committed a sexual assault on the boy he's supposed to be in a relationship with. He says he hates himself, but he doesn't seem to want to accept responsibility for what he did. Maybe I'm misjudging him though. Is he actually going to miss Si, or is it the sex? Sad though that Si feels the loss, he cared about Toby. Still does.

 

About the end of the chapter? FINALLY!!! Also Si ready to make the effort to start talking himself. I think progress can be made from here. Great chapter, and looking forward to the next.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Spikey. Actually I thought he same at first - that Simon is a minor and therefore couldn’t be interviewed by the police without a parent present. Perhaps your a Brit too, as that is the law here! Friends who work in law enforcement in the USA put me straight on this. In the USA there is no such restriction and law enforcement officers can interview a minor without parents being present if they chose. In fact, they hardly ever allow a parent in the room by reasons of tarnishing the value of the evidence.

 

In the situation at the hospital, I think allowing Luce to join the discussion was because they didn’t particularly see it as an official interview at that point. They were just trying to get some background.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

oxala%s's Photo

Apr 02 2016 03:19 PM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Thank you Riley ... another wonderful chapter.
I am relieved that Simon is making a conscious effort "to feed the right wolf". To my mind, that's half the battle. I was a little amused at the end, "fifteen year(s) old or not - started crying". At almost fifty, under similar circumstance, I would certainly want a shoulder to cry on. I bet the tears will do him some good. It's good to see Luke available, loving, and patient. Let's hope he can maintain it, especially the patient part. I am sure there is a part of him that would like to push ... seems to get it from his overbearing mother ... :) .
Simon does not need an interrogation from anyone, not Luke, and especially not Lucy!
I think it was good for Simon to feel some sadness at the loss of his relationship with Toby. Ironically, the half truth Toby told his mother seems to be serving both Si and Toby well, at least for the moment.
I still feel terrible sad for Toby. Unlike Simon, he really has no one. I am glad that it appears that he did not set the fire.
I look forward to the next installment! :2thumbs:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I’m the same - I can cry at the slightest provocation…even at the news! Simon is on the mend at last, and it’s beginning to look like Toby didn’t set the fire - though why he stayed in the building…mmmm…

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Apr 02 2016 10:43 AM

(Chapter 70 Review)

As much as we've been hating on Lucy and Geoff for how they've handled Simon, has anyone really mentioned Grace? We can't exactly fault them for not recognizing Simon's real issues -- none of them have the benefit of an omniscient narrator to show them what happened that day. However, Grace did know about Toby's past, and, considering her profession, should have known he'd need therapy to work through those issues. Hopefully, she will do right by him.
As for Simon, I worried that he'd continue to shove down everything, but he finally decided to "feed the right wolf". Him breaking down to Luke was gratifying. Even if he doesn't manage to open up about what happened or what he's feeling, simply admitting that he hurts is a huge step in the right direction.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Interesting point about Grace. She’s quiet perceptive, but even she can only work on what she knows, and that might have been nothing more than that Simon and Toby had a bust up. It had happened before.

 

Simon seems to have turned a corner now at least, and I think you’re right, just verbalising stuff can help, even if it’s just a beginning.

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

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Apr 02 2016 10:03 AM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Si has always been a great kid. He seems determined to get past what was done to him by Toby and the ensuing surgery. I don't believe he hates Toby and had he been more seriously injured Si would feel badly, that doesn't mean Si is likely to forgive him soon. I know it seems Greg, Lucy and Luke are somewhat oblivous about where Si's head is at but what happened to him is so far beyond anything they might imagine they are to be excused. Now that Si has confided in Luke we can expect a more filial involvement in helping Si recover. Eventually the truth will out.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I tend to think that nothing much in life is black and white. It’s like yo say, you can care about someone and be totally fed up with them all at the same time! I hope Simon is on the mend, too - though he’s not going to be the same guy he was before.

 

Thanks for the review, Dughlas.

 

Riley

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Apr 02 2016 06:45 AM

(Chapter 70 Review)

Things seem to be falling into place, but I'm sure Luke and his parents are capable of fucking them up again by assuming stuff and pushing Si at the wrong moment. :rolleyes: I wil hope for the best, and at least Toby is out of the picture. He probably didn't set the fire, which is a relief, and now he has told Grace hey have broken up, she won't expect Simon to visit. Maybe she can keep Lucy from pushing issue - or the policemen might be of use in making Si's mum reluctant to have him associate with Toby for a while. She did well with them, I have to admit, a proper tigress in proecting her cub, lol.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Capable of totally screwing things up - oh yep…what it is to be human! Lucy was quite handy wasn’t she, lol!
Riley

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Apr 02 2016 06:29 AM

(Chapter 70 Review)

A truly fantastic chapter!! I really liked how Simon is starting to heal but it is a process and not an abrupt resolution. That makes it much more realistic and compelling. Thanks



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Roadrunner - much appreciated!
Riley

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Mar 30 2016 09:22 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Wow. Still dumbstruck by where that went.

 

And THAT is always a good thing. You are one of the very few authors anywhere who can do that to me Riley.

 

I am looking forward to seeing what is coming, though I wouldn't be keen in saying that if I were Toby or Simon I think lol.

 

Good work again Riley!!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Glad you’re enjoying the read! Next chapter coming soon, and I wonder what Simon and Toby are going to say to each other?

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Mar 29 2016 02:36 PM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Glad Simon will visit Toby, even if all it means is self preservation. Please God the whole event means Luke and Simon really talk about things seriously. It would give Luke a much needed spine stiffening, if nothing else. Great chapter and wonderfully written, as always...



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I agree - come on Luke, open your eyes for God’s sake!

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Mar 27 2016 10:06 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Perhaps Simon has carried his behavior too far, but it's hard not to sympathize with him. Toby in fact raped him. What's hard to understand is that Luke and Simon are very close brothers - why didn't Luke take the "bull by the horns" and make every effort to find out what was so troubling for Simon to be acting so difficult to the extent he was.
Again, this seems to be another example of a character fault in Luke. To love his brother as much as he seems, he should have been persistent in getting to the core of Simon's problem. Instead, he seemed to just walk away from it. Simon needed someone so close to him, near his age, and fully aware of his sexual orientation to have gotten to the bottom of the problem.
Now, on another subject - how about Ry and Luke coming out to each other. It's long overdue.
Larry



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I agree - let’s hope that Luke grows a pair and realises soon that he has a brother!

 

Luke and Ryan - just makes you wanna tear your hair out sometimes! I guess when you’ve known somebody a long time, its impossible to see past your existing conceptions of them.

 

Thanks for the review, Larry.
Riley

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Mar 26 2016 09:51 PM

(Chapter 69 Review)

I think I'll need to know more before I can pass judgment on Toby re: the fire. The other stuff is easy to pass judgment on.

 

Suicide by fire sounds ...awkward. I have a hard time believing it's what he did. More likely tried to burn the painting. Whatever it was will come out.
Si and Toby ought to be an interesting moment,.
Luke and Si hasn't run its course yet. That'll probably be where it all comes out.

 

Not to mention poor Elliott.

 

Great chapter Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Skinny. Did Toby set the fire? I dunno, seems hard to believe. And yes, ELliott’s past still has some power to hurt him it seems

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Mar 26 2016 09:14 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

So Toby set fire to the art building and nearly got himself as well as three other men killed. Honestly that doesn't engender much sympathy from me. I thought Simon's decisive break from Toby a couple chapters back was handled maturely and was the right thing to do. That Toby kid is a mess and while it's not entirely his fault, I personally don't see any future relationship with Si being anything other than volatile. This reaction is a prime example, the kid should be in therapy, not in a relationship. It would have been nice if Simon could have been there as a friend, but Toby broke that relationship and comitted an unforgivable act. Simon shouldn't force himself to continue their interactions, and he damn well shouldn't feel guilty, Toby raped him for crying out loud.

 

All that being said, I found the conversation between Luke and Si at the end rather frustrating. The fact that Luke even thought he was with Toby to begin with shows how aloof the kid has been about this whole thing. I mean I know Si has been secretive but come on. Beyond that, it would have been better, and more realistic honestly, for Luke to just ask why Si had given Toby the picture back. And for Si to simply say he broke up with Toby. What was the point of vaguely asking where the picture was like he didn't know,and Si to dodge the question? It just kinda drags every minute detail of this whole drama out needlessly. Even if Si had avoided the why of what he did, just freaking have that part of the conversation out of the way.

 

I agree with Timothy though, I hope Si gives a polite "Glad you're okay" and goes about his business, and does tell Toby to fuck off if he tries to guilt Si in any way.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review Spikey. If Toby really did set the fire, then it’s hard to know what he thought he had to gain. Was it just to make a point? I don’t think Luke will avoid the ‘picture’ issue for much longer, even though he didn’t get the chance before Simon hurried out.

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Mar 26 2016 09:09 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Thank you Riley!

 

Fantastic and riveting chapter ...

 

Luke is finally piecing the puzzle together, even if it took a sledge hammer to get his brain in gear.

 

I hope Toby didn't set the fire, but, .... ooof ... I imagine the arson investigators will be eager to chat with him. What a mess all the around! I am relieved that he is nominally safe, but whether he set the fire or not, there appears to be much damage to his psyche.

 

The situation between Simon and Toby, as well as the apparent emotional/psychological state of each boy has certainly become extremely sad and horrifically ugly. I find it difficult to imagine many adults who would cope with such deep complexity well. While Si's anger is certainly understandable, returning the painting had an element of cruelty. I am still holding out hope that Simon will be able to demonstrate some forgiveness. Not easy!

 

It appears that the cat is almost out of the bag ...

 

I look forward the reading how it plays out.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

That’s a really intriguing thought - that returning the painting has an element of cruelty to it. I think you’re right and perhaps Simon sees it as a way of striking back and showing some form of ‘power’ over his situation.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Mar 26 2016 07:36 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Incredible chapter Riley, and although it has still left questions it has become the catalyst for the truth to come out.
Luke know knows there is something seriously wrong with Simon / Toby and I am sure it will all come out in the wash but think it may come to blows between the brothers before long as Simon is still so stubborn and has a quick temper.
Some time ago I asked if Elliot was over the death of Miguel and I think the answer is no, he had no way of knowing if the crash killed his friend or the fire but all is not well with him.
Simon would like to put what Toby did behind him and carry on with his life, he still thinks of Toby but is now guarded, who knows what way the story will take but the great author Riley Jericho :worship:
Waiting for the next chapter already :2thumbs:
Thanks.
Jeff.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff. I think you are right and we just got our first indication that Elliott its still affected by his past. Aren’t we all?

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Mar 26 2016 06:14 AM

(Chapter 69 Review)

Tha was a relief, and I guess Simon going down to see Tobias may be a good idea for both of them, although I'm a bit worried about what will happen when they are face to face. Sparks may fly - is that what you're trying to hint with the chapter title?
But I believe the truth needs to come out, even though the time and place is wrong. I shall hope Simon will simply tell Toby he is pleased that he survived the fire. If Toby tries to guilt Si into forgiving him, I sincerely hope Si will tell him to fuck off. Even if both their moms are present. :pissed: And if Toby set the fire to kill himself, I will be extremely :angry: but I think the boy is too egocentric and cowardly to do that - or perhaps he's exactly selfish enough to pull such a stunt to get back at Si. :unsure:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Timothy. Actually, ‘Out of the Frying Pan and into the Fire’ is a chapter title taken from the book Simon is reading - The Hobbit. It idea, however, is the same - just when you think it’s bad, it goes and gets worse! If it really was Toby who set the fire going, why would he do that?

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Mar 24 2016 11:13 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Luke's attraction to Elli has me wondering about Ry's and Luke's long attraction to one another. We've now had 59 chapters and still those two don't know they're both gay and have deep romantic/sexual feelings for each other. Is that relationship ever going to be consummated, or will the Elli/Luke replace it?
One of the reviews may have already brought this up.
Larry

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Mar 24 2016 04:14 PM

(Chapter 68 Review)

Hi Riley. Sorry but re-posted here after mistakenly posting this on ch 67 so you have two reviews the same guess senility is setting in :no: Was this chapter on a parallel time line as the previous (ch67)where Mrs Reed looked out of the window and said Oh my gosh?? ( Fu*k me that sounded like something from star trek) lol
Ok, you said the Art Block was on fire and immediately thoughts go that Toby is behind the blaze.........or is he??
Maybe its someone else?? we have "strangers" at the school or we may have someone nearer home, the plot thickens, but whatever or who ever started the fire I am sure things will be reviled.
Talking of reviling things when is the sex side of things going to rear up? I have never know so many pure and virtuous boys in all my life, no one seems to want to have sex !!!
Thanks for a few great chapters which are very thought provoking.
Looking towards the next chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

All the more reviews for me, lol! But thanks for this one. Yes, we are following both Luke and Simon’s day, so maybe it’s possible that Mrs Reed is seeing the same thing as Luke - you’ll have to wait and see.

 

Good question - and an important one about who set the fire. It could be Toby, but we still have no idea where he is.

 

“No one seems to want sex!” Lol! You’ll have to go to Nifty for that, then! I actually think teens think about sex almost all the time, but only on the inside. It’s probably more realistic to life that they don’t spend every day jumping into bed with some new friend and bonking the heck out of them!

 

A great and perceptive review, Jeff - thanks!

 

Riley

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Mar 24 2016 04:07 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Hi Riley. Was this chapter on a parallel time line as the previous where Mrs Reed looked out of the window and said Oh my gosh?? ( Fu*k me that sounded like something from star trek) lol
Ok, you said the Art Block was on fire and immediately thoughts go that Toby is behind the blaze.........or is he??
Maybe its someone else?? we have "strangers" at the school or we may have someone nearer home, the plot thickens, but whatever or who ever started the fire I am sure things will be reviled.
Talking of reviling things when is the sex side of things going to rear up? I have never know so many pure and virtuous boys in all my life, no one seems to want to have sex !!!
Thanks for a few great chapters which are very thought provoking.
Looking towards the next chapter.

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Mar 22 2016 04:20 PM

(Chapter 47 Review)

Simon can try some hydrogen peroxide - if that doesn't work, a weak bleach solution.
Larry

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Mar 21 2016 05:43 PM

(Chapter 68 Review)

I totally loved reading about all the competitions and how good Owen and Elliot were in their respective sports. :)

 

Now I am really worried about Toby. Shit. How will Simon feel if Toby burns in the fire? He has enough on his plate, and now he'll feel guilty about Toby.

 

Can't wait for the next update, Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - you’re all caught up! Toby is a worry. There’s a fire, but where is he? If something happens to him, then it really will go pear-shaped!

 

Riley

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Mar 21 2016 12:03 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

First of all, I'd get Landon alone and beat the fucking shit out of him for the uncharacteristic spanking - a spanking that was more a personal vendetta than part of any previous "hanging". And it would be a long time before I let Luke off the hook especially since Ry put himself in harm's way to protect his friend.
I sort of felt that, considering the depth of Luke and Ryan's friendship, that either Luke's failure to come to his friends aid was your attempt to expose a character failure in Luke or, as a writer, you failed to have Luke respond credibly based on their close and closeted sexual feelings for each other. And if those feelings had any element of love, it's hard to believe Luke wouldn't go to his mate's aid.
My sympathy for Luke is at a very low point - Ry is my "Knight in Shining Armour" in this story.
Larry



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think you have hit a nail on the head, and actually I think we all have character failures. Maybe this is one of the things that can bring reality to a story? This is a big one for Luke and he soon begins to regret what he did - or didn’t - do for his friend.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Mar 20 2016 07:13 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

I'm praying Toby didn't go and do something stupid out of fear, desperation...humiliation?

 

I really loved the quote: "The one you feed." It fits perfectly with the wolf Simon's been feeding. I hope this is a turning point. At least he knows that he needs to do SOMETHING, even if he doesn't know what that something is.

 

Now I'm afraid to click on the next chapter!!!



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Go on....click!!

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Mar 20 2016 05:01 PM

(Chapter 25 Review)

I am thoroughly enjoying AETC in the USA. I only began reading it this past week. I noticed it in Nifty when you first started writing it but never cracked a chapter. Why? Sometimes titles don't look interesting and so many of them in Nifty aren't worth starting. Or, I might have been put off because I've resented my whole life that I never had the chance to make that decision about circumcision.
But, I'm certainly glad I gave it a try. You're a really good writer with credible characters - with each chapter I'm looking forward to the next one. Fortunately, I didn't start the story when you first began writing it, so I didn't have to go through the experience of your story disappearing for a long period of time (noted in the first review above and which often happens with Nifty stories).
One minor observation: Uncut American teens are not unusual in this the 21st Century.
Now that I got that off my chest, I can go on to Chapter 25, etc.
Larry



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Larry - great to hear from you, and thanks for picking up on ET. I hear what you’re saying about the story title - it can definitely get under people’s skin one way or another! Hope you continue to enjoy the read.

 

RiLey

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Mar 20 2016 11:52 AM

(Chapter 66 Review)

So good to see Estela again! (one 'l'' or two?) :) I do remember Alejandro, vaguely though. I didn't realize Ryan looked like him.

 

This chapter was pure fun, Riley! It was so nice just reading about the kids enjoying a day of competition and fun, no angst, no anger, just fun hanging out with friends. And of course so good to see Elliot again! Now how does Todd (it was Todd, right?) know Elliot?

 

I pray that Olly can come through on his 'deal'. :) And of course good for Owen for showing them who's boss of the hockey stick! :lol:

 

I suppose the next chapter will go into what Simon did during that day...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You’re on a roll with the reviews, Lisa! Estella (2 l’s - maybe a typo?). More details will come out int he next chapter fitting it all together.

 

Owen and Olly are another story, though not sure if I’ll ever get to tell it properly.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Mar 20 2016 11:22 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

I can't believe I never read these next few chapters! Where the hell have I been????

 

I really can't fault Simon's parents; they don't know the extent of Simon's emotional pain/damage. They just think his sullen behavior is because he was cut when he didn't want to be -- nothing else. I'm glad they did throw the therapist out there. Simon does need to talk to someone.

 

I really thought Simon was going to slip up and tell them when he came down to apologize. Too bad he didn't.

 

Another great, emotional chapter, Riley! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi again Lisa. I agree with you about Geoff and Lucy. They get a bit of bad press in the reviews, but their just ordinary parents trying to do their best as they see it - tough when you only have half the picture.

 

Riley

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Mar 19 2016 07:17 PM

(Chapter 68 Review)

Thanks Riley, truly excellent writing and story telling here ... wow!

 

And talk about a "hang". I may not be hanging in a nasty school bathroom, but it's much further down from the cliff. First thing Monday, I am trading in my Parker Owens voodoo doll for a Riley Jericho model :) !

 

Oooof, looks like Toby blew a fuse or two or three .... or maybe Si? This is too ugly and I can only hope that neither gets hurt. In spite of what some might think of him, I really like Toby and would like to see him find some peace. I wish Si would forgive him, or at least confront the situation in a balanced way, but then, he is almost as whacked as Toby right now ... urg! Ugly!

 

I agree with SkinnyD, shower scene was great; too funny all the way around.

 

Thank god for Estela. Without her, we might be reading about Elliot and Luke bumping into one another on occasion a year from now. Go girl!

 

If your knees hurt on Monday night, blame skinnydragon!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, Estela seems to be into a bit of matchmaking. Simon is trying to get his head around stuff, and Toby…well who knows where Toby is!

 

Thanks for the great review.
Riley

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Mar 19 2016 03:05 PM

(Chapter 68 Review)

Oh Riley, you little devil! :devil: You stretched a cliffie out over two days!!

 

I think Estela wants to play the matchmaker. Will it work? Both those guys just might be ready. That is, if Luke doesn't get burned rushing into the building.

 

btw, the shower scene was priceless.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Skinny. Yep, it looks like Estella has her own agenda! I wonder if she’ll get her way?

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Mar 19 2016 11:17 AM

(Chapter 68 Review)

I sure hope Luke is right about Simon's friends being able to keep their mouths shut, or his brother may have a hard time forgiving him. Oh, and did Luke even listen to them or to anything Si has said in relation to Toby for the past weeks? Why on earth would he assume Simon is with Toby?
Please, no stupid running into burning buildings by Luke or Simon, right? :no: It's bad enough that Si will probably end up blaming himself for this too. I hope his parents find him a really good therapist.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hopefully Luke is on the right track with Simon’s friends - but you’re right, let’s hope it doesn’t make it worse. As for the Art block…is anyone in fact in there?

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Mar 16 2016 09:07 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I love this story. This is my go to site when I need to relax and lose myself in a story. Thanks for sharing with us! ( and a very happy late birthday to you)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for reading, and for your reviw.
Riley

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Mar 13 2016 12:17 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

My first instinct to 'Oh my gosh.', was what the heck did Toby do.. Waiting will be torture..
Clearly Toby did not realise the magnitude of his actions. Is he that naive though to think he and Si could just go back to being? I liked that Simon finally laid it all out. He needed to do that for himself and to get through to Toby. How the chips fall is another matter.

 

The one you feed. I hope Si recognises which wolf he'd been feeding, or now, the one he needs to. He might need help still with that..

 

Great chapter Riley... Anxiously awaiting the next.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Let’s hope it’s a turning point for Simon, Defiance, though you’re right, he still might need help - he just needs to be willing to accept it.

 

Thanks for your review.

 

Riley

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Mar 13 2016 11:56 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Another great chapter, hopefully Simon is starting to see he is about to implode if something doesn't change. I really hope the cliff hanger isn't Toby doing something stupid, but he also needs help. Hopefully he might confide in Grace what happened.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Has Toby done something stupid? Maybe…maybe not…

 

Will the next chapter shed any light? Maybe…maybe not…

 

Riley

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Mar 13 2016 01:44 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

I'll be honest, after the words with Toby and him throwing the picture that Toby gave him at his feet, my feeling of the Oh my gosh is probably of Toby hanging from a rope outside the school. :(

 

Simon is dealing of the fallout of being raped by Toby. Toby is dealing now with the prospect of telling his mom that he f-uped again and they need to move again. Will Toby be strong enough to do that? I think Simon will realize he let the evil wolf won and now he will have to deal with these consequences too. :(



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Toby hanging from a rope - mmm, that’s a grim thought. Maybe…who knows…, though you’re right, for Toby, there are consequences.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Mar 12 2016 10:05 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

If my fears about the cliffy are right that will be bad enough but also if Toby does something dramatic the repercussions for Si would be even more convoluted than they are now.
By the way what have you been changing in the chapters you have updated?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Cliffy? Me?

 

Who knows what’s gong on outside - time will tell, Steve.

 

As far as the early chapter updates, these are purely putting right some grammar and spellings. No change in the story.

 

Riley

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Mar 12 2016 08:20 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Thanks Riley,

 

"The one you feed" is a variation of many stories that meant much to me over the years. I hope si can find it in himself to feed the right wolf ... not always as easy as it sounds ...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

No, you’re right, it’s not. And I don’t think Simon - even if he hopes for it - will find everything suddenly perfect once again. It’s a journey.

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

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Mar 12 2016 06:12 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

I hope Simon is about to turn to corner on his anger. Now, even though Toby is un the wrong, I hope he gets help also and doesn't do anything stupid. Now, what the heck is happening outside on the field. Looking forward to the next chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Next chapter is on its way - though whether it will bring answers, I can’t say!
Riley

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Mar 12 2016 12:44 PM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Great chapter. Finally, Simon tells Toby off in a way that's direct, not cryptic. Maybe Toby will figure it out, and change before he hurts someone else. Love the quote about the wolves...perfect for him to think about. But Simon still needs a counselor. It's gotten to that point, really...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Young people can be quite resilient, maybe more so than we think. Let’s hope Simon is going to be like that.

 

Thanks for the review, Parker.
Riley

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Mar 12 2016 11:40 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

OMG a cliffie from Riley?

 

Si got the needed lesson he'd been avoiding from the wolf story. It seems to have gotten through the walls he had up.

 

The Toby encounter was ...interesting. I can't help but think the view outside the window is somehow related. If it is, then it's not good.

 

A great and brooding chapter Riley. Don't keep us waiting too long!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny. The Tale of Two Wolves certainly seems to have hit a spot…but as to what’s going on outside…well…

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Mar 12 2016 10:39 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Finally. A glimmer of hope for Simon is something I thought we'd almost never see! Loved this chapter and I can't wait to see what has rattled the grouchy librarian. :rolleyes:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review - great to hear from you! Let’s hope Simon has turned a corner, though what he’ll find there…well, who knows…

 

Riley

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Mar 12 2016 09:26 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Well yes, Simon had his say and that was an important step in his healing. But even more important was what he read in that book about wolves. That really hit home and got him thinking. What will it lead to? Will he ever forgive Toby (not saying he should kiss and make up either- but?).
And of course Mrs. Reed's "Omy my gosh". What does that mean?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Mmmm - what has she seen out of the window? That would be telling!

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

Timothy M.%s's Photo

Mar 12 2016 08:35 AM

(Chapter 67 Review)

Well, at least Simon had his say. Hopefully, Toby will leave him alone from now on. And writing things down may help. :unsure: I'm still worried about him, though - and there's still the parents to deal with. :pinch:
I'm gonna ignore the cliffie. :rolleyes:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Cliffie? Mmmm…maybe…

 

Still a ways to go for Simon - though hopefully he’s on the right track.

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Mar 06 2016 03:46 PM

(Chapter 66 Review)

Riley, what a great way to bring many of the different characters together! Like the other reviewers before me, I fear that this upbeat chapter is but a respite before an inevitable Simon showdown.
I really need to reread ISH because I don't remember Estela, or Alejandro for that matter. Shame on me ;)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Shame on you! But thanks for reading, anyway!

 

Riley

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Mar 05 2016 11:49 AM

(Chapter 66 Review)

What a grand, busy and artfully done chapter. Out of the swirl of events, you center the reader on Owen and Olly, and on a very startling and important pronouncement. What a bargain Olly made! Hope he gets to keep up his end. Wonderful to see Elliott again - wondered if he would make an appearance again. Thank you for the respite from Simon's troubles, but they haven't gotten any better, have they?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, there's a lot going on with this chapter, though you're right, just because it's not about Simon doesn't mean he's fine.

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

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Mar 05 2016 10:04 AM

(Chapter 66 Review)

YAY - A well needed break in the Si angst and tragedy!

 

It also put us back in contact with Elliot, Estela, Ollie and Owen etc.
Everything shifted a little and it all flowed so well and even a bit breezy.

 

An all-around great chapter Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes, a bit of a shift of pace, though everything has its place!

oxala%s's Photo

Mar 05 2016 09:13 AM

(Chapter 66 Review)

Thank you Riley! Este es tan bonito! Me gusta mucho.

 

As much as I always enjoy reading new chapters of ET, I enjoyed this one even more. With the festivities of the day, the unexpected appearance of Estela, the odd bonding between Luke and Ollie ...

 

This chapter recreated the tone, or mood, of "In Safe Hands". I read ISH before beginning ET and absolutely loved it! The airy quality of the writing here combined with Estela's visit felt like visiting an old friend, one I have not seen for a long time.

 

I also found the chapter to be tremendously interesting for its very lack of obvious dramatic development. Nothing obvious here, yet so many subtleties. Estela pulls Luke a little closer to Elliot's past. I was a little confused by Estela stating that Ryan resembles Alejandro. I don't remember that character; I need to skim through ISH again. Her observation of Ryan in itself seems to pull Ryan, Elliot, and Luke a little closer to some inevitable orbit. I want to call her Estrella.

 

Finally, I really liked the line,

 

Luke had the feeling that, for people like Mitchell, with all his connections and money, pigs would sprout a second dick if needed, and then happily fuck you over with it to get what they wanted!

GREAT CHAPTER RILEY!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Old friends indeed. It will be interesting to see what Estella brings to the table. Good things, let's hope - though if you don't remember Alejandro, you definitely need to read ISH again!

 

Thanks for the review!

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Mar 01 2016 11:23 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

Hi Riley,

 

Oh things just keep going from bad to worse for poor Simon. It was certainly an interesting chapter. I did half expect Geoff to find Simon trying to drown himself in the bathtub though- so I am so glad that didn't happen!

 

The question I keep asking myself is, when is Simon going to try his 'altered bits' out. Only thing I don't find believable is that so far. I get that he is angry, but he has gone this long and not had any side-effects from not relieving himself?! By now he would be having blue-balls for sure lol, especially seeing he would be pent up after how things went with Toby right before his operation. Anyhow that is just a random thought. I just hope that we don't see any comical 'boner scenes' of poor Simon instead until nature takes its course lol.

 

The Astroglide though, is just killer funny. A recurring motif almost. Perhaps I am the only one to find any humour or irony in it. I think I would be mortified in real life however, in the same situation to find my mum having brought that for me. I probably would have found it easier to accept it from dad 'on the side' than walk in and find it propped up with a note from mum that's for sure. Still poor Simon is taking every little thing so harshly. He almost has developed a post traumatic stress disorder, that's for sure.

 

TBH the last few chapters did play out smoother in the end than how I was expecting things for poor Simon even though it was clear he was never going to handle having a circumcision well at all (I did half expect scenes of Geoff and Luke holding down Simon in Dr Tiberius's office whilst he operated on a rebellious fitful Simon).

 

So where to from here for Simon? I am left surely guessing. It seems like his whole world has come crashing down around him in ever facet of his life. Only thing I would hate to see is some 'miracle solution' or 'fairy godmother solution'. I would think this is going to take him a lot of time to work his head around instead of some quick waving magic wand ;) The emotional turmoil here needs to see Simon's character grow through the adversity as you have done so well with other characters in the past in your works...but I get the feeling that is what you have planned :)

 

Ok again cheers on the good work ~~!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hey there Matt - as always, thanks for the review!

 

Simon’s in a bad place but I don’t think he’s anywhere near topping himself. I’m hoping that as time goes on he’ll be able to try to see things from a different perspective. Right now, his ‘bits’ in the kind of way you’re hoping for are the last thing on his mind. I think sex is a lot to do with what’s in your head. If theres nothing there to push you, then you just don’t. I think that’s how celibacy works!

 

The lube is really bad timing. Actually, I suspect he knew about it from Luke’s experiences, but reacted badly just the same because of his own guilt and pain.

 

I agree, healing is a process, but what starts it can be unexpected!

 

Thanks for the review,

 

Riley

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Mar 01 2016 10:54 AM

(Chapter 64 Review)

Hi Riley, Great work again ! You really know how to capture character emotion so well :)

 

Nice twist there with Ella. I expected Tiberius Senior and not Ella at all. I wonder how things would have gone with him undoing those stitches instead of Ella... Actually now I think about it, why wasn't Dr Chowdry who handled that given Tiberius handed Simon over to him? Either way I think Ella would have handled it with more decorum than Tib. Sr. and Chowdry.

 

Poor Simon, he really has had a run of it lately. Finding out what went down with Toby was unexpected, seeing where it landed poor Simon was more of a shock. Seeing him not handling the whole circumcision well at all and knowing he is in for quite a rocky ride is heartbreaking. I do hope you have some pleasant twists coming for him in future chapters Riley ;) He needs it before he really does come un-stitched!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Taking out of sutures would definitely be an outpatient procedure with no need to involve a hospital. It would be quite normal to hand a patient back to the original doctor for those to be taken out by hi or her, or even a practice nurse.

 

Simon is really having a hard time, that’s for sure. He’s going to need help soon.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Feb 28 2016 09:30 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I've read all the chapter through this one. I wish I could put my finger on what makes your story so engaging. It's a good story with little sex, but with a lot of serious things happening. You are an excellent writer and I'm jealous that you get so many reviews. I wish I could get as many as you do. Someone mentioned clicks. What do you mean by clicks?
Anyway, great job. Very enjoyable reading.



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Thanks my friend. By clicks, I think it probably mean story reads for each chapter.
Riley

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Feb 28 2016 10:33 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

Thank you Riley, great chapter.

 

I was relieved to observe Geoff and Lucy finally noticing that something is surely wrong. I felt terrible for Geoff. He knows he mishandled the situation. I can't really fault him. He lacking important information. It is a realistic reminder that parenting is difficult.

 

I am so disappointed in Luke right now. Urg! I guess with new school year, new car, new license he is a bit self absorbed like so many teens in addition to being a little aloof.

 

I was confused by a couple of things. No one appears to have noted Toby's sudden absence. Surely it is conspicuous. Did Lucy not puchase lube some weeks prior when she saw Ryan at the pharmacy?

 

It's still hard to witness Simon's suffering. I still want to give a hug, perhaps even more than ever. I fear that his previous happiness has left him I'll prepared to cope with his current stress. I am also reminded that it is frequently difficult for kids of that age, in "normal" situations, to control their emotions.

 

Finally, it is at least a little encouraging to know that Simon is aware 'something needs to change.' Now he needs the what and how.

 

Don’t be too hard on yourself Si. I have lost my temper with far lesser reasons to be angry.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for not being too hard on Geoff and Lucy. I don’t think there are many - if any - perfect parents. Just ones trying to make the best job they can. Yep, Luke is distracted by a whole bunch of things - he needs to get his head back on soon!

 

Re Toby. Usually Simon went up to the Skerrit place where they could be themselves more easily. I guess the parents just assume that Simon hasn’t felt up to cycling around the last couple of weeks. To the love question. Actually, no, she didn’t buy it that day. Certainly not in the store she say Ryan. We left it hanging as to whether she would drop into another store. In fact she didn’t, and she more recently got a refill for Luke and picked put he same for Simon. All really bad timing!

 

Is something going to come up that will help Simon? I hope so for his sake.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Feb 28 2016 06:27 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

Glad they are all Brits with presumably no arsenal available...
This is making the Hang look puerile. I find it a bit of a stretch that Luke hasn't pushed with Si or checked with Toby to find something more was going on than the circ. And I agree that the parents have gone off the tracks and need help badly. Most schools would be a bit more aware of such a dramatic change in attitude for a student.
You have all of us spiraling down with Si. Amazing job Riley.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I agree that Luke and his parents need to be more on the ball, but I also suspect it’s easy to get distracted by the timings of the story. While we’ve been wrestling with this for literally months, the characters have only been at it a few weeks. If you take off the couple of weeks that the family would assume that the normal discomfort of healing was at the bottom of Simon’s issues, then it’s not surprising that they are only just now re-evaluating. And remember too, that Simon, for the most part, has been trying to avoid any aggro.

 

Ranks for the review Steve!

 

Riley

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Feb 27 2016 06:34 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

I'm not going to be too harsh on Geoff and Lucy. They clearly know something is wrong with Simon, but what? He's not talking, and I suspect they are very much out of their depth in knowing what to do. Everything they have tried so far isn't working, but if Si won't talk they are just taking stabs in the dark. They can't exactly put a gun to his head and make him talk to a counsellor.
Another great chapter Riley, Si nearly said what happened, hopefully he will slip up again and then the dam can burst ( metaphorically speaking) and he can start the road to healing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think you’re right about Geoff and Lucy - and who is it that can say they are perfect parents, anyway? Let’s hope Simon can find some help somewhere.

 

Riley

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Feb 27 2016 05:37 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

I know it's been said before, but would someone please give that kid a huge, judgement-free HUG - and preferably his older brother, when he's worked out that his brother needs him more than he might think.
I wonder if Geoff or Lucy will pick up on Simon's near-outing of himself, where he said he "can't use [his balls]" anyway - I thought that might have been a reference to him not having kids.
Thanks Riley for the continued brilliant work. Looking at the chapter index, Simon's been through so much, over quite a while, so we can only hope that a silver bullet comes his way soon to turn things around for him.
Milo



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Milo, and thanks for the review. Hug away - he really needs it! Good question about whether mum and dad will pick up anything from Simon’s outburst. I doubt it though, I think the whole gay thing is another world right now!

 

Riley

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Feb 27 2016 12:58 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

I personally am all out of sympathy for Lucy, Geoff, and Luke. They were on the right track at first, Simon does need help. However, their entire approach is just ridiculous. All this talking behind his back and getting his brother involved? No, just no sorry. Giving him astroglide? I mean really? Then all three of them self-righteously getting mad when he naturally reacts to it. Whether that kid jerks off or not is nobody else's business and it just seemed invasive to me. I don't know it bugged me. Simon overreacted, kids do that, and they already recognize that he's having a problem, intruding on his personal activities just seems a bit over the line to me. Compounding that with all of them then ganging up on him after that is a bit too much. And Luke isn't Simon's parents and really needs to stay out of all of that. They don't need to have anymore discussion about Simon with Luke behind his back. Just my two cents. At least they recognized after the fact that they handled it wrong.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It just shows that, even with the best intentions, timing can really mess you up. Lucy got the astrolgide for Simon because she was getting the same for Luke. She thought she was helping and of course now she’s beating herself up big time.

 

Suddenly everyone goes off the deep end - but nobody feels good about that afterwards. It’s good to remember that, in life, there’s almost ALWAYS a bigger picture!

 

Hopefully they can get back on track again, soon.

 

Thanks Spikey.

 

Riley J

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Feb 27 2016 12:41 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

I have to say that I'm not feeling that sympathetic toward the parents. True, they don't know about the rape, but they seem awful cavalier (to me anyway) about the ramifications of having such a surgery performed on someone without their consent. Even without what happened with Toby, Simon would be devastated---at his age to be reminded of your lack of control, to have something so personal decided by others, even if it's for the best, would be traumatic.
Monica and Geoff seem to have forgotten that Luke's recovery was informed by his wanting the procedure. I'm thinking that perhaps the two of them might benefit from therapy.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Don’t be too hard on mum and dad. It has to be tough to be a parent when you only have part of the picture. I think the whole thing has blindsided them and only now are they beginning to look deeper.

 

Thanks for the great review!
Riley

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Feb 27 2016 12:15 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

How terrible for Simon to be digging himself deeper and deeper as he tries desperately to retreat inside himself. The worst of it is that there are people who would listen sympathetically if he let them hear what hurts him the most. Luke must be wondering what happened to his brother - the one he used to know. What's left of his own friend group will have stopped caring what he does, soon. We can only hope for some kind of intervention before something even more terrible happens...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Luke’s head is elsewhere at the moment it seems, and I guess this is still only a relatively short period, so I think that Luke and his parents still haven’t plumbed the depth of the issue. However, it can’t go on much longer.

 

Thanks Parker.

 

Riley

mg777%s's Photo

Feb 27 2016 12:00 PM

(Chapter 65 Review)

You're an amazing writer, Riley. I just used up half a box of kleenexes. Can't wait to find out what will happen next!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lol! Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Feb 27 2016 10:56 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

A deep and brooding chapter Riley.
I saw this coming from the moment the 'incident' happened. (go back and check my review)
It'll all come out for sure, it has to.
Will it come out in a confrontation with Luke, as Jeff1 suggested; in a therapy session which is iffy at the moment; or in an unanticipated way, known only to the cunning author? ;)

 

btw Monica is becoming one of my least favorite moms, and she always was on my 'questionable' list. She should have taken psych 101 before becoming a parent. In fact it should be a requirement for pregnant mothers-to-be. :pissed:

 

End of rant. Can't wait for this all to unfold, and I'm squeezing for ya Si !



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep - you were on the ball with this one. You said months ago that it was heading this way and you were right. Don’t be too hard on Lucy. She’s not a bad mum, she’s just struggling to understand and make good decisions.

 

Riley

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Feb 27 2016 05:43 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

Hi Riley, wow what a chapter.
Simon is in deep need of help, but much of it seems to be brought on by his rebellious streak. His woe is me attitude has to be honest, blown things up bigger than actually are. :unsure:
His outburst to Geoff and Lucy was a good example of a call for help, but instead of getting things under way they are going to leave it for a few days even after Simon had a bottle throwing tantrum at his dad.
As for Luke, god that kid not only needs a dick up his arse but also a boot, how much longer is he going to sit back and do nothing? his brother backs him and they join forces when need be but with this he acts as if he doesn't give a toss and to be honest two brothers going at each other could make Simon let slip what happened :devil: so allowing the whole story to come out.
Simon needs help sooner than later, Luke needs to get his act together and Geoff and Lucy need to step up.
Thanks Riley, cant wait for next chapter :2thumbs:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hey there Jeff!

 

Geoff and Lucy flailing a bit, that’s for sure, and Luke is to focused on himself just now to be much good either. Are they bad people? No, I don’t think so - just in the dark.

 

Riley

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Feb 27 2016 05:06 AM

(Chapter 65 Review)

The road to Hell is paved with good intentions. :no:
But at least Simon's parents dismissed the idea of him talking to Grace. I'm pretty sure Si would have lost it completely, if they suggested that. :o I think his reactions in school and at home are quite understandable, knowing what we do, and I'm counting on his family having a healthy spell of remorse once the truth comes out.
For now the thought of what will happen if Simon is forced to endure locker rooms and showers at school is making me :pinch:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Timothy, and thanks for getting the reviews going on this chapter. I also saw your posts in the forum! Simon’s really stuck between a rock and a hard place right now and needs to find some way to break out.

Lisa%s's Photo

Feb 26 2016 04:26 PM

(Chapter 64 Review)

Wonderful chapter, Riley. :)

 

Too bad Ella didn't have more time with Simon; she may have gotten him to crack. He's holding it all in and will probably explode once he reaches his room. He'll cry angry, sad tears of what was lost (his foreskin) and the reasoning behind it (blaming himself for letting it happen).

 

I'm actually surprised Lucy and Geoff didn't want to talk to Dr. Tiberius (Sr., since they thought he took the sutures out), since they do know each other a little more than most doctor/patients. If I were the parent, I'd find it odd that Dr. T didn't come out to at least say a quick hello, everything looks good, see you soon, type of thing.

 

I also liked reading about how Ella and Mel met; that was a sweet story. :)

 

Looking forward to the next chapter, Riley! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think that Geoff and Lucy probably assumed that Tiberius had to rush on to another patient as otherwise he probably would have come to see them. Ella is quite a character isn’t she - glad you like her.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Feb 26 2016 01:02 PM

(Chapter 63 Review)

What a terrific chapter, Riley! :) We really needed a positive chapter. God knows what condition the Summers' will find Simon in when they get back home. :(

 

Ryan and Luke have nice catching up to do, and it was nice seeing Gramma and Pops getting along with Lucy and Geoff. :) Ryan's grandparents are terrific (and I humbly stand corrected from my previous comment - I must have been thinking of his sperm donor! :P), and I'm so glad he has them. He knows they love him no matter what - unconditionally, which is so important for anyone. Tech-savvy Alice found out Ryan's secret, and I'm so happy her and Pops are ok with it. :)

 

On to chapter sixty-four! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Ryan is such a softy at heart really, though he’s had to develop a hard shell to survive. Having his grandparents really on his side now is gong to make a big difference I think.

 

Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Feb 15 2016 03:31 PM

(Chapter 64 Review)

Some of this is now getting confused for me due to the revisions in earlier chapters. Still another brick in the wall as it were. At some point I need to read through from the beginning of the revisions. Thanks as always.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Steve. Hope you can make sense of it. Shout if there is anything that needs clarifying. But more than anything else, thanks for the support!

 

Riley

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Feb 13 2016 12:13 PM

(Story Review)

Never has a guy deserved such a big fucking hug.

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Feb 13 2016 11:54 AM

(Chapter 64 Review)

How well you draw the medical office and doctor Ella T's work with Simon. She began to soften his icy stance, but she couldn't really get him to melt, could she? Doubt Luke will do any better. At least there is still hope he might do so with the right person. This was a fantastic chapter, and leaves me wanting more - as you always do...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. Ella will make a great doctor, that’s for sure. Thanks for all your great insights!

 

Riley

oxala%s's Photo

Feb 13 2016 10:59 AM

(Chapter 64 Review)

Thank you Riley. As always, I really enjoyed the latest couple of chapters.

 

Ella is slick! It was interesting to observe her skillful navigation of Simon's fragile emotions. She will almost certainly become a much better doctor than most. Atypical of her profession, she understands the difference between treating a human and repairing an automobile.

 

It was nice to receive a little more of her backstory with Mel.

 

As usual, the scene was so vivid that I was practically the proverbial fly on the wall. I don't know who wanted to hug Si more, me or Ella. A hug could have made the experience even worse for Simon. Clearly, he is working hard to check his emotions. Clearly, he has no desire to allow anyone to see his tears.

 

With caustic irrationality only a human can muster, Simon feels guilt. He deserves his pain; he deserves his punishment. This may be the most dangerous of Simon's many seething emotions. Oh yeah, I really want to give him a hug.

 

Luke, Luke, this is Houston, please confirm re-entry ... Luke, Simon really needs a hug!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there. Just noticed your entry into the forum too, so thanks for that! I agree, Ella is a smart lady. Her and Mel make a good team. I’ll defitinyly pass the hug on to Simon!

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Feb 13 2016 10:58 AM

(Chapter 64 Review)

A really great chapter, Riley!

 

The office scene was super well-done. I thought Ella was pretty perceptive, too bad she didn't go just a little further with Simon, he might have cracked.

 

And a big thumbs-up to Simon. He kept his parents out of the procedure! He has more steel than Luke, it seems.

 

Also a nice little peek at Ryan, whose crushing isn't as private as we thought.

 

A great story, continuing!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Skinny. I think will do Ryan a lot of good to be a but more out in the open with the grandparents. We’ll have to see where that goes.

 

Riley

peethree%s's Photo

Feb 06 2016 08:23 PM

(Chapter 63 Review)

That was a really good chapter. I teared up during the conversation between the grands and Lucy and Geoff. I have a feeling when Lucy gets a copy of the pictures her mother's intuition may kick in and she may notice something between the boys that they haven't even acknowledged to each other. Yes, I hope one of them will have the courage to talk to the other. Now for the return home. I just hope it is not too many tears.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes it was interesting to get more of a picture of Ryan form his grandparents, Peethree. I really like them! Ryan and Luke remain close, though I don’t think Geoff and Lucy see nay more in that than what is on the surface, and Simon is still down. Who knows what will come next?

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Feb 06 2016 09:42 AM

(Chapter 63 Review)

What a wonderful day for everyone, especially those of us reading ET. Luke and Ryan appear to be spiraling toward each other - hope one or the other gets the courage to come out to the other very soon. Simon is still a very great worry. Who will help him change his course? And what in the world will happen to Toby? Or with Elliott?
One of the best portions of this chapter was the background on Ryan's life that we got to see. It explains a great deal. And how good it is that Ryan has family he can count on now. Thanks so much for this chapter. Looking forward to more, of course. It is bad form to beg. How about I grovel? Please sir? More?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. It’s good news in that yes, Luke and Ryan appear to be heading int he right direction. Let’s hope they keep moving that way. At the same time, Elliott is still out there on the edges…

 

It was good to see the grandparents and get more of an insight into Ryan’s background.

 

More coming, though there’s quite some editing to do yet.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

Jeff1%s's Photo

Feb 06 2016 08:10 AM

(Chapter 63 Review)

OMG Riley.
Finally we get to the Gramp's and what happened to Ryan, BEST chapter so far. I really love the Gramp's,
This chapter really had a lot of feeling, the wily Gramp's helping Ryan he in turn coming closer to telling his best friend his secret, getting along with his own Mother and lucky for us all no mention about the sperm donor.
Ryan has matured over the summer, in fact since his hang, but Luke on the other hand has not matured yet. I hope the " sit down Luke I have something to tell you " chat is not to long coming then hopefully Ryan and Luke will be cumming ;) but somehow I think even then Luke could bottle it and hide which could have a devastating effect on Ryan..
As for Simon, Mmmmmm not sure how that one will pan out, Simon has to me always acted a bit of a "victim", seems to allow himself to be led and steered through life and has not really asserted himself with the likes of Toby who in effect took charge of things.
Toby wanted to do this Toby wanted to do that and Simon went along like a lamb, unfortunately Simon was going to be on a loosing side.
With Luke having a go at Simon before they all went to Ryan's may have been a good thing as Simon is feeling sorry for himself big time and although Luke is suspicious he will always be there for his brother when he needs a shoulder to cry on and should be putting two and two together that Toby did something to hurt Simon or is Luke that thick?? I don't think so, maybe slow on the uptake, but thick no, Simon's attitude is one that needs a good slap to wake him up, he has a brother who can help and knows hes gay so the rents can be kept out of it a bit longer, so please Riley, make it soon.
Thanks once again for a great chapter and look forward to more Ryan/Luke shenanigans lol lol :) :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff - glad you enjoyed the interlude with Ryan’s grandparents. I really like them too, and it’ll be interesting to see what they bring to the table now.

 

I agree with you about Simon. He’s a typical younger brother who’s used to most things being decided for him. it’s not really surprising that he’d let Toby take the lead in a lot of stuff. The question still is, is Simon partly to blame for what happened, and does he (as you say) need to wake up a bit?

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

Napaguy%s's Photo

Feb 06 2016 07:51 AM

(Chapter 63 Review)

Enjoyed the continuing saga
painfully slow at bringing Ryan and Luke to knowledge that they have more in common than they might have imagined possible. Just think how much the story possibilities that will be at hand when they are out to each other!
regards
Napaguy



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes - they do seem to manage to was around each other all the time!
Riley

Dayne Mora%s's Photo

Jan 31 2016 12:37 PM

(Chapter 62 Review)

So, Ryan and Luke are too afraid of losing each other's friendship that they can't come out to each other. However, Luke is getting closer to Elliott, who is comfortable being gay, and Ryan is developing a friendship with Jacko, and they're out to each other. I can see how these new friendships could turn romantic.
Which is to say, I totally ship them. Still want to see Luke and Ryan together, buuuuuuuuut this will do for now.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello again, Dayne.

 

I’m not sure that Ryan is developing that kind of friendship with Jacko. I think Jacko would like to think it though! However, it’s also good to see that Luke is loosening up a bit. Maybe something will happen….

 

Riley

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Jan 31 2016 12:27 PM

(Chapter 62 Review)

Another great chapter, I do like the ones with Ryan's Grandparents in.
Like other have said, little worried for Simon all alone at home with the dark place he is in mentally.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Simon - yes, it’s always great to see them. And let’s hope Simon is okay, and thanks for the review.

 

Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Jan 31 2016 12:47 AM

(Chapter 62 Review)

Now I remember how great Ryan's grandparents are! :) I wish I knew what story I was getting mixed up with! lol

 

I really enjoyed this chapter because it brought some happiness to Luke and his parents. It was great seeing Ry again, and I would hope if Luke ever does feel comfortable enough coming out to Ryan, that Ryan would do the same. I'm curious about tennis camp and how well Ryan and Jacko got along. After all, Jacko was following Ry around like a puppy dog at the barbecue. :P

 

Like your other readers, I am really worried about Simon. I'm praying that he didn't do anything stupid since he was home alone.

 

I'll be waiting on pins and needles now until the next chapter. :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa! I’m trying to stay on track with this week\s posting. Hopefully will be out tomorrow. Ryan and Jacko? Well I think Jacko would like that, but not sure Ryan would feel the same! Like you say - he’s like a puppy dog at a BBQ! Many have also wanted to know a bit more about Ryan’s grandparents, so this was a good opportunity to look closer.

 

Riley

peethree%s's Photo

Jan 30 2016 12:38 PM

(Chapter 62 Review)

One of the reasons I look forward to Saturdays is your updates. With theexception of feeling bad for Simon, I realized I had a big smile on my face as I read. I hope one of those boys will get the courage to come out.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Saturday is near - the next chapter is in edit with Andy! A surprising step forward for Luke this week. I wonder if he’ll go anywhere with that, or just sit on ti as usual?

 

As always, thanks for the review.

 

Riley

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Jan 30 2016 12:01 PM

(Chapter 62 Review)

I am so, so worried about Simon. There could be a tragedy, and very soon, if someone doesn't intervene. Very, very surprised that Lucy hasn't done so yet. On the good side is Luke finally thinking about trusting Ryan with coming out. Perhaps his honesty could beget still more from Simon...if he is still with us.
Thanks for a great chapter - Ryan sounded like he had a grand time over the summer; perhaps he is able to talk about himself, too.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker.
Simon is all over the place - at least internally. On the outside he’s not saying enough for his parents to really get what the problem is other than their own guesses. A good step forward for Luke though. Perhaps he’s getting off the fence?

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Jan 30 2016 11:54 AM

(Chapter 62 Review)

The one time Lucy, who is way to much of a helicopter mom, should have been more in tune with her youngest son, she wasn't.

 

I don't know about anyone else, but I'm worried about Si, alone at his house.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Don’t be too hard on Lucy, Skinny. It’s a lot easier to see this stuff from our perspective when we get to see behind all the characters, whereas she, Geoff and Luke are a bit lost. That said, I’m not sure how she would handle it is she DID know what was really going on!

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

oxala%s's Photo

Jan 30 2016 11:26 AM

(Chapter 62 Review)

Thank you Riley. Great read as always.

 

While neither as eventful nor dramatic as the last hand full of episodes, it advances the plot and characters nicely.

 

As Luke suspects, Si pulled off a manipulative escape from social obligation. On some level he may be 'a little prat' as Luke muses. Come on Luke, at leat call him 'a smart little prat'. Well done Si :) !

 

Ryan seems much better emotionally and more willing and/or able to interact with Luke. Interesting to observe Luke contemplating a deeper honesty with Ryan. I suspect that Ryan and Jacko have had some interesting, and perhaps profoundly benificial, conversations over the summer.

 

Well done Riley!



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As you say, I guess this chapter has a lot of transition in it. Ryan seems to be in a pretty upbeat mood these days, though I’m not convinced it’s much to do with Jack! Perhaps we’ll know more in the next instalment?

 

Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Jan 29 2016 10:56 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Yay, Ry's back!! :) Although weren't Ryan's grandparents always fighting with each other? Didn't they embarrass Luke and Ry the last time they went out to the country club? Or am I totally mixing up different stories? lol

 

I can sort of feel Toby's panic and desperation in getting Simon to talk to him again. He really has no clue what he did. He hadn't realized that he went way too far with Simon. Like Oxala said, many trauma victims blame themselves for what happened, and Simon definitely feels everything is his fault. He's spiraling down a dangerous path, and he really needs help before it's too late. He has to be able to come back from this.

 

I was cracking up when Lucy saw Ryan buying his own lube! lol At least Lucy had good sense not to start a conversation with him about the best kinds of lube to get teenage boys! :P



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Wasn’t just so funny Lucy catching Ryan buying ‘solutions’! And she’s also trying here best, though she’s missing part of the puzzle.

 

Ryan’s Grandparents? No I think you’re confusing them with another story. They are a great old couple and Luke really likes them. More about them in the next chapters.

 

Riley

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Jan 28 2016 11:52 PM

(Chapter 21 Review)

Riley, I'm enjoying every chapter because they are always full of surprises. Of course, Luke doesn't know that his best friend is gay and like usual, they play cat and mouse with each other. Simon and Toby managed okay even though they are younger. The only thing that caught my attention was that the scenes, while different, they were also very similar because the two brothers are both gay and are hot for their best friends, who also happen to be gay. You write very well and hold a reader's interest.



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Hello my friend. Thanks for the review and for getting this far!
Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Jan 28 2016 11:24 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

And I'm review 22 --- better late than never, isn't that what they say? lol

 

I'm glad you had a good birthday, Riley, one that carried over into the next day. lol

 

Yeah, the end there with Luke -- definitely not good. I can understand he was pissed now because the whole family was trying to cheer Simon up, and they don't have any idea why he's so moody. Luke is going to kick himself when (hopefully WHEN and not IF!), he finally finds out.

 

Maybe Luke should think back to breakfast when Grace stopped by. Simon told her he had work to do and didn't have time for Toby to come over. Even though they communicated silently, and Grace knew something was up, Simon did say he's probably see Toby next week in school. That should sound odd to anyone who knows they're best friends. Never mind boyfriends (only Luke and Grace know that), but best friends would be with each other and keep each other company in times like these. So right there by Simon not wanting to see Toby at all should have been a red flag. Then when Luke saw how Simon reacted to Toby being there, should have been red flag number two.

 

It's heartbreaking to see Simon suffering like he is. He has so much sadness and anger in him, and he has no outlet for it, except by taking it out on Luke. I did notice that he's taking too much Tylenol. He woke up early, took two or three, then two hours later he's taking more, and then he goes down to breakfast AND TAKES MORE, along with his antibiotics. Not good. I can see him getting addicted to them, if people can actually get addicted to Tylenol, which actually does NOTHING for me. lol

 

Another thing I didn't like was the fact that he is already sort of shutting off his penis. I don't know the right word for it, but he was thinking about not having anything to do with it (or something like that), and not letting anyone else ever touch him or get close to him again. He will find it very difficult to trust from now on. I just pray somebody catches on quickly (maybe Toby can confess to Grace and get the ball rolling here), because Simon is going to need to talk to a professional about what happened. He will never get over this (if he will at all), without professional help.

 

And, I have another chapter to read! Yay me! lol Awesome chapter, Riley! As usual! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - and thanks for the birthday wishes!

 

You’re right, Luke should be a lot more on the ball, though I think he has his mind elsewhere just now what with Elliott being on his horizon. In the meantime, Simon is slipping into a bad place and nobody seems to be able to help him. He’s even losing confidence in himself. I just hope he’s resilient enough to pull through.

 

Riley

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Jan 28 2016 08:08 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Riley- just wanted to let you know that I love your writing, and am always eagerly waiting for the next chapter!
Keep it up.



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Mr Arsenal! Guessing you’re from this side of the pond? Thank you for the note, and glad you’re enjoying the tale!
Riley J

Gandalf%s's Photo

Jan 25 2016 11:07 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Very scary times for Si. I so hope something will jar him into help before the depression moves into a more active faze. Good to have Ry back. But Luke,too, has questions to sort,out. So well done. pax.



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Something likely to start bubbling over, for sure! Thanks fro the review, Steve.

 

Riley

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Jan 23 2016 07:54 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Another great chapter. I am looking forward to Ryan being back and hearing what he has been up to. Also, I am sure the dinner with his grandparents will be fun.



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Hi Peethree. Ryan’s Graands are always great value for money. I don’t doubt it will be a memorable occasion!

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Jan 23 2016 04:43 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

I hurt with Simon, and feel for him in his isolation. That it is self imposed is both tragic and completely understandable. The explosion, the release of tension, when he finally let's go of his secret will be very much greater as a result. I hope for a figure - Geoff or Luke - who can get through the walls and ease the terrible story out of him. Thanks for a great chapter. Looking for more, of course.



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Hello Parker. Yes, totally agree. Whether Simon likes it or not, it’s going to start firing off in unexpected times and ways.

 

Riley

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Jan 23 2016 03:24 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

So yeah, my heart is breaking for Si... :,(



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Me too. Everything seems to be going against him just now.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Jan 23 2016 03:23 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

I really hope Simon doesn't do something really stupid, but it kind of feels like he is heading in a downward spiral at the moment.

 

Looking forward to the next instalment :)



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I hope he doesn’t either - but he’s still not letting anyone near.
Riley

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Jan 23 2016 01:15 PM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Double plus awesome Riley! Double plus awesome! Thank you!

 

As I suspected, Si had come close to being 'honest' with Luke just prior to Luke losing patience. Oooooof Luke, if you could only have maintained patience a few more seconds ...

 

Last week I was miffed because some were being too hard on Toby. This week I am schooled. I've been too hard on Lucy, and to a lesser extent Geoff. I enjoyed observing Lucy coming to terms with the maturity of her boys. To see her put so much effort into cheering Si was simply beautiful. I have a whole new respect ....

 

Obviously, neither Lucy nor Geoff really understand why Simon is so hurt. But they KNOW he is hurt. This is an excellent potrayal of what I like to call "parental intuition". As cynical and scientific as I am, my parents still astound me on occasion with almost clairvoyant insight ... and it is spooky! One instance of this about four years ago literally saved my life.

 

I love the characters in ET. They are so realistically flawed, just like me :) .

 

That Luke puts genuine effort into coaxing Simon to dinner with Ryan's grandparents while genuinely hoping Si will decline is too funny and too real. Been there done that!

 

Simon thinks Toby raped him. Wow! I really don't care whether or not the situation fits a technical or legal definition of rape. I am not a barrister (uh, lawyer). It is important to acknowledge that this is what Simon understands. Yet he still blames himself:

 

"I know." They were wrong about one thing at least, and he added, "It was my fault."

It does not "make sense". It is also a common reaction to sexual trauma. He blames both Toby and himself. It is logically problematic and emotionally true.

 

It will be interesting the learn whether or not Si can find the inner courage to forgive Toby and/or himself. And how long? Days? Months? Years? However Simon reemerges, he will be different, wiser, and wearing a difficult scar. As his penis told him, "We're both hurt, I know that, but I've not changed...we can still do what we need...we can get past this...try and you'll see..." Wisdom often comes from unexpected sources, unexpected context ... :)

 

Lucy finds cool sailing themed briefs on "special offer". Lol, I understand that only because I listened to "the Clash" as a teenager. Lucky Si, let's just hope he finds enough peace to appreciate mom's effort ...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I’m always amazed how many significant - even life-changing - moments can balance in the edge of a knife in life. Maybe things would be different if Luke had actually waiting those few seconds and listened. Now we’ll never know.

 

Like you say, Oxala, we’re all flawed. One of the things I like about this story is that there is nobody who is that perfect. almost all the main characters lose it at some point, or make poor decisions. Lucy is an example - she’s trying to be a good mum, but she can also be a right pain.

 

Simon’s confusion is growing as quickly as his self-confidence is diminishing! Let’s hope there’s a way out.

 

Thanks for the review,

 

Riley J

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Jan 23 2016 11:12 AM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Well I could certainly foresee this from the moment of the rape chapter. It's got to come out, like bilious food making you nauseous.

 

Well done Riley. Every shredding moment of the chapter leading us to ??



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny. Yes it has to come out. Simon will find out that you can’t bury it alive, eventually.

 

Thanks for the review,
Riley

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Jan 23 2016 05:05 AM

(Chapter 61 Review)

Well, we all know where Simon is heading. :o :no: :,(
It remains to be seen who or what will save him. I'm gonna trust in you, Riley. Don't let me down, please, or :pissed:



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Keep heart - it’s far from over!

Timothy M.%s's Photo

Jan 23 2016 05:02 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I have to admit I sort of gave up on the story when there was all the locker room bullying. But I'm back on board now, skimming the previous chapters and really getting into the story with this one. I like Simon a lot more as the main character, and you do a great job of showing how little mistakes and the wrong word at the wrong time can be fatal. :pinch:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I don’t think anyone particularly enjoyed those chapters! I guess, however, what happens to us makes us who we become - even for Simon.

 

Thanks for the review Timothy.

 

Riley

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Jan 19 2016 11:03 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Do clicks count as reviews? Some of us kept checking a link for almost 2 years until 3 chapters suddenly reappeared. If each those clicks count as a review of the story, you hold the record!!
In any case, another great chapter(s) and belated Happy Birthday.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

And review No. 20!

 

It’s been amazing to get so much feedback. And yes - clicks count! Sorry it took so many before the story fired up again. There were plenty of reasons for that, but here’s not the place to go into the details. I just wanted to say thanks for keeping clicking!

 

Thanks for the birthday wishes,
Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Jan 18 2016 10:30 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I hope someone figures out it is not just the circ that is a problem. Suspect someone will hug him or something to get emotions going.
Sorry you had to get a year older to post two chapters this week. It is not necessary to wait a year to do it again. And again cheers on your Birthday.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Steve - review No. 19 is yours! I think you probably understand Simon well enough to know he normally is the kind of kid that unreels really easily. But this time he seems really low and shut down. I don’t think he’ll let anyone close enough for that hug anytime soon.

 

Riley

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Jan 18 2016 02:15 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday, great chapter i can't wait for the next one. I really hope Simon talks to someone about what happened or someone finds out he really needs some help.,



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Simon - long time no hear! Thanks for the review (you got No. 18). Simon is in a bad place right now. Let’s hope something changes soon, though he’s pretty much shut everyone out - even Luke.

 

Riley

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Jan 18 2016 09:45 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Just keeping it simple here (going to write in your Birthday blog :P)
But Wow... I was wondering how things were going to go down for Simon. Not what I had been expecting at all...elective. GULP! And the war ensues hehe.

 

Good job again mate :joe:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Matt - and thanks for your other message too, it was great to hear from you! You’re reviewer No. 17 and I can hardly believe how many are coming in. Thanks for reading!

 

Riley

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Jan 18 2016 06:25 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I've loved this story for years. I can't wait for Elliot and Luke to get together. Or wait, maybe I meant to say that I can't wait for Ryan and Luke to get together. Or, maybe, since Toby and Simon are obviously finished, maybe Luke can get together with Toby. Since Luke's so shy and at least he knows that Toby is gay. OK, I guess I do NOT hope that Luke and Toby get together. But what I really do hope is that, kind of like The Secret Life of Billy Chase, I hope that An English Teen, Circumcised in the USA never ends! Because it's that good! Seriously, Riley, thanks for writing such an awesome story and happpy (belated) birthday. Michael



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello MG - and thanks for the birthday wishes! I would definitely say that…nothing is for sure! LOL! Simon, Luke, Toby, Ryan, Elliott, Jacko…who knows what they’re going to do. I can only promise you one thing…it’s far from over!

 

You got review No.16!

 

Riley

Dodger%s's Photo

Jan 17 2016 02:44 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

A great double chapter Riley. Interesting times ahead for the Summers family. I wondered how long it would be before Luke snapped a little at his brother. I feel for Simon, but I'm hoping that he will eventually let Luke in on what happened. I think that he would be a good person for Simon to confide in and Luke has already proved his loyalty and love for his younger brother.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Dodger - glad you enjoyed the double bill! I think Luke could help his brother, but something’s going to have to give in Simon first before he starts letting anyone near.

 

Thanks for being review No. 15.

 

Riley

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Jan 17 2016 02:54 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Well I will be your number 14 Riley. :)

 

thanks for for the bonus chapter. Now I feel obligated to give you something in return. 0:)



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No. 14 is yours!
Riley

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Jan 17 2016 01:42 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday Riley!

 

These two new chapters were really spot on. Especially chapter 60, now that we're seeing more of Simon's perspective and emotions. That was really a major faux pas at the end there on Luke's part, though he didn't really understand the implications of his words. The drama is heating up, and I'm both enjoying it and looking forward to more.

 

Once again, thank you very much for sharing your fantastic writing, and Happy Birthday!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think I’m enjoying writing as much as you are reading, Shinoai. Luke really blew it, didn’t he, though you can understand it in the circumstances. Simon is really shutting everyone down.

 

Thanks for the birthday wishes and for being reviewer No. 13!

 

Riley

peethree%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 10:40 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday! I love reading this story. I am a pretty crappy reviewer, so I don't say much. I am really feeling bad for Simon.



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For being reviewer No. 12, you’re a star! Glad you’re enjoying the story.

 

Riley

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Jan 16 2016 06:38 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Thanks Riley for yet again more great reading. I *always* look forward to your next instalment, and they never disappoint.
I suspect it's going to be hard for Simon to keep his anger at Toby bottled up. Purely for his sake, I hope he can confide in Luke - despite the little conflict between the two at the end of the chapter. It's going to be messy either way, but he's just going to remain a twisted mess if he can't talk to someone he trusts about what happened to him. Toby has a cheek turning up like that. So many pots on the boil, so to speak.
Thanks especially for the double chapter - what a generous way to celebrate your birthday! :-)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Milotin. I have the feeling that Simon is beginning to interpret everything that comes at him in a way that confirms how bad he feels about himself.

 

Thank you for review No. 11

 

Riley

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Jan 16 2016 04:15 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday! All my best wishes for you!
Simon has to be in turmoil right now, I hope things will work out for him with time.
I can't believe the nerve of Toby!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the birthday wishes - and for taking review 10! I think Toby is only just figuring out how close to the edge he’s gone!

 

Riley

Defiance19%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 02:11 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday Riley...
Started late, got caught up and I am following along and rather enjoying the story.. Well now, I feel horribly for Simon. The next few chapters I imagine are going to be even more difficult to say the least...

 

Thank you for a wonderful story!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the birthday wishes, but glad you’re caught up with ET and are even enjoying it! Tough times for Simon.

 

Thanks for being review No. 9

 

Riley

oxala%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 02:08 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

HAPPY BIRTHDAY RILEY! Awakening to find two new chapters of ET made it feel like my birthday. Thank you for two more excellent and riveting chapters.

 

From the chapter titles alone, I knew I was in for a rough read. Just when I thought Simon's cornucopia of negative emotion was filled, guilt entered the fray. I know Simon has no reason to feel guilty. To some extent, I'm sure Simon knows it as well. Guilt is an incidious emotion that rarely bows to reason.

 

The scene with Toby's mother Grace was brilliant. It was like a psychological mexican stand off between Simon and Grace ... and neither flinched. And they pulled it off without communicating anything to Simon's family. The realism of this scene epitomizes what I love most about ET.

 

Toby seems to have made some enemies among ET fans. Toby did not intend to hurt Simon. He is selfish, immature, brash, impulsive, and a bit kinky; he is not cruel. Now that he has enough information to get somewhere near two when summing one and one, I imagine he will feel horrible soon enough. I actually feel bad for him.

 

Simon's isolation, anger and despair are heart breaking. With Lucy on Mars and Geoff firmly stuck on the moon, I had really hoped that Luke would be able to communicate with his brother. While Luke can be thick and seems to be in the stratosphere at times, he does understand Simon.

 

Based on the brief and strange interaction between Simon and Toby, Luke should have realized he was missing important information. Thick! I certainly can't fault him for loosing patience with Simon. Sadly, he could not have chosen worse things to say to Simon if he had tried: "...you brought it on yourself...always someone else's fault with you...Mum and Dad did what they thought was right...GET OVER IT!".

 

LUKE! Your brother NEEDS you, NOW!

 

As to Luke's musings regarding hand washing, chili enthusiasts like myself quickly learn the merits of hand washing prior to .... :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Oxala - like I mentioned in GA chat, the whole chilli reference made me laugh! as always, thanks for putting so much into your review…it’s hard to know where to start, other than to say thanks for the birthday wishes too!

 

I really enjoyed writing the scene between Simon and Grace. I could just feel the simmering air between them. I also think you’re right about Toby. He may have made a massive mistake, but I think he’s honestly feeling absolutely awful.

 

And Luke? He really needs to wake up!

 

Thanks for being review No. 8

 

Riley

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 12:38 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I knew something like this would happen, and said so in my comments when the rape occurred.

 

This is not going to get better by itself! :( :(

 

Great writing, as always, Riley! And Happy BD! :2thumbs:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny - you were spot on! And thanks for being review No. 7. Thanks too for the birthday wishes.
Riley

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 12:33 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I feel so badly for Simon, but the horrible thing is that his very silence could hurt him quite as much as the original events. I am so sorry that this happy and wonderful kid is so wounded. Love what you are writing - it is so important for this to be seen.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. thanks for grabbing review No. 6! It’s hard to see Simon so down. he needs friends! Thanks for all the great encouragement on the story.

 

Riley

Ozymandias%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 12:26 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

It's a good thing for Toby that Simon was too incapacitated to punch his lights out. I look forward to the rapist ex-boyfriend getting what he deserves when Simon feels better.
This is a great story, one of my favorites in fact, but the last several chapters have just made my blood boil - not good for my blood pressure, by the way - so I wish this situation would get resolved quickly. I suspect that it will take a lot of doing to get poor Simon back to physical and mental health, however.



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You got review No. 5 Ozy! Hope the blood pressure is coming down over the week!

 

Riley

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Jan 16 2016 12:19 PM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Hey Riley, I'm really enjoying your storyline. Thanks for your birthday present to all of us readers. Hope you had a great day and that the coming year will be filled with much happiness. Keep up the great writing.
Drew



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Drew!
Even though the title is a bit quirky, it’s been great to see so many people following it avidly. Thanks for the birthday wishes and for being review No. 4

 

Riley

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Jan 16 2016 08:11 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

I noticed your story when it was already well on it's way and was hooked right away, so I'm looking forward to every new chapter. I hope you will get lots of reviews as a belated birthday present.
I very much sympathize with Simon, for I wouldn't like to be missing that part of my anatomy either ;). Now that it was taken from him against his will I hope he will come to terms with it eventually.

 

Hope to see many more chapters ! Thank you.



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Hello there, and thanks for the review (No. 3). Simon’s in a bad way, and feeling angry and let down. For sure, and I think we’re all feeling bad for him.

 

Riley J

MJC%s's Photo

Jan 16 2016 07:00 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Just loving the story, Riley, so thank you very much for all your wonderful efforts :) Clearly the situation with Simon has to 'open up' soon for his sake, but also for the sake his family and friends. And happy birthday for yesterday (sounds like you may have had 'too much' fun lol) - and good luck with getting those reviews!



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Hello MJC.

 

Thanks for the birthday wishes…I think I’ve recovered now. Thanks for being review No.2

 

Riley

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Jan 16 2016 06:59 AM

(Chapter 60 Review)

Happy Birthday, may your day be filled with Love and wishes



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Thank you for being the 1st to review!
Riley

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Jan 10 2016 03:13 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

The story has definitely been interesting for the last few chapters. I would think that you were a surgeon specializing in treatment of the male organ with the descriptions in this chapter. I think that Simon will have a rough couple of weeks. I'm wondering what will happen once Toby gets together with Simon.
It's great the Luke and Elliott will probably have that game of tennis, with some other activities added to the mix.
I will look forward to the next chapter. Thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review, Les - not sure about specialising, but I try to do a bit of research! Yes, what will happen when Toby reappears? Will he and Simon be able to talk it out?

 

Luke and Elliott - not sure Luke knows what to do about that. He can be a bit of a wuss sometimes!

oxala%s's Photo

Jan 10 2016 12:35 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Thanks for another great chapter in a novel and engaging story. I have greatly enjoyed the richness and complexities of the many characters.

 

As with the last several chapters, I can really feel Simon's isolation, frustration, pain, and sense of betrayal.

 

He has been betrayed by Toby. To a much greater extent, he has been betrayed by his parents and the doctors. Simon is old enough that the ethical principals of patient autonomy and informed consent are fully applicable. That he was removed from discussion of treatment options is a violation of ethics by both parents and medical personnel alike. Unfortunately, this is very realistic.

 

Lucy is both clueless and autocratic. Neither she nor Geoff seem to understand Simon. Lucy does not care to understand. Like Luke, Geoff desperately needs 'to grow a pair'. Lucy refuses to genuinely acknowledge that her boys are no longer boys, but young men. Worst of all, she refuses to think.

 

Simon is smart. I suspect that he will soon learn that circumcision is rarely required to successfully correct acute paraphimosis. I suspect Lucy and Geoff may soon be on the receiving end of some well deserved anger. Simon may well become angry with himself. With a little patience, ice, and ibuprofen, he may have avoided the hospital entirely. (LOL ... this story has caused me to learn far more about penises than I ever wanted to know.)

 

And Sam .... lol ..
Sam!

 

I hope Elliot will take some initiative toward that game of tennis.

 

Great characters; fun story!

 

Thank you Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Oxala. I guess with Simon being a minor, it’s taken for granted by the authorities - whoever they are - that parents can make those kinds of decisions for their kids. Maybe the paraphimosis could have been dealt with differently - and we might explore that later - but of course, in the heat of the moment, it’s not hard to convince scared parents when a white coat makes a case for something.

 

And Sam? Oh my - what a handful!

 

Thanks for the review!

 

Riley

Gandalf%s's Photo

Jan 09 2016 11:03 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Like most worry continues for Si. I hope Luke catches on soon. But given how oblivious he can be... Ahh so where will "Elli" appear next? Pax.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Luke can be a bit of a twit sometimes, but with Elli? I don’t think that’s over quite yet. Do you?

 

Thanks of the review Steve,
Riley

Lisa%s's Photo

Jan 09 2016 07:55 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Luke, you chicken!!!!! You should have gotten Elli's number!!!!

 

Loved the line from Sam: "I'm still going to be able to shoot, right?" No embarrassment from him! Right in front of everyone including his parents! :lmao:

 

On a more serious note, Simon has rough times ahead of him. I wonder when Luke and their folks will wonder what happened besides being to rough with the Glansie thing. Of course WE know it wasn't from that, but they will wonder why he's not bouncing back from this.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - Sam’s a character, for sure! Depending on how Simon reacts, it’s hard to know how his parents will deal with it. If Simon shuts down on them, they may ge shut out.

 

Thanks as always, for the review!
Riley

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Jan 09 2016 04:02 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Unfortunately for Simon he's going home to exactly the wrong mother, father and brother for what his problem really is. I smell some bad times ahead for him. Probably going to withdraw from the world or explode.
Unfortunately, exploding might be preferable.

 

I was hoping Elliot might have been around as an uninvolved outsider, but while that may happen, it's going to be a while, since Luke chickened out.

 

Great chapter Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny. I don’t think you’re far off. Perhaps if Simon can confide in Luke he might find help, but it’s more likely he’s going to bury it alive!

 

Thanks for the review.

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Jan 09 2016 03:48 PM

(Chapter 59 Review)

Oh, poor Luke with a crush. But his inner turmoil seems so small compared to Simon's. More than a medical doc, he needs a counselor - a trusted friend, at least. He could confide in his brother, perhaps, but can he trust him now? I have my doubts. No way will he talk to his mother or father, oh no. Great chapter, Riley. I'd like more, of course!



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Thanks for the review Parker. I suspect Simon will have to decide if he can confide in Luke. I think it would be better if he did, even if there were consequences.

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Jan 09 2016 08:42 AM

(Chapter 58 Review)

Hi Riley, well after reading INS i know know more about Elliot and can see how hes fitting in with Luke. How ever is Elliot over Miguel fully? could this come back to bite him with Luke?
Sam is a little shit, really needs to be put in his place this thing about his dick and being special almost "god" like seems to have given him an inflated ego of himself and his eventual harem of virgins lol.
As I said before there is a disturbing dark side to Toby that although Simon went along with has led to this drama and poor Simon has taken the brunt of things.
With what happened to Toby in his past he now does not realise right from wrong and must feel what he is doing is normal, this is the sort of kid who could take a gun to school for a joke.
I feel this is just the start and if Simon finishes with Toby then he could make Simon's life hell.
Now, while this happening to Simon what is happening to Ryan?, has he succumbed to the wiles of Jacko and lost his virginity that Ryan and Luke should have shared, or will Ryan come back intact?
Are Ryan's Grand parents still on the scene and has the sperm donor dick been sent to war yet ?
Will Ryan or Luke accidentally out themselves to each other and spend many hours locked in a bedroom???
We wait with baited breath.
Thanks Riley.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff! Some great questions. I think that the history between Elliott and Miguel is going to spill out at some point. Perhaps Elliott is over it, but who knows. Don’t be too harsh on Sam - in some ways, his coping mechanisms for the life they grew up with are almost polar to Elliott’s, but not necessarily worse. School will probably grind a few more corners off.

 

It’s also a good question in regards to how Toby is going to react. We’ll have to see on that one.

 

And the other characters? Nobody is out of play yet!

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Jan 06 2016 10:51 PM

(Chapter 58 Review)

'All kinds of quips about phoning home sprang to mind...' Omg, Riley, that line was hysterical! Holy shit was that funny! :D Steven Spielberg would be proud. lol

 

Is Chowdry's name Chowdry or Chaudry? It kept switching in the last chapter and this chapter.

 

Poor Simon. He's feeling so despondent. It'll be good for him to be back home in his familiar house, but it's going to take a long time for Simon to get back from this physical and emotional betrayal of Toby's. He's going to need therapy.

 

Excellent chapter, Riley! As usual! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Lisa - LOL, it could be that autocomplete has had it’s way with Dr Chowdry! I’ll have to check.

 

Thanks for the review, and a Happy New Year to you!
Riley

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Jan 06 2016 08:53 PM

(Chapter 58 Review)

"His car, his rules!" Hope we’re not headed for another ISH. I don’t think I can take another sad ending.



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I think I can put your mind at rest, Wayne, Luke’s not going to total his car!

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Jan 06 2016 08:25 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

It was wonderful to see Elliot's family again! I loved Rose and Benedict from ISH, and it's so good to see them here, making friends with Luke's parents. :)

 

Skinny's right; things for Simon will get worse before they get better. I see him retreating into himself, into his mind, and I'm not sure if anyone will be able to get him out, at least for quite a while. When he's ready to talk, Luke will be the one he'll confide in. Toby better run for the hills when this happens because I'm sure there won't be a rock he can hide under where Luke won't find him and try to beat him to a pulp.

 

Ok, on to the next chapter. Hey, I'm finally catching up! lol



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

From this chapter, it does look like Simon is a long way from bouncing back. I’d like to think he will talk to Luke, but Luke is pretty caught up with Elliott right now, and might not be listening! Simon certainly won’t confide in his parents. The next step will be when Toby come to visit - then what will Simon do?

 

Well done for catching up Lisa!

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Jan 05 2016 11:25 PM

(Chapter 56 Review)

Sam's a hoot -- along with Becky! lol Yep, they are a bit young to be 'dating'! haha Becks is a trip though - telling everyone about poor Simon's willy! :P

 

Simon is not going to be a happy camper when he finds out what happened to his willy. But that's if he really cares about something physical like that. His mental state is in too much turmoil I think.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Sam and Becks - what a walking nightmare of precocious teen! Simon’s in a dark place though. Not good.

 

Thanks for the review!

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Jan 05 2016 10:14 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

Elliot!!!!! So wonderful to see him again, Riley! :) Of course it's too bad it had to be in a hospital, but at least Sam's ok. And Simon's circumcision will heal. It's just his emotional state that no one knows about yet that is in jeopardy.

 

The whole thing with Elliot's brother being born in a Muslim country and what they did to him after he was born...I never heard of that. How could they just take liberties like that? Too bad they can't sue...

 

Another excellent chapter, Riley!! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Lisa! Yes, Elliott has hit the story with a vengeance now. We’ve seen a couple of brief glimpses of him in earlier chapters, but this is the first time Luke has really engaged with him.

 

It’s early days for Simon to know how well he’ll recover, but lets hope that they can sort him out. As for Sam - well..as you say, too bad they can’t sue!

 

Riley

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Jan 04 2016 02:06 PM

(Chapter 58 Review)

I can feel the emptiness, the pain and the anger Si's going through in your writing. You portrayed that so very well. Also well done is the slow, gathering friendship between Luke and Elliott. It's about time Luke got to crush on someone hard. Hope for Simon's recovery - which may mean he really needs Luke about now. Is there hope for a new chapter soon? Please?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Next Chapter coming soon Parker - it’s with Andy as I type!

 

Luke really is getting a bit of a crush on Elliott, though knowing him he’s unlikely to do anything about it!

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Jan 02 2016 11:50 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

Shit, as a mom, I would have handled it the same way as Lucy did. The fear for your child and the fear that you have no idea what's wrong with your child, makes you snap in anger and frustration, but like it was written, it was only her fear talking. It's terrifying when something happens to your child and you have to rush him to the ER, or worse yet, call 911.

 

Simon's pain is horrifying. I'm praying that whatever it is, it can be fixed and that he doesn't suffer any permanent damage.

 

Of course his mental state hasn't even been touched on yet. His physical pain is too much now for him to even THINK of what exactly happened at Toby's.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - looks like you’re on a roll!

 

I guess it’s the not being able to do anything about it - to put it right - is what’s the most painful for a mum. Thanks for keeping up with the story!
Riley

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Jan 02 2016 10:14 PM

(Chapter 53 Review)

I did hit the 'like' button, but I didn't really like the chapter. The writing was great, as always, Riley, but it was a really dark chapter.

 

I think Simon is going to be traumatized by this. Toby has no idea that what he did was essentially rape. Simon yelled 'no' a few times, and even though he may have accidentally caused Toby to go deeper, Toby should have just pulled out.

 

Plus, thinking about Ryan and not Simon, was wrong. He was so caught up in his little Ryan fantasy, that he didn't realize what he was doing to his boyfriend. He's making excuses now, telling Simon it was HIS fault for pushing him deeper in by Simon moving, but he's in denial. Of course he's angry with Simon now because he doesn't understand why Simon is so upset. He's lucky if Simon every talks to him again, and if he does, it's going to be a very long time from now.

 

I always liked Toby; I never saw anything bad in him like some of the other readers mentioned. I love his mom! I hope eventually he can confide in Grace, and Grace can get him to see what he did was so wrong.

 

I'm trying to catch up now, Riley! I think I have a bunch of chapters to read! :)

 

Hope you had a great holiday and HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - and a Happy New Year to you too. Yes, the chapter was darkly uncomfortable as a fun romp came to a terribly wrong conclusion. There's been signs of this with Toby for a while now, and it's been hard to separate the quirky from the the baggage he's brought with him from the previous relationship.

 

Simon is likely to spiral as he's not going to want to tell anyone what happened - maybe not even Luke. Grace is probably the only other one he can turn to, but....

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Jan 02 2016 12:56 PM

(Chapter 58 Review)

An insightful chapter, Riley!

 

Speaking of insight, I certainly hope Dr. Jacko's Dad has more than Si's family does. And I hope it leads to what the chapter title as inferring. Simon is not nearly ready to be transported, in his cocoon, back home.
If it happens, he'll remain in that fetal position, mentally at least, until someone wakes up ...and it won't be him!

 

A very careful portrayal of the shock he's in. Good writing, Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Skinny

 

Simon’s in a downward spiral for sure. Physically, he should recover as long as the doctors have done a good job - and there’s no reason to believe that they haven’t. The rest of it? Well that they can’t see, and I suspect Simon will want to keep it that way!

 

Riley

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Jan 02 2016 08:29 AM

(Chapter 58 Review)

Knowing you I'm suspecting these last two chapters will need re reading for info lost in the first reading. So much up in the air. Hope someone helps Si sort. Luke and E will be interesting. But right now the title summed it up. Happy New Year.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Happy New Year to you too Steve! I just hope Luke leaves some time for Simon now he’s got Elliott in his sights, as younger brother is carrying a shed-load of hurt.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Dec 30 2015 12:17 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Hello Riley,

 

Thank you for sharing this story with us.

 

Si is my favorite character in this story. It kills me to see him so hurt. I too hope that he can get through this misery without hating Toby. They are both quirky characters; while very different, they compliment one another nicely. I think Toby really cares for Simon, even if he is selfish and careless. Let's hope he learns from this terrible mistake.

 

It is very nice to see Elliot again. He has certainly grown more confident since we last saw him. I really liked when Luke asked about the wrist band.



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Elliott has been drifting on the edges for a while, but he’s definitely hit the ground running with Luke now. As for Simon, he’s really struggling. Will he be able to find his way through? Will he even be able to face Toby, even if his boyfriend try to make amends?

 

Thanks for the review, Oxala, and a Happy New Year to you
Riley
PS Re your question about what happened to Sam…does that happen? Mmmm…will leave you to figure it out!

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Dec 29 2015 03:07 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

Ahhhh, I finally made the connection that Elliott was the main character of ISH! I had read it quite a while ago, but English Teen went on so long without him showing up that I forgot, and now he's taken me by surprise!

 

I am really excited about what Luke's new budding friendship with Elliott means for his development, and ultimately happiness, but I'm also worried that he's not emotionally mature enough yet to help Elliott with his (probable) emotional baggage. Fingers crossed?

 

I'll have to read In Safe Hands again soon so I can get better context of the coming chapters, but I am really enjoying this story lately. English teen is really picking up pace!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello my friend, and thanks for another review! ISH and ET were always going to be the same story, but Elliott was important enough to have his own backstory. Elliott has also arrived into ET a few years on from his own traumas, and has grown a lot in the intervening time. I would say that he was confidant, but under the surface there is still a history that affects him.

 

Happy New Years to you.

 

Riley

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Dec 28 2015 12:41 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Simon isn't even close to beginning a recovery. In fact, he's still on a downward spiral.

 

I have the feeling things are going to be much worse for him before they begin to get better. Poor Simon, but poor Simon's family, who won't be able to understand what's really going on. Simon is nowhere near ready to explain. Helicopter mom has the attitude to make it all even worse.

 

Only Luke, with perhaps insight from Eliot, stand a chance to break through.

 

Good chapter Riley! It revealed a lot.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Some really astute perceptions, Skinny. It looks like Simon is going to try to keep a lid on his feelings…bad news of course, because his anger and sense of betrayal is going to start surfacing in other ways.

 

Will Luke be able to help. Maybe, though he’s a bit consumed with his own issues right now with Elliott on the scene. Somebody needs to get Simon talking. Toby? Helicopter mum? Neither seem that good an option!

 

Happy New Near to you!
Riley

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Dec 28 2015 11:08 AM

(Chapter 57 Review)

you have to feel sorry for simon. not only does he have the injuries but his best friend and boyfriend got carried away and did it to him. that sort of leaves him with nothing.(apart from his loving family of course). instead of calling for toby to be ground up and discharge on the dirt, i would like for the two of them work out the great wrong that was done to simon. what happened was serious and must be handled that way.but simon did at first agree. i happen to like toby and his mother and would not like them to disappear from the story. i don't think the two boys can work out this predicament them self. who would help? and is toby going to visit either in the hospital or at home? that would be very interesting.
riley, thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, it’s really hard to see Simon feeling so low. You almost want him to get blazing angry - at least stuff might get dealt with then. However, I can’t see that happening anytime soon.

 

At some point he’s going to have to face Toby, and I think that scares him too. Is there any hope for the two of them? I dunno…it would take a miracle or at least a lot of help.

 

Happy New Year to you, and thanks for the review
Riley

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Dec 28 2015 07:06 AM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Ahhh, poor child, I hope that he does not slip into despair. Simon is such a lovely soul, to have this done to him is deplorable. Let's hope that his big brother is astute enough to discover the cause of this and provide the support Si needs. The brothers love one another deeply, I suspect even more than they've ever thought.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Dughlas, and a happy new year to you!

 

The big question is whether Simon is going to start talking or whether he’s going to close down. Will Luke be able to look beneath the surface and find a way of helping, or is he more consumed with the new guy on his own horizon?

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Dec 27 2015 11:25 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Poor Simon - he must feel he has been completely betrayed by the person he loved. And he has been given the operation he was determined to avoid. Frankly, I hope Luke beats Simon's "boyfriend" to the consistency of toothpaste!



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Simon is in a bad way and is going to struggle to come to terms with what has happened. Will he be able to see any good in it and be able to move on? And what’s going to happen when he next sees Toby?

 

Happy New Year Ozymandias
Riley

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Dec 27 2015 10:49 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Authors prerogative to resolve nothing. Just want the next chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lol! On to the next chapter, and a Happy New Year!
Riley

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Dec 27 2015 06:33 PM

(Chapter 57 Review)

Another chapter that brought tears to my eyes. I feel so bad for Simon. As he said at the end, he has lost so much. You made me feel all of his lost innocence. This story is getting better and better and it seems
there is so much more left to tell.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It’s hard to see Simon so down. You just want to give him a hug and help him to talk it through. Is anyone going to be able to manage that?

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Dec 23 2015 02:32 PM

(Chapter 56 Review)

probably read ISF couple years ago. Struck by how sensitive Elli & Miguel were. You really felt for them and then ending really hurt. When started ET there was reference to ISF but I forgot what it was about. Then after this chapter went back and reread. Still hurts. Now you can't let Luke hurt Elli, that would be too much. What are you going to do with Ryan.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Now this is the real problem that's brewing Randy. We know a whole lot about Elliott from ISH, just as we do about Ryan. Is someone going to get hurt here?
Riley

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Dec 21 2015 12:16 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

Funny how Elliot is the sophisticated one here. It is embarrassing that I lived in Sevilla for three years on my boat and couldn't do the Spanish. Maybe I am a stealth Brit.
This was a nice time getting the boys better introduced but of course there are a lot of plates being juggled. As always waiting for more. Happy Hollidays.



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Steve! I didn't even realise you were a Brit! You're right though - we Brits are rubbish at languages. Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Dec 21 2015 12:07 AM

(Chapter 55 Review)

YES! Elliott is back and with a connection to Luke. Have waited 2 years to find out a little more about Elliott. Although I read on with a little apprehension knowing your stories can have a very sad ending.



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Indeed Elliott is back - actually he started appearing way back when Luke was in the opticians getting glasses for his dad. It’s true Elliott comes from difficult personal e’s in a experiences - and now he’s in a mix with Luke and Ryan. Is someone going to get hurt?

 

Happy New Year!
Riley

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Dec 20 2015 01:05 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

Not much to say, but this was a great chapter to read. It is good to see Elliott and his family and find out how he survived everything that happened. I am sure it will be a story to tell. That ending brought it all back of why they are there and what Simon has gone through. I think Ryan has competition.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Peethree. Ryan may have competition, but I'm not sure Luke will be any forthcoming with Elliott than he ever has been with Ryan...unless something changes...

skinnydragon%s's Photo

Dec 19 2015 11:26 PM

(Chapter 56 Review)

A great chapter Riley!
ISH was posted before I was on GA, so after this chapter, I've been trying to catch up. I'm about half way through and already stuff in ET is making mores sense, although the stories can certainly stand alone.

 

"If there had been somebody to blame for Simon’s trauma other than his brother himself, he would have gladly beaten the fucking bastard to a pulp!" -- Haha ...Toby better hope Luke never finds out!
"Te gusta, verdad" Ha! Sam's sure got thier number. Maybe Elliot will be the catalyst for Luke. He needs a little shove.

 

Thanks for this chapter Riley!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Skinny. Yes, it was probably a good thing Luke's Spanish is non-existent. Not sure how he would have handled that. Glad to hear you're enjoying ISH!

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Dec 19 2015 05:29 PM

(Chapter 56 Review)

Thanks Riley for another great chapter. The banter, and bonding, between Elliot and Luke is quite enjoyable. I suspect Elliot's history is just a few of Luke's prying (or innocently curious) questions away - if so, it'll be interesting to see how Luke responds, given his internal conflict of finding Elliot so attractive yet being afraid of admitting his same-sex attraction to anyone in real life.
The aftermath of Simon being circumcised isn't going to be pretty, especially how staunchly opposed he was to the procedure. So, so many issues there, not least will be a feeling that Toby has permanently robbed him of something so private by his mindless, vile actions. I'm also guessing it won't be too long until Becky continues her grossly inappropriate blurting and spreads the word wide and far. The guy had better develop a strategy for dealing with unwanted questions and attention. I really hope that before long, he can put this behind him and get on with being a kid, but I dare say that'll be some time away yet.
So many different pots on the boil in this story, and I'm so eager to get a look in at each of them - no doubt you have an update coming for each (how's Jacko going with cracking on to Ryan at tennis camp, for example?).
Thanks again, and please keep up with the engaging, captivating writing.
Milo



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Milo. I agree with you, Simon is in a bad place on all kinds of levels. Will he confide, or will he shut everyone out? We already know a lot about Elliott through ISH, so there's no question where he's coming from. But will Luke catch on - and I'd he does, will he do anything about it? And then there's still Ryan. Not sure I can really see him going for Jacko, but stuff can happen...

 

Lots of choices, and soon they'll be back at school!

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Dec 19 2015 12:14 PM

(Chapter 52 Review)

An Embarrassing dinner night with a teacher turned out to be an exiting one. I felt like a normal and formal dinner with someone old rather than new. I never knew the situations about a step father, not even seen near me. :lol:

 

About Daniels and Grace!!! We want to know what You think or plan to do. After all its Your story... :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi MGK. So far so good...it seems to have been a nice meal. Toby has behaved and, it seems, got on well with Daniels. We'll have to see how the rest of the day goes!

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Dec 19 2015 08:42 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

What a great chapter! It's so nice to see ET and ISH intersect for more than a passing glance like before. I am quite unsure whether I root for Luke and Elliot or Luke and Ryan at this point. You have made them all likeable and believable at the same time. And they sure need a little more in the love department.
As for Simon, I do hope he confides in Luke some time soon but a ward full of other kids might not be the best place.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Bleu. Thanks for your review. Having Elliott in the mix sure stirs things up for Luke, but who knows where it will lead or with whom!

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Dec 19 2015 08:30 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

I've been a fan of Elliott's since "In Safe Hands" first appeared and was waiting for him to arrive.

 

Toby is in for a world of hurt when Luke finds out just what happened to Si.



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If Simon feels able to tell that is... And yes, we now have Elliott in the field. It could get interesting!

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Dec 19 2015 07:17 AM

(Chapter 56 Review)

great chapter. You had mentioned earlier that you would link up with In Safe Hands. You are insufferable though,if you arrant ending on a cliff hanger then you are teasing us with possibilities. Where is this going, is Luke going to fall for Elliott and leave poor Ryan high and dry or will Elliott be disappointed or... I guess we will find out in time.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Insufferable? That's new - never been called that before, though I do enjoy keeping readers guessing. So is someone going to be disappointed...or is it something else altogether?

 

Riley

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Dec 12 2015 09:59 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

I must say I was waiting for the social worker to show up regarding the abuse. Hope that was dodged. Elliott is a cool new direction. Not sure we need too many more directions.
Since it was mentioned above I will put in another bug for, Against the Machine. Pax



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Steve. I think Simon was pretty cleaned up before he went to the hospital, and I doubt that Toby would confess anything to his mom quite yet - he probably doesn’t even realise where Simon is.

 

You knew Elliott was coming, Lol!

 

As for ATM - as I said to jdvr, let’s see if there’s still anyone ready by the time we get to the final chapter of ET!

 

Thanks for your review,
Riley

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Dec 12 2015 07:29 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

I am so happy that you are writing again and have some of your works published. I was wondering when or if Elliot would play a larger role in the story. This last chapter was an excellent read. Poor Simon, and will he tell the truth about Toby?

 

BTW, is anything happening or going to happen with Against the Machine?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Ah…Against The Machine… Not sure yet. My first goal was to finish ET and get the final chapter published. We’ll have to see how that goes. If there are still people reading by they, then maybe!

 

Will Simon tell all about Toby…I doubt it, at least for now, but who knows…

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Dec 12 2015 06:46 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

Great couple chapters! Things seem to really be moving along again now, what with the serious problems between Toby and Simon, all of Simon's penis issues, and the introduction of Elliot to Luke's life. I am excited and hopeful that Elliot or possibly Simon's problems will evoke some sort of change in Luke or Luke's life.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there! It will be interesting to see how all this affects Luke - especially the arrival of Elliott. Have you read Elliott’s story yet ‘In Safe Hands’?

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Dec 12 2015 02:31 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

A great chapter Riley!

 

i wonder if any of the medical team noticed Simon's posterior condition, assuming there was at least some damage.

 

Perhaps it will be Elliott, rather than Ryan, to draw Luke 'out' - an intriguing and potentially complicating possibility. :o

 

Another interesting chapter in a very interesting story!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I’m guessing not when it comes to Simon’s backside. Simon did have a shower after he got home, so I think he would have been cleaned up - that and the hospital were probably more worried about what was around the front!

 

Elliott is definitely one to watch!

 

Riley

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Dec 12 2015 12:22 PM

(Chapter 55 Review)

How I feel so badly for Simon. Perhaps he'll be fully out of pain, eventually. But the scars of the day will last a very, very long time. For Luke, he's made a new friend, and investigating Elliot promises to be a lot of fun. Looking forward to more!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. A bad day for Simon for sure…and tomorrow might not be any better. Elliott is somebody to watch - have you read his story?

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Dec 12 2015 08:37 AM

(Chapter 55 Review)

I feel sort of guilty that it has taken me until chapter 55 to tell you how much I am enjoying this story. It's very well plotted with a wonderfully realized cast of characters. I hope the story goes on until Simon graduates from college!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

A very thankful hello to you! Anyone who reads and reviews the tale is a real boost to me, and the more so if it's a first review from a long-term reader! So thanks for this , and I hope you'll come back with more as the story progresses.

 

Riley J

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Dec 08 2015 08:36 PM

(Chapter 52 Review)

Well, I'm finally trying to catch up with one of my favorite stories!

 

I think the dinner (lunch?) went rather well. :) I think the four of them were very relieved. lol

 

I definitely agree with Skinny; I like the connection that Simon and Grace have. I think it's the type of connection you can't have with your own mom.

 

Onto the next one! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lisa! Brilliant to hear from you as always! Dinner did go well, but then…well, I guess you’ll have to see. Your right about Simon and Grace. Often teens can get on better with adults who aren’t their own parents.

 

Thanks for your review.
Riley

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Dec 07 2015 09:26 AM

(Chapter 54 Review)

A heavy chapter. You describe it like you have experienced it yourselve?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Joey. I’m relieved to be able to say that no I haven’t experienced anything quite like that! I don’t think any of us would want to.

 

Thanks for your review - it’s great to hear from you.
Riley

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Dec 05 2015 08:15 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

WOW! Talk about having you on the edge of your seat. Typical mother behavior on Lucy's part. I rather to 1000+ things rather than try to calm a distraught mother. Sounds like Simon has a rough road ahead of him.



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Thanks for the review. Yep - a rough road behind and ahead for Simon. Let’s hope he recovers quickly.
Riley

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Dec 05 2015 07:41 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

Youch!!! Simon's distress translated into reader's tears at this end. Whatever the outcome for him, I do hope he's promptly given some pain relief - and by some stroke of luck, avoids the Spanish Inquisition from his parents as to how this happened.
Loved the used car negotiations, Riley - thanks for the light humour in an otherwise uncomfortable chapter. My first car was a Volvo too. :-)
Cheers,
Milo



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Hey there again. You gotta love a Volvo! Thanks for the review Milo.
Riley

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Dec 05 2015 06:41 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

My heart goes out to Simon, maybe he should have listened to the Doc in the first place and had the op like his brother. I'm sure it would have been a lot better for him in the long run. Paraphimosis sounds eye-wateringly painful. Ouch! Lucy seems a little paranoid to me and should understand that at their age, her sons would probably prefer her not to keep demanding to see their willies. She dosen't really understand anyway. She should have trusted Luke to examine Simon's dick, he would have handled it a lot better. Excuse the pun.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Dodger, and thanks for your review! Yes, perhaps he should have listened to the Doc. For sure, he shouldn’t have listened to Toby! Lucy is just being a mum, and I don’t think in the circumstances that she was just going to stand back and do nothing!

 

Riley

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Dec 05 2015 06:17 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

I knew it was going to turn out terrible for Simon, and his mind hasn't even been able to process the rape yet. The pain and complications which brought him to ER are focusing his attention. When the rest hits him, being 'out' is going to seem trivial. Unless he shuts sex down completely.

 

His family has no idea the depth of damage he's endured.

 

A good (bad) chapter Riley!



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Oh dear - what have we done to the poor kid, and what will happen when he gets past anger to something else?

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Dec 05 2015 02:39 PM

(Chapter 54 Review)

Poor Simon! I suspect this won't end well for him, I wonder if he's going to have an emergency circumcision he won't want. No doubt he's going to be outed to his parents too, it's going to be a very stressful to for him.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Jagboi - and thanks for your review. If Simon’s parents believe that the Paraphimosis is an outcome of the stretching tool, then maybe he won’t be outed. It doesn’t make the rest of it any better though!

 

Riley

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Dec 05 2015 08:39 AM

(Chapter 54 Review)

How very, very, terrifying for Simon. The pain just amplifies the fear, and the fear reinforces the pain. You do marvelously at characterizing the reactions and painting the emotions of Geoff, Luke and his mother. The reckoning will come later, and that fear will further tear into poor Simon. Toby really did a number on him, and I fear it will put Simon off any kind of healthy relationships for a long time to come. This is an excellent chapter, and I thank you for it.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review Parker. It was quite a rocky ride down to the hospital! You’re right, I think you have to wonder how this is going to impact Simon in the long run. Let’s hope he can get through it.
Riley

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Dec 05 2015 08:04 AM

(Chapter 54 Review)

Another great chapter. I feel so bad for Simon and the family. You capture so well all the emotions of the family members. I know there will be so much more to come for all, including more tears from me.



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More to come - and some surprises too I think!
Thanks for reviewing.
Riley

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Nov 28 2015 11:35 PM

(Chapter 53 Review)

Thanks for another great chapter, Riley, even if it was quite dark. Poor, poor Simon - that's the last thing he would expect from someone he's so close to. Even before it happened, I was wondering where the warmth and tenderness in their exchange was - wouldn't that be more Simon's style? Toby is clearly troubled - as others have pointed out, not only to be so offbeat as to be fantasising about somebody else, as if the dude he was with wasn't even there with him, but the way in which he violated Simon is utterly appalling - not only the effective rape, but the 'unhooding', too; it was all so wrong. I do hope Simon is able to talk to, and be comforted by, his older brother - but even that isn't going to be enough to make him feel ok. I wouldn't be surprised if he can no longer trust or even respect Toby, at least not for a very long time. I bet the youngster also wishes he could confide in his parents just for the emotional support, but I guess there's no way he could, given the subject matter.
Very keenly looking forward to your next instalment. Thanks again.
Milo



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Milo. No, it was never Simon’s ‘style’, and whatever feelings he had for Toby are going to be torn to shreds. There’s something about Toby that’s a little disturbing and whatever is driving him isn’t good. Trust Toby? No. Get help from Luke? Maybe. Confide in his parents? No a chance!

 

Thanks for the great review.
Riley

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Nov 28 2015 12:51 PM

(Chapter 53 Review)

It was so bad in so many ways. And it's only going to get worse.
Simon is traumatized, possibly injured. If Luke pries the truth out, heaven help Toby.

 

Toby has had issues all along. You've certainly given us enough warnings Riley. But as readers, we usually assume main, likable characters always come through. You've showed us not to make that mistake with a few characters in this story.

 

You'd think we'd learn! :rolleyes:



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I don’t think anyone is perfect, Skinny. Most of us have our dark side, and try to ignore a cupboard carrying the odd skeleton! At best, Toby is damaged stock, and you could make a case that he can’t help how he is. Poor excuse though, isn’t it! And, as you say. if Luke finds out, heaven help the guy!

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Nov 28 2015 09:51 AM

(Chapter 53 Review)

Poor Simon. It was all fun and games, and then he got very badly hurt. He said no, but was in no real position to enforce his wishes. And Toby really didn't get it, or intend to get it. Him fantasizing about another boy while prying open his own boyfriend speaks volumes about where he is right now. So different to Simon. Can Luke be of any help or support to Simon now?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker! You’re right, Toby didn’t get it - or possibly didn’t even intend to get it. Honestly, I’ve always wondered why those two are together, and I think Simon is coming to that conclusion just now, too!

 

The question is, will Simon tell Luke? I don’t think he’d say anything to his parents, but he might his brother. If he could do that, I think it would really help.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Nov 28 2015 09:47 AM

(Chapter 53 Review)

I have to say, I really used to like Toby, but in the last few chapers I began doubting if he really was a nice guy. In the course of this chapter I began to dislike him, he displayed a personalitiy I cannot approve - extremely selfish, disregarding of others feelings and opinions, very pressuring and singleminded.
But regarding all the other chapters I am not ready yet to write him off, but that can only be avoided if he realizes his mistake and changes. I also think he won't realize them on his own.

 

I only hope Simon didn't hurt himself, when his foreskin was forced back and will ne able to process the event



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

While there is a lot to like about Toby, he definitely has a dark side. It’s not new either - it’s always been there, but it’s only as he’s begun pushing out the boat now that he has Simon that a lot of the previously hidden traits are beginning to show through.

 

But can he change? And more to the point, can Simon ever forgive him?

 

Who knows, but thanks for the review!

 

Riley

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Nov 28 2015 09:02 AM

(Chapter 53 Review)

Wow! The previous chapter was such a high with the dinner going so well and now everything ends so poorly for Simon and Toby. You weaved in some of Toby's issues well with the flashbacks to his earlier treatment that seems like he was dominated and his watching and fantasizing about Ryan's hang. Really good chapter that I hope Simon recovers from, but I am not sure how soon. What is to come? Toby is so unpredictable.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Peethree! Originally, it was going to be all one single chapter, but it started getting long and my editor and I decided that we should break it up, so that there is a good, followed by a real ugly. Toby has always had issues, damaged by his own experiences when he was a kid. Once you weave in his creative imagination, it becomes a potent mix. Whatever happens now, it’s not over in all kinds of ways…just not good ones!

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Nov 28 2015 07:50 AM

(Chapter 53 Review)

Not good, not good at all. Toby seems unaware that he just raped Simon. His earlier experience left him damaged and there are issues he needs to resolve. I think we may have just read the beginning of the end of their relationship.



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I think it happened without either of them thinking it was that (i.e. rape), but I wonder how long it’s going to take for Simon to begin to see it in that way? Even if it weren’t the end for them, it’s sure going to be a long way back.

 

Thanks for the review Dughlas

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Nov 22 2015 03:24 PM

(Chapter 51 Review)

I loved reading about the barbecue!

 

I do agree with Milo when he mentioned Jacko and Ryan. I also noticed that Jacko is trying to insinuate himself between Luke and Ryan. Luke's already getting a little annoyed, but wait till he finds out Jacko wants Ryan the same way Luke does! Maybe Luke should think about going to their camp also, if for no reason but to keep an eye on Jacko! lol



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

LOL! Jack is so easy to read, he’s going to have to be careful, I think, Lisa! Thanks for another review - they’re always welcome!
Riley

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Nov 22 2015 02:44 PM

(Chapter 52 Review)

A nice, more intimate, chapter following the bigger busier ones.
It wouldn't surprise me if Daniels already has the boys figured out. If not, I'm sure he would be cool with it. Instead of Grace 'telling' him, it would be better if the boys did some small thing to make him realize, if he hadn't already. It would be better than a big announcement.

 

Riley, you painted the connection between Simon and Grace so well. Also her ability to use Simon to keep Toby under control. :)

 

Great chapter Riley! Now about Luke... ;)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks again for another the review Skinny. I actually doubt that Daniels is that clued up. he teaches at an all boys school, so is naturally only ever going to see same-sex friendships as normal day to day stuff, and nothing unusual. Now about Luke…well, we’ll have to see!

 

Riley

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Nov 19 2015 06:59 AM

(Chapter 51 Review)

A fine day with friends and different kind of pairs and all. It simple, neat and I know You worked a lot. I liked it.

 

But, when are You going to give a 'Luke and Ryan' shot for Us. I was eagerly waiting for that. :)



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A shot for Ryan and Luke…is that ever going to happen? And if it does, is it going to be how you think? One thing I can promise - it won’t be boring!

 

Thanks for the review MGK

 

Riley

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Nov 18 2015 11:47 PM

(Chapter 51 Review)

Yes, indeed, but painfully slow. College--no less?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Napaguy. College seems a long ways away. Maybe that feels safe to Luke - but maybe he isn’t going to be given that luxury?

 

Riley

milotin%s's Photo

Nov 18 2015 03:16 PM

(Chapter 51 Review)

Thanks Riley for another great chapter, and especially for a back to back treat. It seems there are nuances and dynamics developing between many different characters now, each with a little mystery about how the development will pan out. For example, Owen and Olly (that's especially interesting), Stacey and Luke (will Luke be honest with her, and will it help him to confide in someone?), Jacko and Ryan (I want to say Jacko should keep his eyes off Ryan, but that's none of my business) and of course Simon (one of my favourite characters) and Toby and Mrs Skerrit. Credit to you for getting so much going on, with such flow and consistency and a "down to earthness" about it all.
I'd love to hear from Ryan's perspective some time - no doubt you have that planned for us all. :-)
Thanks again for the brilliant work.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Owen and Olly - well there’s an unlikely pair if you ever met one! Jacko is definitely showing signs of eyes for Ryan, though I don’t know what Ryan will do with that. Someone’s going to get hurt if he’s not careful.

 

If you like Simon, then the next few chapters are going to keep your attention!

 

Thanks for the review and the kind comments!

 

Riley

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Nov 15 2015 08:58 AM

(Chapter 50 Review)

Hi Riley.
This was a busy chapter with lots of different avenues to take.
Is the story still set in and around 2008/9 ?
You have given Simon the chance to remain intact unlike Luke, but when Luke went to have his SmartKlamp fitted Dr Tiberius for one moment while waiting for the anesthetic to take effect on Luke's dick thought Luke may have been able to stretch the skin, was this the same method Simon now has?? but its good to give options on medical methods.
Toby, Mmmm hard to put a sticker on the boy, seems he gets bored easily and can be very dismissive to others including Simon. I wonder if this all stemmed from his problems he had when he lived in Sarasota and his friendship with Dillon.
It may even be the reason his what seems to be a growing interest in BDSM is coming from, his ability to cause pain and humiliation for others how he had pain and humiliation caused to him though be it not fully sexual then, is now turning that way with Simon.
Simon on the other hand has love for Toby, whether its a first love or the start of something else remains to be seen as both are still in high school and as we all know things change the older we get, but I also see a jealous and troubled streak in Toby that Simon will not allow or to hold more than a curious interest in his BDSM games as to be honest Simon is to "nice" for anything to heavy.
You seem to have moved away from the lax attitude of the teaching facility at the Academy after Ry's hang, true the kids are scrapping as a sign of solidarity but the staff still have gone unpunished.
Like many others have commented on, Luke seems totally closeted in his attitude about Ryan over the last few chapters and in fact the last few chapters have opened for more people to enter so pushing Luke/Ryan to one side.
It will take a lightning strike to get Luke out of the closet unless he is forced out, either by force from a third party or from a bout of maybe jealous anger aimed at Ryan.
I would like to see a bit more interaction with the older folk, will this happen? I know Ry's dad is a shit and is a drain on the lives of Ry and his Mum but with her parents in the picture this could work in both their favors if Ry's dad was taken care of.
Simon and Luke may be typical brother's, fight have there own friends but at the end of the day they both help each other out and they can talk to each other so drawing them closer, maybe Luke should use Simon as a shoulder to cry on and reveal his feeling for Ryan.
Great story, look forward to the continuation of this chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the full review Jeff!

 

So yes, the story at this point is 2008. Sometimes stretching is an option for tight foreskins, but it really depends on the age and the severity of the condition. Well remembered - Tiberius did have another look at that for Luke, just to confirm in his own mind that there was no other option than surgery.

 

You’ve got it right with Toby. Maybe like all of us, his past affects his present, and the whole leaning towards BDSM games comes from his experiences with Dillon, confused by the agony of humiliation he suffered under his hands. Simon doesn’t like it and, though he loves Toby, none of it bodes well.

 

Luke and Ryan continue to stay at a distance and, like you say, a lightening strike is needed. Perhaps they’ll never connect, or perhaps it’s coming…who knows, but something has gotta give soon! And if it does, hold onto your hat!!

 

Riley

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Nov 14 2015 11:58 AM

(Chapter 50 Review)

This is an informative chapter on the developing relationships in the several groups. And it appears to be a kind of watershed moment, when events that fall can have consequences that flow in a bunch of different directions. Wonder how that will work out for Ryan, for Luke, for Toby and for Simon. Looks like Luke is in a waiting / holding pattern...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. Good question. Who knows what will come next and with who…
Riley

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Nov 14 2015 09:45 AM

(Chapter 50 Review)

Ok , need more time on the older group. Some how Ryan and Luke need to become aware that they have more in common than they yet have been able to grasp. Even though neither has any strong interest in the opposite sex.
Keep it coming
Napaguy



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They do seem to be managing to remain in the dark! I guess with the likes of Stacey and Mel in the mix, neither is even considering that the other has no interest in girls.

 

Thanks for the review on this one!
Riley

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Nov 13 2015 02:38 AM

(Chapter 49 Review)

It's been a pleasure rejoining and catching up with this story. It is fairly heartbreaking to read a well written and engaging e-fic, only to discover it's not been updated for quite some time, and may not be again.

 

On the other hand, the surprise and delight of seeing an update just about makes up for it. These last few new chapters have been very, very good. In particular, I find myself incredibly engaged when Ryan is the narrative focal point. His emotional and life conflicts are complex and powerful, and I can really feel for him.

 

Luke, on the other hand, has succeeded in annoying me on multiple occasions now, in the way he seems content to just watch things happen and never take action, either for himself or for others. He has become something of an observer character, through which the problems and turmoils of other characters are reflected - a literary device I can understand, but don't exactly love.

 

Actually, I wouldn't mind if his... idleness was actually something he was aware of, and struggled with (it caused him problems, or he regretted it.) Yet, it seems almost as if he has no idea that he is living his life like a side character. His regret over his inaction during Ryan's hang, a guy he supposedly had at least some degree of feelings for, was really understated and shallow, or so I thought.

 

These are all just my impressions, and don't get me wrong, I really do enjoy reading this novel. I would not be surprised if, in fact, all of these things I've complained about are actually deliberate on your part, a piece of a greater scheme for an upcoming dramatic or emotional payload. Even if they are not, I'm sure you have interesting things in store.

 

Hope you are doing well, and eagerly awaiting more!

 

-Shinoai



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Shinoai. Glad to hear that you’re back with the story and delighted to read your great review!

 

I think you hit the nail on the head with the perception that Luke is quite distant in many respects. It’s not just a feature of a person who’s something of an outsider (a Brit living in America), it’s also because he’s never really had to fend for himself in life or faced much in the way of difficulties or failure.

 

Ryan on the other hand is complex, but solid. He knows who he is and finds ways of coping well with his difficult life. However, I think we’re just beginning to see that Luke realises he can’t keep sitting on the fence.

 

Again, thanks for the review - and I hope you’ll add more as the story progresses!

 

Riley J

Lisa%s's Photo

Nov 11 2015 12:37 PM

(Chapter 49 Review)

So good to see Stacey and Owen again! Maybe even Olly too...eh, maybe not. lol

 

I was sort of surprised to see Simon and Toby at the BBQ; do freshmen always hang out with the older kids? I mean, I know mine did, but that was mainly b/c the whole wrestling team always hung out together as a group, even JV. But as I always say, the more the merrier! :lol:

 

Great chapter, Riley! Looking forward to the next one! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Next chapter should be up soon, Lisa!

 

Don’t forget that this cookout was arranged by both Todd and Mason, so they both brought their own friends from their separate years. Still plenty of time left in the day for things to warm up!

 

Riley

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Nov 10 2015 07:39 PM

(Chapter 48 Review)

I'm thankful Simon doesn't need the surgery (right now at least). That whole SmartKlamp thing with Luke just seemed like such a pain in the ass. I hope Si will have fun with his stretching tool! lol

 

And of course I agree with everyone else who said Luke is a great big bro! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

A massive relief all round I think, Lisa. Now stretching is on the menu - and let’s hope Simon decides to forgive Toby. Luke was pretty cool too - he seems to have a good head on him (pun unintended!) Lol!

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Nov 10 2015 04:08 PM

(Chapter 47 Review)

OH EM GEE! Poor Simon!! What's he gonna do?? He can't possibly dye his pubes back to natural, what's he gonna do? Oh how embarrassing! lol He's sure to be pissed at Toby now! haha

 

Can't wait to see how this plays out. Snicker, snicker.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You’re right - sorely pissed off! Toby maybe pushed it too far this time!

 

Thanks Lisa!

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Nov 07 2015 03:29 PM

(Chapter 49 Review)

What a busy chapter!
All the characters in the play were on stage at the same time. Lots of emotions, grudges and plenty of other things to observe and guess about.
A triangle between out, partially out and totally in the closet. That could be seriously interesting :lmao:

 

Well done, as usual, Riley! :2thumbs: Can't wait for more (or should I say, the other shoe?)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, everyone is on stage. Great fun. The day is still young though, and we’ve yet to see how the characters are going to interact. More coming shortly!

 

Thanks for the review.

 

Riley J

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Nov 07 2015 02:14 PM

(Chapter 49 Review)

Someday, lighting will strike Luke. Maybe Ryan will be there, maybe not. But at least he's had the experience of being happy and delighted with life. For one golden day. Thanks for the busy, detailed and evocative description. More, perhaps? Soon?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Glad you enjoyed this chapter, Parker. I agree with you - lightening needs to strike, but where and how remains to be seen!

 

Riley

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Nov 07 2015 11:19 AM

(Chapter 49 Review)

I've had the impression that Ryan and Luke are close friends. Since they are both closeted why not break them into at least a closeted couple! And



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lost the last bit of your review there Napa, but interesting direction… What’s it really going to take to get them noticing the right things?

 

Thanks for the review.

 

Riley

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Nov 07 2015 09:43 AM

(Chapter 49 Review)

Hi Riley.
Liked the banter of Luke's dad when they took Simon for his exam, so British :rolleyes: , and how Mum was almost ready to do her Florance Nightingale act again seemed disappointed.
Simon gets to play with himself as much as he likes was a joy, talk about a kid in a candy store and I guess he will use that as an excuse and take matter's in hand more than normal and i wonder as Toby is in to a bit of BDSM he will offer a hand. :P
But methinks there could be tears before bedtime with the Luke, Ryan, Jacko triangle :no:
It looks as though Ryan coming out to Jacko has given Jacko a love interest that he never thought of before other than a possible bedtime wank fantasy that he now see's as a possibility and Ryan could also be tempted to reciprocate if the chance as well as something else should arise :blushing: Luke although he may not fully realise it he is starting to show a bit of jealousy even though it was only flipping burgers, he is not to keen on someone coming between him and his mate. :fight:
Maybe Luke will catch Ry and Jacko kissing :pissed: a slanging match ensues and Luke outs himself. Who knows :X
Thanks again Riley for as usual a great chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Jeff, and thanks for a great review!

 

I think you’re right about Toby, we’re beginning to see a side of him that probably has Simon a bit cautious too. Let’s hope they can sort out their differences.

 

Jacko is certainly suffering from a bit of hero worship syndrome with Ryan, that’s for sure! Will it go anywhere? We’ll have to see, though I think it’s yet another thing Luke is totally oblivious to.

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Nov 03 2015 07:01 AM

(Chapter 48 Review)

i like how you show the brothers' care for each other. They can argue and scrap but have a deep bond love and loyalty. Thanks for the chapter



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks my friend! A chapter I really enjoyed writing too.
Riley J

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Nov 02 2015 09:46 PM

(Chapter 48 Review)

Nice chapter with all embarrassing situations and all. Luke proved to be a good brother. But Si's not wanting a Op~ there must be some reason You planned I think. Yeah it did look like a BDCM ~Pubes Waxing. Hahaha...

 

Nice Chapter though... :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Luke did prove to be a good brother to have around when you're in a scrape—or in Simon's case more of a waxing! I don't think he enjoyed any of that at all. It might be a while before him and Toby are talking.

 

Thanks for dropping a note.
Riley

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Nov 02 2015 01:41 PM

(Chapter 48 Review)

Again a very interesting chapter, maybe a bit disappointed about the fact that Si did not get circ'ed .. If he is going to be, hope it'll involve Toby as a special guest !
Actually, i hope that Toby and Si will find to stay together =)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Simon does seem to have got away with it, though it's a real point of tension between him and Toby. Perhaps Si's boyfriend is just going to have to get used to that. I guess we wait and see!

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Nov 01 2015 12:54 PM

(Chapter 48 Review)

Youch! Pubes waxing!!! Sounds like BDSM :o :o :o
Some very funny scenes, throughout Riley! :rofl: An altogether enjoyable chapter!
Somehow I don't see the Simon/Toby dynamics returning completely unaffected by this episode.
Luke was so helpful as a brother,until it was out of his hands :blushing:
Can't wait for the fallout and the next chapter!!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there - thanks for the review on this chapter. I had a lot of fun writing it too! You're right, Luke was pretty cool in managing to head off any disaster, but we'll have to see if Simon can shake off his bad mood with Toby. Summer's coming, so perhaps they'll settle down a bit?

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Oct 25 2015 08:51 PM

(Chapter 47 Review)

I love this series! I am so happy to see you back. I grew up in the southeastern states and I'm very familiar with the Roswell Alpharetta area. Reading your story is almost as good as going home.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I hope I have it right. I like to do a lot of research. Glad you’re enjoying the read, and thanks so much for the review!
Riley

Parker Owens%s's Photo

Oct 25 2015 11:24 AM

(Chapter 47 Review)

Thanks for this chapter. Wonder how Simon is going to handle all this; and can't wait to see the extract from Luke's journal...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Chapter up shortly. Thanks for the review Parker
Riley

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Oct 25 2015 10:02 AM

(Chapter 47 Review)

incredibly funny and sexy too. i figure simon makes a fast run to toby's, or gets lost and forgets the appointment or just mans up with the doctor and his dad. i don't think simon going to take responsibility so its really up to toby and is the washable part is as easy as he described. maybe he could take toby to the drs. and explain its a new fad at his school.
thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

A run for it or forget the appointment. These might be options. Can’t see his mum taking that well, though.
New chapter up shortly, so we’ll see.
Riley

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Oct 24 2015 10:36 AM

(Chapter 47 Review)

OMG. What a pickle. I was thinking he would just have to man up and deal with Tiberius and Dad. But I bet if he talks to Luke he will get really yanked about Tiberius's daughter. Eek. Hope she is off. Suspect Toby is in for it. You really do string it along so well.
Of course as a sailor I am distressed he will not be sailing for a bit. That's why I had mine done in February. Lol. Pax.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Okay - good try. Now we don’t want to be messing up his sailing…I’m guessing that’s a mite uncomfortable?! As always, you’re a star Steve - and thanks for the review!
Riley

Jeff1%s's Photo

Oct 23 2015 12:36 PM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Hi Riley. liked the last couple of chapters, a lot has gone on with Ryan and his life has been a roller coaster but to some extent so has Luke with his feeling's of betrayal towards Ryan for the hang and resulting feelings both have with each other.
Seems Ryan although amazed with the Scraping and its popularity is a bit suspicious that its a fad and many are just going along with it as a joke or from peer pressure.
Joe 's sadness of his own hang and the mental turmoil of his violation hit home on Ryan that while Ryan was a leader of hangs he now realises how traumatic this sort of "joke" can be.
As for Jacko we see a person who is unable to understand his new feeling's who feels he is the only person who has been made this way within a school of macho influenced guys who is terrified his secret could come out and his life made hell (something I know only too well from my own school days.)
Ryan took a huge gamble telling jacko his secret, but it is always easier to talk outside the box instead of inside it with the person you really care for...Luke.
Now Ryan has taken the first step lets hope Luke is the next person he talks to or maybe the wily old Grandparents, who will give him the advice and support he needs.
Maybe Luke needs to drop his straight macho image maybe a slip of the tongue, but whatever it is, these two boys need to get it together.
So the sperm donor maybe getting a promotion? lets hope he gets sent to Afghanistan or Syria and he gets killed, that could open up new story lines involving Ryan with his mum getting back on her feet and controlling her life again.
Thanks Riley, waiting for next chapter with baited breath.;)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

As always, a great review Jeff. I enjoyed writing the scene between Ryan and Jacko, plenty of tension in something that could easily backfire. Will Ryan take it further with Luke? Honestly, I doubt he has that confidence yet. That said, anything can happen in love and war, and we now have the grandparents in play too.

 

Next chapter out shortly!

 

Riley

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Oct 13 2015 02:55 AM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Just a quick note to say thanks for another highly enjoyable chapter, Riley. I'm such a fan of this story; it's always such a joy to read. I love the moment poor Ryan has to make a quick exit from the showers - it's nice to see him enjoying a more "normal" kind of experience than what he's had to endure recently. Cheers, Milo.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, I really think Ryan is getting back on track again. It was hard to see him so down.

 

Thanks for the review, and glad your enjoying the story.

 

Riley

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Oct 11 2015 11:41 PM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Luke studying urology! lol That was funny! :D

 

Great chapter, Riley! :) I'm finally all caught up! Sheesh!

 

I thought Ryan's talk with Jacko went really well, and I'm glad he was able to admit it to Jacko. The whole conversation with Joe was good also.

 

Looking forward to the next chapter, Riley, as always! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Lisa. Glad to hear you're caught up!

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Oct 11 2015 10:30 PM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Ahh the fruit is blossoming. Big step for Ry. If only he could be as brave with Luke. Great how he reached out to Jacko.
I get fearful when you disappear for this long. Take care.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Still here and kicking Steve. Managed to get away on holiday, and Andy, my editor has been chokka too. It was a risky step for Ryan, but I think it gives a sense of how he is changing. Luke is still a step to far though, I think.

 

Thanks so much for the review.

 

Riley

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Oct 11 2015 10:09 PM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Good writing. Now just hoping that Luke now bares his "secret", now that his brother and Ryan have begun opening up. Difficult issues to deal with at the high school level
i enjoy your stories. Keep them coming.
regards
Lenard



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lenard — and thanks for the review. School is almost over—at least for now. I guess we'll see what the summer brings?
Riley

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Oct 11 2015 04:27 PM

(Chapter 46 Review)

Thanks for this chapter. I thought the scene in which Ryan finally admits he's gay to Jacko was well done. Please tell us there is more coming. Please?



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes there is more! Quite a lot more actually. Belt up, it's going to be quite a ride!
Riley

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Sep 21 2015 05:27 AM

(Chapter 45 Review)

Another awesome chapter. I haven't been keeping up with all my favorite stories. However, I did read the last five lol and let me tell you Luke and Ryan need to have something happen. :-) at least once. As for Toby's tree house, that was hot. I'm surprised that mum didn't yell them.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Remijay. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Not sure Grace knew what her son was up to. Not sure she would approve either!

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Sep 18 2015 12:58 PM

(Chapter 45 Review)

I definitely agree about another great chapter. The action in Toby's treehouse was awesome. Two young men really getting into each other is great. I imagine that Grace suspected something was going on in the treehouse, but decided to give the young lover's some privacy.
I'm waiting for similar action to occur between Luke and Ryan, but that may take more time.
Thanks again for writing this awesome story.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Not sure if Grace knew or not. She's not daft, so maybe. And Luke and Ryan...well who knows?!

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Sep 17 2015 07:27 PM

(Chapter 42 Review)

I definitley agree that was another great chapter. The proverbial "shit" almost hit the fan with Ryan. He was going to believe the slightly alterer story that Landon and his father had presented to him. Luke really stepped out of his comfort zone to bring the issue to a head. His technique was remarkable.
I definitely hope that the word about the incident will spread and that the "hanging" and the subsequent bashing of Landon will be put on the shelf.
Then, you will deal with the continuing saga of Luke and Ryan.
Thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

And thank you for reading and for the review!
Riley

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Sep 16 2015 02:59 PM

(Chapter 34 Review)

The plot is thickening with both couples--Simon and Toby, as well as Luke and Ryan. Now, I understand the comments about alcohol. I can hardly wait for the next chapter.
As other reviewers have indicated, Grace is really cool. Mother's often know about their son's behavior way before the teen's realize. Grace has noticed the stains in the underwear, as well as the crusty sheets and smell of sex in the air.
I suspect that Luke's mother is aware of the attraction between Luke and Ryan. I can only imagine the reaction when the alcohol is discovered.
I'm waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You’re right, Grace is a real tower of strength for Toby. How much has she noticed? Probably a lot more than they think!

 

As far as Lucy is concerned, I don’t think she really sees anything yet in regards to Luke and Ryan It’s not really on her radar.

 

Hope you enjoy the next few chapters - and thanks for the review!
Riley

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Sep 16 2015 01:32 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Another awesome chapter. The signs are appearing that Ryan really likes Luke. I'm wondering where this will go. Ryan revealed his deep dark secret about beatings by his dad. You could tell that this took a great deal of courage, but also indicates how much he cares about Luke.
What's the comment about Luke and Ryan getting drunk? I don't remember either of them doing any drinking of alcohol. Of course, the inhibitions would go by the wayside. Luke would get his wish for making out and/or sex with Ryan.
Thanks again for writing. I just started reading this story last week, so I'm going through the chapters quickly.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

As you know, Ryan has a definite thing for Luke, so this must have been especially difficult for him. I’ll need to check the ‘drunk’ reference. That might have been an orphan, left over from a bit of a rewrite I did. Thanks for pointing it out. And thanks for the review too.

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Sep 15 2015 10:22 PM

(Chapter 27 Review)

Your readers are on the brink, sitting on the edges of their seats to find out what happens next. I sense some desire for Ryan to get back at the people who participated in "The Hanging". It might not be physical, but he needs to get some revenge for the humiliation.
Luke's accident in Ryan's house may allow them to proceed with their relationship. The suspense to find out if Luke damaged himself with the fall is too much to take, so I will proceed to read the next chapter.
You definitely brought some interesting twists to the story in the last few chapters. I will look forward to unwinding these twists.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Les - great to have you here and to see some really nice reviews from you! It has taken a lot of time to get to this point in the story, with a lot of setup in the previous chapters. But now it starts with a vengeance! Enjoy the ride!

 

Riley

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Sep 12 2015 12:07 PM

(Chapter 45 Review)

Wow! That sure took the pain out of scraping! Haha
Another neat chapter Riley!!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lol! Thanks for the review!
Riley J

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Sep 12 2015 11:36 AM

(Chapter 45 Review)

toby and simon. so great young love. they seem to fit together like ying and yang. (what ever that is.) great fun chapter. thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks! Always great to hear from you.

 

Riley J

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Sep 12 2015 08:50 AM

(Chapter 45 Review)

Another great chapter to add to this very entertaining story. A hot scene in Toby's treehouse, with the action taking place virtually under his Mum's nose!
I just love the idea of it becoming de rigueur for boys at their school to be clean shaven in the pubic region. Bet it will lead to plenty of itching and scratching as the hair begins to grow again...



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review. Not too much itching and scratching, let's hope!

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Sep 09 2015 10:05 PM

(Chapter 44 Review)

LOVED Ryan's grandparents! They are terrific!!! And they're his father's parents? They don't seem like they could give birth to someone like Ryan's sperm donor.

 

The whole scene in the locker room and showers where all the boys were manscaping was so touching. It got me pretty choked up. It's wonderful that they all give a shit, and hopefully nothing like that will happen again.

 

Terrific few chapters, Riley! As usual! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - great to hear from you again!

 

Grands are great, aren't they! Actually, Ryan’s mom is their daughter (not his dad their son). It was because of the army connection that Alexis met - and married - their daughter. We might find out more about that later.

 

Here’s hoping that the whole Hang incident will never be repeated - but then again, if it’s not that, it could easily be something else in a school such as theirs. For now it looks like they are seeing sense.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Sep 08 2015 09:34 AM

(Chapter 44 Review)

Hi Riley, some interesting chapters, I liked Father Kenny, I think Ryan and he will chat again in the not to distant future.
The kids at school finally getting it together and shaving was a nice gesture but I cant see many of them doing it again once the hair starts growing lol.
But the Brigadier and Alice, fantastic is all I can say.
By introducing these characters you have opened the dimensions of the story and are making the story 3D, Father Kenny is not slow on the uptake and I think neither are the Grand parents in fact they may have already noticed how close Ryan and Luke are in such a short time and it will only be a matter of time before the wily old couple see things and will be a power for Ryan.
I would like to see the Gramps meet with Luke's family I am sure things will be a riot with their sense of humor coupled with the British humor.
I am waiting for the family get together at Ryan's and would like to see Ryan's mum more involved.
Did you ever spend time in the US? as you either know your stuff of did a lot of online checking or maybe are you were the "English Teen" ???
Thanks for your time and effort Riley.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff - and thanks again for a really great review. There are a few more characters coming in at this point, and I think you can be sure we haven’t seen the past of the grandparents! They really are a great couple!

 

I visited the USA for sure, but I do a lot of research as well. Am I the English Teen? Well that would be telling. I tell you what - if I ever get asked to do one of the author interviews that pop up in the forum ever so often, you can ask me outright! LOL!

 

Riley J

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Sep 01 2015 10:39 PM

(Chapter 44 Review)

After the last few, nice to have an upbeat chapter. We needed it! However, I'm missing Elliott.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Missing Elliott? Now there’s a big question…and I’m afraid I have no answers for you! Not even a suspicion of a teaser! Yet…

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Aug 31 2015 03:07 PM

(Chapter 44 Review)

Well I have to tell you that I almost didn't read your story. I just started it a few days ago, and found the spelling errors, misused words and errors in context rather offputting. I'm happy to say that I persevered because in spite of the errors (in the early chapters) you write a good story. Once I began reading, I couldn't stop, and now have to wait impatiently for the next chapter(s)! How long do we have to wait for Luke and Ryan to discover each other??



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

All I can say is I’m delighted you stuck with it. You’re right abut the early chapters - I don’t think they’re as smooth as the later ones. I was already part way through the story before I started getting the help of an editor, and I think you can tell! That said, if there are bits that are glaring, do let me know in a PM and I’ll try to correct them.

 

Thanks for reviewing
Riley J

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Aug 29 2015 05:53 PM

(Chapter 44 Review)

What a great chapter. The lucid conversation was so natural and entertaining. It's great seeing Luke and Ryan bond some more, being surrounded by general happiness and good times. Thanks for writing.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review Milotin. I really like writing conversation, particularly between characters that readers know well. It’s fun! Hopefully things are looking up for the pair.

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Aug 29 2015 11:12 AM

(Chapter 44 Review)

Kudos for great story line. I enjoy the sense o closeness developing between Luke and Ryan.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think you’re right, Napa. When friends go through stuff- even bad stuff -it can have the chance to build a stronger bond between them.

 

Thanks for the review.

 

Riley

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Aug 29 2015 09:58 AM

(Chapter 44 Review)

The solidarity of the upper classmates shows the school culture really is changing.
The Grands are refreshing and welcome reenforcements for future events. Nice chapter.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hey there Steve. I really like Ryan’s grandparents too. Will be interesting to see what role they end up playing in the future!

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Aug 24 2015 07:51 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

I've been catching up on my phone with your new chapters. Anytime I'm waiting to pick my kid up, or waiting for food, or whatever, I'm reading the story.

 

I love these new chapters and the whole thing with Luke and Ryan getting trashed and Luke's parents finding out was both funny and sad at the same time. When Luke's dad realized that Ryan didn't do anything on purpose, his heartfelt apology and tears really got me choked up. I love how Luke's parents are so welcoming because Ryan really needs people who he can count on for support.

 

I'm actually reading the next chapter, but I wanted to let you know these new chapters have been great, just like the rest of the story! :) :2thumbs:

 

Oh, just one small thing: I know Luke and his family come from England, so when they use terms we wouldn't use in the states it makes perfect sense. But when I read Ryan's inner monologue, he talked about being so pissed when he was drunk. That didn't sound right to me b/c he would never use that word to describe wasted, drunk, etc. He would use that word to describe if he were angry or frustrated even, but not drunk.

 

I know it's hard for someone to think like an American when he's not from the states. lol I know I'd probably do the same thing w/o even realizing it. :)

 

Anyway...just stopped by to tell you how much I love this story, and I'm so glad you're back, Riley!! :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Lisa! Great to hear from you - it’s made my day!!

 

Oh my goodness - you have no idea how hard it is to write in an American culture! Like you say, I can get away with a lot with the Summers family because of their British roots, but the rest is tough. One of the jobs Andy Gordon (my editor) has to do in the time he has, is try to steer me through all the American colloquialisms.

 

Anyway, glad to hear that ET still has your heart, and thanks for reading and reviewing!

 

Riley

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Aug 23 2015 09:22 PM

(Chapter 43 Review)

Well, I've just finished reading the whole story and had decided to wait till I reached this point to write a review. Great work ya have here! Before I get started with this chapters review, I gotta say that previous chapter really made my day, Luke's strategy was amazing, it felt like a game or something.
Anyway, focusing in this last chapter I'd like to say that there are some interesting messages you have transmitted us in your writing:
The way some guys that had made bad things realized, thought about it and made a change was one of them, showing that there's not bad guys, just guys which do bad stuff... people is not what they do, as long as there's life there are possibilities to change.
The other one is at the end of the chapter in the chat with Damon and, while it might not be as 'deep' as the first one, it is important to our identity as 'gay guys' or any other group to that matter, here you're saying that to 'brand' people and people's actions is wrong. Just because a guy seems to be dressed as a homeless man, it doesn't mean he's gonna steal from you.
This is one of the causes of me giving you those 'likes', you're transmitting your ideas in a great way, through what you love to do. Of course, I don't really need to point out that your style of writing is really compelling and I love the story and the characters.
Keep up the good work!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there my friend. Glad you made it through to the current chapter! You’ll be glad to know that the story is finished, though often new chapters take a week or so to come out because my editor is a totally ruthless *****! Love him to bits - he’s brilliant!

 

Some great insights here. Thanks you.

 

I think that people are always much more complicated than they seem from first impressions - and more so when it’s a limited story. It’s possible to get drawn along by the crowd - and even do bad things - but that’s not necessarily just who you are. People can change. Maybe it’s called growing up?

 

Anyway, thanks for the nice comments. It’s much appreciated.

 

Riley

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Aug 23 2015 08:37 PM

(Chapter 43 Review)

when i think about this chapter I'm a little confused. its like you (riley) saying that a bunch of male adolescents are going to forget about their sexual urges and go where?? there boys and they are in a all boys school and they take a shower each day with each other and there's going to be comments and jibes and kidding and even some contact. like its said never drop the soap in a boys shower. even what they did in shaving each other is not too over the top (as far as I'm concerned. it makes the story more interesting? maybe!). they are going to do things like what they did and also what was done to the little brother. its called growing up. show me yours and I'll show you mine. nothing unusual. and i can't for the life of me think that any of these things are going to have a lasting effect on anyone's personality.
it was a good chapter and i enjoyed it even though it was very thought provoking. that's what writing should be about.
thanks for writing. i look forward to each week and the next chapter. and what happened to simon and toby? if i recall weren't they a little more involved previously. i think that the situation they are in and with tobys mother the other element that make it particularly interesting.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Bill - and thanks for the great insights! ’Never drop the soap in the boys shower’! LOL! Never heard that before!!

 

No of course there’s no way that teen guys at an all boys school are suddenly going to become angels. On the other hand, perhaps the Hang will get dropped. Will something else take its place eventually? Probably.

 

Simon and Toby are still brewing in the background, and I think Simon is in for a few surprises! (PS - don’t tell anyone I said that!)

 

Thanks again,
Riley

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Aug 20 2015 09:29 AM

(Chapter 43 Review)

This chapter (and the last) have been exciting to read. Read together as a pair, they are especially good. I wonder how Ryan feels about the people who seem to be rallying in his defense. It would be nice to get inside his head for a scene.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Parker. Glad you are enjoying the read. I agree, it’s hard to know what Ryan is thinking just now. I suspect that even if he’s cool on the outside, inside he’s still in some turmoil.

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Aug 20 2015 08:40 AM

(Chapter 43 Review)

Obviously Todd went through some serious soul searching off camera. That took some guts and I think showed him in a little different light from the way my mind was moving.
It also showed how easily a bunch of kids can be motivated, as did the original incident in the boy's john. Another great chapter!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It’s true, we’re getting to see a bit more of Todd. I think as all teens grow up their personalities begin to get more defined. You see a lot of ‘pack’ mentality in people, and not just in teens. I think everyone likes to believe that they are their own person, but a lot of the time behaviour is very defined by what their peers are doing. Few people are truly autonomous in that respect.

 

Thanks for the review Skinny
Riley

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Aug 16 2015 08:51 PM

(Chapter 2 Review)

I read the first part of your story some time ago and really enjoyed it, but didn't realize you had continued writing it. Unfortunately, I can't remember where I left off. Hopefully, I can tell by the date. You are a good writer. I'm not sure why I didn't write a review before.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there. Yes, I kind of took a year off, but used the time to completely finish the story. Previously I got to the chapter ’Stitched Up’, but it’s worth the re-read, as I also updated a lot of the earlier chapters. Most were just tweaked so they fitting together better, but also a number had a lot of completely new content added in them.

 

Anyway, thanks for leaving a review - it’s much appreciated.

 

Riley

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Aug 16 2015 03:12 AM

(Chapter 42 Review)

Another great chapter Riley, it was good how Luke stood up for Ryan in the office despite starting off making a balls up of an explanation, but thinking about it, it was a logical start for an embarrassed teen to say to something that a simple statement that he had a dick operation would have been enough but he finally said it.
The school seems to have a VERY lax attitude to having a minors parent or guardian present when dealing with "serious" punishment after all Ryan could have been railroaded in to any situation had Luke not intervened. the same as turning a continuous blind eye to the humiliating acts of abuse that goes on under the noses of all the staff.
I would like to hear more about Ryan's mum, as apart from her being driven to drink and made a submissive woman by her dick of a husband it is after all her money that buys everything and gives Ryan his own financial life style, I feel that as someone from such a wealthy background she would have had an "inbred" self preservation to survive maybe she is a volcano waiting to erupt after years of belittling from her husband could come to a head. I feel that deep down she would like to stand up to him and that she and Lucy would be a formidable force if they ever teamed up.
Its only a matter of time before Luke and Ryan come out, to each other then to their family's, Luke would not have a problem but Ryan? no, his dick of an old man would tear him a new one and it would be nice if Ryan had surprising support from his his own family, and to he honest I cant wait for the two to of them finally get down and dirty with each other. lol lol.
I think Ryan will have learned lessons from this hanging saga and will once again sit on his throne and could with Luke's help champion a new age of school attitude's towards pupil's being treated with more respect from staff etc.
Thanks yet again for a great read.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for such an in depth review Jeff. I think you are right that the Principal made some bad calls. He’s the kind of guy that would want to deal with it himself if he could. Parents are a necessary evil that bring in money, but no more. I’m not sure he was initially looking to throw Ryan out of the school, though with Landon senior turning up, it got more fragile.

 

When it comes to Ryan parents - especially his mom and wider family - stay tuned. But his father? There lies trouble.

 

Some really perceptive thoughts from you here, so thanks again for the review.

 

Riley

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Aug 16 2015 02:47 AM

(Chapter 42 Review)

I have to say, Luke's intervention in the principal's office was absolutely magnificent. What an incredible turn of events to get them all backed into a corner and to back off Ryan - without having to humiliate Ryan with disclosing the infamous Hang. Brilliant writing; thanks Riley.
I'm still absolutely loving this story, just as much as I was a few years back. The boys seem to have gotten through the worst of things - let's hope there's some good bonding to bring them closer than they've ever been before. :-)
Thanks again, Riley.
Cheers,
Milo.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Milo. You’re right, it really was a turn of events and I don’t think Luke could even guess how it might turn out when he stepped into the office. Are they through the worst? Only time will tell…and the next few chapters of course.

 

Thanks for the review
Riley

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Aug 15 2015 11:26 PM

(Chapter 42 Review)

It better not be almost over. What a penis of a chapter. It is so good to have you back continuing this story. Worry about Ry's safety at home as we move ahead. Pax.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

A penis of a chapter? Okay - now that’s a first for any review!

 

Almost over? I hardly think so…

 

Riley

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Aug 15 2015 09:15 PM

(Story Review)

I have to confess, Riley, that this story only slowly grew on me. But like the tides, it doesn't relent. A great chapter. The characters are developing, and I'm addicted. :angry: Keep up the great work. Hey! ...I can admit when I'm wrong!!!!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Skinny. Slow or not, I’m just glad you’re reading! And thank you!!

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Aug 15 2015 12:43 PM

(Chapter 42 Review)

a stinger of a chapter. luke stood up for ryan like a very true friend, cautious with the administrators and landons father and to the point. told only what was necessary to allow landon to accept a lessor penance. thanks for writing and sharing. i too check very often to see if an update is available. and i don't understand why there is always one more chapter that i can't find (as listed on your sign in page)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for another review Bill. I really enjoyed writing this one too - it was a lot of fun! About the chapter numbers, I think it’s probably because I have an authors intro that’s probably counting in the overall numbers too. You’re definitely not missing anything.

 

Riley

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Aug 15 2015 07:11 AM

(Chapter 42 Review)

This chapter was pure enjoyment. Luke was smart enough to turn the tables on a situation that might have ended pretty badly. I'm now looking forward to a bit of quiet for Ryan and Luke.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review Bleu. A bit of quiet for them? Really, lol!

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Aug 15 2015 07:10 AM

(Chapter 42 Review)

Great update. I am glad Luke had a chance to step up for Ryan. Boy, Landon's dad is a jerk just like the son. I almost wanted to see mama bear have to come to the school and protect Luke and Ryan. I check several times a day for updates on this story.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Mama bear was spared on this one - though I think she would have torn strips off them all if she had got involved! I’m trying to update at least once a week, so keep tuned.

 

Riley

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Aug 15 2015 06:17 AM

(Chapter 42 Review)

Wow! Great chapter Riley. I loved it. Luke finally gets his chance to put things right. Well written, it had me hooked from the first paragraph. I see that you're back with a vengeance.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Dodger. Not sure it’s back with a vengeance, but I enjoy writing and even more so when others enjoy it too!

 

Riley

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Aug 12 2015 08:05 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

You play your readers emotions, well done



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Randy. Appreciate the kind words.
Riley

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Aug 11 2015 05:09 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

I love this story and was thrilled to find that it's back again. It makes me so happy whenever you post a new chapter. You're a wonderful writer, Riley. Thank you, and keep up the great work!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks so much!
Riley

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Aug 09 2015 05:06 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

You have a great grasp of parent child dynamics. Very nuanced dialogue between Ryan and the Father as well, letting them each give guidance to each other. Luke and Ryan need to step up and be honest about their sexuality with each other given the story is set in 2015 not 1977. They have been through enough that they should be able to trust each other by now. The relationship part, well let them stumble a bit further :)



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there. Actually, this part of the story is 2008. Luke emigrated from the UK 5 years prior to that. Even 7 years ago - especially in the awkward setting of an all boys school - they would probably be a little more careful about sexuality. And they’re only teens, and stuff like that takes a lot of guts.

 

So, I think they’re going to keep stumbling for now. Let;s hope they stumble in the right direction soon, though!

 

Thanks for the review and encouragement!
Riley

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Aug 09 2015 02:38 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

very good chapter. surprised that the 'father' wasn't the parent and that was a happy development. some humor in that chapter also. thanks for writing and giving us a smile.



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I doubted that anyone would suspect that ‘Father’ wasn’t who you might assume. I kinda liked the ‘Collared’ title for the same reason!

 

Glad you enjoyed that one, Bill.
Riley

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Aug 09 2015 12:33 PM

(Chapter 41 Review)

That was a good surprise. I was not expecting that Father. I cried more than Ryan in this update, but i liked the way Geoff handled things and i hope things are looking up for a while for Ryan.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

A good surprise indeed. I’m not quite sure what would have happened if it really had turned out to be his dad. Badly, I suspect. Geoff certainly came up with the goods. Dad’s can do that sometimes.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Aug 09 2015 11:27 AM

(Chapter 41 Review)

A very good read.. Less mama and a good dad. And the boys are growing together
keep that thought and trend



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there.

 

Even Dad’s can sometimes hit the nail on the head…sometimes. Thanks for the review my friend!

 

Riley

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Aug 05 2015 06:46 PM

(Story Review)

i just want to say....this is one of my favorite stories on this site! Please don't make us wait for next chapter! :) Great job with this story. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Rofern - and thanks for the note. Glad you’re enjoying the story! The next chapter should be up shortly.

 

Riley J

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Aug 05 2015 03:13 PM

(Chapter 40 Review)

Someone is addicted to cliffhangers. That is a little cruel when the next chapter is not a click away. I'm so glad that you and your stories are back. Hopefully Luke's family will be there to protect Ryan from further abuse. You capture the teenage brain where they can't see their way out of a situation and everything looks hopeless regardless of whether they are surrounded by friends.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Sorry about that - though I know you’re going to kill me when you finally get to the next chapter.

 

Thanks for the review - it’s much appreciated!
Riley

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Aug 04 2015 09:01 PM

(Chapter 40 Review)

Ryan escaped a very bad ending. he could have taken a plane to anywhere and then been a boy on the milk carton. after that near miss it looked like he was feeling better about himself, just a little, and would soon have contacted Luke and had an explanation of what had happen that morning. there was some prior history and background between them and Ryan in particular that we knew nothing about. even though its Ryan's father a few sinks away from him it better than an alternative runaway. good chapter. thanks for writing.
bill



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

The poor guy is on a roller coaster, for sure. Still, I think the next chapter is going to surprise you!

 

Thanks for reviewing.
Riley

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Aug 04 2015 08:53 PM

(Chapter 40 Review)

Oops. That should finish sobering Ryan up. So excited to have the story back on track.



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Thanks Steve. Bet you can’t even guess what’s going to happen now!
Riley

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Aug 04 2015 02:21 PM

(Chapter 40 Review)

I hate Ryan feels like his only safe haven with Lucas' family is gone. Once he gives them a chance, i believe Geoff and Lucy will surprise him. Wow. I was not expecting that ending. They both have some 'splaining to do, although me thinks Ryan will have to do most of it. I read this update at work while i should have been working, but it was worth it. Looking forward to all you have in store for us.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You naughty boy - reading at work! I’m honoured!! It sure is a mess at the moment, but how Ryan will find his way out of it is anyone’s guess.

 

Thanks for the review.
Riley

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Aug 03 2015 10:51 PM

(Chapter 39 Review)

Completely different direction from what I expected after all this time. Can’t wait to see what happens.



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I think you'll be surprised!

 

Riley

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Jul 29 2015 03:22 PM

(Chapter 39 Review)

Hi Riley, nice new chapter mate.
Dads, what can we say? Geoff went like a typical dad off the deep end with out all the facts, sounded just like mine did when I was 14 lol.
But in his defense he was only trying to do the right thing as he remembered his own alkie brother and did not want his son to make the same mistakes and go down the wrong path with drink.
Like I said off the deep end,
Luke is trying to protect his mate, but somewhere along the line he will need to sit down with Ryan and hash tings out then maybe the two of them can sit down with Lucy and TALK, something that kids do not seem or know how to do.
I was similar at that age, knew it all but knew nothing.
Geoff is a normal dad, how many times have you been told "Ask your Mum" when you need anything and at the same time you see your dad floundering trying to understand how mum makes things seem so easy.
Geoff character is one I can relate to lol.
However he is now slowly starting to realise all is not well in Ryans life and I am sure we will not hear the last of things until he finds out what terrible home life Ryan has, in fact Geoff could soon be hero worshiped by Ryan and his sons, but that is a story line for you Riley as its your story.
Ryan is so scared of adult males due to his dick of an old man that although he likes Geoff the way Geoff went at him reminded him of his own dad so only natural he ran, lets hope he does not have an accident or something where ever he has gone to.
Lucy well she is a power house the one who wears the pants, I look forward to her involvement.
I still think the school needs to be taken to task over the lack of control with the hazing and hangs etc which the staff must be aware of but seem to turn a blind eye, how many more are needed before someone is seriously hurt with a hang etc?
Great story Riley, nice to be on new ground............
Jeff..



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Jeff. It definitely makes my day when readers take time to write reviews, even just to drop a note that they’re enjoying the tale. But even more, when great questions get asked and issues probed, I really value it. In fact, what often happens is that - for me at least - a good point can end up becoming part of the story! And I think you hit on something really good stuff here, especially your reflections on Dads. I think you’re right about Geoff…he went off the deep end. It doesn’t come out in the story, but he’s also under a lot of pressure at work with the banking crash of 2008. Even the best guys can get bent out of shape now and again.

 

Who knows what will happen with the school, though you can be sure it’s all far from over!

 

Riley

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Jul 29 2015 12:21 PM

(Chapter 39 Review)

It's great to read a new revised chapter after so long, thanks very much. Just a comment that it is rife with typos.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Robert.

 

Oh dear…

 

It’s no excuse, but I use an iPad (DocumentsToGo) a lot and sync chapters with my mac if i’ve been working on them. Maybe it’s just me, but content can get totally screwed up when Apple gets hold of it and just make up stuff! Drives me crazy!

 

Anyway - thank you for reading and for giving me a heads up.

 

Riley

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Jul 29 2015 12:00 AM

(Chapter 38 Review)

Ahhh back to where we left off. Hope the new chapters show up in the "Stories Update" section. I have a feeling many of the original readers still don't know it's back up. BTW great chapter.



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Thanks!

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Jul 23 2015 10:26 AM

(Chapter 37 Review)

i look for your updates every day and very appreciative when there is one is listed.
thinking about ryan and luke and their drinking bout. being teenagers they are growing up and gaining more independence as they age. the drinking resulted in losing that maturity big time. Luke's mother and father took it all from them and they were relegated to little children being put to bed for misbehaving. its going to take a little time before they are trusted again i would suspect. good chapter.
i enjoy seeing the notes from 2 years ago. but where are your readers now? can't you send a email telling your prior readers that your back on gay authors? they are missing a good thing.
thanks for writing,
bill



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the review Bill!

 

I think you’re right, no teens like to be pulled up on their behaviour, and now there will be consequences. Probably a good thing, I think. Nothing worse than when parents threaten something, but never ever do it. Kids learn fast that way!

 

In terms of readers, it’s been a while since I published, so some who were following have moved on…and there’s a great many really good authors that are worth ready on GA. Hopefully, when some new chapters start coming (which they will shortly), a few will come back to check it out.

 

Anyway, thanks again for the kind review.

 

Riley

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Jul 21 2015 10:17 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Hi Riley,
I hope this note finds you well. I just came across this story and loved all of it so far. I love all of the characters and who they are and there quirks. I've noticed it has been awhile since your last posting, will you be adding more? I hope so!
thank you for sharing!



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Buckshot,

 

I'm delighted you found the story and are enjoying it.

 

Yes, I'm updating. It's a long story, but I've been republishing chapters that I temporarily unpublished while I worked on them. From this moment, there's just on left of those, and then something brand new will come!

 

Thanks again for reading and reviewing.

 

Riley

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Jul 19 2015 03:34 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

I do love your writing. I was excited to get to this chapter because i belive this is almost iwhere you left off a few years ago. Such vivid detail when you describe Kieran's hang and Luke's realization of how destructive it actually is to the "victim". I love Lucy, even while she is pissed at Luke and Ryan, she can still jump into crisis mode and help Ryan and maybe protect Luke for the time being.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Peethree. You're right, Lucy is a huge backstop to the story; a typical mum who knows what she wants for her family.

 

You're also right in noting we're almost at where we left of. Two more chapters to go and then it's onto the new!

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Jul 16 2015 08:21 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

hi riley.
great chapter. really hilarious. I'm not sure these boys could drink so much and still walk. a great change of pace.

 

I'm laughing still. thanks for writing

 

bill



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Bill. Ryan's certainly had a skinful...and you can do all sorts of unexpected things in that condition!

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Jul 14 2015 09:52 PM

(Chapter 34 Review)

Riley, just a note to let you know that this story is great and i have been waiting two years to read it again. while the reviews are from another time, 2 years ago, and somewhat baffling at times but obviously you are editing and updating as you go and that great. after all its your story. having read the story before i have been waiting for that little scene between Simon,Toby and his mother. ii want to say its really sweet but that's not what it is. its so private that the reader, at least me, felt that hes listening into a conversation from behind a closet door and that he shouldn't be there. very good writing.
i did want to say something about the hanging that seemed to upset some of your readers. obliviously there some bulling going on here but Ryan participated in doing it to others and he should expect that he was obviously going to get it done to him at some time. there boys, and boys do these things. lets hope Ryan can see that he got what he had given and then get back to Luke. then Luke can tell Ryan that he didn't intervene because of his affliction and that he wanted to see Ryan squirt. after all he is a boy that's very interested in what Ryan looks like down there.
great chapter. looking forward to what happens in the future.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there!

 

Any review for an author and hearing that somebody is enjoying a story is great - but even better when a reviewer asks questions and takes the time to respond in depth. So thank you so much for going the extra paragraph!

 

Yes, it’s true, I am doing quite a bit of updating of the story. As you know, I took a break for a bit, but then have been working on it for about 18 months now. Without the pressure of readers waiting for the next chapter - and the the rushing that comes with that - I managed to settle back a bit and have (for the most part) now finished the whole story. SO then I went back to the beginning and began tidying things up in preparation for republishing. In that ’tidy’ a lot of things were re-written and, I hope, improved. There is also a lot of new content that fills in the gaps and improves the flow, and more than a few bits take the story in a rather different direction! I would certainly say to any who are re-reading like yourself…you should go back to the beginning if you have time, so as not to miss some key bits.

 

Like you note, the Hang is an animal that they have a complicated relationship with. Deep down, I think they all know it’s wrong, but if you give, you get, and it’s only when you get that close do you discover how destructive it can be.

 

But back to Luke and Ryan. The story is far, far from over, so we’ll have to see where it yet leads!

 

Thanks again for your review.
Riley

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Jul 12 2015 01:07 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Nice chapters Ryan is a survivor and shows his trust in Luke telling him how he was and still is abused by his dad, mental abuse is often more painful than physical beatings. But even so Luke can be a bit of a dickhead at times and thinks with his willy rather than the head on his shoulders, but he is young and starting out so some allowances must be made. As for the rest of those who were involved with the hang I would still like to see a bit more payback.
Now.
Tequila, Luke and Ryan getting it on in the bedroom ????? Sorry but 'What ?? i reread several chapters as i thought i missed something important and found nothing about Luke and Ryan getting pissed and getting it on. Then i noticed the reviews where 2013, talk about spoilers.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Nicely put - Luke can be a bit of a dickhead. But then, can’t any of us at times!

 

My bad on the confusion with the chapter reviews. I broke up a chapter as it was getting too long in the rewrite, making two out of one. Seemed a good idea, except I forgot that there would be existing chapter specific reviews that would no longer make sense! Duh!

 

So, to get back on track, the next chapter is going to be a bit of a bumper!

 

Thanks for the review!
Riley

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Jul 07 2015 10:49 PM

(Chapter 30 Review)

Ahhh great! Elliot is still around. Adds some suspense to the tale.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

And it's wide open as to what might come of that!

 

Thanks for reading.
Riley

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Jul 04 2015 04:13 PM

(Chapter 27 Review)

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Jul 04 2015 06:47 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

Think Ryan did the same as most other kids would have done. However if it was me there would be pay back to those who were the leaders like broken noses and fat lips. Take them one at a time and show them who's boss.
This type of hazing should be banned from schools someone always gets hurt and its humiliating the teaching staff must be aware of what goes on and should be taken to task over this as well.
Payback is due.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Payback might help, but first Ryan has to find his way out of the desperate hole he’s fallen in. Even then, it’s hard to know if their friendships will survive this.

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Jul 02 2015 09:53 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

It looks like this version was much harder on Ryan than the last version. It'll be interesting to see where this goes.



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

After having taken a break from the story a you know, I took the decision to change a few things. I wanted to explore what would happen if Ryan didn’t get “luckily” saved by the bell, because in a real life situation with shrewd scheming teens, they would have all the angles covered. Whatever the reason, they seemed to be confidant they wouldn’t be interrupted, so it made sense to take it to its natural conclusion and then see how that affected the rest of the story.

 

Thanks for reviewing!

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Jun 30 2015 03:39 PM

(Chapter 25 Review)

hi riley, (i hope your there)
all these reviews are from 2012?
anyway i read your story, i guess in 2012. it was still going on then. and then you disappeared for awhile. i wanted to reread and then tried all kinds of segannians to try and find where you were. if you were publishing et or the story was on another internet site than ga. finally got 10 chapters that were bedded somewhere on the internet. and i wasn't the only one trying to find you.
anyway, i enjoyed your story in 2012 and am enjoying your return in 2015. i remember the story but i think its somewhat changed but still, a great great read. please keep it coming. i can only get up to chapter 25 (the hang) and it leaves a lot hanging. (pardon me on that). i know there a lot after that chapter.
so the question? are you going to add chapters after 25? do you have a schedule? can you provide a notice when you post a chapter? i think that ga is supposed to do that but they didn't when you reappeared. if you can advise thanks in advance.
great story and thanks for writing.
bill
mgtbill@aol.com



View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Bill,

 

Yes - I’m here, lol! But you’re right…it’s been a while!

 

I guess life - not all of it good - took over and I stopped writing and ended up unpublishing stuff while I figured out what I wanted to do. Then, since last summer, I started writing again with a hope to finish off ET and at least feel I’d achieved something!

 

So, in answer to your question, yes I do hope there will be lots of new chapters coming out, though like any author, you naturally get motivated to bring out more content if you sense people are reading and beginning to review. I realise that I lost a lot of my readership when I disappeared - which is all my fault - so I think we will see how it goes when we get to new chapters.

 

That said, the first draft of the story is actually finished now, though I tinker a lot, so it will go through lots of revisions to try to get it right!

 

You are right in noting that the story software won’t register updates of existing chapters in the normal place, however, when new chapters come out, it should. in the meantime, there is a thread in the forum under the stories section and I drop a note there every time I update. I think that if you click the link to follow the story you also get automatic notifications on updates.

 

Anyway, thanks for reading and for dropping this note.

 

Riley

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Jun 11 2015 12:11 AM

(Chapter 17 Review)

Just as fun as first time. Hang in.



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Thanks my friend

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May 29 2015 05:20 PM

(Chapter 12 Review)

I just wanted to say how awesome it is that ET is back. I was totally hooked on this story when it was originally being posted, and it's so exciting to be reading it again and following the trials and tribulations of not just Luke, but Simon, Ryan and Toby. So, a huge thank you for posting again!
Milo

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And I'm delighted to say that the story - for the most part - is now finished!

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May 16 2015 07:33 PM

(Chapter 3 Review)

Jumping up and down when we get I saw this story had returned.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks, lol!

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Oct 11 2013 10:50 AM

(Chapter 38 Review)

This is an amazingly good story and I am really hooked on it. I just finished reading Chapter 38 (I started it after all 38 chapters were posted online) and am really sad that there is no new material - it's been almost 2 and 1/2 months :). I am so into this story that i feel a sense of grief and that I have lost friends. Please, please post more chapters. it is really hard to not know if we are going to find out what happens. Thanks.
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Sep 22 2013 01:05 PM

(Chapter 38 Review)

Wonderful story line, I have quite enjoyed the unfolding lives of these young adults! Cheers !
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Aug 15 2013 08:21 PM

(Chapter 10 Review)

Great bit of tension with the search for the newspaper at home. The release at the mention of coupons was spot on.
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Jul 26 2013 08:10 PM

(Chapter 38 Review)

Riley, I have got to tell you - I was cracking up with Luke's paranoia! Poor kid! Thank God he thought to look in his drawer! And THEN I was cracking up again reading his mom's note! Omg, like he's gonna be able to TELL her when he RUNS OUT OF LUBE FROM WANKING SO MUCH!!!!! lol Too funny!

Wish Ryan would have woken up to see that! hehe

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

So far, Ryan hasn't woken, though I'm not saying if he does or not. poor Luke...what a day he's had! But you raise a really good question Lisa - what happens when Luke needs a refill. I think I might put that one on the Forum!

As always - love your reviews!
Riley
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Jul 25 2013 01:09 PM

(Chapter 38 Review)

Heheh... Luke's paranoid moment made me laugh. Everything always seems more sinister on a night in the dark, especially when you've just woken, and it's hot and you're horny. Rationalizing things are usually at the forefront at that point. So I can understand.
And welcome to the world of lubrication, Luke. Lol. Great chapter.
Cheers, Riley, hope you're enjoying the summer. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Mike - you know, when you're writing about the Summers, they're all great! (forgive the awful pun). Trust yours is good too!

Luke really became a bit unhinged that night - show show easy it is to think bad of people if you only have part of the picture. Not sure what would have happened if Ryan had woken just then...major red face probably!

Riley
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Jul 24 2013 02:51 PM

(Chapter 38 Review)

LOL! Poor Luke! Two week dry spell - hot best friend erect in front of him....

You would think the doc would have explained the lack of movement and added sensitivity high and tight would create!

Well done Mr Jericho!

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Kitt. When it comes to circumcision patients, especially with kids and teens, I think surgeons often have to tread a careful professional line about what most people use their winkies for, with the hope that, one way or another, most will find out what works.

Thanks for the review!
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Jul 24 2013 01:21 PM

(Chapter 38 Review)

Wow! This has got to be one of the most hilarious and lust charged self gratification portrayals I've read. It was a like riding an emotional roller coaster (in a good way :P). I can't stop chuckling over the crazed conclusions Luke kept jumping to and from.
Thanks for a fun ride :lmao: !

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Oh, it was one crazy night, for sure! Glad you're enjoying the ride!
Riley
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Jun 30 2013 10:07 PM

(Chapter 37 Review)

Yikes! Another unfortunate turn of events for our dear friend, Ryan. I really wanna just hug the guy. I think Luke's parents reacted well, all considering. Though, then again we really have yet to see how they will deal after the night's over. I was half expecting a drunken gay- confession from Ryan. Though I don't think it will happen... Yet anyway. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi again Mike. A drunken confession? No, I think poor Ryan just wants to curl into a ball and wish it all away!

Thanks for the review.
Riley
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Jun 30 2013 09:47 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

April, I mean Tony. needs to lighten up, me thinks. Is he naturally wound up so tight like that, or is there something we haven't figured out about him yet?
Poor, Ryan. Actually, poor Luke. I got caught drunk once or twice like that. I was younger too. Fortunately I had some pretty lenient parents. Well, my mother was anyway. Drinking's always fun, but being drunk and sick as a dog sucks. Maybe it can be a lesson in life both boys can learn from.
On to 37.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Toby has baggage for sure - how that is going to continue to play out in the relationship is to be seen.
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Jun 30 2013 05:15 AM

(Chapter 36 Review)

At least, Toby's mum is a good and supportive parent - though I'm surprised she hasn't gotten him some therapy. Or maybe she did, but not enough, as she may not have realized until right now how bad Toby was messed up by the Dillon incident.
But it makes me sad that Simon and Luke are so afraid to tell their parents the truth. You've done a good job of portraying Lucy and Geoff as nice, loving parents - yes they have faults and are annoying at times but that just makes them more believable. And somehow I think that they will be more devastated to learn that their sons were terrified of telling them that to be told about them being gay.
If you really love your child, I think you'd feel like having failed utterly as a parent, when you found out that your child did not trust you for this. And I'm not saying that I don't understand Luke and Simon hesitating in the beginning, but I'm really wondering why they are so afraid and adamant about not telling their parents. Especially Simon now that he has seen Toby's mum being fine with them being boyfriends. And Simon should realize that he'll hurt Toby by staying in the closet for too long.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It's an good question Timothy. I think if you look at it from the perspective of an adult and parent, you'd come to that conclusion: that it's better for a child to tell all, and any good parent would be loving and completely accepting. However, I wonder if we polled that question in GA whether he or she who was a teen at the time they identified as gay would feel comfortable doing that, what the result would be?

My guess is the majority never do - and the reason is because they've been taught by peers and society to already believe they are guilty of wrong. And this sense of hidden guilt overwhelms almost everything else, freezing them in their own protective bubble of secrecy.

That doesn't mean to say that parents might feel left out and powerless - and even angry - when it does come out.

Then it takes a good parent to really handle it well. I think Grace Skerrit is one of those. She's a counsellor herself and knows that the 'just stick em in therapy sessions' approach rarely helps in the long run.

Riley
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Jun 30 2013 04:55 AM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Ohhh what an evil twist here, that Luke has to deal with Simon being bullied and tortured and almost mutilated. Hope he feels even more guilty now about not doing anything to stop Landon and the other idiots when they attacked Ryan or reporting them afterwards or at least telling his parents.
It's a compelling story even if it is rather depressing that the good guys are treated so badly. And I mean Ryan and Simon and even to some extent Toby, once I learnt of his past. Oh and maybe Damon as well - seems like they'll all need years of therapy by the end of the story.

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There's no doubt that Luke is still carrying a load of guilt, which he needs to find a way of dealing with with his friend, or it'll cripple him as much as a Hang.

Riley
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Jun 30 2013 04:35 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

I'm surprised that Ryan didn't go home and blow his brains out with one of his father's guns. Actually that would have served them all right, mainly Luke and Todd, but even more so Mitchell and Landon and the other culprits who hopefully would have been exposed and expelled and maybe even persecuted by the law. I'm so disgusted by the betrayal and cruelty that I actually want Luke (as well as Todd and everyone else) to feel the guilt and remorse of having done something so awful and unforgivable that they drove the good guy to suicide. And I wouldn't mind for Ryan's hateful father to have the stigma of his perfect son killing himself, either.
But I guess it's better to hope that Ryan will get the help he needs to get over the massive trauma and to move on with his life and find someone else to love and be loved by. Cause Luke certainly does not deserve Ryan (or Elliot either for that matter).

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Timothy - just know getting to the first of your several reviews, and thank you for taking the time to write.

You do get the idea that, if not ready to blow his brains out, he's certainly teetering on the edge of emotional breakdown.

I wish I could say that life - and people - could never be this cruel, or friends let each other down in such awful ways. **** as the say, happens and has happened to more of us than we'd care to admit. So...is it possible to move on? Is it possible to forgive both another and yourself?

Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Riley
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Jun 21 2013 11:25 PM

(Chapter 37 Review)

I just want to wrap Ryan in a big warm hug. He certainly could use some TLC.

Luke was being so nice by washing him and just taking care of him. They should have given him some aspirin though; he's gonna have some headache when he wakes up! lol

I can definitely see Luke's parents flipping out on him and Ryan drinking. I'm glad though that Lucy convinced Ryan's mother to have him stay over. I didn't realize that Ryan never stayed over before. I kinda think that's odd. They're best friends but Ryan has never had a sleepover there. I can see Luke not sleeping at Ry's house, but I pictured Ryan hanging out at Luke's, eating dinner with the folks, playing Xbox with Simon...and then them all crashing on the couch in a mess of popcorn and potato chips. Oh well...Luke would have loved that. lol

I think Ry's parents might have a cow over him spending so much money on Luke.

And boy was Luke's dad nice!!!! Cleaning up Ryan's vomit, ewwww, yuck. I had to clean up one of my kid's friends when she puked all over my bathroom. I almost puked on her puke; it is truly disgusting when it's YOUR OWN KID, but when it's someone else's, it's just totally gross. I'm like the kid from "Cheaper by the Dozen" with Steve Martin. Probably before everyone's time on here, lol, but there was a scene when one kid threw up and then one kid (they had twelve, hence the title), ran into the room and slipped on it and then HE puked, and it went on and on. It was hysterical but disgusting. That would be me.

Anyway, that was so totally off topic. Sorry. Excellent update Riley! I'm looking forward to Ry's hangover. lol

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa. No, Ryan has never slept over before - I think it's because he's a) a very private person who knows he's secure in his own room. B) nervous that staying over in Luke's room might be a bad idea but c) the main reason is that he knows he can never invite others back into his home in the same way, so doesn't like to be put in a situation where that might come up.

A cow? More like the whole herd!

Riley
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Jun 17 2013 05:16 PM

(Chapter 37 Review)

Wow my parents would react the same. Though my mother wouldnt be quite as bad. Lol anyway great chapter. In all honesty Ry should have listened when Luke warned him. But then again when does teenagers ever listen?
Great chapter, looking forward to more... Cheers! Remijay <3

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Thanks for the review, Remijay. New chapters are on the way.
Riley
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Jun 17 2013 02:44 PM

(Chapter 37 Review)

I think Ryans luck HAS turned around. Reasonable intelligent parents now know he has some sort of problem that he isn't dealing with very well, people who had the sense not to turn the boy over to abusive parents in his drunken state. Things can only go up from here.

I remember as a late teen ( back when drinking was legal at 18, i'm a dinosaur i know) dragging my best friend home, cleaning her up and pouring her into bed, then running interfearance with her alcoholic parents. Had my parents been the ones to find us the girl would have been much better off i think.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I also can't believe that Luke's parents would feed him to the wolves, though I think Ryan is stubborn and has both his secrets and his pride. The booze is a temporary thing, but climbing out of this hole he's fallen in maybe only something HE has the power to do

Riley
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Jun 17 2013 01:36 PM

(Chapter 37 Review)

It just seams to get worse for Ryan, all this bad luck has to turn around at some point. At least he didn't have to go home drunk or i think his dad would have gone off the handle.

Hopefully by morning Lukes parents will have clamed down a little.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes - let's hope life gets better for him soon.
Riley
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Jun 15 2013 05:05 AM

(Chapter 36 Review)

A great chapter, i really liked how u made clear the squirming of Simon and Toby while having "The Talk" with Toby's Mom.
About Luke and Ryan, well it was stupid to drink but hey what 16 year old wouldnt do something stupid from time to time after all its the time to make mistakes and learn from them. I bet Ryan will not drink that much again soon. As far as the parenting goes i think Lucy will be fair but she also might want to know why they got drunk in the first place so that could be a little revealing.
Honestly as soon as Ryan started to drop his pants and stroke i had hoped the situation would evolve into a confession that he liked Luke but i guess he was not wasted enough for that, what a shame - on the other hand i guess we would miss a few chapters if that had happened.
I am glad that the story goes on, thank for that chapter.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It was a bit stupid, and they both regret it, though I don't think either will want to tell Lucy anything however much she tries to get it out of them.

Not sure what would have happened if Ryan had said something about his feelings, but I guess we'll never find out now.

Thanks for the review!
Riley
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Jun 13 2013 01:11 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Fantastic chapter, I hope Luke's punishment is not too bad, it was all in a good cause. Hopefully Ryan will pull through soon and be happy again.

Can't wait for the next one :)

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Thanks Simon. Next chapter on the way!
Riley
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Jun 10 2013 04:31 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Another brilliant chapter Riley, Looking forward to the rest, I wonder what Luke's punishment will be hopefully nothing too bad all teens sneak a bit of alcohol at some point. I feel bad for Ryan though but he will get through it.

Thanks Riley, don't leave us waiting too long on the next one :P

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I guess we all sneaked a glass of something in our time Adator - it's getting caught that's the clincher!
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Jun 09 2013 11:55 AM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Riley, I loved how you titled the last chapter and this chapter "Like a Virgin, touched for the very first time...", but where was the touching? lol Well, I guess if you count Kieran and THAT mess of a humiliation, but I when I saw the title of the chapter I thought, "FINALLY! Someone's touching someone!" lol

Anyway...Toby's mom is awesome. Simon knew just how to calm Toby down when his mom wanted to start her 'safe sex' talk. :)

And now to Luke and Ryan. I so did not expect Lucy to find the empty tequila bottle. What a mess. L&R are going to be in such trouble. Tsk, tsk for getting caught.

My heart went out to Ryan though; he was so sad and so down on himself. I want him to sober up so Luke can comfort him. He should tell Luke about his father.

Another terrific chapter, Riley! I was actually wondering where you disappeared to! I'm glad you're back. =)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - yep, I'm still here. Andy (who edits - brilliantly - for me) and I have been pressing forward behind the scenes to finish - and trust me, there's more than a few twists still to come!

I really enjoyed writing the chapter and, even now, can still visualise that tequila bottle rolling gently across the floor. Ryan seems back at rock bottom again, but he can't stay there...but then I think you knew that.

Thanks for your review!
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Jun 08 2013 09:04 AM

(Chapter 36 Review)

I've been refreshing the page for the past week, waiting for a new chapter, and it's finally up! :)
I love how cool Toby's mum is with everything, and how she didn't actually forbid the boys from spending all that time together or anything. It's great to see how suuportive she is.
Also, I particularly enjoyed the way you arranged for Luke's mum to find the tequila. I did not see it coming, though we were previously warned that the shit would hit the fan, I started to relax when they finally put away the alcohol which is why it caught me by surprise. I just really hope that the situation will not put any more strain on Ryan and Luke's relationship.
To end the review, I wanted to let you know that you really are an amazing writer. You have kept me captivated from the very first page, both in ET and In Safe Hands, and I'm at the point where I refresh the page every other hour to see if a new chapter has been put up. I also wanted to let you know that you have inspired me to write my own story, and I will be lucky if it turns out half as good as yours.
I really hope that Luke and Ryan get through this kind of rough patch, and that they do eventually end up together. I also look forward to seeing more of Elliott, and although I want Luke and Ryan to be together, I am absolutely loving Elliott and I hope that he, too, will get his happy ending. Lastly, I would love to see Ethan Alexis held accountable for the way he treats Ryan.
I can NOT wait to read the rest of the story, and I will be refreshing furiously until the next chapter is up.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Regina - it means a lot when someone writes any review, and I appreciate all you've squeezed into yours.

Toby's mom is quite a lady and incredibly supportive, though the story has said little so far about how she's arrived there. She's lived with and come to accept her son's sexuality over a number of years, yet it was probably a shock and touch at first. She's had to fight to keep the two of them on track, but I don't think she sees Simon as a threat to that. - though Lucy and Geoff may be a different matter.

Ryan, Luke and Elliott...is it going to get complicated?

Looking forward to reading something from you, and thanks again for the kind words.
Riley.
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Jun 08 2013 06:29 AM

(Chapter 25 Review)

Xiao Wong. Nice word play there ;)

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Cut King? :)
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Jun 08 2013 12:47 AM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Oh, I don't want to be in Lukes Place right now!

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Mmmmm - I think he wouldn't mind being somewhere else either!
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Jun 07 2013 06:21 PM

(Chapter 36 Review)

Some bunny is going to be in a lot of trouble. Luke's mom is still awesome but I do believe we are about to see Hurricane Lucy. Run boys Run! lol.
Simon and Toby kill me. What little cutie pies. I am glad they are out to the parental units now. Sweet little couple. It will be interesting to see where they end up.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

'Hurricane Lucy?' I like it - and you may be right. She's definitely not the kind of mum to turn a blind eye on anything. Strict, maybe. Unfair, no. We'll see where she ends up. Simon and Toby are cute in a sense - though Toby can get fired up like Lucy too - not always in a good way, either.

Thanks for the review Carrie
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May 29 2013 03:06 AM

(Chapter 35 Review)

I discovered this story a few days ago, and I have been unable to put it down since. It really is phenomenal, and now that I have caught up, I felt compelled to make an account to let you know. You, sir, are in all honesty an amazing writer, and this is one of the best stories I've ever read. I cannot wait to read the rest, and I think I speak for everybody when I ask, no, beg, that you please at least consider writing a sequel.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Regina, it always makes my day when a reader almost runs into the tale accidently, and really enjoys it...so thank you! Whether or not there is a sequel (and my editor is pushing me that way), there's certainly a prequel (of sorts) - so make sure you read 'In Safe Hands'.

Thanks for the review.
Riley
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May 19 2013 04:20 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

Riley,
I thought that was hilarious. The atmosphere was so relaxed. It was like I was there, not only watching, but it felt like I was drunk watching. I recognised that slightly drunk feeling, when the jokes seem funnier than they are, and you don't really care. To write like this you have to live it in your imagination. You certainly captured it in mine. I love reading your work. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Paul

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Paul - great to hear from you again, and thanks for the kind words. So - it sounds like you have personal experience on the legless front?
RILEY
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May 18 2013 11:27 AM

(Chapter 35 Review)

hah i liked this chapter. It was cute and strangely humerus. Especially since they were drunk shopping for clothes. I wonder how much he spent on Luke. LOL...
Maybe being drunk was good for them. They said and did things that they wouldnt normally. Haha!
Keep'em Coming!!
Remijay

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

In my experience, getting legless never turns out for the best - especially if you have to live with whatever stupid thing you did! That said, maybe it'll do them good.

Thanks for the review!
Riley
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May 10 2013 08:36 AM

(Chapter 35 Review)

I just started reading this a few days ago and I have to say its an amazing story. I'm just disappointing that I now have to wait for the next chapter :/ But hopefully the wait won't be too long. I really do hope Luke and Ryan can get together they would be so great together. I know that Luke did mess up not helping him get out of the hang but I think they can get passed that, at least I hope they can. It was quite a difficult read at times, I didn't really know stuff like that happened in same sex schools I suppose I'm a bit naive. I could not imagine going through something like that, Although I think some of you readers have forgot that Ryan actually has been involved in the hang, shaving Kienan's pubes so he isn't all innocent. Don't get me wrong though Ryan is my favorite character and I wouldn't want something like this to happen to anyone.
I think Simon and Toby will get through Toby's past with Grace's help they seem great together and I think they both need each other. I still think Toby has more to share though.
I guess I will start reading In safe hands now until a knew chapter appears and see what Elliot's story is he seems like an interesting character although we haven't seen much of him although I feel that will change soon, I just hope I don't become too attached to him as I have with Ryan as I'm hoping Luke and Ryan get together not Luke and Elliot although after reading In safe hands I probably won't know who I want to get together but I feel Ryan really needs someone in his life hopefully it will work out.
Anyway thanks for the really good read so far and again I hope the next chapter isn't too far away :*)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I noticed your review of "In Safe Hands", so know you got through that and know a little more about Elliott - actually, a LOT more. Will Luke be torn in two by the conflicts that might arise if Elliott steps into the fray? Only time will tell.

There have been some tough moments in the story so far, and everyone is human and makes mistakes. Ryan and Luke are on quite a journey, while Toby seems to carry a load of baggage and could easily self destruct despite an amazing mum.

Anyway, thanks for reading and taking time to review.

Riley
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May 10 2013 05:39 AM

(Chapter 35 Review)

Riley, Riley, Riley.
Wow.
I came across this story on another site a year or so ago. The title put me off, but it had a good rating so I read a bit of the first chapter but didn't really get drawn in. Maybe I was looking for something else at the time, ahem. Or maybe I was temporarily insane.
I've just spent a couple of days reading through all your chapters here, couldn't put it down. I even snuck in some reading time on my phone at work, you must be good!
You have captured these characters and their environment so well. I attended a similar school and it really took me back. The two chapters with The Hangs actually made my heart pound, for real. And not in a good way. But hey that's art right, it's supposed to make you feel. And the description of the surgery, I almost feel like I experienced the procedure (cringe). Some sweet moments too, like raspberry smoothies (aww) and drunk shopping (lol). It's been a rollercoaster.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. I can't wait to read the rest (hint hint)!
Hurley

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there. Firstly, thanks for taking the time to write so much in a first review: it's always great to get good feedback.

Glad you've been enjoying the story, even though it's had a few difficult moments. And there's still a way to go, so stay tuned!

Riley
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Apr 25 2013 03:12 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

I agree w/Mike; this was the funniest chapter yet. :)

Hysterical! Drunk shopping! Ryan is a pisser! And I think there's a lesson in here somewhere, oh yeah, never ride on an escalator drunk. lol Backwards or forwards. hehe

I can't wait to see Luke's mom's reaction to all those bags of clothes! She's going to know that what they bought was way more than $50.00. lol

Thank God for Ryan. ;) Maybe Luke will model the undies for him? lol

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi again, Lisa. Mmmmm... Drunk on an escalator? Yes, probably smart advice!
I think your right about Lucy - she notices EVERYTHING and there's no way she won't add up the price tags when she finds them. Not sure about Luke modelling his undies. They're gonna look pretty bright in the cold light of day!
Riley
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Apr 23 2013 04:02 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

All is forgiven. Really upbeat and chilled.
I feel a lesson in alway signing out of facebook is about to be learned. ;)

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Hi Owain. Thanks for dropping a review. So, do you have Facebook tales to confess?
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Apr 22 2013 11:48 AM

(Chapter 18 Review)

LOL I thought the no dating till he was 16 a decent out when you take into account the facts that the smartklamp misrepresented him and that he really did have most of his blood south of the border for other reasons.
And of course we want to hear more about Owen and Olly. You can't simply set up such a first sight connection and leave us hanging!

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You have to hand it to Luke, it wasn't bad in the circumstances, though it may come back to bite him on the backside. I promise to let you know about Owen and Olly!
Riley
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Apr 21 2013 09:43 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

This was so funny. This is also exactly what the boys needed. They needed to chill and have a little fun. Drunk shopping.. hahahha. I have no idea about that. Really, I don't... Much. I cracked up at the underware shopping, that was too funny. It was cute to watch Ry be able to spoil Luke. Now Luke just needs to be able to model the undies.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Carrie! It WAS good to see them chill, but I wonder if Ryan isn't getting a little TOO chilled! There may be something ahead, and it might be good - or it might be trouble. Who knows!
Riley
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Apr 21 2013 09:41 PM

(Chapter 35 Review)

This is a great chapter. I really enjoyed the fact that nothing major happened yet it was as interesting, possibly more, than other chapters. Thanks for the update, I'm going to keep my eyes open for the next one haha.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there - and thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter as much as I did!
Riley
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Apr 21 2013 09:54 AM

(Chapter 35 Review)

Great chapter, and not before time. :P
I think this was the funniest chapter to date, loved it. =D
Thanks Riley. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Glad you liked it Mike - it was fun to write. Hard to know what the fallout might be, though.

Riley
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Apr 12 2013 09:54 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Hola Senior Riley,
Been of reading other stories so I'm playing catch up. Another good infuriating chapter. That said, Scott Landon is a bullying coward and is using this "Hang" tradition as a guise to bully without being labeled as such. Notice how he is always with his other minions Mitchell, Matt and JJ when he's doing these Hangs? He also tends to take things way to far as is evidenced by his willingness to snip off Simons foreskin, The boy is demented and really needs to a truly severe hang performed on him to see how he likes it, thought I don't really think that he would learn anything from it.
I'm glad that Ryan punched Scott Landon in the nose, though to me it isn't enough for this guy.
Um, guess that's it for now.
H.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Hector - just catching up myself. Actually, Landon is weak and has such a need to 'prove' he's somebody, he's being manipulated - mostly by Mitchell, the one who pulls his strings. Mitchell gets Landon to do his dirty work, but then Landon goes too far. The punch was good, but does it really solve anything for Ryan?

Riley
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Mar 25 2013 05:27 PM

(Chapter 34 Review)

Grace is the absolute best. I'm sure Toby doesn't even realize how truly lucky he is to have a mom who is so cool, so insightful and so supportive of him. Of course this was evident when they moved from Florida. Now at least Simon can feel safe and comfortable at their house.

And of course every mom has to have the 'safe sex' discussion, whether their child likes girls or boys. :) She's certainly not doing it to embarrass them.

So now Simon realizes that Toby has liked him 'like that' for a very long time. Maybe as long as Simon has liked Toby, 'like that'. Toby has to learn how to talk about his feelings with Simon, not to shun him or block him out and make Simon feel as if he did something wrong.

I'm glad they seemed to work everything out for now. I'm looking forward to the next chapter where hopefully we'll see a drunk Luke and Ryan. lol :)

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Hi Lisa - always love to read your insights. Now everyone wants to see a drunk Luke and Ryan...so hold onto your socks - here it comes!
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Mar 24 2013 05:36 PM

(Chapter 9 Review)

This is really getting good! Thanks RJ
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Mar 23 2013 08:12 PM

(Chapter 2 Review)

interesting very interesting. i think this is going to be fun to see through
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Mar 22 2013 12:33 PM

(Chapter 34 Review)

Yay! A new chapter. These two little monkeys are adorable. I feel so bad for sweet little Simon. I hope he fesses up soon to his parents. I am interested to see what happens with all that. Luke's mom handled the whole snip snip situation very well, I bet she just floats along with this too. This was a good chapter. Not so much painful drama but importants stuff none the less. So all that being said, lets get back to drunken Luke and Ryan. Oh and also.... El-li-ot????? I think I have some Reese's pieces if that would make him appear sooner, although they might not last long as I have decided to add them to these yummy cupcakes I want to make.
Tootles!
Carrie

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Carrie - send cup cakes and Elliott will definitely appear sooner!
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Mar 22 2013 11:33 AM

(Chapter 34 Review)

Riley,
As you've pointed out, I know NOTHING about about future chapters, but I have to say that Toby's reaction isn't a good sign. Simon is already starting to have his doubts, their 'make up sex' aside. Grace may - hopefully - be able to salvage things for Toby, but she can't be with them 24/7 so Toby's gonna need to learn a few things for himself if he wants to keep his golden boy - Simon.
Good chapter. Now let's get back to a drunk Luke and Ryan. :P

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Toby is carrying such baggage which he struggles to shug off. In opening up his feelings for Simon, he's uncorking his own can of worms. Can he get past it? I hope so...
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Mar 22 2013 11:20 AM

(Chapter 34 Review)

I like this chapter.... It was sweet and innocent. Plus Toby's mom having the talk with them, before and after was good. Mother's like that are hard to find. The chapter in all was lighthearted even though Toby kept getting into a attitude. Simon did exactly what i would have. And almost done alot of times...
Thanks for the latest Chapter Riley. Hugs! Keep'em coming. Remijay <3 :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes, the boys are lucky to have Grace...a mum to be proud of! Thanks for the note Remijay and the next chapter is on it's way.

Riley
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Mar 22 2013 09:00 AM

(Chapter 34 Review)

Riley: Thanks for the latest chapter. I've been reading this and the previous story for sometime.
The first story broke my heart when Miguel's whole family died in the car crash; and Elliott was absolutely forlorn.
The current story's in-depth and ultra personal exploration of circumcision is fascinating. Since I lost my foreskin days after my birth, I had no recollection of circumcision.
I found the "hanging" tradition at the boy's school excruciating difficult to read. How a school could "look the other way" at such sexual abuse is beyond me.
And now we are up to the reconciliation of Simon and the incredibly gifted but socially flawed Toby. Toby's mother is a great gift to both the boys. How lucky they are.
Thank you for expanding my glossary of terms with 'punnet', a term unknown to most American speakers of English.
And I'd like to point out the correction of 'break handless' to "brake handles'. It will read better.

I hope Luke and Elliott get to meet officially soon. Thanks.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

"And I'd like to point out the correction of 'break handless' to "brake handles'. It will read better. " Oh my gosh, I laughed SO hard! Thank you for this priceless pearl of wisdom. And thank you for reviewing Win (if it is Win - apologies if it's not!). Discovering that there are people both reading AND enjoying ET - and are willing to stick their necks out to say so - means a great deal to me. And you got through ISH too!

ET is certainly full of the good, the bad and the downright ugly and nothing is certain in the journey - other than the only way to find out is press on to the next chapter!

So - I'm off to put right my brake handles!
Riley J
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Mar 14 2013 12:19 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

only recently started reading, im really curious to see whats going to happen with Luke and Ryan.
oh and Simon and Toby. Cant't wait for the next chapter
great job once again Riley

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Hello Declan, and thanks for the review. I think we're all wondering what's going to happen with Luke and Ryan with a bottle to share. Could be good or....

Riley J
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Mar 12 2013 12:56 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Wow, nice chapter. Simon and Toby... I wonder whats going to happen now? I would be angry at Toby too for how he handled the situation. But Im glad that his mother told him to chase after Simon. I hope everything will be better for them... As for Ryan, i know that he still feels the sting of being hung, come on man, shit happens. Anyway, Luke and Ryan drinking Tequila? Things are going to either getting heated in the bedroom, or Lukes parents are going to find out and things will not be so pretty for them... I hope for the best for them... Maybe they will explore being intimate.
Keep up the great work... Til next time. Remijay <3

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Toby does seem like high maintenance though its not as if Simon doesn't know that. They have been friends a while. However, I think he's discovering what taking it the next level in a relationship means.

And Luke and Ryan? It looks like a disaster in the making to me!

Thanks for the review.
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Mar 11 2013 03:11 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Oh NOOOO, my NERVES :lmao: Tequila? Now they're going to blame it on the TEQUILA ... :facepalm: whatever happens...Arrrgh!
I share Lisa's sentiments to the T re. Simon and Toby.
I get so mad with some of these boys that I can almost poke my arm through the screen of this laptop hehehe but what a tale we are able to enjoy...Ta stax so much, Riley :music:

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Who knows what is going to happen with a bottle in the bedroom? Hang on to your shirt - we'll have to see. Thanks for the review Rano.
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Mar 11 2013 10:11 AM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Wow, didn't see that one coming about Toby. I can see where he would find it hard to trust people after his experience. And wow, they did start young! lol

I'm sure Simon wasn't about to end their relationship b/c of that. I think he just needed to get away from Toby b/c Toby was just venting his anger and saying things he didn't mean. The problem is, Toby thinks he's dirty or not fit to be with Simon, or some othe nonsence. I'm hoping Simon can reassure Toby by his actions that his feelings for him haven't changed.

I LOVE Luke and Simon's dad; he's a pisser! :) Really funny guy and so cool for a dad! =)

Now, what will happen to L&R while they're up in Luke's room getting trashed on tequila? lol

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It's true, behind his talented exterior, Toby carries quite a bit of baggage. No, I don't think Simon would have thrown in the towel, but he's got questions. Getting close to Toby can be painful! Let's hope he can get Toby onto an even keel.
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Mar 08 2013 06:04 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

You have the talent of making the casual conversation, an interesting read. That's something I've noticed in particular when reading your stories. I really loved the dialogue between Geoff, Ry and Luke, around work, the ironing, and the 'hidden topi'c relating to Ryan's recent issues.
Similarly a few chapters back, the conversation between Luke and Lucy in the car coming back from the doctors. They manage to keep the flow of the story an interesting read.

Geoff: "Don’t tell anyone, but he likes to call it his wi…”
What? The English term, 'willy'.. or the American term 'wiener'? :P I'm thinking 'willy' being that they're Brits and all. but Either one would be an embarrassing fact for an older teenager.

What's going to happen now? I'm thinking it's high time Luke and Ry get together :P They both deserve it. Could a drunken night on Tequila be the beginning of something special?
Can't wait to find out.
Cheers Riley :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Was it 'willy' or 'wiener'? Good question! Actually, I'm not sure. The previous evening, in the conversation with his dad, Luke had called it a wiener first. It was after that he then offered the term 'willy' and his dad - in jest it has to be said - seemed to infer that Lucy might be more comfortable with that. Frankly, nobody in the UK says wiener.

It's true, I do like conversation, Mike. I think you can communicate a lot if done in the right way.

So, is a bottle of Tequila going to break the ice? Let's wait and see...

Thanks for the review.

Riley
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Mar 08 2013 04:52 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

Dude you are SOOO harsh. Geez, give a guy a little readers choice thingy and he get's all high and might..

Let's recap where you left - Simon and Toby - fighting, maybe over.
Then you give us two very horny teens and alcohol. Riggghhhttt that's safe place to leave. :-P
Looking into my crystal ball, I see a new king of cliff in 2013 - Riley Jericho.
Time to chance my signature line. :whistle:

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Me...harsh? Ooooohh - that's ripe. Reader's should see your editing! So, Luke and Ryan are heading towards being a little tipsy. How can you even THINK that that might get naughty. Get a grip or goodness sake! . Mind you, I could get into this cliffy thing - it's fun!

Riley
PS. Actually even Andy doesn't know what happens next...
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Mar 08 2013 03:49 PM

(Chapter 33 Review)

I have a feeling that this could get intresting with Luke and Ryan getting drunk :)

Keep up the good work this story really is amazing :)

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Thanks Simon!
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Mar 08 2013 02:06 PM

(Chapter 32 Review)

Hi Riley.
I do hope that there will still be some fall out from what happened to Simon, those responsible need to be taken to task as well as the school for turning a blind eye on this hazing type of activity that it must have known was taking place over the years, as well their mum going through the roof when she finds out about it.
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Feb 27 2013 05:54 AM

(Chapter 32 Review)

I guess I needed this chapter to calm the poor nerves down a bit after the super-intense previous chapters. Yikes!
Now what I really experience as a tease is the following:
[“This morning?” Luke shook his head in surprise. “It feels like days ago already!” He shrugged. “It was fine. No damage.” And I saw that guy again – from the opticians, he thought secretly.]
And somehow I see trouble on the horizon for Ryan and Luke. But then again, well yes, let 'em roll Riley :P

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Rano - yes, it was a chance to take a bit of a breather and lets hope things settle down a bit for everyone.

Riley
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Feb 26 2013 08:21 AM

(Chapter 32 Review)

I ditto everyone else; I'm really glad Simon was ok and he didn't get cut. I'm also glad him and Toby seemed to have made up. I'm really curious now about Toby's story about his last b/f. And I think I asked this in the chapter when they first got together, but they are young. How many years before did Toby have this b/f? How old was he? Ten? lol Seriously though, if he's fourteen/fifteen now, (they are freshman, right?), was he like twelve? That is still pretty young. Anyway, I'm looking foward to hearing about it.

Lucy's great, sorta manipulating Ryan into coming over for dinner. I hope he and Luke have a chance to talk and Luke can try to cheer him up.

Great chapter Riley! :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It's quite interesting, Lisa. If you track the stories in the 'how old were you' thread in the forum, it's amazing how many began to make a connection to being gay at age 10 or 11.

Lucy was great - and let's hope Luke and Ryan have a good evening together.

Thanks again for the review
Riley
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Feb 25 2013 06:15 PM

(Chapter 32 Review)

I read the previous couple of chapters out of order (doh!) but that just made it more tense. I'll have to stop reading these before bed. I'm exited about the sleep over but also looking forward to Toby's story. All good. Thanks.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there, and thanks for the note. Toby's story. He's such a dark horse is Toby; lots of secrets. But will Simon regret asking? Time will tell!

Riley
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Feb 24 2013 11:12 PM

(Chapter 32 Review)

Well i agree with Carrie76 and i am glad that Simon was not really hurt. But i also have to add that you hit the breaks really bad. I mean chapter 31 was so energised had so much speed or power in it up until the very end, then you post chapter 32 and all that power is just gone - that was a bit of a bummer. Even so it was a another great chapter and i really look forward to the next one.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there. I guess life is like that - full speed one day, and go slow the next. Sorry if it dropped too much. In fact, I really appreciate the feedback to help me get a better idea of how it 'reads'. So, thanks.

Riley
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Feb 18 2013 03:52 PM

(Chapter 32 Review)

I am so glad that sweet Simon was not hurt. I like him and Toby together. This chapter was pretty good. I like the way you built Ryan back up. I think he needed to fight his demons so to speak. I don't usually condone violence but no one gets to hurt people like they did Ryan and especially with what they were planing to do to Simon. I say good for them that they handled it.
I have to say though, you are a tease. I want to know what happens when Ryan stays the night. I hope its devilishly bad. This story is so good though. I can't wait to get it all together.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think we're all glad Simon is okay, Carrie; and he seems quite resilient - maybe because he's got Toby to fall back on. Ryan on a sleepover? Mmmm - now THAT might be interesting....
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Feb 06 2013 07:29 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

I agree w/Remijay! Fuckin' A, man! I'm glad Landon got his but omg, Simon's bits! Luke's bits! They'll both need to go see Dr.T. Holy shit.

I'm thrilled that Ryan came to Luke and Simon's rescue. =) A thought crossed my mind though: although Ryan did 'save them', I wonder what he was thinking when he obviously followed Luke in there and saw what was going on. Was he thinking that, sure, Luke runs in to save his brother from The Hang, but watched and laughed with everyone else at HIS hang yesterday! That's something I would probably be thinking. Maybe I'd be a little annoyed that Luke would so readily run in to save Simon, (ok, granted they are brothers), and just leave Ryan to, well, literally to hang. Not intending that as a pun. But in any case, I am so glad that Ryan did come to their rescue and put his thoughts and feelings aside, (if he had the thoughts I mentioned), for his best friend and his brother.

As far as Toby: I definitely could see why he was so upset with Simon. It seemed like Simon was ignoring him; not including him in his conversations, not inviting him to play tennis with them.....but the way I read it, by Simon saying "us" to whoever he was talking to, I think he meant him and Toby, not him and Luke, like Toby had thought. They really need to talk. Wait until Toby finds out what happened to Simon.

I also have to agree with the majority of the reviewers here: there has to be some action taken against Landon and Matt. JJ was at least trying to talk Landon out of his crazy, psycho actions. When, (and I'm sure it'll be when and not if), Luke's parents find out what happened, they are going to have a fit. I just hope Ryan doesn't get in trouble for breaking Landon's nose.

Terrific chapter Riley! I was holding my breath the whole time Simon was being tortured. Ok, gotta go vote now! ;)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Lisa!

I don't think that Ryan would have had the time to think it through in such details. I think he ran straight after Luke not knowing what to expect, saw what was going on and reacted instinctively.

Toby and Simon have to talk. Toby is getting jealous and is acting weird.

Will there be consequences? There has to be. The question is what, and how wide will it go?

Thanks for the great review!
Riley
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Feb 04 2013 07:24 PM

(Chapter 30 Review)

'K, have to somehow *squint* mine eyes not to see what others have reviewed; but I just wanted to add to the last chapter (29) I think I agree with our fellow follower about: "circs often get a poor press, but its mostly to do with infant human rights (which is understandable), rarely because cut guys feel badly done by on how well it works afterwards."
My nephew confided to his mothers brother the following: " I'm so glad you *told* mommy to allow us to retract all the time and clean ourselves properly; but what about Zeee; WHY did he grew close?"
What actually happened to Zeee was that [bless the doctor into eternity] he was ENLIGHTENED.He only surgically cut off the TIP of Zeee's foreskin...and Zeee, being an Afrikaner Caucasion South African, is ever grateful for that "curcumcision", 'cause he fits-in.
Zeee is happy today, he still fits in (in South Africa)... so the same with Luke (North America; more specifically USA) ; its a matter of culture, or becoming part of a culture, 'K? or even personal preferance; like Luke, whilst bubbling and stumbling all over their ...whatevers. It is actually sad to read about situations like this;Recall that Simon apparently don't want ANY of this circumcision stuff...heheheh...let's see how THIS ONE is going to *unfold*, eh?
Riley, some of us are waiting in anticipation to see how you are going to handle *this* one ;)
As for now, I'm off onto our one and only Riley
Onwards - Voorwaarts :)
I really love this story...
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Feb 04 2013 05:58 PM

(Chapter 29 Review)

Well, I've just knee-jerked and nail-biting myself blue-and pimple-nickle from where I am ;) This is just too much for my constitution heheheh I couldn't resist to read on and On and ON -- sorry, without any reviews in the interim. But well, WHO is gonna blame me for being totally infatuated with Ryan and Luke (or is it actually Luke and Ryan?)
Now that I've caught up with everything (except for 30 and 31, that I'm gonna tackle RIGHT AFTER THIS) I have to say that my heart ain't going to handle it. I've been reading/monitoring every lil BIT of what is going on - even on the REVIEWS, but just do not go ahead (oh my, just HOW gay can you get? heheheh) This is one out of 7 (SEVEN) stories that REALLY jumps right into me. Luke (gaurgeous guy); Simon (very much my type 'o guy as well [you authors tend to type these youngsters rather *adult*, but Simon is a guy I can REALLY relate to); but RYAN - well, Ryannnn actually blisters me no end...Man-oh-Man, RYAN is actually my kind of guy, OK?!!! He is just WOW the way he is depicted...Eishhh!
I SO much love this story that I'm actually detracted from many others that I also am MADLY in LOVE with...but, these guys - and the frequency they are being posted - is just SUPER, Riley :) on the par with Billy Chase [my lil heartthrob] ;)
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Feb 04 2013 03:14 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Fucking A! What a chapter. When the fighting started i broke out in a worried sweat. i hope Simon isnt too badly hurt. And I'm so glad that Ryan came to both of their defenses. :) What are best friends and brothers for? Lol If Luke didnt have the klamp removed he might have survived the kick. All in all though, i hope landon and his gang remembers what they should and shouldnt do. Especially with scissors, wtf? Anyone with a brain, would know that cutting foreskin will make the person bleed, and maybe bleed to death.
Awesome chapter, keep them coming. Remijay <3

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Remijay. We're all waiting to see if Simon is seriously damaged or not. Le's hope he's okay. Being kicked by Mitchell will have hurt bad, but at least Luke didn't get stamped on. Landon got what he deserved, but it's not yet over.

Riley
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Feb 04 2013 10:00 AM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Are these kids insane? I mean cutting off Simon's bits like that? Or at least planning to, and It seems that Landon did actually cut at least partially.
This is a crime, and a police matter.No longer a childish prank. In fact heads should be rolling. Where are the staff?
Very difficult to read, having said that, I understand it's part of the story, and sometimes bad things in life do happen.
Thanks Riley. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Mike. You'll have to wait for the next chapter to find out if Simon was actually cut. When Luke 'saw red', was it blood, or was he just steaming angry? A crime, or a prank gone wrong - or both? More coming soon, and thanks for the review!
RIley
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Feb 04 2013 02:15 AM

(Chapter 31 Review)

What a barbaric arsehole that Landon is. I concur with the previous reviews: there needs to be some serious consequences for him and surely the parents, school, and maybe the law would get involved.
I wonder, Riley, if you have in mind for Luke and Ryan to be punished too - that'd be typical fare for a school - and maybe they'll finally get some time alone in detention or something. I'm busting for them to, you know, just get close to each other. ;-)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Agreed - there have to be consequences. But will it be good? If the school reacts, what will they do? You're on the right track Milotin, so keep reading!

Riley
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Feb 03 2013 03:25 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

It does feel good, but I feel like I have been on an emotional roller coaster. Some of these guys have some serious mental issues.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Well, they're certainly stupid idiots that should know better.

Thanks for the review Peethree!
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Feb 03 2013 02:54 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

At last, payback but I think there will be more yet.
What happened to Simon is a criminal act and needs to be delt with. Also the teaching staff need to be woken up to what they are turning a blind eye to. No school can say that teachers and the Head are unaware of this kind of thing (Hanging) in fact teachers hear everything that goes on at a school eventually and this hanging has been going on for some time. Maybe its time for some expulsion's and a new head.
Apart from that can we have more Luke and Ryan kicking the crap out of them a bit more before the teachers arrive .......PLEASE.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I had to laugh! I think that kicking the crap out of them some more is EXACTLY what Luke wants to do, though whether he'll get his wish, who knows.

You're right, there has to be consequences. But for whom?
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Feb 03 2013 02:31 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

You are damn right, it feelt great. I guess Ryan saw that something was very wrong just by a look at Luke so thats why he went straight after him to deliver a few well placed and very well deserved punches. About Simon, well to be honest i like the fact that he too needs to be circumcised and hopefully he will be but i sure as hell hope he wasnt due to a pair of scissors.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yes, seeing Luke charging by would have been hard to ignore! Ryan followed fast and got there just in time. It looked like Simon needs the same operation as Luke, but you get the idea he REALLY doesn't want it. Maybe trouble ahead?

Thanks for the review
Riley
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Feb 03 2013 12:29 PM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Jeez! At least the hard part is over, I wonder what the consequences are going to be for everyone involved, as well as Toby.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Toby and Simon have a few issues to sort out. They really need to start talking. I think you're right, it's hard to imagine there won't be consequences

Thanks for the review,
Riley
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Feb 03 2013 11:40 AM

(Chapter 31 Review)

Oh god, finally Landon got what he deserved - although a bit late. Hope Si is alright.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

He did, though there still may be consequences for all involved. Hopefully Simon is okay.

Riley
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Jan 29 2013 12:07 AM

(Chapter 30 Review)

Dammit, I wanna change my vote and vote you King of the Cliffies! You're killing me here Riley! What did Jacko want? Who's in trouble??? Is it Ryan??????????

I really loved seeing Elliot again! :) I'm trying to remember: was Elliot originally from England, or did he just live there at one point? Hopefully the boys will bump into each other again. But....stil rooting for Ryan. =)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Lisa, Lisa! You always make me smile! I'm not usually known for cliffhangers, but this one seemed to have happened accidentally. Hopefully, I'll be able to update today, and you'll find out. But will it really be what you think it is?

No, Elliott isn't originally from England, though they were stationed there for a couple of years with his father's job at DSL. Elliott ended up living in many countries, which is why his accent is quite complex. His mum is originally latin american, but his father is American. Now they live permanently in the States.

But will he now come between Luke and Ryan in some way? Who knows!

Riley
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Jan 28 2013 07:20 PM

(Chapter 30 Review)

I continue to enjoy this great story, especially since the name "Hector" made its way in, though just in passing. I don't know very many "Hectors" except my uncle for whom I was named after, the actor Hector Elizando, and the greek mythical charactor Hector (not sure if he was a god or not). So thanks for putting that in the story.
Now at the end of this chapter you made mention of not-so-mystery-mystery boy and his part in the story. Well I don't usually try and predict what an author is going to come up with next in their story becuase I would always be wrong, but since you asked I'll take a shot.
I see a love trangle between Luke, Ryan and mystery boy and Luke having to choose between the two which will cause Luke great distress.
Anyway can't wait to see what really transpires. I know it will be good.
Hector

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Hector - I did actually think of you when I picked the name. I quite like introducing real characters into my stories. Nephy even made it into 'Against the Machine'!

So, you're going to go for a love triangle between Luke, Ryan and Elliott? It's a possibility…but then, again…

Thanks for the review!
Riley
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Jan 26 2013 05:00 PM

(Chapter 30 Review)

another chapter of finely crafted writing and compelling story telling. I have to admit, I've started obsessing over ET. checking nightly for the latest installment and becoming increasingly agitated until I score a quick fix of a new chapter.
Guess I'll have to re-read it from the beginning just to get my fix until the next chapter comes online. great writing.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the great review! Hopefully you can score a 'fix' shortly as I'll be updating soon - and it'll be a good one!

Riley
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Jan 26 2013 11:24 AM

(Chapter 30 Review)

Oh. . .what happened? ? Update soon, please!

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Update is on the way, peethree. Hang in there!
Riley
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Jan 26 2013 09:13 AM

(Chapter 30 Review)

Oooh.. I cliffhanger, huh?
So mean! :P
Hope Ryan's okay.
I love the way you write the conversations between Luke and Lucy, they're comical at the right moments without being OTT.
Thanks Riley, and you can definitely count on my vote for the awards.
Mike.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Mike. It's the final round coming up soon - here's hoping the story made it through the nominations. Hope you'll vote again!

Who knows what Luke is going to find now - but it doesn't look as if it's gong to be good…

Riley
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Jan 17 2013 03:44 PM

(Chapter 29 Review)

Hey Riley! Thank you so much for putting that little link there to vote for the 2012 stories. I went into the forum section and had no idea where to look! lol So thank you; "English Teen" definitely gets my nom. And Ryan; so glad he's nominated; I love him. :)

I'm so relieved that Luke's mishap didn't cause any permanent damage. But I must say, like at the beginning when Lucy and Luke went for the consultation, I would not have been in the same room as my son and the doctor. Being a mom, I'd be pretty embarrassed and you know, I wouldn't even have a choice; none of my sons would even ALLOW me in there with them! lol But I would trust the doctor to know what he's doing and plus I wouldn't even know what I was looking for anyway.

Lucy does handle embarrassing situations very well, I must say! As does Luke; it's good they were both able to joke about it! It was funny, when Luke asked about Ella, and Tiberius, (is that how it's spelled? No, it doesn't look right, Now I've got it! lol), said she wasn't the one assisting him today, I thought out would walk Ryans bff. lol Wouldn't that totally mortify poor Luke?

I'm looking forward to the next chapter when Luke gets back to school. I hope things are better with Ryan and of course with Ryan and Luke.

Great job Riley! :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hey there Lisa - hope you managed to vote in the end!

So, Luke seems to be in the clear, though the whole thing for both him and his mum was acutely embarrassing. Of course, Luke hasn't yet made the connection between Ella and Ryan - all that is still to come…and won't THAT be interesting!

Next chapter is right around the corner - and thanks for the review on this one!

Riley
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Jan 15 2013 12:49 PM

(Chapter 29 Review)

Well Riley,
first of all thanks for another great chapter. I have to admit i was a little confused at the beginning of it because chapter 28 ended with Luke chatting on Facebook and then u start with Luke's Mom trying to calm the sea after a fight between herself and Luke.
But after that i enjoyed the humor and quite frankly you did put much of it in this chapter. Getting a boner in front of a doctor is embaressing enough but in front of your own mother must be almost every boys worst nightmare - hopefully we get Luke's view of this little event in the next chapter.
As for the details of the outcome of a circumcision you really know what your writing about. There is in fact a higher sensibility right after the cut but the owner gets used to it quite fast - at least i did - in about 7 - 10 days.
Anyway thanks again and hopefully you dont let us wait to long for the next one.
Sincery Azrael

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Sorry if the transition in the chapters was a bit abrupt Azrael. Often, when writing, an author automatically fills the gap in his head, 'cos he already sees it, forgetting that readers need the picture too.

As you noticed, the chapter was meant to bring back a little humour and a breathing space in the story - and isn't it every kid's nightmare to pop a woody in front of his mother!

Yes, its absolutely true - the transition from uncut to cut can be agonisingly abrupt if one is circumcised as a young adult, but guys do get used to it and find it surprisingly good in the end.

Thanks for the review.
Riley
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Jan 13 2013 06:15 PM

(Chapter 29 Review)

Wow, how embarrassing for Luke? Poor guy. Lol.
I was in a similar predicament when I was a little younger, aged ten, and that was embarrassing enough!
And Simon's next now, good to hear that Luke suffered no permanent damage to his tackle after the fall, and that the procedure went well. Hopefully Simon' will be a similar outcome. If indeed they go ahead with it. Maybe Lucy should book her husband in and see if she can get a '3 for the price of 2' deal? He-he!
And as for the sensitivity after being circ'd, I know only too well how true that is. Very sensitive, indeed. A lot of the negative comments about the subject claim that you lose sensitivity after having one, but in my case I found the opposite to be the case. The inner-pink skin (the sensitive part) is still there, it's just now in a different position. Sort of 'inside out' so to speak.
Anywhoo...Great chapter, thanks Riley. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Poor guy and poor Mum too! Neither of them enjoyed that much!

'3 or 2' - now there's an idea! I think I might use that, Mike LOL.

I think I agree with you - circs often get a poor press, but its mostly to do with infant human rights (which is understandable), rarely because cut guys feel badly done by on how well it works afterwards.
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Jan 13 2013 12:40 PM

(Chapter 29 Review)

Hi Riley. This was a really funny chapter. I adore Luke's mom. I cannot think of even one man who would want to be in this situation with his mother. Luke is very brave. I feel bad though that Simon is going to have to go through all this too. He is young though, he will survive. It will be interesting in the coming weeks to see what happens with the boys.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I agree - poor Lucy, she was mortified! At least it seems to be over now... And if you believe that...

Thanks for the review!
Riley
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Jan 05 2013 08:31 AM

(Chapter 28 Review)

Poor Ryan. I wonder if he's ever told anyone else about what his dad did to him. I hope he and Luke work things out if only because the longer he spends with Luke's dad the better - perhaps, eventually he could tell Geoff or give Luke permission to tell him.
The last couple of chapters were hard, Riley, but, I suppose, necessary. We're not out of the woods yet, but there are grounds for optimism that it'll work out OK for the boys.
Thanks again.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

No way has he ever told ANYONE about that Low Flyer. His Mom knew, but felt powerless to really support him when he needed it. I think he does see the Summers family as a role model and it gives him hope that 'family' can work if given a chance.

You're right. Not out of the woods yet, but moving he right way.

Riley
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Jan 04 2013 12:29 AM

(Chapter 28 Review)

Whew! I'm so relieved that Ryan isn't blaming Luke and he's ready to 'fight the good fight' so to speak as far as those asses Landon and Mitchell are concerned.

But I wanted to smack Luke upside his head! What the hell was he thinking, (or apparently NOT thinking!), when he joked about both of them showing their dicks that day. Omg Luke! Just when Ryan was acting like his old self again.

I am glad Ryan told Luke what his father did to him and how it affected him when Landon was smacking him. I'm optimistic that their friendship will remain intact. Haha, not like the Klamp, lol. I actually agree with Luke's mom about going to the ER. I don't know, the pain he was feeling didn't sound so good. He wouldn't want to risk any permanent damage. :(

One thing I don't get: there are so many stories where gay boys/men, whatever, are lamenting about not being able to have kids and/or not being able to give their parents grandchildren. What's up with that? Gay couples have kids all the time; all different ways. Why would Luke think something that's so outdated, unless he isn't aware that he can in fact, have kids.

Anyway....great chapter Riley! Hope you had a great New Year! :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa. Catching up with review - and thanks for this one. Luke seems to be stumbling from one mess to another, but I'm optimistic for them too. They just need some time to calm down and let their hair down a bit.

Gay couples having kids? I hear what you say, but firstly this story is set around 10 years ago. At the same time, Luke isn't yet 16 and as a boy, can't even get his head around relationships, let alone have any idea about starting families! Few 15 year old guys - gay or not - would. I remember it...we're pretty hopeless!

Riley
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Jan 02 2013 09:20 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

This Hang thing makes waterboarding look like a day at lake. Maybe this ought to be used as a form of torture.
Poor, poor Ry. I feel for him.
Great story telling.
Oh and Happy New Year.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep - it was really bad - and hard to know now how Ryan will do in the aftermath.

Thanks for reading and reviewing - and a belated Happy New Year to you too!

Riley
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Jan 02 2013 07:04 PM

(Chapter 28 Review)

aw, why did it have to end? The chapter I mean. I could just read and read :P
And what a stark contrast between the last couple of chapters, and today's update? Such a pleasure to read.
And is it weird that the whole klamp removal scene was slightly arousing in a weird way? Hehe. I'm such a perv! Seriously.
Fantastic chapter, I needed that. :)
Can't wait for ch29.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You're too kind Mike! It's certainly a relief to see the two coming out of the crisis - though whether it's over yet is to be seen. Can Ryan really shake it all off that easily?

Poor Luke - hoisted by his own SmartKlamp! I don't think his troubles are over either!

Thanks for the review.
Riley
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Jan 02 2013 05:48 PM

(Chapter 28 Review)

Not sure if I'm a 'Hoe', but I'll drop you a note anyway. ;)
That was a bit of a relief to read. Sad, touching (no pun) and funny. Luke's character flaws, as well as his need to put his foot init make him more likeable.
I found peoples reaction to his standing by, rather than saving Ryan were interesting. You seemed to hit a raw nerve. I think everybody has been in both Ryan and or Luke's shoes in one way or another. Feeling like they were abandoned or like they should have done more.
Keep 'em coming.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

No, I agree you're not a Ho! I like what you say about the flaws in a person making them more loveable. It's so true - yet often we all try to be perfect, thinking that's what counts, even if it's not real.

I think you hit the nail on the head in the reaction readers have had to Luke. We're uneasy because we know what it's like on both sides of that coin.

Thanks for the review.

Riley
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Jan 02 2013 03:48 PM

(Chapter 28 Review)

I really love this story; I'm always on the edge of my seat waiting for something to happen. I honestly can't wait till the next chapter! :D

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Greg - glad you're enjoying it, and thanks for leaving a review. I can promise you there will still be more than a few surprises to come!

Riley
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Jan 02 2013 03:16 PM

(Chapter 28 Review)

Great update! I feel like there is hope for the relationship. I hope neither one gets involved with Jacko for some reason. I am glad Ryan confided in Luke and think maybe this is a turning point for them.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Peethree. I really hope there is 'hope' too. Not sure about Jacko. he's younger than Luke and Ryan and I don't really see anything in that way. At the same time, Jacko isn't there by accident and has a role to play in the tale, one way or another.

Thanks for the review,
Riley
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Dec 19 2012 02:31 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

I've read this twice now. I like the way we've got a glimmer of hope that Ryan be able to let his feelings for Luke, and Luke's trust in him, rise to the surface and help him recover from the trauma that was 'the hang'. I even reckon there's a bit of hope that the taking apart of the SmartKlamp could, just possibly, result in a wonderful, accidental, but deeply-wanted sexual encounter. Then again, there's plenty to go wrong on that front, too, with both guys being keen not to be seen to be gay in front of the other.
As usual - can't wait to read what happens next!
Thanks Riley for the terrific story. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I'm not sure that Luke and Ryan will have an encounter - at least not in that way. I think there's much too much pain under the surface for that. However, time will tell as to whether trust can be rebuilt.

Thanks for the review!

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 06:06 PM

(Chapter 27 Review)

Jesus.
I put off reading Broken for most of the week, for good reason. That was harrowing. I sped read my way through both and actually felt relief when the smart klamp broke. ugh.
You've knackered me out now. Going to sleep.
Cheers.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Harrowing Owain? Yes - you're not wrong! Hope you slept well, and thanks for the review.

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 04:54 PM

(Chapter 27 Review)

I was truly upset by Chapter 26 and I had to jump to the end part of Chapter 27 before reading all of it. I had to know that things would be better between Luke and Ryan.

When I become so emotionally involved in a story I give credit to the writer.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello there davewri. Thanks for the review - it's always great to hear from new readers. I wouldn't say it was over yet, but it seems to be heading in the right direction for Luke and Ryan

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 02:03 PM

(Chapter 27 Review)

I think Luke falling on the steps was the best thing that could have happened to their relationship. Ryan was understandably lashing out at Luke and I think if Luke didn't trip on the stairs and had gotten to Ryan's room, Ryan still would have yelled for him to leave.

I think they're going to be ok. Ryan didn't hesitate to come to Luke when Luke called him. He didn't tell Luke, too bad, you deserve this, I'm not helping you, see how it feels, etc., etc. He didn't hesitate to help Luke. I don't know why Luke turned on him when Ryan admitted to watching the SmartKlamp video. So what? That just shows us that Ryan really cares b/c he wanted to see what Luke was going through.

I was really pleased with Simon also. I'm glad he lashed into his brother. It doesn't matter that Luke regretted not helping Ryan, it doesn't matter that he felt so guilty; he needed to know that it wasn't ok that he didn't do anything. Deep down inside he know that Ryan would have tried to put a stop to it if the roles had been reversed. Yes, and plus Ryan saved Luke from that humiliation.

And Landon and Mitchell: they're a bunch of assholes. Landon just brushes it off as if it were nothing; as if he didn't humiliate and disgrace a "friend" in front ot so many people. He thinks Ryan will be fine? He thinks Ryan will just forgive him? He's delusional.

Terrific chapter Riley! Now I can breathe a sigh of relief, for now anyway, that Ryan is at least talking to Luke. Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I think you're right Lisa. If Luke hadn't fallen then there may well have been no future. Even now, it's not yet over. With the video, I think that Luke was just a bit surprised, that's all. He has no idea how interested Ryan really is.

Landon…delusional? You bet!

Next chapter is just a few clicks away!

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 11:56 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

you know me... i have been following this story since last year. Grant it... It's no where near the chapter that it was last year but oh well. A good/great read anyway. The detail and the imaginery that you have put into this chapter, not including other's. It's wonderful, i know a few people that were "hung" but they came back from the humilation of it... Great friends stick with you until the end, even then it goes beyond that... Ry, for his sake took the bullet for a friend. But he didnt expect what happened to him, did. At least he is still the caring friend. Also it helps that he loves Luke. :)
Keep'em coming.
Remijay <3

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Hi Remijay. Thanks for the thoughts. Like you, I hope the two of them can get past this. Glad you're enjoying the read!

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 10:05 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

Ok Riley. You fixed it and did it wonderfully. Its almost like Karma said " haha kiddo! gotcha back!" I am glad that Luke and Ryan were not seriously hurt. It will take time for the boys to come back together but Ryan helped Luke when he needed it. He is still in his heart so there is a chance. Luke said the one thing that will give them a chance. Luke admitted he needed him. Ryan will need him too and hopefully know it shortly. They will be ok though. One day at a time.
P.S. You are for serious going to have to like send these two to Disney, or Six Flags. Maybe Comic-con or something. Hell right now I would settle for them just going out for an ice cream cone! Keep up the good work dearest and I will be right here waiting for the next chapter... Well maybe not right here because I have to eat left over dinner from last night. :thumbup:

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Fixed? Maybe…maybe not. AT least they are talking Carrie, and that's a start. And maybe you're right, a time will come where Ryan will need Luke again. Let's hope he doesn't get let down.

You think they should go to Disney? It's a thought - let me know why…and thanks for the review!

Riley
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Dec 16 2012 05:15 AM

(Chapter 27 Review)

* Re posted*
I'm still feeling angry about the chapter before last, though I need to clarify that I was angry at the events that unfolded. Not at the story itself, or the author. I genuinely love the story, and I had up until that point also really liked Luke. I think I still do, but he made a big mistake, or more appropriately didn't act on something he should have. I also think it's cause I've really taken to Ryan. Perhaps more so than any other character in both the story, and all the other stories I've read over the years. I can just really connect with him. I hope he continues to be a part of the story in some shape or another.
His actions to helping Luke after that awful fall, cement my feelings even more. Despite still hurting physically and emotionally from "the hang" and feeling betrayed by his best friend and his other friends, he still managed to put all that aside when Luke needed his help.
Onto Luke, I'm in two minds, I'll probably know how I feel, better as the story progresses. Though I do hope there's no serious damage to his 'member' after the fall. I feared the worse until they had managed to examine it. He might not have acted the way he should have, but he's not a bad person. Now Landon? I really hopes he gets his. He sooo deserves knocking down a peg or two.
Cheers, Riley. :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Mike - thanks for transferring your review onto the properly published chapter. Though you couldn't say it was completely his fault, it's a complete mess that Luke has ended up with. With the benefit of hindsight, none of us - and least of all him - feel he's done what he should. And he may still pay the price for what was a terrible betrayal.

And Ryan? How he does it, I've no idea, but like you, I hope he can move on.

Thanks.

Riley
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Dec 12 2012 08:34 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

I wanted to say what a great story you have written in “An English Teen, Circumcised in the USA”. I discovered it on a Saturday, and could barely tear myself away from it to go to sleep so that I could begin reading again on Sunday. I just moved, so I had plenty of things that I should have been doing, but I couldn’t bear not knowing what happened next in the characters’ lives.
Let me say now, after having read Chapter 26, “Broken”, I wish that I wouldn’t have discovered the story until it was completed! I don’t think that I have ever read anything faster than the words of that chapter, devouring it in order to discover what happened next to poor Ryan. You skillfully sucked me into the story until I was emotionally invested in the characters, and it is terrible to now have to wait for the next chapter to see how Ryan reacts to the horrible molestation that he suffered!
I had to get hold of myself after I was finished with the chapter, because it caused a darkness in my heart and soul as I mourned Ryan’s mistreatment and betrayal. I had to mentally shake myself as I actually said aloud, “The characters are fictional, and the situation is not real, dammit, so snap out of it!”
I think that the obvious thought that occurs to any reader who empathizes with a character is a story is, “What would I do in (in this case) Ryan’s place? If he retreats from the world as much as possible, quits tennis, lets his grades at school go, broods in his room; he is bound to run into his abusive father. I don’t think that there would be any tolerance of that kind of behavior from his dad. How would his father respond if he learned of the hazing, especially the sexual aspects of it? Would he say, “Chin up and take it like a man!” or would he see the sexual assault of his son as a personal violation of himself? Since Ryan obviously is made of “strong stuff” due to his survival of his father’s abuse, maybe he will stuff his emotions inside and put on a brave face.
However, you did choose to name the chapter “Broken”, and I suspect that you didn’t use that title capriciously. You even described the moment at which Ryan went over the emotional precipice, and was broken.
I hope that you won’t let any of your tender-hearted readers (of which I am one) influence you to sugar-coat Ryan’s response so that he will be “all better” now. You’ve written a very compelling drama here, and I hope that you will portray the ugly consequences that result from the terrible things that Ryan has endured. I completely agree with other reviewers that Luke doesn’t deserve Ryan since he made no move to go get a teacher! He even allowed his own lust and curiosity at seeing Ryan masturbated to cause him to let the abuse continue! With friends like him, who needs enemies?
Thank you for sharing your talents, and for the emotional roller coaster ride! Please don’t be too long in continuing the story. It was really great reading it all in one go over an almost non-stop period of three days! I hope I can continue to read it while the characters and events are still fresh in my mind. Great work Riley! Really great!

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Ferd - and firstly, welcome to the story! Secondly, thanks for taking the time to write such an extensive review to give your perspective on what you see.

Mistreatment - and worse - betrayal. These really are ways to hurt people and I think we all felt the darkness of that, seeing it in a person that has enough to deal with in life without pouring on more fuel.

You have two really great questions. How is Ryan going to react to this and secondly, if it was me, how would I fare? I said in an earlier review that it frequently amazes me how much some people bear in life that, if I were in their shoes, would snap me in two like a twig! Yet everyone has a breaking point. Have we reached Ryan's? Is there a future for him and Luke? Some have questioned why I revealed that Ryan was gay a couple of chapters back. Why not leave that to the moment where we would hope Luke would find out that Ryan could be the love of his life and all would be sweet?

Other than on Nifty, life's not like that though, is it. And I told you that Ryan was gay, because, actually, that's not the story. So what is?

There really are going to be consequences to this. There have to be. Can there still be a friendship for Luke and Ryan? Only time will tell.

Thanks again for your review.

Riley
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Dec 10 2012 03:51 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

I am conflicted with this chapter. On one hand the violence tempered by the humiliation inflicted on Ryan makes me sick, however the fact that your writing conveys such strong feelings and responses is a credit to its power an impact. It is even more powerful given that it is a fairly long chapter that sustains the feelings and tension within a single prolonged scene. So even if I personally don't seek out or appreciate this amount of violence, I was moved by its force and its emotion. On a lighter note,time will tell if Luke was the one to call out that Benson was coming and has redeemed himself a little.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Was it Luke who called out that the Principal was there? We hope so, but…

Thanks for the way you've reviewed the chapter. My intention has always been to convey the force of emotion and the terrible pain of a victim. It was difficult, I know. Thanks for the review on it.

Riley
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Dec 09 2012 08:21 PM

(Chapter 8 Review)

We now see that Luke and Elliot have had their first sighting of each other. That was an interesting tactic used there by Elliot. Smooth and not to obvious, lol....who are we kidding??...He intentionally and blatantly pulled his shirt up to be flirty and a tease to Luke. I am guessing that quite some time has passed for Elliot. I just don't see him being like that unless quite a bit of time has passed and he has learned to live with the pain of his loss.

ps... :( I must not be a very good 'gay boy' as I don't have an iPhone LOL ;)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Ah - you've found Elliott at last! Yes, it's a few years on since ISH, but where he fits in ET is yet to be told. A tease? You bet it had to be!

Riley
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Dec 09 2012 03:17 AM

(Chapter 26 Review)

That was just horrible. How can anyone of those kids think that that was ok? The spanking? Landon was really getting into it. The kids were all laughing. It was horrific that these kids are so immoral. They don't know right from wrong. Yeah, I can see a simple wedgie; I've been hearing about those for years, but this, this Hang, is appalling.

I ditto wildone: I would hope to God that Luke was grinning and laughing at Riley's distress. I hope it was just Riley's poor state of mind that thought he saw Luke grinning, but really didn't. But I gotta tell you Riley, I am extremely disappointed in Luke. I can see where he knew whatever he would have said to try to get those guys to stop the Hang would fly over deaf ears, but when Landon starting spanking Ryan, that should have been the point where Luke screamed at them to stop. Then he should have high-tailed it out of there and found a teacher. And the teachers; what the fuck is up with them? It seemed like those boys were in the bathroom for HOURS. Didn't any teachers roaming the halls HEAR ALL THE FRIGGEN NOISE IN THE BATHROOM???

And you know, I wouldn't blame Ryan if he never talked to Luke again. I know that it wasn't Luke's fault that these Neanderthals started the Hang, but he could have stopped it. He could have gotten someone from the staff, anonymously and the boys in the bathroom wouldn't know it was him who ratted them out. I am so disappointed in Luke. He did not step up to the plate. He was no best friend to Ryan. And Ryan took all this shit trying to fucking protect Luke! Gah, I'm so angry.

Anyway....I also noticed in other chapters, but in this chapter in particular, that you like to use the term 'safe hands' or 'in safe hands' a few times throughout the chapter. Just reminds me of poor, sweet Miguel......you torture me Riley. lol

It's three a.m. but I'm so distressed over this chaper I gotta read something funny. Damn you.lol

Please hurry up and update; I wanna make sure Ryan isn't going to retreat inside his head and shut everyone out. And agreeing with Rebel's review, I hope that Ryan doesn't suffer psychological damage. I can definitely see his spirit breaking; he has a horrible home life and school and his friends were the only things keeping him sane. Now all his friends are mocking him and he feels that he lost Luke as a best friend due to his "grinning" and inactions, so what else is there to live for?

Ok,I'm gonna shut up now. =)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Lisa - hope you've calmed down a bit! Yep, it was truly horrible - made worse by the knowledge that this kind of stuff actually goes on in our schools.

Luke has messed up so bad here and rightly feels complicit in what was done to Ryan. Will Ryan ever speak to him again? I don't think I would! Maybe they are totally stuffed now? Worse, you wonder if Ryan will even get over it.

In Safe Hands? Trust me on this - the words are not accidental!

Riley
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Dec 08 2012 02:12 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

i remember this chapter. i know it wasnt easy to write. Let alone read after it was finished. But some things have to be written. It fiils in the story with more depth... Now, if i was put into the situation like that, i wouldnt allow myself to become hard. I'm glad that i have controll over something like that :) Anyway, what happened to Ry is what happens when you take a fall for a friend. You never know the outcome until its finished. I also remember the next chapter. :) Great chapter btw, Remijay

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep - it's true - you can never know what tomorrow will bring! Whether it will be enough is hard to tell. Thanks for the review.

Riley
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Dec 08 2012 05:49 AM

(Chapter 26 Review)

I forgot how close to the edge(over the edge) this went. As others have noted your skill at dragging Ryan and us to this point will move us as well as Luke and Ryan on. I hope the subsequent chapters are posted soon so we and Ryan are not long kept in this horrid place. Thanks for all your work. Pax.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for this review and also for the entry in the discussion thread. Things have gone so badly wrong here, and you have to wonder if there is any way back for a friendship between Ryan and Luke?

Riley
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Dec 08 2012 12:23 AM

(Chapter 26 Review)

Don't understand where that came from -- seem like gratuitous violence and out of context for this story -- just to "sex" up and otherwise sturdy story.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

To be honest wecs, I don't think there was anything remotely sexy about what just happened.

Nor did it just come out of nowhere, I'm afraid. Stuff like this goes on in our schools - particularly boys only schools like the Academy. I don't doubt it was violent; the contrast between this and the last chapter is marked. One sounds fun and a bit of a laugh, the second is the agony of the victim. And I think we all felt it deeply because of how much we've invested into the characters over the last chapters.

In it all, thanks for being willing to give a review to say what you think.

Riley
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Dec 07 2012 11:04 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

Wow, that was painful to read even though I wasn't there :(

I do have to admit that I didn't really understand what the 'hanging' was with all the explanation from the last chapter. Now, sadly, I do understand and wish I didn't. The fact that Ryan really has so much against him in life with his parents, his hidden sexuality and now to be exposed as ridiculed as not being 'adequate' (high school term, not mine), this may have been the straw to break the camels back.

I feel Luke was the one that yelled about the principle. I hope that Ryan in his distress looking to see Luke smiling was just that a delusion.

Yes what the other students did was illegal and criminal, the scary thing is until recently things like this went on (and sadly still do) in fraternity froshing and I'm sure some schools have the same initiating freshmen in High School.

Am I mad at you Riley...No. As an author you have pushed your characters and your audience to a dangerous precipice, now we will see what happens to ease everyone down gently. I am confident that you will do this for all of us :hug: .

People would argue it should be toned down but I need to see the chapter in the entire context of the story before I make any such judgement.

Thanks for the chapter Riley :hug: ....... I think ;)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

The truth is, anyone can break, Mike. Yet what constantly amazes me is how much some people bear in life that, if it were me, would snap me in two like a twig! Does stuff like this still go on? Of course it does - and I think that, because nastiness, though it mode stay hidden, doesn't go out of fashion! Luke's complicity is a mess and who called out that the principal was there is unknown just now.

Well - you're right - things are teetering on the edge of a long fall. Is it really possible to get through it? Only time will tell - but thanks for being willing to wait and see what the next chapters bring.

Riley
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Dec 07 2012 10:05 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

I have to admit that I only scanned these last two chapters. It was just too brutal for me to read in detail.

This incident is the stuff of lifelong psychological complications and definitely took this story down a dark path. Ryan was sexually harassed and almost raped by bullies. I know that they won't go to anyone higher up but even reading about a fictional event like this had me at a rage. Thank god a bystander screamed that the principal was coming. It broke the mob mentality and reminded them that what just happened was too far.

I want Landon to suffer. I could see someone actually killing the bullies and a lot of innocent bystanders because of the hang. Please don't let it come to that.

Finally, I will definitely continue to read your updates but if this is a tragedy then let us know. I don't read tragedies.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I agree, it was awful. Worse with the knowledge that these kinds of things actually have happened in our schools. You're right to be in a rage about it Rebelghost! Somebody shouted out, but who that was isn't clear yet.

The story is a long way from being over, and there's good and bad still to come. It's all I can tell you.

Riley
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Dec 07 2012 06:45 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

That was so hard to read and almost like the wreck on the side of the road you can't look away from. I hope Luke can help Ryan get his self confidence back. Poor Ryan having to deal with this humiliation on top of a painful homelife. Reading this was painful.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks for the picture - the wreck on the side of the road that you can't look away from. Apt! I don't really think Ryan wants to talk to Luke just now. Would you?

Riley
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Dec 07 2012 05:43 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

That was painful to read. If I had my way, every one of those little twats would be rounded up and publicly tormented and humiliated ten times worse than what Ryan just had to endure.
There's schoolboy pranks, and then there's ganging up and bullying someone who's defenseless. I don't see much difference in what they did, and molestation, and in a way, it was. Molested and humiliated for their sick pleasure. And Luke *grinning*? I expected better from him.
He doesn't deserve Ryan. :(

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

It's so hard, when you feel you know somebody, and they go and let you down. I agree about Luke - he's really messed up...and that's almost worse than the nasty stuff from those you expect it from!

Now we have to see if there is any way back...

Thanks for sticking with it Mike

Riley.
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Dec 07 2012 02:29 PM

(Chapter 26 Review)

RILEY! Grr. Poor Ryan. Luke will help him pick up the pieces if Ryan will let him. I just hope Ryan lets him. That was a hard chapter to read but true, you didn't promise it would be easy. I don't think a story would be good if it was all sunshine and roses. I am still mad at you though. Posted Image Post the next chapter so I can get unmad at you. Posted Image ( p.s. It was still awesome and you are still wonderful.)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You wouldn't be human not to be mad, Carrie. You're right, it was a hard chapter. Bullying in any form gets me steamed. People can really get hurt. The question is, will Ryan come through this ? I guess we wait and see...

As always, thanks for the faithful reviews!
Riley
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Dec 03 2012 07:40 PM

(Chapter 25 Review)

Riley if memory serves you have expanded this section and made it clear that this is a tradition at the school and perhaps a bit more understandable as such. I would hate to be hung but you have made both the tradition and the terror very real. I continue to love your writing and am glad to see you moving along with the story. Thanks as always for your work. Pax

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there - long time, no hear! Thanks for checking in, it's always great to get a note from you.

That was my thought exactly when it came to setting up a 'tradition'. It seems a clearer context. I have to confess that I'm still nervous about losing readers over it though though. Time will tell.

Riley
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Dec 03 2012 11:11 AM

(Chapter 25 Review)

Those kids are ruthless! Omg, how mortifying! Poor Ryan. This whole thing started when he was protecting Luke from being found out with his SmartKlamp, right? I sure hope Ryan doesn't blame Luke. I hope he's not angry with him.I do think that Luke should have made more of an effort to stop this. Even though he couldn't stop it, he should have tried, b/c at least then Ryan would know that Luke was on his side. You know what I mean?

I hope Ryan isn't so embarrassed that he's going to avoid Luke now. I mean how humiliating is it to know the boy you're crushing on, who happens to be your best friend, is watching you?

Ah, I'm on pins and needles Riley! Great job! :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Well, I think we can be sure that Ryan has just been dropped in it! Poor kid indeed - and you have to feel for him more knowing that, as you say, he got there because of wanting to give Luke a get-out clause!

There's going to be lots of regrets after this - not the least from Luke who, as you note, is being a a pig by sitting on the sidelines and letting it happen.

Thanks for the review,
Riley
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Dec 02 2012 10:02 PM

(Chapter 25 Review)

Just dragging out the agony, for Ryan, Luke and your readers. Can't wait to see where this goes. This story could have been trite and it is so very good. thanks

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I hope you can be sure of one thing Roadrunner - the story won't go where you expect! Thanks for the kind words and review!

Riley
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Dec 02 2012 12:06 PM

(Chapter 25 Review)

Poor Ryan. :(
Those kids are brutal! Lol. There's no way I'd be forced to 'spill my seed' in front of a crowd of hooligans. Lol
When 'hanging' wedgie was first mentioned, it made me think of someone who's hanging on a hook or something from the back of their underwear. The 'hanging wedgie' in this one is ten times worse, hehehe.
Thanks Riley. :)
Oh, btw. I see there's a LondonLolly FB page on Facebook...Any relation? :P

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

LondonLolly? Of course - that's Luke!

The Hang is pretty brutal. The truth is, schools are not always places of safety for kids, despite what the authorities believe and what parents hope!

Thanks for the review Mike.
Riley
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Nov 28 2012 09:52 PM

(Chapter 6 Review)

Still loving the story although I must admit. I don't see the big deal that Luke is making over all this circumcision thing. Maybe its just me. I do tend to be a live and let live kinda of guy though. Each to their own! I also think Luke and Ryan would make a rather cute couple :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Luke is definitely getting into a knot about circumcision. I think his problem is that it's becoming unhelpful lay intertwined with his feelings of attraction for guys - and Ryan in particular. At the same time, he has a point - when you've been dragged away from 'home' the last thing you want is to keep feeling left out.

We'll have to see about him and Ryan

Thanks for the review
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Nov 28 2012 07:44 PM

(Chapter 4 Review)

A rather interesting thought. Could both brothers be gay? That would certainly put a twist to the family. Again I'm loving the closeness of the brothers in this story. The respect and confidence they have in each other. Maybe Luke should confide in Simon his possible feelings for his best friend. Maybe that is for another day. We'll see.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Who knows about what route either brother will take. Gay or not, it's quite a journey! I don't think Luke is anywhere near opening up about what HE thinks yet, though. Glad to see your review.

Riley
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Nov 28 2012 05:17 PM

(Chapter 2 Review)

Three years since the Summers family has emigrated - so Luke must be 15 years old. 'K, just had to get my bearing ;)
I appreciate the background info, i.e. contrasting Brittain with the US, bringing us to "the world of the circumcised dick":
Had to laugh about the description of the clipped willy's in the school showers, and I must add that in my country it is - or maybe nowadays was - just the other way around when we were younger. It used to be the clipped ones that were the odd ones out Posted Image Talk about cultural differences heh
Lucy to Geoff, "Luke seems to think he needs to be circumcised" (my italics). Yikes! From what I've gathered so far is that poor Luke is the one in dire need to be circumcised, and maybe Luke's dad should not have repeated his gramp's quip of "If it's not bust, don't fix it!" I find it slightly difficult to accept that Luke's folks - or at least his dad - didn't try to do a physical fatherly check-up. Really...
And if I may add, clipping is definitely not the one and only argument for "health and wholesomeness" downstairs. Proper parental instruction/education for young ones will allow them to remain not only intact but healthy and clean as well. 'K, I guess I've belaboured this specific point by now :P Anyways, so far I really enjoy this story tremendously - just a bit of soliloquy-ing going on in my skull-congregation whilst enjoying this read Posted Image
Ta stax for sharing with us, Riley Posted Image

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi again Rano. Yep, Luke is definitely getting fascinated with the uncovered
glans! Like in your country, he would hardly ever see one in the UK. His Dad is probably right, but there more at stake for Luke here than is at first apparent. Again, you have to relies they are Brits. Some things you just don't talk about!

Thanks for the review,
Riley
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Nov 28 2012 12:48 AM

(Chapter 3 Review)

Interesting story so far. Quite a unique subject being discussed as well. I'm loving the closeness of the brothers and no I'm not speaking of the bedroom scene between them. I'm speaking of the closeness they have with talking and being able to share. The mom seems a bit high strung but rather nicely balanced by the dad's laid back attitude. I think this will be an interesting ride reading this story. One I will thoroughly enjoy. Looking forward to the next chapters.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there! I think you're right about their mum - needs to make sure everything is right for her kids! Glad yo've started the read and I'm looking forward to hearing your take on the chapters.

Thanks for reviewing.
Riley
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Nov 26 2012 01:54 PM

(Chapter 24 Review)

Ouch, poor Ryan, I can't wait to see how this turns out. Keep the awesome chapters coming!!! :D

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Yep - big ouch! I certainly wouldn't like to be Ry just now! Thanks for the review!
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Nov 26 2012 11:21 AM

(Chapter 1 Review)

Seems to me I'm lagging behind the crowd, but here I am to offer my off-beat (?) opinion of this very interesting prologue. I must admit that it would have taken me much longer to open this story-file if it was not that I've enjoyed Riley's In Safe Hands just recently...
Firstly let me state that in this very first installment there is quite a clear object lesson for any male who has not been circumcised Posted Image
It's amazing how often one hear of menfolk who are in need of surgery just because they have not been taught by their parents to retract their foreskins and clean appropriately when the have a bath or shower - if this simple routine has been instilled from childhood, how could there ever be occasion for such drastic measures of wiggling some cold chrome instruments under the cav of the patient? It's rather beyond me that Luke did not know that 'under ther' actually existed! Really - and this is not meant judgmentally at all. So much more reason for a socalled enlightened age to arrive properly where there ain't no bashfulness or false modesty not to want to tallk aobut these essential personal hgiene "tricks" that needs to be administered on a daily basis. And, yes, hoping against hope that all "untouched" gaylings reading this story will take note. Who ever would have thought that GA could be the ideal primer in many respects for many dirrerent kind of readers Posted Image
In closing, I really appreciated that bit about nothing on but his t-shirt and socks! Me thinx its rather sexy Posted Image
Ta stax, Riley, for - what I can allready feel in my bones - is going to be another great story Posted Image

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there Rano - and welcome to ET!
There's certainly some things that will come out in regards to circumcision, though the story is much much more than that. Should Luke have known about retracting foreskins? Possibly not if his very British patents didn't think to have it checked. One of the strings to the tale is the differences in cultures - even between countries that - nearly - speak the same language?

Thanks for reviewing - and hope you keep at it!
Riley
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Nov 25 2012 07:48 PM

(Chapter 24 Review)

Man, Luke better think of something to get, (or give, lol), Ryan; Luke owes Ryan big time for this! He sacrificed his own red undies to save Luke from being injured himself. I hope Luke realizes this. But what the hell does "HANG HIM!" mean? Now I'm really worried for Ryan!

I really love Mel! I thought it was great that she bonded, (ha, watching Bond, hehe, sorry, couldn't resist), so well with Luke. Luke liked her so much he couldn't be jealous. Glad though that Ryan cleared up the whole 'not dating Mel thing' for Luke.

One thing that bothered me though was when Luke and Ryan first got in the bathroom.Luke told Ryan that he had called him the day before and Ryan acted like he didn't know that and shrugged. Well, you would think if someone is crushing on someone else, and that someone else called, you would think this person would call the other person back asap. Why did he act so nonchalant about it? Even if he didn't know, (no caller ID, or whatever), why didn't he act more sorry? I don't know; it just seemed like Ryan didn't care.

Also loved the Jacko reference! I didn't realize it ALSO had to do with the Jackson Five! lol I'm slow that way. =)

Something else I'm really curious about Riley. I know that it's been a few years, (I forgot how many; at least four or five, right?), since Luke's family moved the the states. I was just wondering why he hasn't taken up any like American terms. Such as: loo for bathroom, queuing for waiting in line, note for money, can't think of any others off the top of my head,oh, revision for studying, but that wasn't in this chapter. Anyway, I know when I went to school in Boston, I was talking like a true Bostonian even years after I came back home. So I guess I'm wondering why Luke is speaking more like an American after being here for that long. Just curious....

Anyway, can't wait to find out what's gonna happen to Ryan! :) It better be nothing bad.....

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Indeed - what does HANG HIM mean, Lisa.

No real Jackson Five I'm afraid - just a writers tease!
With Ryan, you have to remember that he's totally paranoid at being labelled for what he is. Perhaps if he discovered the call late in the day - particularly if alike had said what it was about - he might have decided to leave it be.

Finally - why does Luke speak so many English-isms? That's a good question. Firstly, there's the saying 'you can take the guy off the island, but not the island out of the guy!' Secondly - am more important - you're making an assumption as to where Luke is living when he writes his notes. The actual events happened a good ten years ago. Don't assume Luke still lives in Atlanta, or has done for some time!

Thanks for the great questions.
Riley
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Nov 25 2012 12:10 AM

(Chapter 24 Review)

Ryan showing his love for Luke by getting wedgied, but will Luke escape the same peril? Can't wait until the next chapter to find out.
OK! So I just finished reading the last four chapters at once and a lot has transpired.
Simon and Tobey finally 'find' each other and consumate their love.
Toby tells Simon that his mother already knows about him and she's fine with it but Simon won't allow Toby to tell her about Simon. I kinda wish that Toby would have talked Simon into allowing him (Toby) to tell his (Tobys) mother about them being together. It would have allowed Simon to be a little freer while at the Skerrits house.
We learn a little more about Ryans abusive father, and the rest of his home life.
I take umbrage at how you seemed to paint the Alexis family as being 'All American' what with Captain Alexis being all controling, brash and manipulative. That is not the embodiment of the 'All American' family because you find people like Capt' Alexis in all cultures.
On to Ryan being gay. I was hoping this was the case and I hope that he and Luke "find each other".
Mel is a pretty awesome big sister to Ryan. So nice he needs someone to talk to.
Um can't wait to see Lukes klamp get removed. You did such an awedome job detailing his circumcision that I felt like it was me getting one, and I'm already circumcised.
Nuff said.
Still like the story and the author even if he ticks me off every once in awhile.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Hector - apologies for ticking you off! On the other hand, not all cultures ARE the same. For example, many Asian cultures are built around the concept of shame and a need to show respect. I don't think we would expect to keep our heads lower than our boss/leaders in the west! In the states, anyone can become president if they have enough personal power and drive, whereas tribal cultures in many parts of Africa would think that concept totally ridiculous! Leaders are not made that way.

Anyway - Simon and Toby have figured a few things out, but there are still some unknowns there. Mel's really great, isn't she - like you say, and awesome big sis!

Just the Klamp to go then? But you know it won't be as easy as that!

Thanks for the really good review!
Riley
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Nov 24 2012 02:10 PM

(Chapter 24 Review)

I agree, the 'wedgie war' scene was awesome! Lol.
I'm so happy for Toby and Si, though I won't count my chickens quite yet. As often the case in romance, things can change, and suddenly, especially young love. Still, I'm really happy for them both.
The day is almost upon Luke, a moment he's been waiting years for. I hope he's happy with the results.
I also loved the exchange between Luke and Mel. I found it pretty amusing.
Also worth noting is Ryan willingly sacrificing himself to the wedgie for Luke's benefit. I only hope that Luke realized it.
The more I read about Ryan, the more I'm liking him. He's a good guy and a great friend to Luke.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

You're spot on there, Mike. Life can throw a curve ball pretty quickly. Luke has one more day left, but Ryan has picked up a wedgie. Will it turn out to be a sacrifice he was happy to make?

Thanks for the great review.
Riley
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Nov 24 2012 12:02 PM

(Chapter 24 Review)

I love this story. The wedgie battle killed me. That was just too damn funny. It seemed like Ryan took one for the team there because Luke is still all Klampified. What a good friend. I liked the tone of this chapter too. It moved the story forward very nicely and it was like a peek into every day life. Good job on that. I sure can't wait to see what happens next.
Simon and Toby are just the cutest little guys too. The funniest part is for being the youngest little imps, they seem to have figured out what they want and how to get it. Awesome.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Carrie - well what comes next might not be what you or Ryan expect and whether taking one for the team turned out to be a good idea. Simon and Toby are still quite early in a relationship, so you're right, they have a lot of figuring to do.

Thanks for reviewing.

Riley
PS Klampified? Nice!
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Nov 24 2012 12:01 PM

(Chapter 24 Review)

Things aren't looking good. Wedgies can be cruel and physically dangerous. I hope nothing too terrible happens to Ryan.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Wedgies can be a nightmare...but that's the least of Ryan's problems! I agree, Wedgies can be cruel. Often what is behind them can be worse.
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Nov 24 2012 11:47 AM

(Chapter 24 Review)

I remember this chapter, along with the chapter that follows... I do indeed agree with NInecila, poor Ryan =\ But all is well after awhile... Very good at detail, i see you still have it. I love reading this story it's entertaining and funny at times.
Keep'em coming.
Remijay

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Thanks Remijay. Yep, we all feel for Ryan! Things are not looking so good for him! Appreciate the review.
Riley
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Nov 24 2012 06:47 AM

(Chapter 24 Review)

Oh boy, poor Ryan!
But I wouldhave thought Lukes appointment to get the clamp Remonde would have been on monday.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Poor Ryan indeed! Nope - it was in an earlier chapter after the operation, the doc had to make it Tuesday as he had no slots on the Monday.
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Nov 22 2012 12:23 PM

(Chapter 23 Review)

Oh Riley Riley! What a fantastic chapter! Although I am really saddened by Ryan's home life. I feel so bad for him.

And my mouth dropped open when I read that Ryan prefers guys! Holy shit! And Mel, (who I already adore), likes girls! AND SHE'S DATING DR. T'S DAUGHTER!!!!!! Double holy shit!

I have a feeling that Luke is gonna think that Ryan and Mel are together. I hope it doesn't turn out that it's gonna break Luke's heart. Mel has to figure out a way to hint to Luke about Ryan. I don't want Luke thinking that Ryan and Mel are together and then is going to be so depressed and it'll totally ruin the evening.

Now to the beginning of the chapter: I so love Toby's mom! She's a pisser! "Are you decent?" So she's expecting Toby to be naked all night with Simon? lol "And maybe you can open the windows!" Omg, she is funny! :) Subtle, huh?

Another awesome chapter Riley! I'm really looking forward to their night out! :2thumbs:

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Always great to hear from you Lisa! You're right, Ryan seems to have trouble piled all over him one way or another. Let's hope he holds up. Mel and Ella - yep that was quite a surprise. It'll be interesting to see what that means for Luke.

Glad you like Toby's mom - and surely you must know how important it is to open the windows! However, she has no idea that Simon and her son are in a relationship…yet!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Riley
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Nov 22 2012 06:30 AM

(Chapter 23 Review)

OK, some of the obstacles are out of the way. Toby and Simon are together and Ryan is just as much in love with Luke as Luke is with Ryan. I'm relying on Mel to make one or other (or both) of them see sense at the cinema this evening.

Thanks for another great chapter.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Yep, Simon and Toby are together. We'll have to see where that goes. Will Mel get them together at the cinema? Mmmm - who knows. She really wants to meet Luke, though I'm not sure she would drop Ryan in it.

Glad you enjoyed this one!
Riley
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Nov 20 2012 12:04 AM

(Chapter 23 Review)

If you could only see the smile on my face when Ryan said that Mel was the only person other than himself that knew he liked guys :D

Wow, in the past 3 chapters we've had Simon finding out that Toby is gay, like him and getting to fool around. Then we had the whole Ryan and Luke in Luke's bedroom scene with Luke boning up. Now we find out that the love of Luke's life, Ryan is gay too. I just so hope that Luke and Ryan figure each others out sooner than later :) Hopefully Mel can help out with that. I guess the only thing that could make that happen for sure is if Mel shows up with her girlfriend to the movies and Luke is shall we say...taken aback when he realizes that Ryan knows the person who painted his dick for him :P

Great chapter Riley! Thanks for posting :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Steve! You're right, things have really moved along fast. Ryan is gay, but is that the end of the story? I don't think so. Will Mel say anything at the movies that makes a connection for Luke? Well, we'll have to see, but I don't think she'd let down Ryan. She's not like that. Next chapter coming out soon!

Thanks for the review!
Riley
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Nov 19 2012 05:31 PM

(Chapter 23 Review)

I am thoroughly addicted to the story; I am literally shaking with suspense because I so badly want to find out what happens next. This chapter and all the previous ones have been excellent, and I recommend this story to anyone and everyone who comes across this, you won't be disappointed.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Purple - it's always really great to hear from a new reader; even more so that you're enjoying it so much. Don't shake too much because the next chapter is coming shortly. Keep reading - and I'd love it if you joined those who kept reviewing. All of you really help me!

Thanks for the review and all the recommendations!

Riley
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Nov 19 2012 12:20 PM

(Chapter 23 Review)

I was worried about some of the foreshadowing earlier and I'm glad the we've gotten that out of the way. Now the hard part is going to be seeing Ryan deal with the homophobia of his father.

A quick question: is this pre or post DODT? It might make things easier for Ryan if it were post.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi there again. Thanks for the review, though not sure what DODT is. Message me! What will the foreshadowing mean…I'm leaving you guessing at that.

Riley
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Nov 19 2012 09:52 AM

(Chapter 23 Review)

:::Kermit arm flail::: Yay! Ryan is gay! Good for Luke. I was sad to find out about his home life being perfect but it will all work out. This chapter was really funny with the addition of Mel and the whole Gizzy watching thing. Man, cats sit on the floor and lick their own behinds but then they judge what humans do for fun. I just don't get it. It just totally cracked me up though. This chapter was a turning point chapter though, it was one that lets you peep around the bend. I just hope there is something good coming for the boys. Simon and Toby are really going to have a lot to deal with in the future. I think Luke will help them too. This chapter was fun and I can't wait for the next.
Oh and the whole Hitchhiker parts? Floored me. I have more than one yelled Don't Panic at a meeting at work and I am also very likely to yell out So long, and thanks for all the fish! As well.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hello Carrie - now you've got over your Kermit flailing, it's great to hear from another HitchHikers fan! As you say, we get to peep around the corner a bit. Simon and Toby have lots of things to work out, and Ryan is gay. But, as you might guess, there is probably a lot more to the tale than discovering that. Remember, whatever happens, 'DON'T PANIC!'

Riley
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Nov 19 2012 04:23 AM

(Chapter 23 Review)

Oh my... I LOVED this chapter.
There's so much to say I'll probably forget some of it.
First of all, this one was huge! A pleasant surprise and kept me busy for a good half hour.
Oh and, omigod! Ryan's gay?!? Yes! That's awesome news for Luke then. :)
The attention to detail in this one I think is unmatched by any previous chapter. I really enjoyed the glimpse into Ryan's home life. And still he continues to amaze me, despite having lots to complain about, or feel down about, he's so positive in his outlook on things. How he deals with an overbearing father figure, a distant alcoholic dependent mother, being an only child, hiding his true sexuality from almost everyone, and coming up fairly 'short changed' in the trouser department. And having a huge crush on his 'straight' best friend, Luke. (His perspective) it's like he still manages to see the bright side of things.
Oh and of course then there's Ella and Mel! I remember that Luke mentioned in his notes that Ella would be a person to reappear in his life again at a later time, but I never would have guessed like this, lol.
I think that's it. Except just to thanks, Riley. I loved the chapter!
Mike

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Hi Mike - it took you half and hour to read? I bet you read it twice! Yep - Ryan likes guys and this was definitely the chapter where we find out more about him. You're right in saying he has a lot to deal with in life - anyone of which teens of his age would find a struggle. He seems to cope with it all well on the outside.

Ella and Mel - well there's a surprise. YOu have to wonder where that will lead!

Thanks for the review!

Riley
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Nov 16 2012 03:32 AM

(Chapter 22 Review)

We came so close to the double there. If only Luke could find in Ryan what Simon's found in Toby. Well, there's time yet and who's to say that Ryan isn't as nervous as Luke. Until you've done it a few times and have a solid set of friends to support you, it can be a daunting prospect.
Looking forward to the next instalment - thanks again.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Of course, we have no idea about Ryan at all. He could be a red herring! Good thought about needing good friends behind you. I'll drink to that!

Thanks for the review.
Riley
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Nov 14 2012 08:09 PM

(Chapter 22 Review)

Man that Ryan's a pisser! lol He had me cracking up with his cracks about styles and trimmed pubes.

I also have a feeling that he pretty much diffused the situation when Luke mentioned what he mentioned. By gently putting his hand on Luke's shoulder it told Luke not to worry, it's all cool. At least that's what I got out of it.

I was surprised at Stacey's dad calling to apologize. He seems to be a stand-up guy.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter; I'm curious to see if Simon comes clean to Luke about what happened at Toby's.

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

The Crop 'n Cut? Yep, Ry does have a wicked humour! What the whole thing with the shoulder was is a mystery though. Ryan remains a dark horse.

Ya really think Simon can keep quiet? I doubt it!

Thanks,
Riley
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Nov 13 2012 09:58 PM

(Chapter 22 Review)

Great chapter Riley Posted Image

You are a bit of a tease here, you know ;) That exchange in his bedroom of the gawp was....interesting. The thing is, we still don't know if Ryan does have feelings for Luke or not.

I imagine why Simon is so excited to be home, lets hope he doesn't burst into the room and blurts out what he did with Ryan still in there.

I also think Luke is now on the radar of his mother. She did talk to Stacey's dad and obviously he mentioned that Luke had said his parents didn't want him dating till he was 16. Caught in a lie, me thinks 0:)

Looking forward to the next chapter, thanks again :)

View Post Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Now that WOULD be if Simon let the cat out of the bag like that. Ouch, things could get tense! Is Luke on Lucy's radar....mmmm not thought about that. It's possible isn't it. What do you think she would make of that?

Answers on a postcard!

Thanks for the review Steve
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