Seems to me I'm lagging behind the crowd, but here I am to offer my off-beat (?) opinion of this very interesting prologue. I must admit that it would have taken me much longer to open this story-file if it was not that I've enjoyed Riley's In Safe Hands just recently...
Firstly let me state that in this very first installment there is quite a clear object lesson for any male who has not been circumcised
It's amazing how often one hear of menfolk who are in need of surgery just because they have not been taught by their parents to retract their foreskins and clean appropriately when the have a bath or shower - if this simple routine has been instilled from childhood, how could there ever be occasion for such drastic measures of wiggling some cold chrome instruments under the cav of the patient? It's rather beyond me that Luke did not know that 'under ther' actually existed! Really - and this is not meant judgmentally at all. So much more reason for a socalled enlightened age to arrive properly where there ain't no bashfulness or false modesty not to want to tallk aobut these essential personal hgiene "tricks" that needs to be administered on a daily basis. And, yes, hoping against hope that all "untouched" gaylings reading this story will take note. Who ever would have thought that GA could be the ideal primer in many respects for many dirrerent kind of readers
In closing, I really appreciated that bit about nothing on but his t-shirt and socks! Me thinx its rather sexy
Ta stax, Riley, for - what I can allready feel in my bones - is going to be another great story

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I blame you for my not getting sleep last night!
I found the title titillating, and saw that it took place in North Georgia, having just moved from Dahlonega myself. I thought I’d sample a chapter or two, just to see, but got sucked in and read all ten. I enjoyed the story, the writing was good, and I look forward to it being continued, but I do have some comments:
To me, this story should be written from the first person, especially as it has a tone of being told in reflection, through experience, than from the point of view of a young teenager; if it were ‘of the moment’, his uncertainty, as a young teenager, doesn’t work well for me. Also, I found the ancillary scenes, without Ryan, a little jarring.
I can see this getting gratuitous, as in the water bottle scene. What you’re writing is bold and rings true, but should be focused to your audience. If this is for young men, then it’s too explicit. If this is for older men, then it runs the risk of being porn.
It also needs to be edited for content. You present such strong characters and situations that I found myself skipping over sections of nostalgia, looking for what happens next.
Like I said, I look forward to reading more, and seeing what happens to the guys.

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

i've read quite a bit of this story when it was first on here, im excited your giving it another get go

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I have been looking forward for ages for this story coming back

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Glad Luke is back in town(?). This was the kind of story I was looking forward to and missed it when it was discontinued.
I can't remember anything so seriously wrong that could people give reason to complain about so let us just enjoy the humour that this story has.

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I am really looking forward to this story and I'm so glad you're continuing it.

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Riley! Riley! Riley! I'm so glad you're posting this story! Since quite a few readers mentioned this in their review of "In Safe Hands" (still crying, btw), I've been eager to read it! =)

From what I gathered in the prologue, something was wrong under the foreskin, that's why Luke is being circumsized, right? I mean I've never really heard of any one other than babies getting circumsized in a hospital or at a bris.

Looking forward to the next chapter Riley!

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

I remember this story Riley.  The first time I read it, it was awesome. I can't remember though if you put that much detail in the first time... anyway, getting off track.

I really liked... you never did finish this story .. I have been waiting patiently... yay I give you an A+ very well done...

Reply from Riley Jericho (author)

Ouch.  What a hook!

To all those who want to ban circumcision, this story could be a revelation. But then again, noting human stubbornness, probably not....

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