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01-Spark - 2. The Mission

Chapter 2. The Mission

 

When I woke up Andy was gone.

It took me a moment to realize it. When I did, I silently berated myself from having lowered my guard like that yesterday. I stood up from the bed and stumbled into the bathroom for a piss. I wasn't going to hurry. If he had stolen anything, he was long gone and there was nothing I could do about it. I wasn't going to ruin my own morning earlier than I had to.

I flushed the toilet and then looked around the bedroom as I came back. Nothing amiss there. There wasn't a lot to steal, anyway. Most of my valuables were inside the safe under my bed, under the floorboards. You would need a power drill to get to it, so I wasn't worried about that. Besides those, the only things someone might have possibly wanted would be my cash and my gun.

Both of which I had just left lying in the living room, in the tangle of my clothes.

Shit.”

I headed into the living room… and I was surprised, but not how I had expected to be.

My gun wasn't missing, and neither was my wallet. They were both lying side by side on a table next to the couch, along with my neatly-folded clothes. I walked up to my wallet cautiously and opened it. Everything was there. Then I checked the magazine in my gun: still full. He seemed to have left some time ago, but when I went to the kitchen I found a little note from him thanking me for coffee and saying he had made some for me as well, for when I woke up. I clicked the coffee maker on and, sure enough, some coffee had already been brewed. I poured some into a mug and sipped it. It tasted better than when I made it. A lot better, in fact. Andy must have put some cinnamon in it or something.

I was mystified by Andy's behavior, but I didn't have that much time to ponder it. After having had my coffee, I took a shower and then dressed hurriedly. I had to get to work and I didn't want to be late. Smith would be looking for any excuse to ride my ass one more day and I didn't want to make it easy for him to do it. I got ready quickly but carefully, even ironing a clean shirt before putting it on. Then, finally, I left my apartment feeling a strange uplifting sensation in my heart. I had walked all the way to the subway before I finally recognized the sensation for what it was: happiness. Yesterday's encounter had left me feeling… happy. It had been so long since I had felt like this that it took me the better part of my journey to work to really process the feeling. It was strange, knowing today was the first day since Jane had died when it actually felt all right to smile.

It didn't last, though. As soon as I went through the big revolving doors that were the entrance to our office headquarters I knew something was up. The big building was imposing enough from the outside, being one of the few skyscrapers still left standing in the city. Inside, however, it was an entirely different story. There were only a handful of us working as Peacekeepers now, and more than ninety percent of the gigantic building was simply empty, offices boarded up, ancient vending machines crumbling to dust upstairs. In fact, since the last working elevator had finally broken down three years ago, nobody went all the way to the top floors anymore. It was a long climb, one not many people wanted to make despite the magnificent views of the city it afforded.

I had been working here long enough to know that whatever the crisis was at the moment, it was big. Mike at the door gave me a stiff nod in greeting as I stepped inside the main hall, which I returned. He had his hand resting idly on the gun at his belt.

Don't tell me it's a sewage breakdown again,” I told him, as I let him scan me as part of the totally useless security protocol. I said it jokingly, but I sincerely hoped it wasn't that. The last time one of the main pipes had broken down there had been riots, and then we’d been forced to close off an entire section of the city for good when the damage couldn’t be fixed, relocating hostile, reluctant people and so on. Not something I remembered fondly.

He shook his head. “Not that. From what I've gathered, it's something up at the Plant. They won't say what, though.”

If I find out, I'll let you know,” I told him, already distracted by the sight of Smith coming down the hall right in my direction. Great. He was followed by a couple of his lackeys, and they looked more stressed out than usual. Many pairs of eyes followed their progress towards me.

The boss himself,” Mike pointed out unnecessarily. “What’d you do to piss him off?”

Rick,” Smith said loudly. “Nice of you to finally join us. Come into my office. Now.”

I glanced at the clock on the wall: it was only five to nine. He knew it and I knew it, but I decided to ignore it. I followed Smith and his entourage down the hall, into the lower office section. As I passed by one of the water coolers I got sympathetic looks from a couple of other cops. I shrugged in response and walked the last few meters to Smith's office.

He immediately opened the door, crossed the vast room which could have easily held three good-sized workspaces, and sat at his desk. His two assistants took up seats to the left of the room where a couple of dilapidated computer terminals still worked. They immediately began typing and doing their best in general to look very busy, but their constant glances in my direction defeated their purpose somewhat.

We have a problem,” Smith said to me, gesturing grandly with one hand for me to sit at one of the chairs facing his desk. I remained standing, which elicited a tiny frown.

I saw that,” I said. “Something about the Plant?”

Smith's jaw clenched. He ran a hand through his thinning hair. “I really need to tell Mike to stop blabbering about every rumor he thinks he hears.”

So it's not the Plant?”

Smith sighed. “Yes, and no. Sit down, Rick. Please. The problem is a little bigger than that.”

I raised an eyebrow. Smith was never this civil to me. Whatever the problem was, it had to be important. My guess had been correct.

Rodriguez, Hant,” Smith said, addressing his assistants. “Go get me some breakfast and get the Mayor on the phone. I need to talk to that son of a bitch and he can't hide behind his receptionist all day. Go!”

They went, but it was clear that they were disappointed at having just been kicked out of the office right when the juicy stuff was about to happen. I rolled my eyes without thinking. They were supposed to be training to be the Peacekeepers of the future, the most promising of our new recruits. Right.

They're not all useless, you know,” Smith said once they were gone.

Can they fight? Can they even use those guns they’re carrying?”

Well, not accurately, but—”

Then they are useless,” I cut in.

Smith's look hardened. “I don't remember asking for your opinion, Rick.”

And I don't remember voting for you to become Chief over me, so I guess we're even.”

When are you going to let that go?” he asked me, visibly growing irritated. “It's been nearly two years. Face it, I won.”

I'll let it go when you quit. Which you are close to doing, even if you don't realize it. You're not cut out for this job, Bill. You never were.”

Smith opened his mouth, then shut it, and amazingly he got himself under control without exploding. It was amusing to watch. “We don't have time for this, Rick. We've got reports that the Mainland has sent agents to take out our spark Plant. It seems last month's negotiations went very badly. The Mayor was threatened while he was there, and there was talk of all-out war.”

What?” I asked. “There can't be war. They'd be destroyed too. Everybody knows that.”

Smith grinned sadly. “So we thought. So everybody thought. But earlier this morning I was in a meeting, talking to some of the Intelligence boys from Engineering and the Mayor. They said that the Mainlanders have developed some sort of lower-quality fuel resource which they’d sell us once they take out our spark Plant. I don't know the details; you'd have to be a science guy to understand it. It doesn't matter. What’s important is that we are really vulnerable now. They know it, and they might want to act on it any day.”

And they're sending agents?” I asked him. “Why not an airstrike? I know there are still a few working bombers in the Mainland’s hangars. I saw them when I did my military training there. That's the one part of their city that is still intact.”

We sabotaged them. Well, Covert Ops did. They struck preemptively as soon as news of the new fuel source was published, but I only heard about it today. That's part of what I want to talk to the Mayor about. By approving that stupid offensive action, he all but declared war on the Mainland. If any of their agents are successful in sneaking past us and taking out the spark… well. You know what would happen.”

I nodded slowly, letting the silence stretch out over long seconds as I processed the information. It felt slightly unreal for this to be finally happening. In a few short minutes, Smith had changed my view of the entire world. This could be it, this could be the war to end all wars. We had all grown up learning about it, fearing it, and finally disregarding it as a stupid course of action that no sensible man would ever take. The Mainland depended on us as much as we depended on it. To destroy one of us would destroy the other, or at least so I had believed. Now, though…

I didn't doubt Smith's word. He was a manipulative weasel, but he never lied about the job. It was just hard to get into the mindset of total annihilation so suddenly, calmly talking about it in his office. In a way, I felt slightly disappointed at the news. As a child I had always imagined that the last war would be fought with great machines, lots of explosions and never-ending battles, not with secret attacks by our own Covert Ops and the enemy agents. It seemed cowardly somehow. It also didn't make it any less deadly.

Have we secured the spark Plant?” I asked. “Strengthened the perimeter? Diverted surveillance equipment to the areas most likely to be attacked?”

Smith nodded. “Yes. We are expecting the attack to happen either today or tomorrow, but as the enemy agent or agents know their secrecy has been compromised, they might lie in wait and strike much later. Weeks even. We need to be very careful about how we handle this. I have limited the amount of people who know about this to just a handful and of course all of Ops. If we are too obvious about the fact that we know of the attack, we will scare the Mainlanders into hiding. It will be months and months of hard work to find them, giving them ample opportunities to just run in and strike or change their plan of attack. According to the Mayor, one of his best spies died in securing the information that the attack would happen within the window we've been given. It happened early this morning. We do have the upper hand now, but only if we know how to use the information that was so hard-won.”

I nodded, understanding dawning. “You want to set a trap. You want to involve as few people as possible, like you said, while still prepping citywide security in case the trap fails and the agents try to hide.”

Exactly. I knew you'd get it right away.”

And you want me to be there, at the Plant,” I added, following the plan to its logical conclusion. “I've been to the Mainland, I know how their military works. I'm not with Covert Ops, so the Mainlanders would have had no reason to warn the agents of me. I'm just a regular Peacekeeper, doing a routine check of the spark Plant. I will be there when they go in, and take them out discreetly, with Ops support.”

Yes, Rick. You're the best man we have.” I raised an eyebrow at Smith's casual acceptance of a fact he had denied for the better part of two years. He continued, not noticing. “You've also been restricted to office work ever since I became Chief, so you'll be even less recognizable. The Mayor agrees that you're the ideal man for the job, and his Covert Ops advisor has volunteered to hook you up with whatever information and equipment you need. If you manage to kill the agents without anybody noticing, then the Mainland will have no way of knowing whether they attempted their mission or not. They will be forced to wait for several months before they give up on the enormous investment they made in sending those people over, their gear, and whatever large machines they managed to smuggle in. That won't win the war, but it will give us time. By then, Ops will have a plan. The diplomats will have also had a shot at calming everything down. Or so we hope.”

I narrowed my eyes. “We're also having elections three months from now. And this is the Mayor's final term.”

Smith sighed. “You don't miss anything, do you? Yes, Covert Ops is also hoping to get their candidate into the Mayor's Hall this election. They want someone more manageable, someone who won't piss the Mainlanders off quite so much.”

And you're helping them with it, promising them our help now. What's in it for you?”

That's not the right question to ask, Rick,” Smith answered, allowing himself a small, insolent smirk. “If you're successful with this, you should be asking what's in it for you. You could be Chief, you know. If we win the war, or even negotiate peace, I won't be staying in this job. I won't need to.”

Son of a bitch,” I said, disgusted at witnessing yet more manipulation and scheming from the snake I had once believed to be my best friend. “You dangle what you know I want in front of me, knowing full well I can’t say no.”

Nobody's really losing anything, Rick,” Smith told me. The smirk was gone and his face became oddly earnest. “If the Mainlanders win and they take out our source of spark, we’re dead. Some quickly, the rest of us much more slowly, but we are all dead. I know you're the guy for the job, and yes, I'm getting something out of it too. Ops will get their man to power next term if they play it right, but does any of that really concern you? You’ll save everybody in this city even if they never know about it. You also get to be Chief, just like Jane wanted.”

Don't you dare,” I growled. “Don't you dare bring Jane into this, you cowardly bastard. She would still be here if it weren't for you.”

For a split second, Smith’s veneer of self-control cracked and I saw a hint of remorse in his eyes. Then he slammed his walls back up.

She wasn't fast enough,” he said. “I was. And you could only save one person before the base blew up. Get over it. Of the three of us, I'm the one who made it to Chief. That means I’m your superior officer, Rick. And it also means you do what I tell you to do. I let you talk to me like you have just now only because of the seriousness of the situation, and only because we need your skills. You know you can’t say no, just like you said, so when this little meeting’s over you will get your ass to your office, get the Ops advisor on the phone, and in two hours I want you geared up and ready to head over to the spark Plant. Our intelligence suggests that if they try to strike they will do so at night, but it won't hurt for you to have the better part of the day to familiarize yourself with the layout of the Plant and prepare. Now get lost. And not a word of this conversation to anyone. Understand?”

I stood up, seething. “Yes.”

Yes what?”

Yes, sir.”

I left. I threw open the doors, practically slamming them onto his assistants, who were hovering right outside hoping to eavesdrop. They wouldn't have heard a thing; the office was soundproof. Smith was very careful when it came to privacy.

I stormed through the hall, desperately wanting to yell, to unmask that snake once and for all before everybody, just like I’d wanted to do every single day for the past two years. I couldn't, but knowing it didn't make it any easier. My oath bound me, sure, but more than that it was the knowledge that there was no easy way to get rid of him. All of the Peacekeepers knew that I should have been made Chief, and all of them commiserated with me that I had to take orders from the guy I’d had to babysit all through basic training and combat drills so very long ago. That didn't help, though. Smith had support from the higher-ups, and that meant nothing short of armed mutiny would get me the position. It wasn't worth compromising lives just to settle a personal score with him. We were few enough Peacekeepers as it was. Even if I hated it, we had to stick together.

I avoided everyone on my way to the stairs, not really in the mood for coming up with an excuse or a cover for the mission I had just been assigned. Instead I started to climb up. Smith had given me a magnificent office all to myself—on the sixth floor. With no elevators. Originally he had meant it is a little revenge on his part, to have me away from everybody else and to make me climb up and down six goddamn flights of stairs every day. I didn't mind, not anymore anyway. I liked the privacy and the views from my office were breathtaking. The windows faced East, which gave me great sunset views over the city all the way out to the sea, glinting under the sunlight. It was one of the few good things about the office job I had been forced to take when Smith had decided he didn't want me out in the streets so much, didn't want me making connections and making friends.

I climbed the steps two at a time, deliberately exerting myself, and by the time I got to my office I was calmer. The anger at Smith subsided and in its place a cold dread formed in the pit of my stomach at the thought of war. A part of me still couldn't believe it. This was a day like any other day. Right? Everything looked normal. Smith’s conspiracy rumors might be only that.

Then I saw the blinking light indicating I had voicemail on my desk, and as I clicked it, the voice of Senior Covert Ops Manager Jules Parker brought the reality of the threat crashing down on my shoulders.

His message was brief, and he was vague enough that anyone who had not been briefed would not have made any sense of the instructions if they had overheard. To me, though, the message was crystal-clear. He specified a time and place to meet with his top military advisor and gave me a number to confirm that I was going to show. I jotted the number down on a pad, thinking in a strange, detached way that this was not what war was supposed to look like. Where were the rushed hallway conversations, the frantic exchange of information? Where was the gunfire, the tanks? Where were the explosions? This day still looked just like any other. I couldn't believe the Mainland was actually going to try to kill us all.

I looked at my watch. I had less than an hour before I was supposed to be at City Hall for my briefing, but the building was only a five-minute walk away. It added to the surreal feeling that had overtaken the entire morning that I actually had free time before being sent on the mission. For a minute or so I didn't know what to do. There was some paperwork I needed to finish, but it seemed stupid since we might all die anyway if I wasn't successful, and besides I had never liked paperwork at all. In the end, my stomach rumbled and reminded me that I hadn't had any breakfast. That decided it.

I went downstairs all the way back to the first floor. I got more curious looks when people saw me. The slightly frantic atmosphere I had noticed upon first coming in was still there, but now I knew that most of the people engaged in the rush of activity had no idea what the entire thing was about. In that, I had to recognize the benefit of Smith's tightlipped philosophy. He had always been good at keeping secrets, particularly when it benefitted him. For the first time since his promotion I had to admire that in him. Some men were just really good at certain things.

Unbidden, a memory of last night rose to my mind. Andy had been very good at certain other things. With his mouth. I shook my head to chase the memory away. I had to concentrate on serious things now. Although…

You look like you got a lot on your mind,” a familiar voice said beside me.

I stopped and turned around. I had come all the way to the reception desk. “Good morning, Susan.”

I saved a turkey breast sandwich for you,” she said, digging through her basket. “Got to keep those big muscles of yours hard and strong!”

She gave me the sandwich with one hand and with the other squeezed my right arm. She nodded appreciatively. I would have been surprised if this hadn't been the millionth time she had done it. She was also seventy-one years old, which gave her some leeway when it came to social protocol.

Thank you, Susan,” I said, pocketing the sandwich and handing her a bill as payment. “I can always count on you.”

She smiled a perfect denture smile. “From the look of things today, it looks like you’ll need some extra nourishment. Don't let what's-his-name get to you, Ricky. Whatever he's having you do is not worth losing the glow you have today.”

Glow?” I asked, puzzled.

If I didn't know you better, I'd say you had a lot of fun last night,” she hinted with a tone that was half playful, half curious.

I felt myself blush immediately. “What? I, uh—”

I knew it!” she exclaimed triumphantly. By now the other receptionist had stopped pretending to type and was also listening in on the conversation. “And what is the young man's name? Do I know him, perhaps?”

Um… no, actually, uh, he's from out of town.”

Really, a Mainlander?” she asked, and grinned mischievously. “So mysterious. You must tell me everything.”

Actually, I need to go, to… I have an appointment.”

Sarah laughed good-naturedly. “For such an intimidating man, Ricky, you're incredibly shy! I just love it.”

I took advantage of the knowing look she exchanged with the other receptionist to escape. I headed outside, nodding to Mike on the way out. I grinned as I took out my sandwich. Sarah was a like a gossipy aunt who also happened to be one of my oldest friends. After Jane had passed away in that damned mission gone wrong, she had been the one who coaxed me out of my self-imposed isolation. She had talked to me for long hours about how she had managed to cope with the deaths of her husband and then her son. Listening to her, I had come to realize little by little that Jane would have wanted me to go on, not linger over her death endlessly like I was doing. It hadn't made the pain go away, but that realization had made life bearable.

I sat down at a bench facing a small park across from the office building. As I ate my sandwich I thought about the fact that it wasn't only my life on the line. It wasn't like I was my city’s last hope, I knew that—Ops would have a backup plan, and a backup for that backup plan. If worse came to worst there were ways to contain the spread of economic and social chaos from total 02-spark loss and the inevitable breakdown of our life-support power grid. Even so, taking any of those options would mean we had been defeated, and that we accepted that defeat, and it would mean the end of my Island city as I knew it. If I could do anything to stop it from happening, anything at all, I was willing to do it. I had learned the hard way that life is worth living because tomorrow you may be gone.

I finished my food, stood up and headed for City Hall. I passed a couple of street vendors, a busy subway station entrance, and a homeless junkie begging for some spark. He wasn't the dangerous hallucinating kind yet, so I ignored him. One of the Peacekeepers on patrol around here would shoo him away soon enough.

It was sunny out, but still chilly this early in the year and it wouldn't get any better as the day progressed. I zipped up my jacket and walked a little bit faster. I wanted to know what I was going to do as quickly as possible.

In the end I was barely on time for the meeting, since I had to wait in line to be scanned by security behind a large group of important-looking businessmen who were also going into the building. The guard was being extra careful with everyone, even going so far as to ask a couple of them to come over to the side so one of his coworkers could perform a more thorough search for any hidden objects, and his progress was painfully slow. I could guess who had given him the order to be on the lookout for any suspicious behavior, particularly since City Hall would be a big target for any of the Mainland agents who did not attempt to take down to the spark Plant. I considered flashing my badge and hinting that I was on urgent, secret business with Ops, but the whole point of having assigned me to this was precisely because I could blend in so well and not be a high-priority threat. The less attention I drew to myself, the better, and so I waited like everybody else until I was finally ushered through. I was given a visitor badge and told to head down to the right, take the elevator to basement level three and then go down the hall. I did exactly that, and I was knocking on the nondescript black door just as the hour struck.

The meeting was brief. I met Jules Parker himself and his advisor, who introduced herself as Michelle Grant. They gave me a pad with blueprints of the spark Plant, employee dossiers and schedules, and clearance to link to the video surveillance network of the Plant from the pad—as long as I authenticated with a ridiculously long password they also assigned to me. They also gave me all the information they had on the impending attack, which wasn't much. Their source had asserted that, at the earliest, the attack would come tonight, but it was more likely that it would be attempted much later, probably in the following weeks. Their main target would most probably be the spark genesis chamber at the heart of the Plant. If they hit that, and they were successful, then everything was lost. The entire chamber had been scanned thoroughly, but I was told there were many ways to tamper with it by interfacing directly with the many systems that fed into it all across the Plant. I was to keep a lookout for anything between one and four agents sent by the Mainlanders. The source had not been certain of the final number, but he had known that a group greater than four in number would have attracted unnecessary attention from us, even if they traveled separately. Thus I was at best faced with dealing with a one-on-one scenario, at worst outnumbered four to one.

I was also given my pick of the Ops armory, but I chose to stick with my own gun. I had customized it myself with specialized ammunition and a close-range stunner, and I trusted it more than any of the other fancy weapons they kept insisting I take. In the end I only carried off a field kit with sonic plugs, night filters and so on. Then they ushered me to a different elevator from the one I had used to come to this level and I geared up as I ascended, sticking the plugs in my ears and stashing everything else neatly in the side pockets of my all-black uniform. The elevator led me up and dropped me off at a back entrance to City Hall I didn't know existed, at the shady mouth of an alley nearly a block away from the Hall. I stuffed the data pad in my pocket last of all and walked as inconspicuously as I could back into the sunlight.

Then a shop down the road exploded.

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It's an intriguing start. I keep wondering what spark is. I thought electricity, but why would junkies want that? Unless they are robots...

 

My mind is running away on me again. As usual. Could a certain someone be one of the agents? That would be a nice twist.

 

I think Susan had a name change at the end of the part where they spoke. Suddenly, Susan was a Sarah. Or I didn't get that part at all...

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Nicely done background chapter. Nice to know our hero had his own baggage, and seems to have dealt with it ok.

Now, is the mysterious trick from last night involved?

Really looking forward to seeing where you take this story--living it so far!

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On 05/05/2015 10:37 AM, Robert Rex said:
Nicely done background chapter. Nice to know our hero had his own baggage, and seems to have dealt with it ok.

Now, is the mysterious trick from last night involved?

Really looking forward to seeing where you take this story--living it so far!

Glad to hear that! thanks for reviewing :)
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On 05/05/2015 06:53 AM, Puppilull said:
It's an intriguing start. I keep wondering what spark is. I thought electricity, but why would junkies want that? Unless they are robots...

 

My mind is running away on me again. As usual. Could a certain someone be one of the agents? That would be a nice twist.

 

I think Susan had a name change at the end of the part where they spoke. Suddenly, Susan was a Sarah. Or I didn't get that part at all...

Uh-oh. I'll go over the chapter and check. Thanks for letting me know!
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I'm a little puzzled about Rick's personality. In the last chapter he was having a consensual encounter of being degraded and dominated. It seems that he should get enough of that at work. Is it extra punishment for failing to save Jane?

The internal dialogue Rick has indicates that there aren't many Peacekeepers anymore, but no reason is given why. I hope we're given more insight into that later.

I notice that the product of the plant is referred to as 02-spark and the story title is 01-Spark. From this I infer that there are variants of spark. Just a random observation. As to how spark junkies are getting high off a power source, maybe it's like some dummies huff gasoline fumes and become even bigger dummies. :rolleyes:

And I like Sarah as a name for the receptionist much better than the Susan one she started out with. :rolleyes: This was another engaging chapter.

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Is he or isn't he, the bit of fun was he really the spy or just an innocent bit of hanky panky. At least our man wasn't in the exploding shop, couldn't imagine it being much fun truth to tell. Engaging and developing nicely I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter, even though that means Tuesday's for those of us in advanced parts of the planet :)

Thank you very much for sharing this tale, very well done.

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On 05/05/2015 06:59 PM, drpaladin said:
I'm a little puzzled about Rick's personality. In the last chapter he was having a consensual encounter of being degraded and dominated. It seems that he should get enough of that at work. Is it extra punishment for failing to save Jane?

The internal dialogue Rick has indicates that there aren't many Peacekeepers anymore, but no reason is given why. I hope we're given more insight into that later.

I notice that the product of the plant is referred to as 02-spark and the story title is 01-Spark. From this I infer that there are variants of spark. Just a random observation. As to how spark junkies are getting high off a power source, maybe it's like some dummies huff gasoline fumes and become even bigger dummies. :rolleyes:

And I like Sarah as a name for the receptionist much better than the Susan one she started out with. :rolleyes: This was another engaging chapter.

Thank you for reviewing! you are very perceptive in the fact that there are variants of spark. also, it looks like I'm never going to live down that careless name change :P
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On 05/05/2015 07:52 PM, Dathi said:
Is he or isn't he, the bit of fun was he really the spy or just an innocent bit of hanky panky. At least our man wasn't in the exploding shop, couldn't imagine it being much fun truth to tell. Engaging and developing nicely I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter, even though that means Tuesday's for those of us in advanced parts of the planet :)

Thank you very much for sharing this tale, very well done.

thank you, as always!
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Here he is a step ahead of his boss, etc. He's obviously trusted and bright..but it isn't a red flag to him that Andy was there from the mainland? He said that he'd have to be rich or something else, so it seems it isn't easy for someone to come from the Mainland. He's come there at the same time these agents might have. I'm shocked it didn't occur to him, esp. when the sweet older woman got it out of him that his hook up was from the mainland.

 

I kinda wish we had a better idea about the place they live. Is it an island off the mainland? why has there always been a fear of the mainland threatening them? Who was the girl who died to him? She was another agent, but was she more than that to him or just someone he was close to on the force? Why are there so few peacekeepers now? This spark is their form of electricity, right?

 

I like this new chapter alot.

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On 05/06/2015 10:15 PM, Cannd said:
Here he is a step ahead of his boss, etc. He's obviously trusted and bright..but it isn't a red flag to him that Andy was there from the mainland? He said that he'd have to be rich or something else, so it seems it isn't easy for someone to come from the Mainland. He's come there at the same time these agents might have. I'm shocked it didn't occur to him, esp. when the sweet older woman got it out of him that his hook up was from the mainland.

 

I kinda wish we had a better idea about the place they live. Is it an island off the mainland? why has there always been a fear of the mainland threatening them? Who was the girl who died to him? She was another agent, but was she more than that to him or just someone he was close to on the force? Why are there so few peacekeepers now? This spark is their form of electricity, right?

 

I like this new chapter alot.

It seems rather obvious that Andy appears suspicious, doesn't it? I guess I can justify Rick's lack of deductive powers by the fact that Andy is the first guy he has met who didn't turn out to be a disappointment.
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