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GA Writing Prompts - 55. Poetry Prompt # 6 – Elegy

Winter Has Come

Those were the days of joy and fun
Bright days of endless love and bliss
Of happiness, nothing amiss
But clouds have now obscured the sun

The wind is cutting, a near gale
And all the leaves fall, whirl and fly
Those happy days have long gone by
The wind is bringing rain and hail

His face is but a memory
Where is he now? Where has he gone?
What happened and what did go wrong?
Why did he then walk out on me?

A storm is blowing, bringing snow
And winter’s come to take its toll
My heart is cold, clouded my soul
I’m left alone, no place to go

I’m in the dark and wondering
As to why clouds obscure the sun
Why and what for has winter come?
Sure to make a fresh start for spring!

Dolores Esteban
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AC Benus

I agree with Lisa! Ok, yes – here it is. You have kept true to the eight-syllable line throughout, and you have considered the pace of metre and married it all so smoothly with natural-sounding rhyme selections. It's great! You've exceeded wonderfully in writing a true Elegy – and the content of the poem is so direct and heartfelt, everyone can instantly relate to it. I think you might want to reconsider which one you enter for the Anthology, as this is a really remarkably good poem. You have shown that formed verse can offer just as much freedom, if not more, than free-form poetry.

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Percy

Dolores, your poetry is always so amazing and thoughtfully considered. Thanks for sharing it with us. -P

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Dolores Esteban
On 02/09/2015 03:23 AM, Percy said:
Dolores, your poetry is always so amazing and thoughtfully considered. Thanks for sharing it with us. -P
Thank you, Percy. :)
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Dolores Esteban
On 02/08/2015 12:08 PM, AC Benus said:
I agree with Lisa! Ok, yes – here it is. You have kept true to the eight-syllable line throughout, and you have considered the pace of metre and married it all so smoothly with natural-sounding rhyme selections. It's great! You've exceeded wonderfully in writing a true Elegy – and the content of the poem is so direct and heartfelt, everyone can instantly relate to it. I think you might want to reconsider which one you enter for the Anthology, as this is a really remarkably good poem. You have shown that formed verse can offer just as much freedom, if not more, than free-form poetry.
I think I worked eight hours on the poem, but it was fun. Now that it's published, I can't submit it to the anthology, I think. Thanks for the feedback. :)
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Mikiesboy

Hi Dolores, wow, this poem was amazing. The feeling and mood was perfect throughout and the rhymes were natural. Really wonderful.

 

tim

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Dolores Esteban
On 12/15/2015 08:33 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Hi Dolores, wow, this poem was amazing. The feeling and mood was perfect throughout and the rhymes were natural. Really wonderful.

 

tim

Hi, thank you for the kind feedback. I'm happy you liked the poem. :)

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