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Occasional Poetry - 27. Sailing and in the Garden

em>Two sonnets for the end of May. I made all the errors herein. Thank you for reading.
Sailing
 
I sail a barque upon a sea of lies,
a placid swell, inimitably blue,
reflecting vividly the sunny skies
obscuring lethal secrets from your view.
 
You cannot see them, eyes cannot espy
the monsters swimming silent in the deep,
nor chart nor map on which you can rely
to steer you clear of reef or lee shore steep.
 
And yet you venture forth upon the wave,
and risk the hazards of the murky dark;
perchance my foolish soul you think to save,
make truth the shore where I must disembark.
 
But first you'll have to board me, and compel
the heart which sails the seas it knows so well.
 
 
In the Garden
 
A blossom spent and browned, all gone to seed,
is like unto a binding promise made;
and yet that pledge cannot be guaranteed,
nor even if or when or how repaid.
 
A thousand hazards might commitment void,
a greedy jay might take it for a snack,
perchance the seed is by a storm annoyed,
to fall on barren soil upon the track.
 
What promise can my withered life extend
to brighter, blooming youth whom I may know;
this wrinkled pod, its season's at an end,
and yet I pray the chance in them to grow.
 
And there is none like you the world around;
discovered in your soul my fertile ground.
 
em>A comment would be mighty fine, a rant would not be out of line.
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I have to tell you I do so enjoy how you boldly claim all errors that lie within your poems.
I like these because they have a sweet rhythm and flow ... they all but sing for me. You've also hit on two things I enjoy, being on the water or in the garden so the analogy works well for me. Then too, I am impressed by the work put into them. I am far to lazy to think in meter and rhyme. Nicely done.

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Sailing... sounds like you are warning someone of your dubious character... kind of like 'boarder beware' ... is this a plea hidden as a challenge, to please try to get to know you in spite of the caution you give? Are you looking for someone to change who and what you are? Maybe I'm way off base, but it is indeed intriguing, Parker. Both poems are superbly written... cheers... Gary....

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Sailing: I totally agree with Gary here. Hidden treasure can only be retrieved by taking enormous efforts into hands. You are more than just a treasure and a great man. Some will definitely risk with your caution and make them yours.

 

In the Garden: The line you had written- 'there is none like you in the world around'. It was fantastic and I liked it very much. It will give you absolute meaning as every other thing in the world has their special feature in them and every one is unique.

 

Nice work Parker. Well done... :)

 

~Emi.

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On 06/01/2016 09:26 AM, dughlas said:

I have to tell you I do so enjoy how you boldly claim all errors that lie within your poems.

I like these because they have a sweet rhythm and flow ... they all but sing for me. You've also hit on two things I enjoy, being on the water or in the garden so the analogy works well for me. Then too, I am impressed by the work put into them. I am far to lazy to think in meter and rhyme. Nicely done.

Dear Dugh, thank you for you kind remarks. That they sing to you is especially satisfying. Each of the broader analogies seemed ripe with possibilities. I am glad they worked for you,

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On 06/01/2016 11:00 AM, Headstall said:

Sailing... sounds like you are warning someone of your dubious character... kind of like 'boarder beware' ... is this a plea hidden as a challenge, to please try to get to know you in spite of the caution you give? Are you looking for someone to change who and what you are? Maybe I'm way off base, but it is indeed intriguing, Parker. Both poems are superbly written... cheers... Gary....

Dear Gary, you have hit upon a couple of thoughts, and the 'friend beware' idea seems closer to my intention. And of course, to board the speaker, one must find him first. Thank you for being so thoughtful in your response to these, which seemed to well up unbidden over the past week.

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On 06/01/2016 12:15 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Both are wonderful, creative and a bit sad. Loved them both.

 

tim xo

Dear Tim, thank you so much. They are melancholy, but the themes here seemed full of possibilities for play and analogy. I am glad you liked them.

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On 06/01/2016 03:20 PM, Emi GS said:

Sailing: I totally agree with Gary here. Hidden treasure can only be retrieved by taking enormous efforts into hands. You are more than just a treasure and a great man. Some will definitely risk with your caution and make them yours.

 

In the Garden: The line you had written- 'there is none like you in the world around'. It was fantastic and I liked it very much. It will give you absolute meaning as every other thing in the world has their special feature in them and every one is unique.

 

Nice work Parker. Well done... :)

 

~Emi.

Dear Emi, how good of you to comment, and so kindly, too. To get the treasure, one must first find it on the wide ocean, a difficult task at best. I am glad you. Liked that like in 'Garden' because it was one that occurred to me swiftly, but I wasn't sure whether use it.

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