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  1. Chapter 3

    So let the games begin.   Again, I'm not sure I like Ben. The way he tells the facts and colors everything doesn't scream trust me. I find him obnoxious to be honest. I don't like that he seems to be counting down til the boys are eighteen and legal.   Emma is a delight. She is a cook who is more worried about filling you up then doing something fancy. She doesn't mince words, and seems to want to mother the boys. I like her take a bit more. Seems to show her character.   Everything we learn about Drew just leads to more questions. How was he hurt? Why has he distanced himself from his family? How did he get into such tight pants? 😁   Aria likes androgynous or feminine attire. This should be interesting. Another week to wait. Sigh.

    So let the games begin.

     

    Again, I'm not sure I like Ben. The way he tells the facts and colors everything doesn't scream trust me. I find him obnoxious to be honest. I don't like that he seems to be counting down til the boys are eighteen and legal.

     

    Emma is a delight. She is a cook who is more worried about filling you up then doing something fancy. She doesn't mince words, and seems to want to mother the boys. I like her take a bit more. Seems to show her character.

     

    Everything we learn about Drew just leads to more questions. How was he hurt? Why has he distanced himself from his family? How did he get into such tight pants? 😁

     

    Aria likes androgynous or feminine attire. This should be interesting. Another week to wait. Sigh.

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  2. Takes Pride

    I'm always glad to see a prompt really inspire someone. Great story and wouldn't mind seeing you expand it. 😁

    I'm always glad to see a prompt really inspire someone. Great story and wouldn't mind seeing you expand it. 😁

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  3. Prompt 354--Word List

    Lol. I remember a wrong number like that, but never wrote those types of stories. I do remember HBO having some more risque shows though. Lol.ah the 70s and early 80s.

    Lol. I remember a wrong number like that, but never wrote those types of stories. I do remember HBO having some more risque shows though. Lol.ah the 70s and early 80s.

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  4. Chapter 2

    The twins are a hard read. You can tell they don't trust anyone but each other. That is sad in so many ways. Time will show more, but you feel for them already.   Drew is going to have to step back and look at what is happening. You know he has a heart, but goddamn is he an ass. If he stops prejudging everything and everyone and takes a moment, he might become a decent human being.   Ben is a wildcard. He claims to be the bitch, which I might agree to. He rubs you wrong, but knows his job. He seems to know what is going on, but seems ready to drop it on Drew's lap and let him take charge.   All in all, just want more so I can figure out who is who, as well as who is out to harm the twins. 6 more days ... sigh.

    The twins are a hard read. You can tell they don't trust anyone but each other. That is sad in so many ways. Time will show more, but you feel for them already.

     

    Drew is going to have to step back and look at what is happening. You know he has a heart, but goddamn is he an ass. If he stops prejudging everything and everyone and takes a moment, he might become a decent human being.

     

    Ben is a wildcard. He claims to be the bitch, which I might agree to. He rubs you wrong, but knows his job. He seems to know what is going on, but seems ready to drop it on Drew's lap and let him take charge.

     

    All in all, just want more so I can figure out who is who, as well as who is out to harm the twins. 6 more days ... sigh.

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  5. Chapter 1

    As usual, we hit the ground running. I can understand Drew's attitude. He was deliberately not given all the facts, was chosen partially because of his looks and not his abilities,  and is finding out that the 'cake walk' might be anything but. You really have to wonder what he is about to get into. All the intrigue is set up, so can't wait for the story to unfold. 

    As usual, we hit the ground running. I can understand Drew's attitude. He was deliberately not given all the facts, was chosen partially because of his looks and not his abilities,  and is finding out that the 'cake walk' might be anything but. You really have to wonder what he is about to get into. All the intrigue is set up, so can't wait for the story to unfold. 

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  6. Chapter 27 - Private Speech

    Ok, so from the other comments I see I came into the middle of a story, not just a person caught between the real world and sleep. You felt the horror of being unable to fully wake or move. Considering how voice irritated him, I'm glad his mother was there as well. Nice chapter/story.

    Ok, so from the other comments I see I came into the middle of a story, not just a person caught between the real world and sleep. You felt the horror of being unable to fully wake or move. Considering how voice irritated him, I'm glad his mother was there as well. Nice chapter/story.

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  7. Amanda Reynolds

    Val, you know I'm a sucker for a good story with a twist. The only thing I'm going to say, and it's your usual request to me, More! 😂 Great story.

    Val, you know I'm a sucker for a good story with a twist. The only thing I'm going to say, and it's your usual request to me, More! 😂 Great story.

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  8. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    You never know what an encounter will bring. Sometimes you just have to take the plunge. Glad you enjoyed it, Caz.

    2 hours ago, Caz Pedroso said:

    Wonderful, just shows you should always grab a chance when you see it :hug: 

    You never know what an encounter will bring. Sometimes you just have to take the plunge. Glad you enjoyed it, Caz.

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  9. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    I'm glad you enjoyed it, Deville. I always like to toy with those getting to know you, or the taking that next step. I find myself to be a people watcher and hopefully that translates into believable characters and situations. Thanks for commenting.

    5 hours ago, deville said:

    An enjoyable story. The emotions , reactions and dialogue highlight the touch and go moments of those first tentative steps after a significant meeting of two people . 

    I'm glad you enjoyed it, Deville. I always like to toy with those getting to know you, or the taking that next step. I find myself to be a people watcher and hopefully that translates into believable characters and situations. Thanks for commenting.

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  10. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Thanks for all the help. Hope you see how I tied it into the topic. 

    5 hours ago, Timothy M. said:

    I liked the fact they could look beyond the age difference and focus on getting to know each other. Drew was very deft in showing how he wasn't born with a silver spoon in his mouth, and in paying a subtle but unmistakable compliment to Terry's mother. They will be a great couple.

    Thanks for all the help. Hope you see how I tied it into the topic. :wub:

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  11. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Glad you enjoyed it. Dialogue is always a way into a story and is something I try to work on. Thank you for the comment.

    31 minutes ago, JeffreyL said:

    A chance meeting leads to an enjoyable day, and a great short story! We got to know a lot about your characters in a short time. Dialogue is always an important part of why I do or don't like a story. Yours was believable and appropriate to the characters and setting. Although this could be considered complete, I would enjoy reading more about these characters. Thank you.

    Glad you enjoyed it. Dialogue is always a way into a story and is something I try to work on. Thank you for the comment.

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  12. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Recently was talking with someone and it's that whole awkward getting to know you thing that happens when you meet someone that I tried to echo here. I agree with the chicken tacos. Sort of a safe easy choice for a shared meal. Glad you enjoyed it.

    52 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

    This was charming, warm and natural. I loved the dialogue and slow 'coming out' of the characters.. and you cannot go wrong with chicken tacos!  Loved it.

    Recently was talking with someone and it's that whole awkward getting to know you thing that happens when you meet someone that I tried to echo here. I agree with the chicken tacos. Sort of a safe easy choice for a shared meal. Glad you enjoyed it.

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  13. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Been a few years but can see the echo with Accidents. Glad you enjoyed it.

    1 hour ago, Zenobia said:

    Thank you for these sweet little scenes. It's a fast-paced short story but still you manage to convey the insecurities that - despite a pleasant atmosphere - naturally shine through when taking the initiative. Drew and Terry remind me a bit of Charlie and Scott in "Accidents Happen"  :)

    Been a few years but can see the echo with Accidents. Glad you enjoyed it.

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  14. The Interview

    Wow. That was great. I felt Carter was going to get away with it, but sometimes people surprise you and make sure the right thing is done. Great story.

    Wow. That was great. I felt Carter was going to get away with it, but sometimes people surprise you and make sure the right thing is done. Great story.

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  15. Chapter 6 - Player Pride

    I always feel people should come out when they are ready and hopefully they will find people waiting to support them. Loved how the coach made sure everyone knew he expected nothing but support. The whole thing made me smile.

    I always feel people should come out when they are ready and hopefully they will find people waiting to support them. Loved how the coach made sure everyone knew he expected nothing but support. The whole thing made me smile.

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  16. Out of Bounds

    You are always innovating Delores. You got the sense of your headline, but I just want more 

    You are always innovating Delores. You got the sense of your headline, but I just want more 

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  17. Blue Jays Pride Night

    I think we all need friends like Tom, who push us out of our comfort zones and force us to live again.   I loved how Pete and Geoff met and just sort of took off. There was nothing forced and I loved the bit about bus fare. Made me smile. Love how it all tied into your headline.

    I think we all need friends like Tom, who push us out of our comfort zones and force us to live again.

     

    I loved how Pete and Geoff met and just sort of took off. There was nothing forced and I loved the bit about bus fare. Made me smile. Love how it all tied into your headline.

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