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  1. Chapter 13

    Aria is going to have some serious blowback from this from his Queen Bitch Mother. I fear what secrets Amara is still keeping. Just what has he done and sacrificed to keep his twin safe?   Okay, maybe I can trust Alicia a bit.    What on God's green earth did the doctor do to Aria all? I want his medical license pulled! Horrible individual. 

    Aria is going to have some serious blowback from this from his Queen Bitch Mother. I fear what secrets Amara is still keeping. Just what has he done and sacrificed to keep his twin safe?

     

    Okay, maybe I can trust Alicia a bit. 

     

    What on God's green earth did the doctor do to Aria all? I want his medical license pulled! Horrible individual. 

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  2. Our House

    The yard decorated, check. The livingroom decorated, check. The kitchen decorated,- if it is more than Halloween towels get out, that's my sanctuary! Lol.    Otherwise a very sweet and romantic Halloween tale. Loved it.

    The yard decorated, check. The livingroom decorated, check. The kitchen decorated,- if it is more than Halloween towels get out, that's my sanctuary! Lol. 

     

    Otherwise a very sweet and romantic Halloween tale. Loved it.

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  3. The Treasure of Escanaba

    Red is no more and Boyd has returned. Nothing is as good for the heart and soul as finding yourself and moving on to where you need to be. Great story.   Bye, Felicia. Oops, I meant bye, Hal.

    Red is no more and Boyd has returned. Nothing is as good for the heart and soul as finding yourself and moving on to where you need to be. Great story.

     

    Bye, Felicia. Oops, I meant bye, Hal.

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  4. City of the Dead

    Now there is a twisted tale. Just as you think things are normal, there is another twist. Very well handled. However, if by chance there is someone I need to clear the air with, I'd rather do it in prayers than by opening the gates. Thanks, but no thanks.

    Now there is a twisted tale. Just as you think things are normal, there is another twist. Very well handled. However, if by chance there is someone I need to clear the air with, I'd rather do it in prayers than by opening the gates. Thanks, but no thanks.

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  5. Chapter 12

    Well, one attempt with Amara and another with a stranger left Aria a mess. No one should be forced to do anything. No wonder he is a mess. Neither twin has a good self image.   All I can wonder about is why dad seems to have abandoned them to their harpy mother?   Still afraid what's going to happen when everything hits the fan.

    Well, one attempt with Amara and another with a stranger left Aria a mess. No one should be forced to do anything. No wonder he is a mess. Neither twin has a good self image.

     

    All I can wonder about is why dad seems to have abandoned them to their harpy mother?

     

    Still afraid what's going to happen when everything hits the fan.

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  6. Chapter 11

    Wow, there is so much happening here.   1) The panic attack was well handled. I appreciate that both boys are able to depend on Drew. There seems to be little they can depend on but each other.   2) Momma is a heartless bitch. Again I fear the fact she is having another child. After what she has done to the twins, you worry what she will do to a new innocent child.    3) Alicia is still a puzzle. Not sure if I trust her.   4) Grateful there was no Ben   5) The threat. Photos, letters, and all leading to more. Things hinted at by Ben earlier now in photos. I worry about the boys. No denying the train has left the station and is picking up speed. Just wondering if Drew can keep it on track, or will we fly off the rails.   Till next time.

    Wow, there is so much happening here.

     

    1) The panic attack was well handled. I appreciate that both boys are able to depend on Drew. There seems to be little they can depend on but each other.

     

    2) Momma is a heartless bitch. Again I fear the fact she is having another child. After what she has done to the twins, you worry what she will do to a new innocent child. 

     

    3) Alicia is still a puzzle. Not sure if I trust her.

     

    4) Grateful there was no Ben

     

    5) The threat. Photos, letters, and all leading to more. Things hinted at by Ben earlier now in photos. I worry about the boys. No denying the train has left the station and is picking up speed. Just wondering if Drew can keep it on track, or will we fly off the rails.

     

    Till next time.

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  7. Chapter 10

    Wow. She has all the love and warmth of a homicidal maniac. I'm willing to bet a praying mantis is more affectionate as she rips off her mate's head then the twin's mother is. I feel sorry for them.

    Wow. She has all the love and warmth of a homicidal maniac. I'm willing to bet a praying mantis is more affectionate as she rips off her mate's head then the twin's mother is. I feel sorry for them.

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  8. Epilogue

    Seeon escaped the civil war that is being waged in his country. His brother fights against his brother-in-law, who has his sister living like a living doll trapped in her own mind. Seeon has had to leave that behind for now and focus on his own future, which is much better for his own health.

    On 9/10/2018 at 5:36 PM, Sussins said:

    We never really found out what happened to the man who killed his father and turned his sister into a vegetable I think there should have been more of this story read something about a child would have loved to read something about that anyway great story thanks 

    Seeon escaped the civil war that is being waged in his country. His brother fights against his brother-in-law, who has his sister living like a living doll trapped in her own mind. Seeon has had to leave that behind for now and focus on his own future, which is much better for his own health.

  9. Chapter 9

    Wow. Their mother makes Joan Crawford look demure. No wonder the twins are all over the place. Even Alicia, who I had respected, lost her mask and admits everything is reported to Mommy Dearest. Next chapter should be interesting. 

    Wow. Their mother makes Joan Crawford look demure. No wonder the twins are all over the place. Even Alicia, who I had respected, lost her mask and admits everything is reported to Mommy Dearest. Next chapter should be interesting. 

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  10. Chapter 3

    So let the games begin.   Again, I'm not sure I like Ben. The way he tells the facts and colors everything doesn't scream trust me. I find him obnoxious to be honest. I don't like that he seems to be counting down til the boys are eighteen and legal.   Emma is a delight. She is a cook who is more worried about filling you up then doing something fancy. She doesn't mince words, and seems to want to mother the boys. I like her take a bit more. Seems to show her character.   Everything we learn about Drew just leads to more questions. How was he hurt? Why has he distanced himself from his family? How did he get into such tight pants? 😁   Aria likes androgynous or feminine attire. This should be interesting. Another week to wait. Sigh.

    So let the games begin.

     

    Again, I'm not sure I like Ben. The way he tells the facts and colors everything doesn't scream trust me. I find him obnoxious to be honest. I don't like that he seems to be counting down til the boys are eighteen and legal.

     

    Emma is a delight. She is a cook who is more worried about filling you up then doing something fancy. She doesn't mince words, and seems to want to mother the boys. I like her take a bit more. Seems to show her character.

     

    Everything we learn about Drew just leads to more questions. How was he hurt? Why has he distanced himself from his family? How did he get into such tight pants? 😁

     

    Aria likes androgynous or feminine attire. This should be interesting. Another week to wait. Sigh.

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  11. Takes Pride

    I'm always glad to see a prompt really inspire someone. Great story and wouldn't mind seeing you expand it. 😁

    I'm always glad to see a prompt really inspire someone. Great story and wouldn't mind seeing you expand it. 😁

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  12. Prompt 354--Word List

    Lol. I remember a wrong number like that, but never wrote those types of stories. I do remember HBO having some more risque shows though. Lol.ah the 70s and early 80s.

    Lol. I remember a wrong number like that, but never wrote those types of stories. I do remember HBO having some more risque shows though. Lol.ah the 70s and early 80s.

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  13. Chapter 2

    The twins are a hard read. You can tell they don't trust anyone but each other. That is sad in so many ways. Time will show more, but you feel for them already.   Drew is going to have to step back and look at what is happening. You know he has a heart, but goddamn is he an ass. If he stops prejudging everything and everyone and takes a moment, he might become a decent human being.   Ben is a wildcard. He claims to be the bitch, which I might agree to. He rubs you wrong, but knows his job. He seems to know what is going on, but seems ready to drop it on Drew's lap and let him take charge.   All in all, just want more so I can figure out who is who, as well as who is out to harm the twins. 6 more days ... sigh.

    The twins are a hard read. You can tell they don't trust anyone but each other. That is sad in so many ways. Time will show more, but you feel for them already.

     

    Drew is going to have to step back and look at what is happening. You know he has a heart, but goddamn is he an ass. If he stops prejudging everything and everyone and takes a moment, he might become a decent human being.

     

    Ben is a wildcard. He claims to be the bitch, which I might agree to. He rubs you wrong, but knows his job. He seems to know what is going on, but seems ready to drop it on Drew's lap and let him take charge.

     

    All in all, just want more so I can figure out who is who, as well as who is out to harm the twins. 6 more days ... sigh.

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  14. Chapter 1

    As usual, we hit the ground running. I can understand Drew's attitude. He was deliberately not given all the facts, was chosen partially because of his looks and not his abilities,  and is finding out that the 'cake walk' might be anything but. You really have to wonder what he is about to get into. All the intrigue is set up, so can't wait for the story to unfold. 

    As usual, we hit the ground running. I can understand Drew's attitude. He was deliberately not given all the facts, was chosen partially because of his looks and not his abilities,  and is finding out that the 'cake walk' might be anything but. You really have to wonder what he is about to get into. All the intrigue is set up, so can't wait for the story to unfold. 

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  15. Chapter 27 - Private Speech

    Ok, so from the other comments I see I came into the middle of a story, not just a person caught between the real world and sleep. You felt the horror of being unable to fully wake or move. Considering how voice irritated him, I'm glad his mother was there as well. Nice chapter/story.

    Ok, so from the other comments I see I came into the middle of a story, not just a person caught between the real world and sleep. You felt the horror of being unable to fully wake or move. Considering how voice irritated him, I'm glad his mother was there as well. Nice chapter/story.

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  16. Amanda Reynolds

    Val, you know I'm a sucker for a good story with a twist. The only thing I'm going to say, and it's your usual request to me, More! 😂 Great story.

    Val, you know I'm a sucker for a good story with a twist. The only thing I'm going to say, and it's your usual request to me, More! 😂 Great story.

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  17. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    You never know what an encounter will bring. Sometimes you just have to take the plunge. Glad you enjoyed it, Caz.

    2 hours ago, Caz Pedroso said:

    Wonderful, just shows you should always grab a chance when you see it :hug: 

    You never know what an encounter will bring. Sometimes you just have to take the plunge. Glad you enjoyed it, Caz.

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  18. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    I'm glad you enjoyed it, Deville. I always like to toy with those getting to know you, or the taking that next step. I find myself to be a people watcher and hopefully that translates into believable characters and situations. Thanks for commenting.

    5 hours ago, deville said:

    An enjoyable story. The emotions , reactions and dialogue highlight the touch and go moments of those first tentative steps after a significant meeting of two people . 

    I'm glad you enjoyed it, Deville. I always like to toy with those getting to know you, or the taking that next step. I find myself to be a people watcher and hopefully that translates into believable characters and situations. Thanks for commenting.

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  19. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Thanks for all the help. Hope you see how I tied it into the topic. 

    5 hours ago, Timothy M. said:

    I liked the fact they could look beyond the age difference and focus on getting to know each other. Drew was very deft in showing how he wasn't born with a silver spoon in his mouth, and in paying a subtle but unmistakable compliment to Terry's mother. They will be a great couple.

    Thanks for all the help. Hope you see how I tied it into the topic. :wub:

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  20. Chance Meeting at the Pride Parade

    Glad you enjoyed it. Dialogue is always a way into a story and is something I try to work on. Thank you for the comment.

    31 minutes ago, JeffreyL said:

    A chance meeting leads to an enjoyable day, and a great short story! We got to know a lot about your characters in a short time. Dialogue is always an important part of why I do or don't like a story. Yours was believable and appropriate to the characters and setting. Although this could be considered complete, I would enjoy reading more about these characters. Thank you.

    Glad you enjoyed it. Dialogue is always a way into a story and is something I try to work on. Thank you for the comment.

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