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    Currently retired from Community College teaching (Civil Technology) and non-singing volunteer for Seattle Men's Chorus and Seattle Women's Chorus

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  1. Andy:

    You will possibly never even see this note, as authors do not often go back to read comments on stories submitted five years ago, but I would be derelict in my duty as an ogre lurking under my bridge if I failed to nip at your toes a little. In Chapter 10 of your story about dragons, if I failed to direct your attention to a homophone. The word reign applies to the rule of a monarch. If you want to mean to control someone I would suggest rein would be a better choice. That is a thin strap, usually of leather, used to control a horse.

    Okay, I will go back to trying to learn enough Celtic to be able to pronounce the Welsh names in your story.

    MisterWill

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    Eros

    It has been well-established in politics and repressive governments, that a lie, told often enough and said loudly enough can take on the color of gospel truth. The fact that children are not exposed to any masculine influence in the lowest grades of school is a demonstration of that. Adolph Hitler proved it too in 1938-1945 in his propaganda campaign against "undesirables" like Jews and homosexuals. His campaign was of immense value to the Allies as intellectuals fled Germany during the Second World War creating a tremendous "brain drain" on European society.
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    Chapter 57

    As a long-time reader of the Bridgemont series, I am fascinated by your ability to connect them to this series 200 years later. That ties everything up in a big Bridgemont blue bow, congratulations. Now to go back to the Bridgemont series a see how Bertie deals with this!.
  4. I am unconcerned whether Admiral Dickson is unhappy that I did not seize Corneille,” Granger said flatly.  

               “Neither am I,” Daventry augmented.

    This is on the face of it ls a confusing statement and might better be expressed with Daventry saying, "As am I.!

  5.  

    I am re-reading the Bridgemont series and have reached the chapter which details the treatment for gangrene in serious wounds. In spite of my revulsion in reaction to using fly larvae and urine, I checked up on that process and find that it is used even today for the same problem, though sterile water is easier to come by contemporaneously so urine is no longer the treatment of choice. Congratulations on your excellent research. I will wipe the barf off my computer before sending this e-mail!.

    Misterwill

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    Chapter 45

    "I felt that memory seer through my psyche" do you mean sear as in a burning flame?
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    Chapter 11

    One of these days I am going to have to return to Gun Room and restart reading the entire Bridgemont Series over again. However, this is the second time you have used 'morning twilight' hours in your writing. I was unfamiliar with that term (though, of course, I was comfortable with the use of 'Twilight' to designate the brief period of 'half-light' following sunset, so I challenged myself to investigate the use of the term to apply to early morning hours. In my research, I discovered several periods both just after sunset and just before sunrise to which astronomers apply the term 'Twilight', along with other designations such as 'nautical dawn', civil dawn, civil twilight and nautical sunset among others. Your use of a period (at sea) just prior to the top-most limb of the rising sun appearing on the horizon is totally correct and, while the timing and length of that period varies somewhat (in relation to the hemisphere and to the season of the year) is an accepted astronomical ( and naval) term, as applied to an interval just before dawn when the upper limb of the sun appears to rise to the horizon. I remember when I was growing up in a farming community that my father applied the term 'cocklight' to that same period and we used to laugh over the frustration of a very ancient rooster who, I feel, felt that if he failed to call attention to that time of day, the sun would be unable to rise. Misterwill
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    Chapter 96

    Troll alert; homophone: “He pretty much tows the line.” One 'toes' the line, like a racer preparing to run. Misterwill
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    Readers, What Do You Skip?

    Valkyrie is a person after my own heart. I thought it was just because I was getting old, but reading the same sex scene in story after story, or even worse, several times in the same story, mixed in with grammatical errors frosts me. I know that on GA a certain amount of M2M sex is expected, but not every time two men get into a room together need we go into repetitive detail. I find the skip key very useful in that case. Though I have been doing some research online about acceptable grammar in contemporary writing and have decided that most of my objections are old-fashioned. In days past, I have jumped on authors for using a structure that I was taught many years ago (it is nearly 80 years since I last attended an English grammar class) and the lectures I sat through at that time were so conservative and hide-bound that what they insisted on is no longer appropriate. I will still comment on homophones though, as to use one is just a sign of laziness on the part of an author (or of ignorance on the part of an editor).
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    Introducing Sex Into Your Story

    As a reader, oriented toward relaxation and enjoyment, not a professional author, nor an editor, a consumer of the stories that are posted to GA, and as an elderly man perhaps of an age where sex in stories merely for the sake of sex does nor pique my interest as much as it might were I a hot-blooded teen ager. I enjoy reading about sex. but only if it advances the story or the characteriazations. It, in my opinion, should be like spices in cooking -- something that adds savor to the dish, not overwhelms the flavor of the meat. I contrast the Bridgemont stories with the Hornblower series -- in the one there must be a sex scene before any progress is made in the story -- in the latter there is no sex male or female at all. If I find too much sex in a story, I am well within my rights as an enjoyer, a reader, to skip a portion of the text, just saying in my mind, 'Well, they had sex again.' and moving my eye down the page to get back to the story line. But I find that a series, like the Hornblower stories, with no sex whatever, especially in rereading them as an adult, to be marginally boring. Misterwill
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    Chapter 10

    I am most pleased and excited at seeing Granger back on his quarterdeck. My only concern is that the long hiatus in the Bridgemont series was not brought about by some condition of poor health on the part of the author. But at any rate, welcome aboard, sir. Misterwill
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    Chapter 16

    Okay, here goes the troll under the bridge: 'doing good' means performing an act of charity, though it is used in informal English as well. The correct expression should be 'doing well'. some authors object to that as it sounds formalistic or stuffy. It is an expression which is pretty much a matter of choice by the author or editor. But there is no such word as 'anyways' the correct word is 'anyway', and when speaking of two people, please use the case of the pronoun properly; as a subject, It should be 'John and I are going to town', if used as a subject 'it was a gift for John and me'.To decide which is correct, just leave the other named person out of the statement and listen to the phrase.
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    Chapter 20

    I had started to become confused by all the different boys and the many new horses, but it looks like as you progress with the story that confusion will work itself out. For the sake of your readers keep the number of characters/pairings down as well as the principal horses. Remember that we are meeting these people/animals for the first time and until we get to know them better can be easily overwhelmed. Misterwill
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    Chapter 1

    I notice that one of your comments used the word 'goobers' in describing youngsters. There is quite a story behind that name. During the Civil War in the US, the Yankee navy blockaded all of the shipping from the Confederate states in an effort to starve them into submission. They were in the main successful and much of the trade that the South relied upon to support their 'cotton' economy was cut off. Over a period of several years, the blockade began to affect severely on the availability of food especially meat and fresh vegetables in the south. A peanut farmer named Goober discovered that the peanuts he had been growing, for which there now, because of the blockade, no export market, were an excellent source of protein and if boiled, could be substituted for fresh vegetables so "farmer Goober's peas" became a staple part of the diet for the Confederate army and quickly entered into the tradition of the southern army. Since that time the name "Goober peas" has become an informal synonym for boiled peanuts.
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    Chapter 11

    Each of the chapters you publish starts with a photograph of a man or two men with a little child. Is any of the men in those pictures, you? I realize you show them because they are beautiful examples of males loving small children, But seeing them makes me wonder about your life.
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