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    Horror
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    Ireland
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  1. When you forget your own material... it gets embarrassing lol.

     

    "What the hell did I name this protagonist now?"  I'd question.

     

    "Lucas," a dedicated fan will say.

     

    And I'm like ☹️ hmm.....

  2. D.K. Daniels

    Coming to Terms

    A thought-provoking piece revolving around a young boy, who is left in a state of limbo as he experiences, and tries to comes to terms with his best friends last port of call. Highly recommended; and it is short too which is cool.
  3. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 1

    I loved the plot twist the second half of the short. For the duration of the piece you had me convinced I was reading about a human. Then as I carried on the wording began to shift and I understood that you weren't talking about a human anymore. Instead, you were referring to a beloved old pet. Cats, Dogs, and whatnot, they become family, doesn't they? Perhaps they are a pain at a time; except you cannot live without the buggers. I myself have two rescue dogs and love the two them perhaps more so than humans. Dogs are a special kind of breed ain't they..? Thanks for the nice read.
  4. When you are down; there is no further place than down. - Danny

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    2. Headstall

      Headstall

      I hope things get better for you... cheers... Gary.... :hug: 

    3. ancientrichard
    4. D.K. Daniels

      D.K. Daniels

      Thank you, everyone, for the kind words. I suppose over the weekend I have been feeling quite weightless over a matter, which seems to have an eternal drive behind them/ it to plague me. Of course, life is not without its ups and downs. Only it is something I didn't need at the moment. Thanks for your concern. Virtual hugs. @drpaladin @Headstall @ancientrichard

  5. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 3

    Oh sure, certainly. I wasn't referring to the child's POV. Simply the social worker. For one if you were working with children, would say, "your parents didn't want you." I highly doubt it. I have worked with many age groups for one, a sensitivity filter is a must if you are working in such a field.
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    Chapter 3

    Overall I get the message you are trying to convey. My heart melted when Carl turned around to his father and asked, "did I get it right?" That was such a sweet thing to say. Although, I must say your scope for the story has increased and you feel more in-depth with the characters and their surroundings. However, the chapter could have used some proofreading ahead of time. There are missing words; and some runoff lines that don't make a whole lot of sense. The caseworker Janet does not appear to have a sensitivity filter revolving around her profession. I would not assume a caseworker to say, "your parents didn't want you," to a child in her care. Perhaps that could have been something briefly mentioned to the adoptive/foster parents in private. Plus, there is also something that Janet did that didn't match up with her occupation. Surely in social care, most have to know the basics like CPR and whatnot, instead, she took notes... notes. Some use she was. Plus, with the protagonist being 5, I doubt he is going to understand much about grades and information. The basics like a badman and policeman are probably that most idyllic. A good book if you wish to capture the voice of a child more in more depth is a book called Room by Emma Donoghue. Good book, it is also a feature film. So far I like the progressing keep up the good work, and take your time with each chapter.
  7. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 1

    Accepting such a responsibility can be daunting. The fact that he has chosen to stay with the department, and is determined all but speaks for itself. However, eventually seeing what the world can throw at someone who is trying to help can wear them down. Let's hope Mike has the mentality to stay focused and well in his line of duty. As sad as the truth may be. A small sacrifice for saving many is always a frowned upon option. Social stigma can grind down at elected personals trying to do good with their time; when all that some can complain about is who you didn't save, rather than the ones you did.
  8. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 1

    Overall, you have a solid first chapter. It could do with some TLC. If the university I am assuming plays a little bit of part in the story describe it a little. Perhaps be more elusive when describing characters. Give them distinguishing features so we can tell them apart from one another. Think Harry Potter - that is genius, glasses and a scar along with his hair color and eye color. We leave the rest up to the imagination. To break up the continual flow of the action, perhaps drop a paragraph of backstory. How long as the protagonist been talking to Sean? Is Enzo's year going according to plan? What is he looking for on Gay Cupid? lol - Good chapter, look forward to more.
  9. D.K. Daniels

    Prologue

    Interesting opening. You could have brought the reader for an experience by adding some descriptive words into the mix. For instance, when the man's head hit the tiled wall, it could have made a sloping sound because of the water running and the shampoo that remained. Could the white mixture in his hair turn a bright or mellowed red? Perhaps there is more to the perpetrator. Did he wear gloves, mitts on his feet? Did the light from the bathroom flood out into the hall or bedroom. Add some suspense to the killer's behalf. Maybe the door creaked as he opened it, something he didn't except. Just possibly he did get past the door without a problem. Good work, keep it up.
  10. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 33

    Great to see that Rick is advancing. Let's hope that he gets where he wants to go in the tournament. Its incredibly sweet to also see that Taine and Sly drove all the way up just to support Rick, that there is devotion. I figured that the Dodge Charger car was not going to be someone equally tormenting to the boys. I figured it would be someone they knew, but not the brother. Good plot twist. I wonder why he came all this way too and for the last couple of days, he has been stalking the boys.
  11. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 9

    I suppose we can all speak of a pen-pal at one point in our lives. Some are very special, you learn to love their honesty, and since writing for one is such an intimate and vulnerable thing, you get to witness a part of another person that is not always present in flesh. Us creatures are quite critical; when we don't know who we are viewing but connect with on an emotional level, great bonds usually are formed. My first ever "boyfriend" given this is the internet age, and I am a child of this eras contraption was via facebook. We spoke over a three, almost four year period and became close. The only hard bit was, he was over 18,000 km away, which was hard in itself when we fell in love; of course, however, we progressed to talking via skype and whatnot. Unfortunately, I never met him, I did love him dearly. We went out separate ways as ones do, but nothing bad became of it. Sad to know we don't talk anymore, but that is life. People come and people go.
  12. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 32

    So much happening in this chapter. At times I am a tad bit confused considering Ireland doesn't have many of these traditions and if they do they are drastically simplified lol. Except I can relate to how Rick feels about progressing with something he didn't think he was going to achieve. I reckon any time you let yourself down in the form of a hope, just sometimes it comes back to prove you wrong. I felt sorry for Kathy, I am sure she accepted her defeat with a sense of dignity and pride.
  13. D.K. Daniels

    Love, Simon- A Coming Out Movie

    Love, Simon is a great addition to the LGBT film community. However, I believe there have been stronger portrayals in cinema which deal with the same issues. One of which, I have come across; only a short distance away from Ireland, in Iceland, the talent director Guðmundur Arnar Guðmundsson made a beautiful debut called Hjartasteinn (Heartstone.) The movie grips the viewer on so many other deep topics, including topics touched on in Love, Simon to some degree. It summed up brilliant character development in an imploding town. The trailer, however, does not do it justice. https://www.imdb.com/title/tt4613254/
  14. Yesterday, I officially passed a new goal of mine. In total, I have written in excess of over 500,000 words. Which is a lot? 200,000 of these words which are on Gayauthors, and has been accumulated since January. I am thrilled to be able to reach a milestone and with every word you guys have read, I hope by this time next year I will have 1,000,000 words. :) Cheers

  15. D.K. Daniels

    Chapter 2

    There are some bittersweet moments floating about the chapter. I was genuinely touched by the boys reaction of breakfast. I suppose, if he had been treated badly for god knows how long, the sudden overwhelming eruption of colour and merry glee is frighting to Chris. The overall premise of the current story reminds me of the book called, “a child called it,” by David Pelzer. Plus the other two remaining books which talk of the mans later life. The fact that Chris has made a friend in Carl is heartwarming, and understand that Carl has taken to his new friend quite quickly almost feels like the main character can finally breathe. On another note, perhaps with more gripping scene, switch from the telling progressive, to showing. Instead of telling the audience that the condensation fogged up the window. If it has any relevance to the story, show it. Use the five senses for reference. One thing I can imagine is that the boys could have began to shake when the bedrrom door was closed. When they slammed the door, did the hard clap richoct throughoutnthe walls of the house. Great work, I look forward to more
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