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Adamagika: The Spirit Within - 41. EPILOGUE

EPILOGUE

Victor Cross stared at the green flames rising high into the air before him. He watched as they slithered across the floor of that one massive room in the ancient castle, reserved for one purpose – a purpose that was, at that moment, being fulfilled.

Three pale, almost skeletal mages danced around a massive rune on the ground with wooden staves in their hands. The bright green rune itself seemed to be generating the violent flames that erupted from the stone floor. With each wave of their hands, a section of the fire would rise and turn a deep dark shade of blue or black before resting once again into the cold green that dominated the space. The whole room was bathed in green light except for four small sections that were being covered by the shadows of four thick pillars supporting the ceiling.

Decades ago, he would have wondered how they were still alive when every single one of them in that room should have been dead from the flames rising high into the ceiling, occupying half the room. There should not have been enough air to breathe if the scorching heat did not kill them first.

However, he did not wonder about such things anymore for they were no longer his concern. His thoughts those days were cloudy. They had always been for as long as he could remember, for as long as the voice allowed him to remember. He only knew and did what the voice allowed him to.

Besides, it was impossible to tell at that point the different between him and a corpse. He mused that he could very well have been dead and just hadn’t realized it yet.

She is coming, the voice he came to know as Lord Raezhul said.

“Leave us,” Victor said to the three mages.

Without any questions, the three waved the staves in their hands over their head and disappeared in a bright display of green light and blue smoke which slithered through open cracks and holes in the walls.

Victor raised his head as though to study the scorch marks on the ceiling. “You shouldn’t be here.”

A figure moved from the darkness behind one of the pillars. She blended so well with her surroundings that she could have been mistaken as a shadow dancing with the flames. As she came into the light, long, dark hair and a beautiful face was revealed. It was a woman he knew was once called Margaret Langsley, Jacob’s mother.

Of course it wasn’t really her. The real Margaret Langsley has been dead for many years.

“I came to see what progress you have,” she said.

“There is no need for you to witness this,” Victor said, his voice echoing as though two people were speaking at the same time.

Margaret seemed to ignore what was just said. “You’re still going through with it, then? I was under the impression that things did not go according to plan.”

“Yes,” Victor said. “It seems my old friend Edward is up to his old tricks again. The boy’s soul remains whole and all my attempts to break it have been quite... disappointing.”

“I still don’t understand why you just don’t kill the old man. Your host is not feeling sentimental now, is it?” she asked tauntingly. The green flames around the room flickered dangerously.

“Was it not you who told him what was to come? Perhaps you are to blame for him being a thorn on my side.”

Margaret scowled at him, marring the beautiful features of her face. “You know well enough that he would have seen right through any deception I tried. His gifts have always been quite troublesome. He would have known if I hid anything or had lied. Besides, he has been getting a lot of help. That, coupled with his control over the other boy and the events in Arantiva, has far greater consequences than my own actions. Even without my help, he would have thwarted your attempts at killing young Adam Lowry.”

“In truth, that was not his doing,” Victor said. “It seems the boy Jacob is far more powerful than I imagined. His affection for the other boy broke through my spell and he managed to free himself when his lover was at the edge of death. It appears he has a powerful gift of foresight which shall prove useful in time.”

“Why would you need him for that when you already have me?”

“It never hurts to have a surrogate.”

“You make it sound like you don’t trust my visions,” Margaret said with an unkind smile.

Victor turned to her, his thin lips grinning madly. “Did you not foresee several times that Adam would die? How many visions did you give me of his death? Three, was it not? And how many times did they not come to pass?”

Margaret paled in the green light. “I give you the future as I see it. I warned you that those paths were uncertain. Obviously, someone else who has the capacity to see the future is interfering, changing it as time goes by. Adam should have died during their training when you possessed that other boy to attack him. Yet Jacob interfered somehow and created a shield that saved him. Adam should have died in that assault against the humans yet that Brian brat interfered. He should never have gotten out of the crystal cavern alive yet something must have happened there that once again changed fate. Someone is prodding the people around him to interfere and I have no control over the changes they enact.”

“Indeed,” Victor mused and remained silent as he watched the green flames growing steadily higher. When he finally spoke again, the room grew colder although Margaret certainly did not seem to feel anything, “so tell me Seer, what do you see now?”

Margaret frowned. Clearly this question made her uncomfortable. She looked at the flames as though looking for answers within them. “Darkness still. Absolute darkness. Nothing has changed in the end. Something is about to happen to this world. Whatever it is can’t be good. It’s like the world before this, after she destroyed it. Everything is just… gone. I don’t know what will happen and that worries me.” She paused watching the flames. Sadness seemed to radiate from her features. “Are you certain what we’re doing is going stop whatever is coming?”

“Oh yes,” Victor said seriously. He was very good at hiding the amusement in his voice. “Quite certain of it.”

When Victor said nothing else, Margaret tilted her head to the side as though to study the flames. The shadows created by the green fire on her face made her look almost evil. “So, what is with the charade? Why prepare his body if we are unable to put him under our control?”

“There is more than one way to bend another to my will,” he said. He raised his hand over his chest and a small hole appeared in his black armor. Within seconds, a blackened crystal was protruding out until it escaped completely from his chest and floated in his open palm.

Margaret looked at the crystal curiously. Her eyes widened at the realization that dawned on her. “You cannot be serious.”

“I told you that you did not need to witness this,” Victor said.

She looked at Victor’s thin skeletal face. The lack of life in it didn’t seem to bother her so much as the crystal that was now floating in his hand. “Have you learned nothing from the past? From the failures of the last Demon Lord? It is forbidden for our kind to bend other spirits to our will in that manner. To do so would fuse your essence into this plane. You will lose your immortality. It is one thing to bend the host but this… this is madness.”

Victor smiled a grim smile. “Not even you know and see everything, Seer. Isn’t that what you just told me?”

“I will not help you do this,” Margaret said.

“Then leave,” Victor said as he once again looked at the green fire. “You have done your part.”

Margaret looked at first surprised at the dismissal then angry. “This is not what we agreed on. If you do this, this will be the end of you. I guarantee it.”

“Have you foreseen this?” he asked in an almost amused tone. “Or are you going to stop me? Are you going to release another wave of prophecies with the sole purpose of bringing about my end?” He laughed, his cold voice echoing in the lifeless stone. “Do what you have to. In the meantime, you are no longer welcome here.”

“Don’t you dare!” Margaret yelled. As she did, there was a sound somewhere overhead in another room. It sounded like thousands of glasses smashing and breaking at the same time. Margaret yelled in pain as white flames engulfed her.

“Curse you, Raezhul!” she flared as her fingers slowly melted away. “Your treachery shall not go unpunished. If it is the last thing I do, you shall pay! I swear you shall pay!” Her figure burst in a blinding blue light and nothing was left, not even dust.

“Should we be worried?” Victor asked the empty room.

No, Lord Raezhul’s voice echoed in Victor’s head. A powerful seer she is, she has not the power to affect another spirit, nor will she have the time to plot against us without giving herself away. We will take care of her. There will be time for that later. We shall destroy her even if we have to tear apart the Hallean Mountains piece by piece. For now, we must finish our task.

Victor watched the floating crystal, hovering over his open palm. He didn’t question the voice that spoke to him. It was no longer in his nature to question. He had given up all free will so long ago. Yet, he couldn’t help be disturbed – or perhaps the better word was curious. In all the years Victor had heard the voice of Lord Raezhul, it had never sounded uncertain. And that was exactly how the voice sounded just then.

Grasp the crystal, Lord Raezhul said, his voice just hinting with a small warning. Complete the cycle.

He grasped the item that he had pulled from within his body. No, not his body but the spirit of Lord Raezhul. He didn’t understand how such things worked but he knew that the crystal was more than a piece of rock. It was part of Lord Raezhul, a fragment of the spirit within him. As soon as he touched it, the black crystal released a light green glow from the very center of the stone. With the crystal in hand, Victor walked towards the wild fire that was burning in the center of the room.

The spirit of Lord Raezhul spent decades preparing for that moment and Victor delighted at the excitement coursing through his body. Dozens of the most powerful spirits and mages in the world were manipulated or killed so that the events of that day could be made possible. He has waited for the reincarnation of this particular spirit for centuries so that he can undo the damage she has wrought. Only she with the power to break us can restore us. Only Ho-o could possibly have the power to return their world and their very existence to the way it was.

At first, he was reluctant that his plan would work as her spirit was fractured between two hosts. Perhaps she even intended it, knowing he was up to something. Perhaps she knew of his plans after all. She did have some degree of foresight that constantly made him worry. It was the very reason he had to ally himself with the Seer, an alliance that was no longer necessary.

Though he sometimes doubted, he did not waver in his resolve in what must be done, what sacrifices must be made for his kind, for all spirits. He plotted and planned so that when the time came, her power would be united in one host. He knew that if her power was divided, if even the tiniest bit was absent from the containment he would placed, the repercussions could be great. The spells could unbind and he could end up creating something greater and worse than even he could possibly imagine. Something uncontrolled that would have all of Ho-o’s power as well as his own.

But he was certain that his plan had worked. The boy had played his part well. He felt the power pouring through from Adam to Jacob and even heard the connection between the two break. All that immense power and the very essence of Ho-o’s spirit in this world were contained within the boy he had manipulated. The integrity of his soul was irrelevant as long as the other spells held.

Yes, his plan will work.

Wherever he stepped, the flames would recede almost as though they were afraid. The fires moved back as Victor progressed over the rune, to be consumed within the massive green bonfire.

Inside, Victor knelt and the tongues of fire pulled back revealing a large black rock that was lying at the very center of the green rune. Victor looked down at the almost shapeless rock and smiled. With one swift motion, he thrust the jagged black crystal into the stone. The room exploded into fire as the green flames spread in every direction as if they were afraid and desperately trying to escape from Victor and the rock lying at his feet. The black crystal slowly sank into the rock and disappeared beneath its dark surface.

For a moment, nothing happened other than the continuous billowing of the flames around the room. And then the thing Victor had been anticipating for so long finally began with the rock’s movement. A section of it broke away from the rest attached only by a small segment no thicker than a boy’s arm. In fact, it could have been a boy’s arm because the very end opened up to the unmistakable shape of a hand. The rock slowly broke apart and revealed pale flesh underneath the charred stone.

Victor smiled as two eyes opened to look up at him. The cold green of his eyes looked with triumph at the palest blue that were gazing almost emptily back at him.

It is done, Lord Raezhul said.

“It is done,” repeated Victor Cross. He raised his hand over the stone and it exploded with an unearthly shriek. A naked body stretched itself out over the fiery rune as a boy’s anguished cry fused with the enraged howl of a wrathful spirit, their voices echoing throughout the castle, unheard by the living.

A thousand miles away, Adam Lowry woke with a scream.

This officially marks the end of Adamagika: The Spirit Within. Thank you for taking the time to read it. I'd appreciate any feedback on it through a review, a personal message, a post in the discussion thread, or even through an email at hamencheese@yahoo.com. ;)

If you're wondering what's next, it unfortunately won't be the sequel to this (though I do hope to write that eventually). I will however release a new story from a different genre next week on Tuesday (the day after Adamagika's regularly scheduled release). Check that out in the meantime while you wait for the sequel. :P

Again, thank you for reading Adamagika and I hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

Disclaimer: This story is a work of fiction. It is an adventure story but contains some elements of a romantic relationship between two consenting teens. If reading such is offensive to you or illegal in your location, do not read further. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author reserves the right to distribute this story.
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Hmmm, not much resolution nor insightful hints as to what is to come. More of a teaser with the actual state of Jacob still a mystery. No follow-up to be expected for a while ....And patience is not my strong suit. :(

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Well sadly this is over and as Dave said, there is no sequel in sight. But then that is normal for the book world. It can be a couple three years before sequels come out. Glad to see you are practicing for when you are published my friend.

 

Not that this is about me, but this will be my 500 review - fitting I think no? [okay I knew I was two away so I did the other first :P]

 

I think some things ended up resolved, others not so much. All in all very well done HC. Hopefully you will get around to writing the second one and i will be waiting -

 

Thanks for writing and posting this.

 

Andy

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Hmmm - on-line fiction is a mercurial format and as with any serial publication, the driving force is that at some point there will be a resolution of some sort. This epilogue was unsatisfactory in setting up a future story line or completing the current story line. While some might consider this type of close edgy or artful, this is so unfinished that I am disinclined to read anything else you write. Sorry but that's just how this leaves me.

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On 04/12/2011 02:32 AM, Daddydavek said:
Hmmm, not much resolution nor insightful hints as to what is to come. More of a teaser with the actual state of Jacob still a mystery. No follow-up to be expected for a while ....And patience is not my strong suit. :(
Hi daddydavek, thanks for the comment and I'll keep that in mind for my future works. I know it doesn't close some of the questions though that was my intention anyway for this particular series. Thank you for reading though. :)
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On 04/12/2011 03:02 AM, Andrew_Q_Gordon said:
Well sadly this is over and as Dave said, there is no sequel in sight. But then that is normal for the book world. It can be a couple three years before sequels come out. Glad to see you are practicing for when you are published my friend.

 

Not that this is about me, but this will be my 500 review - fitting I think no? [okay I knew I was two away so I did the other first :P]

 

I think some things ended up resolved, others not so much. All in all very well done HC. Hopefully you will get around to writing the second one and i will be waiting -

 

Thanks for writing and posting this.

 

Andy

Well thank you for that 500th review. :P Yes, there were several things left open in this story. I realized that many things remain unresolved. Some were done intentionally like what happened to Jacob. Some on the other hand were unintentional like what happened to Thomas - don't remember him? :). I'll be posting another story next week which will not last as long as this one. I already have the chapters mapped out and I'm expecting it to be 25-30 chapters long unless I find that I can't squeeze them into fewer chapters. Still a long way but I don't dedicate too much time to writing. I don't actually intend to publish any works. I'm doing this mostly as a hobby. :)
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On 04/12/2011 04:01 AM, Laz_9 said:
Hmmm - on-line fiction is a mercurial format and as with any serial publication, the driving force is that at some point there will be a resolution of some sort. This epilogue was unsatisfactory in setting up a future story line or completing the current story line. While some might consider this type of close edgy or artful, this is so unfinished that I am disinclined to read anything else you write. Sorry but that's just how this leaves me.
I'm sorry to hear that Laz. I really am. :( But this story was written with the intention of writing a sequel (well a trilogy, since a sequel won't fit everything I intend to happen). Perhaps you can help me by sending in a form of a personal message what you think is the bottom line of the current story line and why it was unresolved. Several things are left hanging yes but those were mostly intended. In the meantime, all I can do is hope that some day you may change your mind. :)
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My heart just shattered in a million pieces Hamen!! I am in deep denial.... y did Adam scream? is Jacob dead.... argggggggg I'm gonna kill him if he's not dead!! lol but seriously, this is so sad... can't wait for book two which i hope will come about as soon as possible. i understand any element that may act as an impediment to ur speedy writing but i hope u resolve them quickly... thanks for a wonderful story although i have about a million questions

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On 04/12/2011 08:56 AM, jazziebabe said:
My heart just shattered in a million pieces Hamen!! I am in deep denial.... y did Adam scream? is Jacob dead.... argggggggg I'm gonna kill him if he's not dead!! lol but seriously, this is so sad... can't wait for book two which i hope will come about as soon as possible. i understand any element that may act as an impediment to ur speedy writing but i hope u resolve them quickly... thanks for a wonderful story although i have about a million questions
Hi jazziebabe, no, Jacob is not dead. The amulet in Ch 40 showed that. Now for why Adam screamed, it was because the two events in the last two paragraphs of the epilogue are connected as they occurred at the same time. As to how? I'll just have to discuss that in the sequel if it hasn't been figured out yet. Thanks for reading the story and I hope you enjoy the new story I'm releasing while you wait for the sequel of this one. :)
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Oh god, great ending, i can speculate so much from that last chapter, now I just gotta write it down so I remember it when you write the sequel *gets out pen and paper*. I'll be checking in to read what ever you write next, really like you as an author, cause you make sense (most of the time *wink*) , and have great ideas. Will keep in touch.

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On 04/15/2011 01:30 PM, tiatan101 said:
Oh god, great ending, i can speculate so much from that last chapter, now I just gotta write it down so I remember it when you write the sequel *gets out pen and paper*. I'll be checking in to read what ever you write next, really like you as an author, cause you make sense (most of the time *wink*) , and have great ideas. Will keep in touch.
Thanks! I'm really glad to hear you enjoyed it. I'm even more pleased to hear I made sense *wink*. I hope you also like the next story coming up. :)
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Great story. I am very happy that I discovered the story when it as finished and that I did not have to wait for each update :-) I would have bought the (e-)book if it were available.

 

The characters, their strong bond, their interaction, fate vs independence ... all of these ingredients are just my cup of tea. I really hope you will continue this story.

 

Well done,

 

Thommy-Lee

 

 

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On 05/18/2011 06:26 PM, thommy-lee said:
Great story. I am very happy that I discovered the story when it as finished and that I did not have to wait for each update :-) I would have bought the (e-)book if it were available.

 

The characters, their strong bond, their interaction, fate vs independence ... all of these ingredients are just my cup of tea. I really hope you will continue this story.

 

Well done,

 

Thommy-Lee

 

Thank you Thommy-Lee. I appreciate hearing that. ^_^ And yes, I do intend to continue the story, possibly after my other story "Charlie" is finished. Check that out too. Perhaps you'll like it also despite the genre being different. :)
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GREAT JOB! I really enjoyed this story - action packed - but was left scratching my head with the ending. I'm happy to see that there will be a Book 2 and maybe a Book 3.

 

AWESOME!!!:2thumbs:

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On 07/09/2011 02:35 PM, Eddy said:
GREAT JOB! I really enjoyed this story - action packed - but was left scratching my head with the ending. I'm happy to see that there will be a Book 2 and maybe a Book 3.

 

AWESOME!!!:2thumbs:

Yes, I realized that erm... shortcoming... with the ending that I'll make sure not to repeat in Book 2! Haha. I hope to write it soon (possibly after I finish my other story Charlie). :)
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I probably shouldn't be reading your replies to reviews because it makes me come up with more theories as to what will happen next. Jacob and Ho-o is being held captive by Lord Raezhul and he wants to control Ho-o or something, right? Then Adam will somehow save Jacob and stop Lord Raezhul by using the demon blade. However, for whatever reason, I keep thinking that Victor and Lord Raezhul aren't that bad. Maybe I'm reading too much into it.

 

Anyway, finish Charlie, write one short story, and then start the sequel! :)

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On 08/04/2011 05:10 AM, Ramon said:
I probably shouldn't be reading your replies to reviews because it makes me come up with more theories as to what will happen next. Jacob and Ho-o is being held captive by Lord Raezhul and he wants to control Ho-o or something, right? Then Adam will somehow save Jacob and stop Lord Raezhul by using the demon blade. However, for whatever reason, I keep thinking that Victor and Lord Raezhul aren't that bad. Maybe I'm reading too much into it.

 

Anyway, finish Charlie, write one short story, and then start the sequel! :)

Haha. Yes, I think you got the gist of the story with a few tweaks here or there. 0:) I am attempting to finish Charlie soon. It's just that I find myself lacking time. >.
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I know you probably get this a lot but seriously whats wrong with continuing the story? Yeah I know you wrote in authors note there wont be any sequel but why did you wrote the epilogue then? For me its just a huuuge cliffhanger I absolutely hated/hate and will hate. Dont get me wrong Im not angry, mad or a spawn of pure evil but I really loved your story - read it in less than 3 days thats how much I loved it. If I didnt know better I would think this was a rewrite from some kind of fantasy book and you should totally get published (in my humble opinion). Thank you for writing this, for publishing it and also I crave the sequel now at least I know there wont be one I should be waiting for so I can get on with my life :DDD Thanks a lot again and I hope to see more of your wonderful work here :)

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On 11/14/2011 03:34 AM, Leesil said:
I know you probably get this a lot but seriously whats wrong with continuing the story? Yeah I know you wrote in authors note there wont be any sequel but why did you wrote the epilogue then? For me its just a huuuge cliffhanger I absolutely hated/hate and will hate. Dont get me wrong Im not angry, mad or a spawn of pure evil but I really loved your story - read it in less than 3 days thats how much I loved it. If I didnt know better I would think this was a rewrite from some kind of fantasy book and you should totally get published (in my humble opinion). Thank you for writing this, for publishing it and also I crave the sequel now at least I know there wont be one I should be waiting for so I can get on with my life :DDD Thanks a lot again and I hope to see more of your wonderful work here :)
Hi Leesil. Actually, my exact wording was "If you're wondering what's next, it unfortunately won't be the sequel to this (though I do hope to write that eventually)."

 

That means the next story I was working on at the time Adamagika ended was not the sequel to Adamagika. To be exact, that story is my other story entitled "Charlie".

 

Adamagika: The Spirit Within (A:TSW) will have a sequel. Ever since I wrote it, I intended it to be a three part book series with a short story between each part. I'm planning to start working on the short story post-TSW after I'm done with "Charlie". :)

 

Also, thanks for reading and leaving a review. Always glad to hear from readers. :D

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i must say i started to read this story and liked it a lot but i had not really dropped it but skimmed through the last few chapters after jacob's issue with the dark lord lol, i am a sucker for sad stories HC so although i really liked this story i could not bring myself to read the end especially as i thought it was the end i cried like a baby at the though that he was dead. I'm really an emotional mess really. I will have to read the end again.

Did i say i hate sad things already. i just can't handle drama lol. the story was so sweet y did it have to take such a drastic end :,( i mean i understand y sigh its just my poor little heart i can't handle sad things really well gets me depressed for a long time. But i loved the word you created one of the first stories i read here

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On 01/24/2013 02:02 AM, itachibones said:
i must say i started to read this story and liked it a lot but i had not really dropped it but skimmed through the last few chapters after jacob's issue with the dark lord lol, i am a sucker for sad stories HC so although i really liked this story i could not bring myself to read the end especially as i thought it was the end i cried like a baby at the though that he was dead. I'm really an emotional mess really. I will have to read the end again.

Did i say i hate sad things already. i just can't handle drama lol. the story was so sweet y did it have to take such a drastic end :,( i mean i understand y sigh its just my poor little heart i can't handle sad things really well gets me depressed for a long time. But i loved the word you created one of the first stories i read here

Aah, I didn't think this story was sad (save that one chapter perhaps). At least it isn't compared to the emotional roller coaster that my other story here is. Hehe. I learned from this story that while a little uncertainty is good, a lot of unanswered questions are bad. It's something I'm hoping to avoid with the sequels and mini-novels after.

 

The first mini-novel is in progress already if you want to check it. That one isn't sad (at least, I'm pretty sure it isn't).

 

Overall, I feel this series is light-hearted with humor and allegories intended to make you think (lightly) more than feel. But hey, maybe that's just me. :)

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Just finished reading this and I must say WOW !!! I absolutely LOVED it :wub: I just could not stop reading it. I absolutely love your characters they just go straight into my heart ..... but the sad ending when Jacob and Adam are not together in the end just breaks my heart :no: please try to have happy endings :glomp: ... other than that your story is amazing and I am soooooo happy!! that the next book of this series is complete and I can't wait to read it thank you v.v. much for writing this :thankyou:

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On 05/11/2013 06:32 AM, ania187 said:
Just finished reading this and I must say WOW !!! I absolutely LOVED it :wub: I just could not stop reading it. I absolutely love your characters they just go straight into my heart ..... but the sad ending when Jacob and Adam are not together in the end just breaks my heart :no: please try to have happy endings :glomp: ... other than that your story is amazing and I am soooooo happy!! that the next book of this series is complete and I can't wait to read it thank you v.v. much for writing this :thankyou:
You're welcome ania187! I'm been working on and off on the second book. I must admit it's taking me awhile to get it going. I think it's mostly cause of the wonderful feedback I received from my last story Charlie. I feel like every other story I write moving forward has to live up to the same (if not better) standards. Hehe.

 

Anyway, if you haven't yet. Do check out that story. You might like it too. :)

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You know, I forgot just how great of an author you are. And you can always tell the truly great authors because they have no reviews until the very last chapter. ONLY those with incredible restraint can stop long enough to comment. The rest of us HAVE to go on and read the next. Reviewing would burst the bubble of disbelief. I marathoned it. Just couldn't stop. I MAY be suffering from sleep deprivation shortly.

That was a most incredible story. The only part I had an issue with was the bickering in the hall about who would go in to retrieve the weapon. My family thought I was nuts as I was screaming at my computer to just get your asses IN there, we were losing the city!

Ya, I was hopelessly involved in the story.

What I HONESTLY don't understand is why you're profile says only that you're a "promising" author. Is that like a practicing physician? We're supposed to wait until they get it right? Well you already have so . . . WTF?

Thanks for a wonderfully great adventure. I'm gonna have to go now and see if the sequel is up yet.

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This is one of the best stories I have read on here!

Such an interesting, magical and lovely tale.

Hope to read the end of this series in my lifetime!

Thank You! :D

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Oooo, a cliff hanger? I have so enjoyed this story and I DO hope that you WILL consider writing a sequel.

Thank you very much for writing it, I look forward to more of your tales. :)

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