Poetry by Renee - 5. Belonging

I can relate, Renee. We probably all can at different times in our life.  We are who we are, and it's ourselves we have to please. I like how you separated the verses into couplets, slowing down the rhythm. I do that sometimes as well, but usually with rhyming couplets. Very effective... the sense of sadness, and feeling alone, came through beautifully. I didn't know you were a poet   Well done... cheers... Gary....

I'm not well versed on the subject of poetry, but this went straight to the heart. Nicely done. 

I've been trying to figure out what to write about this.  I've written and erased several comments, but nothing seemed adequate so I'll just say: you did a great job of describing how it feels to be out of place... out of step with the world.  I've felt that, and it's not a good feeling.  Excellent job  

You did a great job of communicating that feeling. We've all been there st some point, and it hit home for me. 

2 hours ago, Headstall said:

I can relate, Renee. We probably all can at different times in our life.  We are who we are, and it's ourselves we have to please. I like how you separated the verses into couplets, slowing down the rhythm. I do that sometimes as well, but usually with rhyming couplets. Very effective... the sense of sadness, and feeling alone, came through beautifully. I didn't know you were a poet   Well done... cheers... Gary....

Thank you, Gary. I'm not a poet, not like many here, but sometimes I just need to get how I'm feeling out and I was recently challenged to attempt more poetry. I debated the spacing, but in the end I preferred the two lines together vs four. Glad you enjoyed it.

1 hour ago, R J Drew said:

I'm not well versed on the subject of poetry, but this went straight to the heart. Nicely done. 

Thank you, RJ. I'm not well versed in it either, but luckily I was able to convey what I wanted.

1 hour ago, LitLover said:

I've been trying to figure out what to write about this.  I've written and erased several comments, but nothing seemed adequate so I'll just say: you did a great job of describing how it feels to be out of place... out of step with the world.  I've felt that, and it's not a good feeling.  Excellent job  

I have that same problem when I try and comment on something someone has written. You're right that it's not a good feeling, but sometimes all you can do is deal with it, or have the strength to walk away. Thank you for your comment!

you made me understand your pain, but also the hope. well done

40 minutes ago, Defiance19 said:

You did a great job of communicating that feeling. We've all been there st some point, and it hit home for me. 

 

Thank you, Def. I wish I could say I'm glad you could relate, but I wish nobody ever had to feel that way.

Just now, mogwhy said:

you made me understand your pain, but also the hope. well done

Thank you, Moggy.

Understood! Loud and clear. Great Job!

Just now, BlindAmbition said:

Understood! Loud and clear. Great Job!

Thank you JP!

Renee, i liked this. I'm no poet but this was lovely and introspective. 

2 minutes ago, MichaelS36 said:

Renee, i liked this. I'm no poet but this was lovely and introspective. 

Thank you, Mike. Glad you enjoyed it.

It's a great poem Renee.  I like the form. It's sad but there seems to be hope also. Nicely done. 

2 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

It's a great poem Renee.  I like the form. It's sad but there seems to be hope also. Nicely done. 

Thank you, tim. Unfortunately, sometimes the truth is sad and hurts, but at the same time there is a release in recognizing that truth for what it is.

I could feel both the longing to belong as well as the loneliness in your words. I guess this feeling of fitting in n wanting to belong is quite common n everyone must have gone through it at some point.  Very well written...