Jump to content
    WolfM
  • Author
  • 113 Words
  • 2,161 Views
  • 14 Comments
Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 

Ravings of a Rabid Werewolf - Poetry by Wolf - 12. Waves

Thank you to AC for once again helping me out as I try something new.

The sand feels warm under my bare feet

As I watch the waves, if you could call them that.

I’d hoped to spend my day off surfing,

Though Mother Nature seems to have foiled that plan.

I walk along the beach hoping to see something worth riding;

Just one swell to give reason to get out the board.

Yet this day it is not to be as other wetsuit clad bodies mill around;

In the search for that wave, that thrill, that joy of gliding across the water’s surface;

That feel of a shortboard, fish or gunboard under your feet,

As you try to tame the ocean and command the waves.

Copyright © 2017 WolfM; All Rights Reserved.
  • Like 10
  • Love 3
Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
You are not currently following this story. Be sure to follow to keep up to date with new chapters.

Recommended Comments

Chapter Comments

having never been to a beach, but loving to walk barefoot at the lake, i can remember the feel you mention, the warmth from the earth, the slight abrasive feel of the sand

i can see the "wetsuit clad bodies" standing around

i don't know about form or style, but i liked this, it flowed nicely and painted a picture of an all too calm day at the beach

 

thank you again for sharing your words with us

 

  • Like 2
Link to comment

i can see those bodies and the calm of the seas in this, as much as seas are calm . the disappointment. nicely done Wolfy

  • Like 2
Link to comment

You make me feel the day, sense the sand and too-calm sea; the unplanned aimless milling about, and the sight of taut wetsuited men lingers in my brain. You have brought all of this to life.  

  • Like 2
Link to comment
22 hours ago, mollyhousemouse said:

having never been to a beach, but loving to walk barefoot at the lake, i can remember the feel you mention, the warmth from the earth, the slight abrasive feel of the sand

i can see the "wetsuit clad bodies" standing around

i don't know about form or style, but i liked this, it flowed nicely and painted a picture of an all too calm day at the beach

 

thank you again for sharing your words with us

 

Thank you molly :) 

  • Like 1
Link to comment
22 hours ago, mogwhy said:

i can see those bodies and the calm of the seas in this, as much as seas are calm . the disappointment. nicely done Wolfy

Thank you moogy. :)

  • Like 1
Link to comment
22 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

You make me feel the day, sense the sand and too-calm sea; the unplanned aimless milling about, and the sight of taut wetsuited men lingers in my brain. You have brought all of this to life.  

Thank you Parker.  :hug: The wetsuited men did make for a nice visual and riding my motorcycle in a wetsuit and boots is always fun.  Disappointing not getting to surf, but at least not a total loss for the day. :gikkle:

Edited by WolfM
  • Like 2
Link to comment
19 hours ago, deville said:

Your words make it so easy to visualize the day and even feel the slight underlying frustration. 

Thank you deville :)

  • Like 1
Link to comment

What I like most about this poem is it's quite confidence. It's about a grand view: seeing the ocean; thinking about being on a boat or a surfboard. But that grand perspective is intimate too because you let the reader walk with you in your quiet moment of contemplation. 

 

Well done. I think it's lovely. 

  • Like 2
Link to comment
25 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

What I like most about this poem is it's quite confidence. It's about a grand view: seeing the ocean; thinking about being on a boat or a surfboard. But that grand perspective is intimate too because you let the reader walk with you in your quiet moment of contemplation. 

 

Well done. I think it's lovely. 

Thank you Al.  Not only for the advice on some of my poems but for the encouragement you've given me and the confidence to keep trying.

  • Like 1
Link to comment
View Guidelines

Create an account or sign in to comment

You need to be a member in order to leave a comment

Create an account

Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy!

Register a new account

Sign in

Already have an account? Sign in here.

Sign In Now
  • Newsletter

    Sign Up and get an occasional Newsletter.  Fill out your profile with favorite genres and say yes to genre news to get the monthly update for your favorite genres.

    Sign Up
×
×
  • Create New...

Important Information

Our Privacy Policy can be found here: Privacy Policy. We have placed cookies on your device to help make this website better. You can adjust your cookie settings, otherwise we'll assume you're okay to continue..