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Twenty-Two Early Poems - 5. flow

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Poem No. 13

 

Love is an emotion

that's deep as an ocean,

as violent as a flood,

and cold as mud.

 

 

Poem No. 14

 

Through fine crimson,

thoughts appear of sweet stillness

to flow into my mind.

 

Through stillness, a swath of air

so light

calmly coming to bear

itself by night

breaks my thoughts of sweet

oblivion

 

 

Poem No. 15

 

10 minutes to eat

4 hours to sleep

 

3 years to go

 

My School Life

 

 

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AC!! These are cool. How old were you here.
13 is a little sad, hopefully love got better for you after this.
14 is interesting .. just reminds of listening for God's still small voice
15 is cool. short and sweet unlike school life.
Nice my friend. I like reading these. Not surprising you write like you do.

 

thanks,
tim

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On 09/25/2015 09:04 AM, Mikiesboy said:

AC!! These are cool. How old were you here.

13 is a little sad, hopefully love got better for you after this.

14 is interesting .. just reminds of listening for God's still small voice

15 is cool. short and sweet unlike school life.

Nice my friend. I like reading these. Not surprising you write like you do.

 

thanks,

tim

Thank you, Tim. I always love how you delve into my poems and work in general. It's always great to get your readings, and I mean that.

 

wywh

 

Thanks for a great review!

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No. 13
The first three lines are flowing in an even cadence as if lulling you asleep.
The last line just four staccato words, which gives the whole a twist.
I like the way that is done with such a limited amount of words.

 

No. 14
Here I see someone lying in bed, late, eyes shut, just letting the colours you see come to you.
The very light breeze coming through an open window interrupts the process of slowly falling asleep.
An almost lace-like delicate poem.

 

No. 15
Just so funny !

 

Nice to see such a variety. Thanks.

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On 09/26/2015 04:46 AM, J.HunterDunn said:

No. 13

The first three lines are flowing in an even cadence as if lulling you asleep.

The last line just four staccato words, which gives the whole a twist.

I like the way that is done with such a limited amount of words.

 

No. 14

Here I see someone lying in bed, late, eyes shut, just letting the colours you see come to you.

The very light breeze coming through an open window interrupts the process of slowly falling asleep.

An almost lace-like delicate poem.

 

No. 15

Just so funny !

 

Nice to see such a variety. Thanks.

Thanks, Peter. You probably give these three slight offerings more attention than they deserve ;)

 

But I like and appreciate your analysis of them, especially of the middle one.

 

Cheers.

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On 09/26/2015 06:46 AM, Headstall said:

#15 made me smile... sometimes simple has the most impact... cheers... Gary

Thanks, Gary. I appreciate your support.

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