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Aditus' prompts and circumstances - 24. Poetry Prompt 13 - Ghazal: Smile

Write one Ghazal in your native language based on the well-known love scene from the Holocaust movie Bent.

Smile

Smile. And I will know you do.

Imagine. I can see you.

 

I do. Can you see me smile?

You will never know it’s true.

 

Looking. You’re beautiful. Sexy

Longing. Do you miss it too?

 

No. I don’t want to miss it.

If they notice, we are thru.

 

Feel. My lips against your mouth.

Taste. And then you will know who.

 

Hot. I can feel your tongue’s touch!

Together! You’re going to...

 

Hear. My breath against your ear.

Touch. Hot. So real. One. Not two

 

They made love. They were human.

They were real. They died. Red. Blue.

First try.
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Very beautiful. Knowing the Bent connection, it's as transfixing to read as the scene is to watch. You've done it.

 

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge!

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My mom took me to Broadway in NYC to see Richard Gere in Bent. Of course in the first scene when he walks across the stage naked we were gasping with the rest of the audience. It was such a fascinating movie. Having relatives who were in the concentration camps made the play all the more real for me.

 

I loved your poem, Addy, it gave me chills.

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On 09/06/2015 11:34 AM, Lisa said:

My mom took me to Broadway in NYC to see Richard Gere in Bent. Of course in the first scene when he walks across the stage naked we were gasping with the rest of the audience. It was such a fascinating movie. Having relatives who were in the concentration camps made the play all the more real for me.

 

I loved your poem, Addy, it gave me chills.

Thank you, Lisa. Every time I see those emaciated bodies, learn about the pain and torture they endured, it amazes me some of them still managed to smile, to love. Standing on the ground of Dachau made me shudder.

I'm really glad you liked my poem. It means a lot to me.

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On 09/06/2015 05:48 AM, AC Benus said:

Very beautiful. Knowing the Bent connection, it's as transfixing to read as the scene is to watch. You've done it.

 

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge!

Thank you, AC for giving me the opportunity. Describing what I saw was the first step to get closer. It was painful, exhilarating and I can't believe I smiled.

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On 09/06/2015 05:24 AM, Headstall said:

This blew me away, Adi. You captured the scene from Bent astonishingly well. Beautiful... Cheers... Gary...

Thank you, Gary. I watched the scene many, many times. They are wonderful actors. They made it easy to feel. Too easy maybe.

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This was so very good. I really liked the rythm of the poem. Conveys the feeling of a stolen moment, breathless, hurried but deeply connected.

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On 09/06/2015 05:58 PM, Puppilull said:

This was so very good. I really liked the rythm of the poem. Conveys the feeling of a stolen moment, breathless, hurried but deeply connected.

Thank you, Puppilull! The scene was very captivating, a stolen moment is the perfect phrase.

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