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    Doctor Oger
  • Doctor Oger
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  • 01/03/2016
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The Sock Drawer - 15. From the speakers the sensual sound

From the speakers the sensual sound

 

We play the Nine Inch Nails

and we're kissing

I relish this and all it entails

nothing is missing

 

He's pulling open my ponytail

with his deft hands

so slender and so pale

they remain in the strands

 

While his tongue, always teasing

almost drives me furious

his touch, always pleasing

renders me delirious

 

From the speakers the sensual sound

is ridding us of our brains

My poor senses are reeling around

sensitive touch is all that remains

 

We're only tongues, teeth, lips

and very hot skin

his nails are grazing my hips

his teeth are on my chin

 

Then his mouth comes very near

and it feels like an honour

when he whispers in my ear:

'I love you,' and I'm a goner.

p>This is old and juvenile and too simple, I know. But it may be still enjoyable.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Mikiesboy

Hey Dr. O .. oh I don't know I think you should put your poem down. I liked it very much. It's simple, but there's nothing wrong with simple if it's done well and this was. Perfectly enjoyable and sweet.

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Parker Owens

Neither old, nor juvenile. I'd call it highly charged, sensuous, and evocative. Simple is okay by me. I like simple.

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Doctor Oger
On 01/06/2016 08:41 AM, Parker Owens said:

Neither old, nor juvenile. I'd call it highly charged, sensuous, and evocative. Simple is okay by me. I like simple.

It's a kind of "rhyme or die!" text is what I meant. I'm glad you found it all those other brilliant things anyway.

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Doctor Oger
On 01/06/2016 07:45 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Hey Dr. O .. oh I don't know I think you should put your poem down. I liked it very much. It's simple, but there's nothing wrong with simple if it's done well and this was. Perfectly enjoyable and sweet.

Oh, I'm not putting it down. If I found it really horrible I wouldn't have put it up here. I'm happy you liked it, and thank you for the feedback!

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AC Benus

I too found it very sensual and beautiful. IMO, the short length of the lines heightens the anticipation, and intensifies an experience for the reader that's close to voyeurism. I think it works very well!

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Doctor Oger
On 01/06/2016 11:49 AM, AC Benus said:

I too found it very sensual and beautiful. IMO, the short length of the lines heightens the anticipation, and intensifies an experience for the reader that's close to voyeurism. I think it works very well!

Oh!

Thank you.

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Headstall

Plain and simple... I like it. It culminates in a beautifully expressed payoff... and it also evokes a time period... well done... cheers... Gary....

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Doctor Oger
On 01/07/2016 05:40 AM, Headstall said:

Plain and simple... I like it. It culminates in a beautifully expressed payoff... and it also evokes a time period... well done... cheers... Gary....

I'm glad it works. Thank you very much for the review.

 

- Oger

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Lisa

Definitely not juvenile, Doc.

 

Then ending brought me to tears, so it's a definite A+++++++ in my book.

 

I loved it!

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Doctor Oger
On 01/10/2016 04:46 AM, Lisa said:

Definitely not juvenile, Doc.

 

Then ending brought me to tears, so it's a definite A+++++++ in my book.

 

I loved it!

Take this great basket packed with seven fresh Thanks!

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