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    Emi GS
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NaPoWriMo - 2017 - 28. April 28 : An Evening Walk

Prompt : What Did You See While Driving?
Write the particulars of a short car ride…not so much who you’re with or where you’re going as what you see along the way. If you don’t drive much, do the same for a walk.

An Evening Walk

A look down the narrow street
From the higher grounds, I stand
The whole city was alive
With emerging electric lights
My little journey on foot

On a grey concrete road
Three brothers fight and play
'How cute my puppies look!'
Thought their mother, may be,
Before howling to snuggle to her

A long distant way, where
Different colours of stars shine
From various number of wheels
Fabulous the picture looks
As I walk aside the path

A light breeze smother my ears
Yet sweat beads dribble asides
Every breath getting heavy
Enjoying minute to minute
I walk back to where I abide

A big thanks to Val for helping me by providing me the prompts. Thank you all for spending your precious time for reading, liking and reviewing my poetry. Undoubtedly all mistakes are mine and mine only.
~Emi.
Copyright © 2017 Emi GS; All Rights Reserved.
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Parker Owens

This particular prompt invites us to describe a slice of life - a tiny sliver of it - and you do that with great detail and powerful description. I was especially fond of the reference to the children playing, talking about their puppies.

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Emi GS
On 29/04/2017 at 0:04 AM, Parker Owens said:

This particular prompt invites us to describe a slice of life - a tiny sliver of it - and you do that with great detail and powerful description. I was especially fond of the reference to the children playing, talking about their puppies.

 

I might have failed to give a detailed description in raising poem, especially where you have pointed out. Actually I was talking about three puppies and their mother dog along side of the path. I hope I can correct that.  Thanks for taking your time to read it though. 

 

~Emi. 

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