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Tyler and Scott start off sharing Melanie as person in common. It doesn't take long till Mel takes a back seat and sparks begin to fly. What happens when these two men take chances in their lives? Each chapter is a flash fiction piece unto itself so watch as they TRY TO ...
Too many emotions running around in my little head. lets see how trying to pen them works out. Please let me know what you think of it.

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Okay, now that I know that it continues, I'll reserve all my energy for the reviews read.gif

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On 07/29/2011 04:42 AM, LJH said:
Okay, now that I know that it continues, I'll reserve all my energy for the reviews read.gif
sooo... does that mean, there are reviews to come? :D lol. thanks for the review! :)

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Right, Frosty, Darlin! It's time to wrap this one up :P By which I DO NOT mean stop it ... However, I think there is a great story potential here and it is being sold short by the flash format now. I've enoyed it so far, but I can see there is stuff starting to develop, and there is a roundness appearing, that I think is going to be lost in the flash format. Would I be tooooo horrible to ask advise you to stop and start again with these characters in the conventional manner.

 

That is not to say that the flash format is bad or anything. It clearly has its place, but I feel like it has been a good sketch book up until now. But the sketching is kinda over and it's time to start making a whole with more depth than the flash format can muster.

 

I think, having watched the series so far, that the flash format would be really good if it was started with a total story in mind, and little vignettes were drawn to eventually make a whole. Metaphorically, this would be like creating a picture from a grid, and filling each square with that bit and that bit only. Eventually we get to see the whole thing. The benefit I can see from that format would be that it could be more like small, almost random, flash pieces from differing points in the plot which eventually make a whole sense. This might need to be rippled out in a two dimensional series of sets ... but it would utterly change the normal linearity of the storytelling method, which could be really interesting. The reader would need to develop a differeing set of interactions with the universe created by the writer, and the writer might need to develop a different set of controls to mould the trajectory of the story, because the reader would quite possibly have a much greater degree of control over how they perceived the characters / elements.

 

I offer these comments, because I like this story so much, I'd reallly like to see it developed conventionally, but I can see a potential real value in the experimentation which has gone on up until this point.

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On 08/06/2011 04:54 AM, Dannsar said:
Right, Frosty, Darlin! It's time to wrap this one up :P By which I DO NOT mean stop it ... However, I think there is a great story potential here and it is being sold short by the flash format now. I've enoyed it so far, but I can see there is stuff starting to develop, and there is a roundness appearing, that I think is going to be lost in the flash format. Would I be tooooo horrible to ask advise you to stop and start again with these characters in the conventional manner.

 

That is not to say that the flash format is bad or anything. It clearly has its place, but I feel like it has been a good sketch book up until now. But the sketching is kinda over and it's time to start making a whole with more depth than the flash format can muster.

 

I think, having watched the series so far, that the flash format would be really good if it was started with a total story in mind, and little vignettes were drawn to eventually make a whole. Metaphorically, this would be like creating a picture from a grid, and filling each square with that bit and that bit only. Eventually we get to see the whole thing. The benefit I can see from that format would be that it could be more like small, almost random, flash pieces from differing points in the plot which eventually make a whole sense. This might need to be rippled out in a two dimensional series of sets ... but it would utterly change the normal linearity of the storytelling method, which could be really interesting. The reader would need to develop a differeing set of interactions with the universe created by the writer, and the writer might need to develop a different set of controls to mould the trajectory of the story, because the reader would quite possibly have a much greater degree of control over how they perceived the characters / elements.

 

I offer these comments, because I like this story so much, I'd reallly like to see it developed conventionally, but I can see a potential real value in the experimentation which has gone on up until this point.

lol. your review made me giggle. Mainly because that's exactly whats going on in my mind. tbh, when i started, i had a story in my mind, and thats point in the story has been reached already (the getting together bit) true, not exactly how i'd wanted it to, but yeah, you get the point. I think the next but of thing that i have planned for them is going to take on a more traditional route. I have been making good use of my sounding board. :) Hope i'd not disappoint people much with abandoning the 'flash' project! :) thanks for the R&R! :D

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