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    Parker Owens
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Spice Rack - 1. Selection

The first of the Spice Rack poems. All errors are mine.

The bar

swirls with dancers,

each hotter than the next;

I want to shout: hey, look my way,

choose me.

 

You called

me crazy to

fall into your embrace;

yet you were the greater fool to

choose me.

 

Harder,

deeper inside,

unhinge me, unsense me,

borne on pleasure's pulse because you

chose me.

I am very grateful to AC Benus and Asamvav111 for their thoughts and insights. And I will be grateful to you, too, for any comments you may want to leave.
Copyright © 2017 Parker Owens; All Rights Reserved.
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Valkyrie

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Very nice, Parker. :)  And no one would be a fool to select you. ;)  

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Mikiesboy
Just now, Parker Owens said:

 

Maybe something like you'd cook up?

Parker!  is that an offer??  i love to cook with you. :)

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MacGreg

This is certainly spicy, my friend. Love the line: "unhinge me, unsense me". In other words, be taken until you can't see or think straight anymore. The entire piece is invigorating. 

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Parker Owens
12 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

This is certainly spicy, my friend. Love the line: "unhinge me, unsense me". In other words, be taken until you can't see or think straight anymore. The entire piece is invigorating. 

 

You have it exactly right. And yes, it is um, zesty, isn't it?

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Parker Owens
33 minutes ago, Defiance19 said:

Ahh, Parker. Nice.  Very, very nice! 

 

Something nice for a warm summer day?

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Parker Owens
17 minutes ago, mogwhy said:

oh the dishes you're going make with this spice rack. keep on cooking:D

 

It's meant to be a short series, but flavorful. 

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Parker Owens
13 minutes ago, BlindAmbition said:

Let the desires be free! Enjoy a SPICY life! 

 

Sounds like you enjoyed this one. There will be more. Thank you!

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AC Benus

This poem has real motion to it, like the swirling dancers I guess. They become the perfect metaphor for the sensations within the poet's head. 

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northie

 

yet you were the greater fool to choose me. Err ... :no: Not that I'm taking sides or anything. ;)

 

Wonderful, sensual writing. So much description, imagery packed into so few words. It's what I like about cinquains. :)

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Parker Owens
1 hour ago, AC Benus said:

This poem has real motion to it, like the swirling dancers I guess. They become the perfect metaphor for the sensations within the poet's head. 

 

Dancing, falling, passion - yes, lots of motion. And you are right that this was meant to make a hundred quick images flash through the mind. Thank you.

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Parker Owens
1 hour ago, northie said:

 

yet you were the greater fool to choose me. Err ... :no: Not that I'm taking sides or anything. ;)

 

Wonderful, sensual writing. So much description, imagery packed into so few words. It's what I like about cinquains. :)

 

Cinquains, like Haiku, require economy. That's the fun part. The frustration is not being able to use a favorite word in the spot you want. I'm this one worked out. 

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Headstall

Okay, first, that was smoking hot :yes: 

And this...

 

You called

me crazy to

fall into your embrace;

yet you were the greater fool to

choose me.

 

For me, this is the essence of love, whether for a lifetime or other. When both partners feel they are the lucky one... 

Wonderful, Parker... exquisite... cheers... Gary....

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Parker Owens

This center portion was not the sizzle, but the real main course, exactly as you say. Thanks for reading this! 

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Puppilull

An ode to the steamier side of things... I like it! 

 

Getting unhinged is very nice. 

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Parker Owens
On 6/19/2017 at 7:50 PM, LitLover said:

Definitely spicy ;)   Very nice, Parker 

 

Not like plain mashed potatoes, no. Thanks for reading!

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Parker Owens
5 minutes ago, Puppilull said:

An ode to the steamier side of things... I like it! 

 

Getting unhinged is very nice. 

 

So glad you liked it! All those good 'un' words were fun to use. Thank you for reading!

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