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Spice Rack - 7. Exploration

Some zest, perhaps? If you find an error, attribute it to me.

Slowly,

one at a time,

languidly unbutton,

unfasten, unbelt, unfold, and

unmask;

warm breath,

lips ghosting on air-chilled shoulders,

sing to sinew and bone

of passion and

heaven.

I am very much indebted to AC Benus and Asamvav111 for their help. And I am most grateful to those who leave comments on this small collection.
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Mikiesboy

Mmm, doesn't feel zesty to me. Feels like a good whiskey ... not to dump back but.. in a fine crystal glass.. sipped slowly and with appreciation.  

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dughlas

Still on a slow simmer having added those last seasonings, savoring the rich heady scent that rises in the steam ... the dish is nearly ready.

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Every word is a delight to the senses.  Zesty, indeed.  Nicely done, Chef. :) 

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23 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

Mmm, doesn't feel zesty to me. Feels like a good whiskey ... not to dump back but.. in a fine crystal glass.. sipped slowly and with appreciation.  

 

Fine whiskey, aged for years to maturity...nice metaphor, very nice. Its fiery trail burns all the way down, igniting unquenchable passions. Thanks for reading this, and for a whole new avenue of thought!

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13 minutes ago, dughlas said:

Still on a slow simmer having added those last seasonings, savoring the rich heady scent that rises in the steam ... the dish is nearly ready.

 

Sometimes the aroma that rises from the stove captivates the senses well before the meal begins. But the flavors are still blending, taking parts of one another on. Thanks so much for your kindness in reading this and for your comments.

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12 minutes ago, Valkyrie said:

Every word is a delight to the senses.  Zesty, indeed.  Nicely done, Chef. :) 

 

It is a piece to heighten the senses, yes? And merci for my new title! I shall need a new hat!

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Two areas of observation. First, what a wildly successful poem! It captures a moment in time like skin-prickling anticipation itself, and how wonderful is that! Secondly, I have hesitated exploring the Cinquain stanza for myself mainly because the short syllable lines must contain words of weighty compactness. Here, you show me how it's done; I am a student to your mastery of your form. Bravo! 

 

 

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1 hour ago, AC Benus said:

Two areas of observation. First, what a wildly successful poem! It captures a moment in time like skin-prickling anticipation itself, and how wonderful is that! Secondly, I have hesitated exploring the Cinquain stanza for myself mainly because the short syllable lines must contain words of weighty compactness. Here, you show me how it's done; I am a student to your mastery of your form. Bravo! 

 

 

 

Your words make me blush. So much has been written about love and passion, it was daunting to try. Having a structured form helped, ironically. If you think it worked - if the sense and thrill of that moment you describe comes through - then I can smile. Many, many thanks. 

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5 minutes ago, BlindAmbition said:

Delicious! To be enjoyed with Champagne and strawberries... Perhaps! 😋

 

These flavors are some of my favorites. As are the slow, sensuous moments of revelation. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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Headstall

Oh... I like this...  'languid' paints the picture of familiar ease. This is not new and hurried... no... not to me... this speaks of knowing, and savoring... measuring our anticipation... superb... cheers... Gary....

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On 6/30/2017 at 7:34 AM, LitLover said:

Not hurried, but a slow and sensual moment.  Beautifully described, Parker.  

 

Thank you, Lit. Nice and slow and savored. Some flavors require this. Glad you liked it. 

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On 6/30/2017 at 4:12 PM, Headstall said:

Oh... I like this...  'languid' paints the picture of familiar ease. This is not new and hurried... no... not to me... this speaks of knowing, and savoring... measuring our anticipation... superb... cheers... Gary....

 

Languid is such a good word, better than lazy. You hit all of its connotations perfectly. How nice this one connected with you. Thanks for reading!

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8 minutes ago, Puppilull said:

Umasked. That's how it should be. Truly naked.  

 

Thank you; I agree - this is as it should be.   Hope you enjoyed this added spice from the rack. 

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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. 

50 minutes ago, Defiance19 said:

I feel time slow down with this one.. Relishing each moment in the best way possible.

 

 

Time stretches out, then compresses - it's so like that. 

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BDANR

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Also a nice poem. I like the alliteration in the beginning and I really liked this line, "lips ghosting on air-chilled shoulders." I think I felt goosebumps ;).

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Thank you very much for your comment. If you had a physical reaction, that makes me very happy, indeed. 

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