Rhymes - 14. Bereft

I am so happy and thrilled you decide to take the sonnet challenge. I wonder if you had ever thought about writing one before. Please do let me know on the poetry prompt posting

Sonnets are addicting to write, once a poet finds his or her sea-legs with them. I really hope you get inspired to write them, because the more you write, the easier it is to express yourself with this form.

If I can offer some constructive thought as a way for you to advance, it's this: begin to arrange the quatrains as four-lined sentences. Having two lines, period; two lines, period, is short changing them a bit. On the other hand, your metre is impressively consistent throughout. Good job!

I love the images in these lines: "The dusk light reflected in golden rings Around the portal to your open mind." It makes me see a brilliant sunset reflected in the irises of the beloved's eyes. That's powerful.

Thanks for posting a very personal and emotional poem.

On 05/09/2015 10:18 AM, AC Benus said:

I am so happy and thrilled you decide to take the sonnet challenge. I wonder if you had ever thought about writing one before. Please do let me know on the poetry prompt posting

 

Sonnets are addicting to write, once a poet finds his or her sea-legs with them. I really hope you get inspired to write them, because the more you write, the easier it is to express yourself with this form.

 

If I can offer some constructive thought as a way for you to advance, it's this: begin to arrange the quatrains as four-lined sentences. Having two lines, period; two lines, period, is short changing them a bit. On the other hand, your metre is impressively consistent throughout. Good job!

 

I love the images in these lines: "The dusk light reflected in golden rings Around the portal to your open mind." It makes me see a brilliant sunset reflected in the irises of the beloved's eyes. That's powerful.

 

Thanks for posting a very personal and emotional poem.