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Shepherd's Crook - 21. Epilogue – (10 Years Later)

Epilogue – (10 Years Later)

The woman, sitting in the plush leather chair, patiently waited. Her long blond hair was pulled into a sleek ponytail. Pale shimmery eye shadow and the slightest hint of pink lip gloss was a smart choice. She looked posh and confident, waiting for the man on the other side of the wide wooden desk to finish reviewing her qualifications.

“Well, Mrs. Mitchell,” The man said looking up from the papers.

“I’m sorry, Sir, but it’s Ms. Mitchell,” Shelby politely corrected him as she looked down at her hands resting in her lap, observing her perfectly manicured nails and long slender fingers that were presently absent jewelry; however, small pearls hung from both of her ears, as well as a strand of pearls, formed a dazzling collection at the base of her slim throat.

“Yes, Ms. Mitchell, your qualifications are impeccable and the letter of recommendation from the Chief of Staff at Shepherd’s Crook Hospital is exemplary. Dr. Jonathan Robinson speaks very highly of you.”

A faint blush crept across Shelby’s cheeks. “Thank you, Dr. Chaudry, but to be honest, Dr. Robinson is a tad biased. Jonathan’s a very dear family friend and he’s always dreamt that I would go to medical school someday like his son, Gibson.” Shelby smiled thinking about her best friend, Gibby. He had been through a lot over the last few years and she was glad that he was finally happy and in love with his boyfriend, Scott Becker.

“But instead you chose a career in nursing?” A crease fell over Dr. Chaudry’s forehead as he listened to her explain.

“I know that Gibson Robinson will make a wonderful doctor, just like his father, but I’ve always felt that my place was in the nursing field, that’s where I can make the most impact. My mother’s a nurse and it has been such a pleasure following in her footsteps these last few years.”

The elderly doctor smiled at her thoughtful answers. “Tell me, Ms. Mitchell, why do you want to work here at The Beauchamp Psychiatric Hospital when you could have your pick at any number of positions in the medical field, and far more glamorous ones, too, I might add?”

“I have always been fascinated with the human mind and working with patients such as yours, will be extremely challenging, but very rewarding.”

Dr. Chaudry couldn’t hide his delight with her successful interview. “We would be pleased to offer you a position here in the women’s ward. You will be a wonderful asset to our team.”

Shelby slowly nodded her head. “Would it be possible to tour the facility and maybe speak to your staff and some of your patients before accepting your offer?”

Picking up the telephone as he answered her, “Of course, of course, I wouldn’t expect anything less; after all, you need to learn about us, just as much as we need to learn about you, before making such a big decision.” He turned his attention back to the receiver. “Tammy, would you please show Ms. Mitchell around?”

Within moments, Tammy knocked on the door before stepping inside. Her turquoise scrubs were bright and cheerful. She looked far more casual than Shelby in her sharp business suit and expensive heels. After a quick introduction, Dr. Chaudry turned Shelby over to Nurse Tammy.

The facility looked like every other in-patient mental facility across the country. Shelby smiled as the young woman explained the daily duties as they walked through the secured hallways.

“So why are you moving clear across the country?” Tammy asked, glancing down at Shelby’s ringless finger. “You’re obviously not chasing after a guy?” The nurse’s sarcasm shined through.

Shelby’s grin widened as she stepped closer to the woman and lowered her voice, “Maybe, I’m still looking for the right girl.” That remark had Tammy stumbling to put some distance between them. A look of horror flashed through the woman’s eyes, unaware that Shelby was just teasing, but Shelby didn’t care. She had traveled halfway across the country for one reason and it had nothing to do with Nurse Tammy.

The woman looked relieved when they reached the Day Room. Dozens of patients sat in the bright sunshine, enjoying games, reading and drawing. Their ages ranged from late teens to elderly patients barely breathing, but one of them immediately caught Shelby’s attention.

Greasy locks of matted blond hair hung over the woman’s face. Her hands were contorted into gnarled claws, clutched against her chest. Sitting alone in the far corner, her lifeless eyes stared out the big window.

Shelby needed to get closer. She had to be sure. From this distance the woman looked more like a homeless vagrant than the remnants of the spoiled selfish princess, she remembered from childhood. Her pulse raced with anticipation.

Tammy noticed Shelby staring at the patient and continued towards her lonely corner. “Mandy, darling, I want you to say hello to Nurse Shelby for me.” Shelby flinched when Tammy spoke. Her heart pounded in her chest. She had spent the last few years searching for Amanda Grady and it looked like she had finally found her. Stepping closer, Shelby could tell there was no way this patient could say hello, the woman apparently couldn’t even keep from pissing her own pants, the smell of urine was so strong.

“This is Amanda Shepherd.”

“Interesting,” The word slipped out before Shelby could stop it, luckily, Tammy just kept on rambling without missing a beat.

“Interesting? No, not really. Amanda here is paralyzed from the chest down as the result of a tragic fall when she was a teenager. She’s been in a catatonic state for years, long before she was transferred here to Beauchamp a few months ago--”

A crash in the hallway interrupted Tammy’s explanation, but Shelby had already heard enough to know that the woman sitting in front of her was Amanda Grady. Excusing herself to go investigate the commotion from outside the room, Tammy left them alone.

Shelby dropped down to one knee to bring Amanda’s icy stare to eye level. At first Amanda’s gaze stayed fixed as she stared through the window, but as Shelby started to talk, her hallow eyes slowly shifted towards the familiar voice. “I got to hand it to Daddy Grady; that was very clever of him to change your name. I almost didn’t find you this time.”

Noticing that she had Amanda’s full attention, Shelby smiled. The girl’s eyes widened with fear and she began to moan. “Shhh, Mandy, don’t get yourself all worked up. You know I’m not here to hurt you. On the contrary, I want you to live a long and miserable life, trapped in this rotting body for as long as possible. Death would be too good for you. I want you to suffer each and every day for the rest of your miserable life, and I want you spend every second think about all of the lives you have destroyed.”

The noise in the hallway stopped. Shelby only had a few seconds before Nurse Tammy returned, so she quickly finished what she had to say. “I’ll be back again someday to check on you. Until then, just so you know, Tanner’s in Heaven and Ethan is in Hell, so when your pathetic body decides to finally crap out on you…when you die, wherever you go…either way, you’re fucked!”

~The End~

I can't thank everyone enough for all of the support you've had for Shepherd's Crook.  This has been such an emotional story and you've stuck with me and Gibby and Tanner through it all.  Your reviews have been great and kept me going, trying even harder to bring you the best story I can.
I hope that I've answered all your questions and haven't left any loose-ends.  Please feel free to coment and review and ask as many questions as you want! If something wasn't answered in the story, I promise to answer everything in the reviews.
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On 08/26/2012 01:30 PM, comicfan said:
The change of character was unexpected. I got the feeling this wasn't originally how you planned it. Amanda is damned any way you look it at, but still not sure if I see it as punishment enough. She was directly responsible for two if not three deaths, and nearly killing Gibby. Gibby got Scott? I would have hoped he found someone who could accept him from the start. Scott would have had to work extremely hard. In many ways I was expecting Gibby to find love after he left there, but as long as the character is happy.

 

I will agree with others that I feel sorry for Shelby. Not because she has hunted after the killer of her brother or any of that. I wonder if she ever knew what had happened when he died and spent time with Gibby and even watched over her. Did she ever have the chance to reconcile that part of his afterlife with her image of him. It is nice to know she stayed close to Gibby though. She became a nurse like her mother and that is a testament to her parents and her desire to help others.

I did hope there would be something about Johnathan finding love again. The poor man had been through so much you sort of hoped he would find a chance at life and love again. He was still young enough that Gibby could have had siblings.

 

Anyway enough of my comments and rants. Nice job on your story KC and can't wait for you next one.

I kept going back and forth over to kill Amanda or not kill her...do I let Tanner kill her or Shelby....questions, questions, questions. I had several conversations with Robert, Rustle and several friends over the ending and I think this is what I felt was right.

 

Scott isn't perfect but nobody is, Gibby could look past his early jackass behavior as they learn to both accept each other, and they don't get together right away, it is a few years later. I the idea of these guys together as adults now that they have learned and grown as mature young men.

 

I agree with you and the readers about Shelby. I feel sorry for Shelby but she is a kind, good and loving person. She's become a nurse and is a caregiver like her mother. That's why she can't kill Amanda, but she still has to keep tabs on her, which is why she went looking for her when she disappeared months earlier. I feel that Shelby and Gibby became such close friends that he has told her about him and Tanner. Shelby and Tanner were very close so I'm betting that even if Gibby never told her, she might have known already.

 

Your rants are always welcome, Wayne! :P Thank you so much for reading and commenting, also for all of your words of encouragment and questions that have me working harder to bring the best story that I can.

 

Thanks! KC

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KC,

I want to first of all let me apologize before hand because I have never been good at reviews.. I read over some of the things others have said and I was like wow!!! However, I can only y do my best so here it goes.

I was extremely caught up in the story. There were many times I felt as if I were there in the story and watching it play out before my very eyes. The one time this was the strongest was in the gym.. It was as if I were sitting there and I could feel the tension building as Amanda pulled the gun and I could sense the fear on Gibby's face.

I wont be ashamed to admit it, but I cried a few times reading this. The first time was when Tanner first noticed the scars on gibby's body. HE played it off as if it were no big deal.. Secondly, as Tanner lied dying, and thirdly as Tanner was saying his final goodbyes to the guy he had fallen in love with.

I love how you showed that love can be eternal and it doesn't stop when we leave this world..

I truly enjoyed and was sad when it ended.. As they say, all good things must come to an end.

I hipe you have many more good things to come.

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On 08/27/2012 12:32 PM, harcallard said:
KC,

I want to first of all let me apologize before hand because I have never been good at reviews.. I read over some of the things others have said and I was like wow!!! However, I can only y do my best so here it goes.

I was extremely caught up in the story. There were many times I felt as if I were there in the story and watching it play out before my very eyes. The one time this was the strongest was in the gym.. It was as if I were sitting there and I could feel the tension building as Amanda pulled the gun and I could sense the fear on Gibby's face.

I wont be ashamed to admit it, but I cried a few times reading this. The first time was when Tanner first noticed the scars on gibby's body. HE played it off as if it were no big deal.. Secondly, as Tanner lied dying, and thirdly as Tanner was saying his final goodbyes to the guy he had fallen in love with.

I love how you showed that love can be eternal and it doesn't stop when we leave this world..

I truly enjoyed and was sad when it ended.. As they say, all good things must come to an end.

I hipe you have many more good things to come.

Thanks so much for taking time to let me know what you thought of my story. Sorry that I made you cry, that wasn't my intent but this was a very emotional story. I found myself getting choked up on more than one occasion. I like to think that there is something out there beyond this life and that the spirit that makes us 'us' will continue. It was a lot of fun writing this story but I'm excited to move on to other projects :) Thanks again for reading! Kc
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*Sigh* Well I finished it, didn't want too. I think you couldn't have ended it any better. It fits.

I agree Scott may not be ideal, but nobody is perfect. Your description of Shelby, I could see her clearly, and Amanda, sheer genius. I'm so sad to see the end of this KC. I can now concentrate on the book I bought, and give you time to write the next awe inspiring tale. Well done KC, huge hugs and bye Gibby :hug:

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On 08/27/2012 06:23 PM, Mark92 said:
*Sigh* Well I finished it, didn't want too. I think you couldn't have ended it any better. It fits.

I agree Scott may not be ideal, but nobody is perfect. Your description of Shelby, I could see her clearly, and Amanda, sheer genius. I'm so sad to see the end of this KC. I can now concentrate on the book I bought, and give you time to write the next awe inspiring tale. Well done KC, huge hugs and bye Gibby :hug:

I know that you've been trying to put off finishing this story but I'm glad that you did! I think that Scott deserved a second chance and in reality most of us have done something in our past that we could have used a second chance ;)

 

Thanks so much for all of your encouragement. It has made me try harder to bring you and the readers the best story that I can! :hug:

 

I will keep you informed of upcoming projects. :P

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You already have my take on things, before posting, but I want to see you blush.

It would be tough to name a more sympathetic character than Gibby, but you didn't make him saccharine. You made him noble and loyal, trying to pick up a life of shattered dreams. I wanted to take him home with me. Tanner was another story - just another golden god who actually turned out nicer than I'd ever expect - accepting, non-judgmental, and loyal, even to Amanda. Shelby, in the epilogue, made me hurt, because I felt the depth of her pain.

The epilogue added great depth to a story that otherwise would have had a storybook ending, and you handled it very well.

Plot lines have always been a strong point for you, and this story is no different. Your characters have come a long way, though, and I'm glad you pump up the narrative more. It makes the work more enjoyable. The one bit of narrative that I found coolest was the bit of fluff floating through the house at the beginning. It reminded me of the credits for Forrest Gump. It slowed the pace and distracted the reader for just the right amount of time.

When you first sent me the piece, you asked me about explicit sex scenes, and said you didn't feel right about them with this story. That was a great call. It's still intimate, but not TMI. There's an innocence about the whole piece that could have gone somewhere else.

I'm sorry this story came to an end. I'll miss the characters. They've become real to me. But at least I can stop sniffling now.

One of the things I like most about working with you is that you listen to suggestions, but you follow your instincts. No matter whether you take a suggestion or not, the work is unmistakably yours. And, damn! I like it.

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On 08/28/2012 10:04 AM, rustle said:
You already have my take on things, before posting, but I want to see you blush.

It would be tough to name a more sympathetic character than Gibby, but you didn't make him saccharine. You made him noble and loyal, trying to pick up a life of shattered dreams. I wanted to take him home with me. Tanner was another story - just another golden god who actually turned out nicer than I'd ever expect - accepting, non-judgmental, and loyal, even to Amanda. Shelby, in the epilogue, made me hurt, because I felt the depth of her pain.

The epilogue added great depth to a story that otherwise would have had a storybook ending, and you handled it very well.

Plot lines have always been a strong point for you, and this story is no different. Your characters have come a long way, though, and I'm glad you pump up the narrative more. It makes the work more enjoyable. The one bit of narrative that I found coolest was the bit of fluff floating through the house at the beginning. It reminded me of the credits for Forrest Gump. It slowed the pace and distracted the reader for just the right amount of time.

When you first sent me the piece, you asked me about explicit sex scenes, and said you didn't feel right about them with this story. That was a great call. It's still intimate, but not TMI. There's an innocence about the whole piece that could have gone somewhere else.

I'm sorry this story came to an end. I'll miss the characters. They've become real to me. But at least I can stop sniffling now.

One of the things I like most about working with you is that you listen to suggestions, but you follow your instincts. No matter whether you take a suggestion or not, the work is unmistakably yours. And, damn! I like it.

:*) Rustle, I can't thank you enough for everthing you have done for me, my stories and my life! You are more than a editor, you're such a wonderful friend! I always look forward to hearing your thoughts about how to improve...even if you do make me keep a dictonary by myside (you and your big words :P )

 

This story has been such an emotional ride. You helped me when I struggled, either from hitting rough patches in the story or a few hard times in my real life...you have been there for me!

 

I can't ever express how much I appreciate all that you have done. :hug:

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I'm glad that Amanda got to suffer. Death would be to easy for her. I like that we see this last part from the sister's eyes but you still found a way to tell us that Gibby is ok and happy.

Finding this site was by accident. Then you responded to emails, I thought that was the coolest thing ever. Stumbling into this in the middle had me hooked and I was glad that I could go back and read it from start to finish (even if it took me a few daays to figure out how to actually send you my coments)

Your so talented, I can't wait to see what you have planned next!

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On 09/01/2012 06:38 AM, Racer said:
I'm glad that Amanda got to suffer. Death would be to easy for her. I like that we see this last part from the sister's eyes but you still found a way to tell us that Gibby is ok and happy.

Finding this site was by accident. Then you responded to emails, I thought that was the coolest thing ever. Stumbling into this in the middle had me hooked and I was glad that I could go back and read it from start to finish (even if it took me a few daays to figure out how to actually send you my coments)

Your so talented, I can't wait to see what you have planned next!

Death would be too good for her. She has to suffer but that will never undo the wrong she has done! I'm glad you found this story and it brought you to GA! Hopefully you stick around and read more (hint, hint) I have some good stuff but there are lots of other talented authors here too! :lol:

 

Thanks for reading and hopefully you come back for my next story! :D Kc

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Well, I felt that Gibby would wind up with Scott, and I feel that Tanner had a part in that. After all, Scott was a neutral person as far as the " Amanda gang". That being said, Shelby was the perfect stealth weapon here. Started out as Gibby's first friend, ended up as Gibby's best friend, and will get revenge for both her brother and Gibby.

I will certainly miss this adventure. The only thing that I wonder is if Tanner ever made his presence known to Gibby again. Sure is a great thought to ponder, while ending this great read. Awesome Job kc. It was worth every moment I spent reading. Thanks for your time and wonderful talent.

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On 09/04/2012 05:11 AM, joann414 said:
Well, I felt that Gibby would wind up with Scott, and I feel that Tanner had a part in that. After all, Scott was a neutral person as far as the " Amanda gang". That being said, Shelby was the perfect stealth weapon here. Started out as Gibby's first friend, ended up as Gibby's best friend, and will get revenge for both her brother and Gibby.

I will certainly miss this adventure. The only thing that I wonder is if Tanner ever made his presence known to Gibby again. Sure is a great thought to ponder, while ending this great read. Awesome Job kc. It was worth every moment I spent reading. Thanks for your time and wonderful talent.

Awwww :*) Thanks Joann! It's weird to work so long and hard on something that you want to bring to readers. I'm so glad that it has had the awesome reception that it did. I was worried that the readers would hate me for killing Tanner and stop reading, but they kept coming back to find out what happened. This story like life isn't a happy ending. I wanted to bring characters that felt real, they were flawed and readers could realate to. Thanks for taking this journey with me and my guys ;) It means a lot! KC
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On 09/19/2012 02:46 AM, Slytherin said:
Loved it worshippy.gif
I'm glad you stuck it through to the end ((and didn't kill me)) :P
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On 04/10/2013 08:45 AM, Daithi said:
k MMaybe that is better than death

But really Scott. Bleh

Thank you soooooo much Daithi for spending the day with me and and my characters! This story means a lot to me. My mom edited the original story for me a few years ago and now that she's gone, I can still hear her telling me what to do and OMG she is still pissed at me for killing Tanner! LOL

 

Yes Scott made a mistake but he deserved the chance at redemption. I know that I've made some really bad choices in the past but a second chance can save someones life.

 

Amanda's fate is worse than death and I totally believe it is what she deserves. She deserves to suffer. I tried to show 1 character is redeemd but another is condemned.

 

Thaks again, your reviews have really made my day today :)KC

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I'm glad that Gibby did find love. I'm just saddened that Tanner wasn't somehow able to come back to him. Great story and I loved the ending. Glad that Amanda is somewhat getting her comeuppance!

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On 04/10/2013 05:19 PM, CW Prince said:
I'm glad that Gibby did find love. I'm just saddened that Tanner wasn't somehow able to come back to him. Great story and I loved the ending. Glad that Amanda is somewhat getting her comeuppance!
Thanks so much for reading my story and letting me know what you think. I'm still a new writer and I learn more and more with every new writing project, trying to get better.

 

Gibby did find love and Tanner will be watching/waiting for him to join him one day. I think Amanda's fate was what she deserved because death would have been too easy. This way she suffers for a long, long, long, long time ;)

KC

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Like Andyboi, I too read the whole story in one sitting. When you killed Tanner off I was about to give up on it because like many, I quite liked the character. Mostly, I guess, because you made Gibby such a sympathetic character that I was hoping they would get together. I went so far as to get up and walk around the room trying to decide if I wanted to continue reading. During my meandering the thought came to me that this 'thing' that I was reading (sorry, I was kinda ticked) was very similar to one of those movies where the powers that be kill off the good guy, because they can. So you can imagine I was not too surprised to find when I returned to your story that you had noted at the bottom that you had originally wrote this as a screenplay.

It was interestingly done keeping Tanner in the story as a vital part of it and not just as a footnote towards an wholly different tale. I wasn't expecting what I hesitate to call a ghost story, which it isn't entirely. You kept it focused on Gibby rather well I thought.

The half-way into the light scene was probably the least successful part of the story. Unlike the dream sequence earlier where Tanner get sucked into Gibby's nightmare, well done by the way, we get another dreamlike situation that seemed there just to wrap up all the dead people and get them out of the way. It would have worked more as a visual than it did as written. One runs into this out-of-body, meeting dead loved ones and coming back type of scene from time to time over a long (many years) period of reading and this does seem to be a very difficult thing to capture with just the right feel. Doesn't help that folks more than likely have their own interpretation of how this might happen. Myself, I've never really given it much thought.

I am surprised that many people were upset that you put Scott and Gibby together. Clearly in chapter two you made a strong case for mutual attraction before the lady started screaming and causing all sorts of confusion. To walk into that while not knowing what's going on. To suddenly be confronted with Gibby's scars. That would be a shock, especially if you've never seen or been given a reason to imagine such a horrible thing could happen to the human body. "What's wrong with him.", seems a rather mild reaction and wasn't on par with the mindless response that others were giving. That Gibby avoided the grill and Scott was indication enough that he was more embarrassed than angry about the whole thing. Scott seeking him out to apologize and Gibby still finding him handsome tells us there is an attraction yet. So, no rant from me, you made your case.

"Tanner." Last words have a funny way of sticking don't they. I thought for sure you killed her off and deservedly so too. We find out she didn't die and yet it was still her last word. That was genius.

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On 08/05/2013 07:30 AM, Ron said:
Like Andyboi, I too read the whole story in one sitting. When you killed Tanner off I was about to give up on it because like many, I quite liked the character. Mostly, I guess, because you made Gibby such a sympathetic character that I was hoping they would get together. I went so far as to get up and walk around the room trying to decide if I wanted to continue reading. During my meandering the thought came to me that this 'thing' that I was reading (sorry, I was kinda ticked) was very similar to one of those movies where the powers that be kill off the good guy, because they can. So you can imagine I was not too surprised to find when I returned to your story that you had noted at the bottom that you had originally wrote this as a screenplay.

It was interestingly done keeping Tanner in the story as a vital part of it and not just as a footnote towards an wholly different tale. I wasn't expecting what I hesitate to call a ghost story, which it isn't entirely. You kept it focused on Gibby rather well I thought.

The half-way into the light scene was probably the least successful part of the story. Unlike the dream sequence earlier where Tanner get sucked into Gibby's nightmare, well done by the way, we get another dreamlike situation that seemed there just to wrap up all the dead people and get them out of the way. It would have worked more as a visual than it did as written. One runs into this out-of-body, meeting dead loved ones and coming back type of scene from time to time over a long (many years) period of reading and this does seem to be a very difficult thing to capture with just the right feel. Doesn't help that folks more than likely have their own interpretation of how this might happen. Myself, I've never really given it much thought.

I am surprised that many people were upset that you put Scott and Gibby together. Clearly in chapter two you made a strong case for mutual attraction before the lady started screaming and causing all sorts of confusion. To walk into that while not knowing what's going on. To suddenly be confronted with Gibby's scars. That would be a shock, especially if you've never seen or been given a reason to imagine such a horrible thing could happen to the human body. "What's wrong with him.", seems a rather mild reaction and wasn't on par with the mindless response that others were giving. That Gibby avoided the grill and Scott was indication enough that he was more embarrassed than angry about the whole thing. Scott seeking him out to apologize and Gibby still finding him handsome tells us there is an attraction yet. So, no rant from me, you made your case.

"Tanner." Last words have a funny way of sticking don't they. I thought for sure you killed her off and deservedly so too. We find out she didn't die and yet it was still her last word. That was genius.

Thanks for coming back to the story, even if you were unsure if you wanted to continue. Honestly, I didn't kill Tanner just because I could, in life sometimes the good guys die and sometimes they finish last and sadly that means the bad guys can win. Not every story has a happy ending but I still wanted this to be an amazing story, a piece of writing that when it's done, you're changed as a person for reading it. There are great pieces of literature in this world that aren't happy-happy sunshine and unicorns.....but I'm glad you gave it a second chance :)

 

I see this story as a ghost story so Tanner still being a major part of the story was my vision (and yes I have a strong background in screenplay writing, so I can often get very visual in my stories :P ) I've had readers tell me that my stories sometimes come across as mentally watching a movie. I hope that's a good thing. ;)

 

I'm sorry if you didn't enjoy Gibby's out of body experience. Most people have their own vision of what will happen at death and life after so some readers might have a different view then I have and I encourage them to share how they feel about Tanner and Gibby's Mom in the light. Personally, it was a very sad and hard scene for me to write since I was struggling with just losing my own Mother while writing this story.

 

I hoped that readers would forgive Scott by the end. Everyone has made their fair share of mistakes in life (jeez, I know I have made lots of mistakes :P ) and if Gibby can forgive him and give him a second chance, I think we can too.

 

Death would be too easy for Amanda, she deserves to suffer and she will for a long long time. It sounds like over all, you enjoyed the story. :D I always love to hear from readers, thank so much for taking time to tell me what you think. :) KC

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Amazing,thank you,discoverd your story at lunch time today,finished at 22.00 today,cried most of the way though,what would be nice is to one day read a final chapter re Gibby dying through old age or maybe something else and being met by his Tanner and being led into everlasting love.
My kindest regards.

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I enjoyed it very much, though I still don't understand how in Carol's eyes she was saving her son by setting him on fire...?🤔

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